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　　读后续写里的 “冲突”是故事 “好看” 的关键密码，也是学生精准把握需要攻克的难点。
一、读后续写冲突创作的三大棘手难题
1.冲突合理性难把控：不清楚冲突要和原文人物性格、情节伏笔适配，易写得突兀。比如原文是温柔内敛的主角，续写里突然因小事激烈吵架，违背 “人设”；或不能发现原文这类伏笔，新冲突和故事脱节。
2.冲突层次单一：只会写表面吵架、遇险，不会叠加冲突，因此故事平淡，抓不住读者。
3.冲突与主题脱节：冲突成了单纯 “制造热闹”，不能为主题服务。比如写亲情故事，冲突是同学吵架，和 “亲情理解” 主题无关，浪费情节。
二、几个冲突突破点，让续写有戏又深刻
1.面对问题，人物产生的消极或积极情绪
【示例】　（2025 全国一卷，Para.1）I realized it was me who was at fault.Shame washed over me as I replayed that day.My brother， hurting and lonely， had trusted me to host， only to feel rejected — all because I worried about minor messes.Toby wasn’t just a pet； he was my brother’s lifeline， yet I’d carelessly forced him to choose between a wet dog and leaving ...
分析：续写第一段呈现“我”意识到错误后的愧疚，回忆哥哥因丧妻本就伤心和孤独，自己却因聚会顾虑，让哥哥在带狗难题中两难，凸显“我”的疏忽对哥哥造成的情感伤害以及因忽视哥哥情感需求产生的自我谴责。
2.面对复杂的情境，人物产生急迫/复杂的心理
【示例】　（2025 全国一卷，Para.2）With the biscuits my wife had made， I arrived at my brother’s door.My palms were sweaty as I knocked， afraid of facing his continued anger.When he opened it， Toby bounded out first， tail wagging wildly at the sight of the biscuits.My brother’s eyes were guarded but softened a bit as he saw me.He stared at me for a moment， then pulled me into a hug.
分析：续写第二段首句提示语提供一个新的情景，即带饼干到哥哥家登门道歉，这让主人翁内心冲突加剧。“我”抵达哥哥家时，因担忧哥哥仍在生气，内心满是忐忑（palms were sweaty体现紧张）；敲门后，托比兴奋窜出、看到饼干摇尾，哥哥眼神从戒备到稍显柔和，这一情境变化让“我”紧张感稍缓。
3.面对他人的行为或行动，人物展开了新的动作/行为
【示例】　（2021 新高考Ⅰ卷，Para. 2）The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.When their mother saw the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her， she was very surprised.It was not only the gift， but the love of the children for her that moved her very much.The two children could finish cooking a breakfast， which she didn’t expect.The children said loudly，“Happy Mother’s Day!” Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them again and again.
分析：续写第二段中，当双胞胎叫醒母亲（woke their mother up）后，母亲的动作首先有“saw”和“was very surprised”，之后在双胞胎发出节日问候“Happy Mother’s Day”时，母亲的动作有“hugged”和“kissed”。这种“动作主动应对”模式在续写的故事情节冲突拓展过程中是比较重要的，因为动作的变化往往承载了人物对情节中矛盾冲突的回应模式及态度。
4.情况好转或情境向好，人物突然有了一个想法
【示例】　（2020 7月浙江卷，Para. 2）At that very moment， the helicopter arrived.My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to be saved.Elli used pepper spray again to buy us enough time.But this time the bear became more alert.He regarded us with the merciless necessity of hunger， so we throw all the food we have.He then turned away and started devouring.As we were climbing the rope ladder， Elli prayed a thousand times to show thankfulness for being safe and sound.
