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读后续写
方法技巧
1．在读懂原文的基础上，紧扣原文中心，以原文的结局为起点，写出故事情节的发展和变化。
2．对原文故事没有写出的情节展开合理的推想，打开思路。多角度地想象出几种情况或结局，并择优而写。
3．要注意前后照应，符合逻辑，防止自相矛盾。必须与上文紧密联系，使上下文融为一体。
4．原文的主要角色，续文中都要安排“戏”，但不要引进影响事件结局的新角色。
五个一致
注意确保五个一致：
1.要与原文的主题或作者的本来意图保持一致。
2.要与原文的体裁、结构、写作手法保持一致。
3.要与原文在人称，主体时态上保持一致。
4.要与人物的思想行为、性格特点保持一致。
5.要与原文的语言特点和叙事风格保持保持一致。
探讨六要素的意义
when
who
where
why
how
what
确定文章的主体时态
确定发生地点，激活环境词汇
用第几人称叙述，确定“入戏”人物，
各自扮演何种角色
通过逻辑，确定故事发展的可能性
确定故事发展的每个阶段:开始的写作部分
考查点，通过以上要素，确定续写内容
评分原则：
评分时，应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑。具体为：
（1）续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
（2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性，恰当性和多样性。
（3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
评分标准：
—创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高。
—使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，完全不影响理解。
—自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。
读后续写评分原则及标准
……根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
主题及与原文的照应
***如何构建续写情节(logical plotting)
本节重点
Continuation Writing of Narration
记叙文的读后续写
beginning
development
climax 高潮
1. What five elements are there in a naration
Continuation Writing of Naration
Warming-up
5W
2. What does a wonderful story include
ending
The exposition introduces the characters, describes the setting and establishes the problem in the story.
The rising action is where the suspense builds and the problem gets worse and becomes more complicated.
The climax is the turning point in the story. It is usually the most exciting part in the story and the part that makes the reader eager to keep reading.
The falling action is the events that happen after the climax and lead to a resolution.
The resolution is the outcome of the story. It is how things end up or turn out for the characters.
learning tips
Tip 1: Your Chinese learning can help your English learning.
学科能力迁移
跨学科融合
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.
“I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there something I can do to help Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcasesin the back seat and then said, “Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
“No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.”
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm(警报).
It was from the bank. There had been a robbery!
Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.
She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that ” He thought. “The suitcase! She thinks I’m the bank thief!”
Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.
What's the style of the passage
Narration (记叙文)
B. Exposition (说明文)
C. Argumentation (议论文)
who
when
where
what
how
why
1. Read for main idea--5w questions
Step 1. Analyse the former part
of the story 解读前文
Analyse the former part of the story解读前文
Read for main idea--5w questions who
when
where
what
Why
1. Arthur helped a young man to carry a suitcase.
2. A bank robbery happened.
3. Arthur thought the young woman mistook him
as the bank thief and started to run.
1. The young man couldn’t get the car moving.
2. A bank robbery just happened and he was
carrying a suitcase.
Arthur, a young man
One day when Arthur was on the way to work.
Park Avenue near the First National Bank
Main idea
One day, at Park Avenue, Arthur helped a young man carry a _______ when he was on the way to work. Suddenly, he heard the sound of an alarm and found a _______ happened in the bank. When a young woman looked at his suitcase, he thought he might be _________ for the bank thief …
suitcase
robbery
mistaken
Step 2. Logical Plotting with the given key words
情节推理和关键词协同
Paragraph 1:
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop! ”……
Paragraph 2:
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur…….
Tip1: Focus on the given sentence of paragraph2 first because some information in it must be mentioned in paragraph 1.
Tip2: Make use of the key words in the given sentences to infer more information.
Para1: As he was running, Arthur heard the
young man shouting behind, “stop, stop!”