分析：续写第二段首句预设了一个新的情境（the helicopter arrived），于是故事主人公的心情好转（My heart leaped with joy），并且当再次遇到熊的攻击时，主人公又有了新的想法（we throw all the food we have），这将故事的冲突与发展带到另一个情境中；此外，当获救后，主人公又开始感谢（Elli prayed like thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound）。可见，用新的想法接续“情况好转”可以充分展现人物对整个事件回应过程中的特写镜头。
5.面对他人的鼓励/激励/帮助等，人物找到了解决办法
【示例】　（浙江卷，Para.2）A few minutes later， the other two cyclists arrived.They found the dangerous situation， where three men circled the wolf.Mac’s friends also jumped off their bicycles and joined the fight with the wolf.More and more cars stopped.Some drivers took out the sticks from the cars， and some took out the knives， even the guns towards the wolf.Just at that time， the wolf might feel the people’s threats， so it began to step back.Soon， it ran away off the road and disappeared in the distance.
分析：续写第二段首句提示给出了来帮忙的人（the other two cyclists arrived），之后又不断有人加入（Mac’s friends also jumped off their bicycles/More and more cars stopped），故事中的人物有了一系列与狼对抗的动作，如“circled the wolf”“took out the sticks from the cars”“took out the knives”等，这些将故事中人狼对峙的冲突进一步推向高潮。
6.获得新的成长，人物开始总结，点题并呼应前文
【示例】　（2022 1月浙江卷，Para.2）One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.I felt so sorry to hear that and I thought I should visit him in any case.He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits.I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect it.We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time.Our hard work paid off and Dr. Henderson was very satisfied with our wonderful findings.From this project， we also learned the significance of teammates.Just as the saying goes， “One person can go far， but a group of persons can travel farther.”
分析：续写第二段中主人公最后发现能与队友和谐相处并最终完成了项目（We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time），这引发了主人公的反省，并且主人公的这种体验不断地深入（从“we also learned the significance of teammates”到“a group of persons can travel farther”），充分展现了主人公内心的矛盾冲突从不断激化到出现转机、再到一步步迎刃而解的过程。
掌握这些，读后续写的冲突不再是“硬凑吵架”，而是像多米诺骨牌，一个小细节触发连锁反应，让故事又痛又爽!学生写续写时，先设计好“冲突炸弹”，保证阅卷老师忍不住读完!
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攻克读后续写“冲突”难题，写出精彩故事
　　
　　读后续写里的 “冲突”是故事 “好看” 的关键密码，也是学生
精准把握需要攻克的难点。
一、读后续写冲突创作的三大棘手难题
1. 冲突合理性难把控：不清楚冲突要和原文人物性格、情节伏笔
适配，易写得突兀。比如原文是温柔内敛的主角，续写里突然因
小事激烈吵架，违背 “人设”；或不能发现原文这类伏笔，新冲
突和故事脱节。
2. 冲突层次单一：只会写表面吵架、遇险，不会叠加冲突，因此故事平淡，抓不住读者。
3. 冲突与主题脱节：冲突成了单纯 “制造热闹”，不能为主题服务。比如写亲情故事，冲突是同学吵架，和 “亲情理解” 主题无关，浪费情节。
二、几个冲突突破点，让续写有戏又深刻
1. 面对问题，人物产生的消极或积极情绪
【示例】　（2025·全国一卷，Para.1）I realized it was me who was
at fault.Shame washed over me as I replayed that day.My brother，
hurting and lonely， had trusted me to host， only to feel rejected — all
because I worried about minor messes.Toby wasn’t just a pet； he was
my brother’s lifeline， yet I’d carelessly forced him to choose between
a wet dog and leaving ...
分析：续写第一段呈现“我”意识到错误后的愧疚，回忆哥哥因丧妻
本就伤心和孤独，自己却因聚会顾虑，让哥哥在带狗难题中两难，凸
显“我”的疏忽对哥哥造成的情感伤害以及因忽视哥哥情感需求产生
的自我谴责。
2. 面对复杂的情境，人物产生急迫/复杂的心理
【示例】　（2025·全国一卷，Para.2）With the biscuits my wife had
made， I arrived at my brother’s door.My palms were sweaty as I
knocked， afraid of facing his continued anger.When he opened it，
Toby bounded out first， tail wagging wildly at the sight of the
biscuits.My brother’s eyes were guarded but softened a bit as he saw
me.He stared at me for a moment， then pulled me into a hug.