Arthur
the young man
the taxi driver…
purpose
dialogue
feelings
destination…
Para2: The taxi stopped in front of the Police
Station and Arthur……
Arthur
the policeman
the real robber…
dialogue
response
truth…
What kind of ending would you prefer for this story
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. …
Tip3: Sometimes, the general key word can guide us to imagine reasonably.
surprising
interesting
feelings:
actions:
surroundings:
transitional words:
Task: Group work for the ending of the story
Step 3. Vivid Writing
Writing Criteria(评价标准):
1. Your story should be well connected to the given passage and the beginnings of the two paragraphs.
2. Your story should be well organized with at least 5 of the 10 given underlined words. Do remember to underline the key words used in your writing.
3.Your writing should be rich in vocabulary, grammar items and sentence patterns.
4. Your story should be coherent(连贯)，logical and reasonable.
连贯性
逻辑性
合理性
丰富性
融合性
准确性
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Task: Group creation work for the ending of the story
Show Time
Appreciate your classmates’ articles and learn from each other.
Paragraph 1:
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop! ” “Give my suitcase back to me!” Hearing this, Arthur immediately realized that the young man was the bank thief. So he continued running until he stopped a taxi. Then he quickly got into it and sat in the back seat. Out of breath, Arthur said to the taxi driver, “Please go to the Police Station as soon as possible. I have a robbery to report to the policeman.” The moment the taxi driver got the request, he drove straight to the police station without hesitation.
add some details
Use different structures
Proper linking words
Language appreciation
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur ran into it, shouting, “There is a bank robbery and I know who the bank thief is.” On hearing Arthur’s story, the policeman decided to head for the bank to investigate the case. However, Just at that moment, the young man came to the police station in a hurry. Out of breath, he told the whole story. As a matter of fact, he was not the bank thief and what in the suitcase were only some clothes. How embarrassed Arthur was when he learned the truth!
add some details
Proper linking words
Use different structures
How to complete a narrative article
Step one: Analyse the given passage.
(who; when; where; what; why; how)
Step two: logical plotting
(the plot, the underlined words, the given two sentences, reasonable ending)
Step three: vivid writing
(linking words, details, sentence structures)
Summary
Practice makes perfect!
You do, you get!
Wish you a pleasant journey of learning English!
He met her at a party. She was outstanding. Many guys were after her, while he was average looking, shy and awkward. After the party, he invited her for coffee. She was surprised, but out of politeness, she accepted his invitation to go on a date.
As they sat in a nice coffee shop, he was too nervous to say anything and she felt uncomfortable. Suddenly, he asked the waiter, “Could you please give me some salt I'd like to put it in my coffee."
They stared at him wtih a strange look! His face turned red, but when the salt came, he put it in his coffee and drank it. Curious, she asked, "Why this unusual habit " He took a couple of sips and replied, "When I was a little boy, I lived near the sea. I liked playing on the sea. I could feel the taste of the sea, just like the taste of salty coffee. Now every time I have the salty coffee, I always think of my childhood and my hometown. I miss it and my parents, who are still there."
典例分析
She was deeply moved. A man who can admit that he's homesick must love his home and care about his family. He must be responsible. She talked too, about her faraway hometown, her childhood and her family. That was a really nice talk, also a beautiful beginning of their love story.
They continued to date. She found that he met all her requirements. He was tolerant, kind, warm and careful. He was such a good man and had it not been for the salt in the coffee, she’d never have really known him!
The rest of the story was just like any other beautiful love story---they married and lived happily together. And every time she made coffee for him, she put in some salt, the way he liked it.
After 40 years, he passed away and left her a letter which said:
Para 1: My dearest, please forgive me for my cheating you all the time. Do you still remember our first date in the cafe ________________________
Para 2: She was shocked by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated. ______________________________________________________________
典例分析
1. 解读文本，奠定续写基础
***读---（plots+language+clues）
内容---who, when, where,
what(He met her at a party and finally got married. Before death, he left her a letter asking for forgiving.)
why+how(续写内容)
线索/意图---（多为结尾或主旨服务）
...He was tolerant, kind, warm and careful. He was such a good man...
...And every time she made coffee for him, she put in some salt, the way he liked it. After 40 years, he passed away and left her a letter...
2. 依据两段首句推理情节发展
两个段首句是重要的续写提示，在很大程度上指明了情节的发展方向。对段首句分析，进行设问，可有效地推理续写的主要情节。
第一段---三个逻辑上的衔接（原文+段首句+第二段段首句）
第二段---关注与文章开头的遥相呼应（线索/意图），根据具体语境弘扬真善美
2. 依据两段首句推理情节发展---（第一段）
Para 1: My dearest, please forgive me for my cheating you all the time. Do you still remember our first date in the cafe __________
Para 2: She was shocked by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated. ______________________________________________
对第一段段首句进行设问：
What happened at their first date in the cafe
What did he do to cheat her and why did he cheat her
Why did he cheat her all the 40 years
2. 依据两段首句推理情节发展---（第二段）
Para 2: She was shocked by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated. ______________________________________________
对第二段段首句进行设问：
Would she forgive him for his life-long lie
Why or why not
She broke down, regretting her naive decision to marry him. Never would she forgive him and never would she marry him if given a second chance.
* Reflecting on what he had done for her in the past 40 years, she began to understand his white lie and chose to forgive him. She would definitely marry him again if given a second chance.
3. 可根据需要合理增加情节
*在不影响主要情节的前提下，可适当合理地增加部分次要情节
*可依据需要增加适当细节描写（环境，心理，外貌等）
3. 可根据需要合理增加情节
第一段可增加的情节：男孩对当时女孩接受他的邀请感到意外，其实他很讨厌和咸咖啡，但为了爱，他忍受了40年；男孩无数次想告知女孩真相，但由于害怕失去最终没能说出口
Actually it was entirely out of my expectation that you accepted my invitation to date. Can you imagine how excited but nervous I was in face of such a charming young girl To be frank, I hated salty coffee. However, each time you made or ordered salty coffee for me out of love, I felt strange and bad in my mouth, but sweet and warm in my heart. I had tried countless times to tell you the truth, but I was afraid of losing you.
3. 可根据需要合理增加情节
第二段可增加的情节：桌子上他们的一张照片勾起了女主对美好过往的回忆，想起了丈夫为这个家做的点点滴滴，她理解并原谅了丈夫
Suddenly, a family photo on the table caught her eyes. No sooner had she seen it than memories came flooding back, those exciting moments when they spent the precious time together, those loving moments when he patiently looked after her during her sickness and those bitter-sweet moments when they had to face hardships bravely.
3. 可根据需要合理增加情节
第二段可增加的情节：女主亲自冲了杯咸咖啡品尝一下，发现其实咸咖啡超级难喝，她想到丈夫竟然默默忍受了40年，最终理解了丈夫默默无私地付出
Suddenly, she rose and walked into the kitchen. Having made a cup of saulty coffee, she smelt it out of curiosity. A strange and bad smell made its way straight into her nose. She hesitated, and then sipped a little. Never had she had such bad coffee. How could he tolerate it for his whole life Immediately, she realized that the man who tolerantly drank salty coffee for 40 years was worth cherishing permanently.
After 40 years, he passed away, leaving her a letter. It said, “My dearest, please forgive the only lie I told you---the salty coffee. Remember the first time we dated I was so nervous that I said salt. Actually I wanted some sugar.” He said many times he wanted to tell her the truth, but he was afraid of losing her. He also told her having her with him was his biggest happiness in his life. If he could live for a second time, he still wanted to marry her.
She was shocked by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated. She wept, with tears down her face, making the paper totally wet. Never had she doubted it. Thinking that every time he drank the strange taste of coffee, her heart ached a lot. Her husband was such a kind-hearted and considerate man that he hid the truth for his whole life. How deeply he loved her! Someday, someone asked her, “What's the taste of salty coffee ” “It's sweet,” she replied.
Summary
1. 读透原文，把握故事发展脉络，根据逻辑预测可能的结尾，择优而选；
2. 分析文章，确定人称，主体时态；
3. 让每个角色入戏，想象出合理情节；
4. 激活话题词汇，使用多样句式。
对学生应试的要求
审题仔细，情节合理；
词汇丰富，句式多样；
过渡自然，结构完整；
卷面清晰，书写优美；

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