分析：续写第二段首句提示语提供一个新的情景，即带饼干到哥哥家
登门道歉，这让主人翁内心冲突加剧。“我”抵达哥哥家时，因担忧
哥哥仍在生气，内心满是忐忑（palms were sweaty体现紧张）；敲门
后，托比兴奋窜出、看到饼干摇尾，哥哥眼神从戒备到稍显柔和，这
一情境变化让“我”紧张感稍缓。
3. 面对他人的行为或行动，人物展开了新的动作/行为
【示例】　（2021·新高考Ⅰ卷，Para. 2）The twins carried the
breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.When their mother saw the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her， she was very
surprised.It was not only the gift， but the love of the children for her
that moved her very much.The two children could finish cooking a
breakfast， which she didn’t expect.The children said loudly，
“Happy Mother’s Day！” Mother hugged them tightly and kissed
them again and again.
分析：续写第二段中，当双胞胎叫醒母亲（woke their mother up）
后，母亲的动作首先有“saw”和“was very surprised”，之后在双胞
胎发出节日问候“Happy Mother’s Day”时，母亲的动作有
“hugged”和“kissed”。这种“动作主动应对”模式在续写的故事
情节冲突拓展过程中是比较重要的，因为动作的变化往往承载了人物
对情节中矛盾冲突的回应模式及态度。
4. 情况好转或情境向好，人物突然有了一个想法
【示例】　（2020·7月浙江卷，Para. 2）At that very moment， the
helicopter arrived.My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to
be saved.Elli used pepper spray again to buy us enough time.But this
time the bear became more alert.He regarded us with the merciless
necessity of hunger， so we throw all the food we have.He then turned
away and started devouring.As we were climbing the rope ladder， Elli
prayed a thousand times to show thankfulness for being safe and
sound.
分析：续写第二段首句预设了一个新的情境（the helicopter arrived），于是故事主人公的心情好转（My heart leaped with joy），并且当再次遇到熊的攻击时，主人公又有了新的想法（we throw all the food we have），这将故事的冲突与发展带到另一个情境中；此外，当获救后，主人公又开始感谢（Elli prayed like thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound）。可见，用新的想法接续“情况好转”可以充分展现人物对整个事件回应过程中的特写镜头。
5. 面对他人的鼓励/激励/帮助等，人物找到了解决办法
【示例】　（浙江卷，Para.2）A few minutes later， the other two
cyclists arrived.They found the dangerous situation， where three men
circled the wolf.Mac’s friends also jumped off their bicycles and
joined the fight with the wolf.More and more cars stopped.Some drivers took out the sticks from the cars， and some took out the knives， even the guns towards the wolf.Just at that time， the wolf might feel the
people’s threats， so it began to step back.Soon， it ran away off the
road and disappeared in the distance.
分析：续写第二段首句提示给出了来帮忙的人（the other two cyclists
arrived），之后又不断有人加入（Mac’s friends also jumped off their
bicycles/More and more cars stopped），故事中的人物有了一系列与狼
对抗的动作，如“circled the wolf”“took out the sticks from the
cars”“took out the knives”等，这些将故事中人狼对峙的冲突进一步
推向高潮。
6. 获得新的成长，人物开始总结，点题并呼应前文
【示例】　（2022·1月浙江卷，Para.2）One day I got word that he
was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.I felt so sorry to hear that
and I thought I should visit him in any case.He was a little surprised to see
me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits.I offered to
do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to
perfect it.We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our
project on time.Our hard work paid off and Dr. Henderson was very
satisfied with our wonderful findings.From this project， we also
learned the significance of teammates.Just as the saying goes， “One
person can go far， but a group of persons can travel farther.”
分析：续写第二段中主人公最后发现能与队友和谐相处并最终完成了
项目（We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on
time），这引发了主人公的反省，并且主人公的这种体验不断地深入
（从“we also learned the significance of teammates”到“a group of
persons can travel farther”），充分展现了主人公内心的矛盾冲突从不
断激化到出现转机、再到一步步迎刃而解的过程。
掌握这些，读后续写的冲突不再是“硬凑吵架”，而是像多米诺骨
牌，一个小细节触发连锁反应，让故事又痛又爽！学生写续写时，先
设计好“冲突炸弹”，保证阅卷老师忍不住读完！
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