资源简介

(共26张PPT)
读后续写
情怀杀！雪地足球兄弟帮：一场20年后的“Snow Bowl”-
友情回忆个人成长类
原文分析
读后续写
原文审读
多篇范文呈现
解题思路分析
读后续写可积累文本
2026届重庆市巴蜀中学高三1月一模考试（月考卷六）阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
This was West Central in the early2000s, a neighborhood of middle-class people born and raised by the tracks, people who never dreamed of leaving. Much has changed since then.Luxury apartments have replaced the rusted trains. It's barely snowed three inches this month.Outside my window, another cold rain slaps Spofford Avenue. The park across the street is empty, a mess of dead-brown grass and dry leaves.In my dreams, though, I see drifts of snow that are deep and blue enough to bury the moon.These are dreams of boyhood, of the gang of neighborhood boys who defined it. Back then, a couple feet of snow meant no school, and we played football every day.Snow Bowls, as I remember them, were wild, violent events, a cross between sport and warfare. Without helmets or pads, we occasionally knocked each other unconscious. We broke wrists and bit ankles.
On snow days, we gathered on the big field behind our high school, where we'd pick teams, four or five a side.The captains were always the same. Matt Moore was a Captain because he was faster and stronger than the rest of us and actually had experience playing organized football. Jimmy White was the other because he brought the football, and he believed supplying the equipment somehow gave him the right.
The games were untimed and there were hardly any rules. We played until the snow melted under our feet, or until someone got seriously hurt. The best Snow Bowls occurred when snow was still falling, covering our tracks and silencing the world around us. In the evenings, we'd play under the field lights, feeling like pros.
Two decades later, I'm the only former Snow Bowler who still resides in Spokane. The ones who moved away like to ask me for updates on home, as if our city is an elderly relative dying from cancer, and I'm the lone caregiver. I always steer (弓|导) our conversations back to the weather, especially the startling lack of snow this winter.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion.
Paragraph 2: We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets.
2、 原文审读 红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，从句斜体；下划线+标黄单词+斜体 为需掌握积累单词、短语；黑体标黄，非谓语；可积累部分为 embody； 注释(定语从句)
2026届重庆市巴蜀中学高三1月一模考试（月考卷六）
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
This was West Central in the early2000s, a neighborhood of middle-class people born and raised by the tracks(过去分词短语做后置定语/独立主格), people who never dreamed of leaving(伏笔). Much has changed since then(过渡句). Luxury apartments have replaced the rusted trains. It's barely snowed three inches this month.
Outside my window, another cold rain slaps Spofford Avenue(无灵主语句). The park across the street is empty, a mess of dead-brown grass and dry leaves(同位语补充描写).In my dreams, though, I see drifts of snow that are deep and blue enough to bury the moon(有点夸张).These are dreams of boyhood, of the gang of neighborhood boys who defined it. Back then, a couple feet of snow meant no school, and we played football every day.
Snow Bowls, as I remember them, were wild, violent events, a cross between sport and warfare. Without helmets or pads, we occasionally knocked each other unconscious. We broke wrists and bit ankles.
On snow days, we gathered on the big field behind our high school, where we'd pick teams, four or five a side.The captains were always the same. Matt Moore was a Captain because he was faster and stronger than the rest of us and actually had experience playing organized football. Jimmy White was the other because he brought the football, and he believed supplying the equipment somehow gave him the right.
The games were untimed and there were hardly any rules. We played until the snow melted under our feet, or until someone got seriously hurt. The best Snow Bowls occurred when snow was still falling, covering our tracks and silencing the world around us(现在分词短语做后置定语). In the evenings, we'd play under the field lights, feeling like pros(现在分词短语做伴随动作).
Two decades later(时间变化), I'm the only former Snow Bowler who still resides in Spokane. The ones who moved away like to ask me for updates on home, as if our city is an elderly relative dying from cancer(现在分词短语做伴随动作), and I'm the lone caregiver. I always steer (弓|导) our conversations back to the weather, especially the startling lack of snow this winter.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion.
Paragraph 2: We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets.
故事山模式 ：
衔接点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
衔接点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
衔接点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
衔接点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。
对提示句P1,P2做逐词逐句的解读，理解其背后深意；
回溯原文，找到对应的文本，确定基本元素，时间，地点，人物，所涉及的物品，细节等信息；
试图对时间线，地点线结合P1,P2的提示句，看是否有所变化，以确定是否需要展开；
构思情节
读懂最后2段尤其是最后1段的信息，合理结合生活实际，构思文章，并完成
成长前的困扰
情境描写+消极情绪的累积→高潮 成长中的蜕变 成长的动机+过程中变化的心情成长后的升华 成长后的收获+积极情绪(喜悦、满足和骄傲等)
动作描写
如何描述
所见
所闻、所说
所思
所做
环境描写
人物描写
语言描写
心理活
动描写
增加细节，展开续写
两种构思方法
“四到一行”
“线索呼应”
看 听 想 说 做
找出线索，前后呼应
“两法六句”
三、原文分析
1. 原文中可直接承接的“伏笔句”
原文句子 伏笔功能
“Much has changed since then.” 现实与过去对比
“It’s barely snowed three inches this month.” 为续写“下雪”埋钩
“In my dreams, though, I see drifts of snow…” 梦想→现实实现
“I always steer our conversations back to the weather.” 天气=情感出口
四、细节内容分析
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 怀旧、内省、敏感的“我” “In my dreams, though, I see…”
情感层次 怀念 → 失落 → 期待 “These are dreams of boyhood…”
关键情节点 Snow Bowls → 城市变化 → 下雪 “Two decades later…”
语言特色 长句、比喻、意象化描写 “deep and blue enough to bury the moon”
关键词分析 snow / dreams / boys / weather 全文反复出现
心理描写 对过去的执念与眷恋 “I always steer our conversations…”
动作描写 打雪仗、聚集、比赛 “we played football every day”
环境描写 冷雨、空公园、灯光球场 “another cold rain slaps…”
隐含主题 成长、时间、失去与保留 整体回忆结构
情感转折 从现实冷清转向记忆温暖 梦境与现实对照
空间转换 窗外 → 球场 → 城市 场景不断切换
时间过渡 童年 → 二十年后 → 当下 “Two decades later…”
五、续写内容设计“模板式建议”
Paragraph 1 可写要点
reunion 的提出 → 勾起旧回忆
联系旧友（不具体描写新人物）
怀疑：“即使重聚，Snow Bowls 还能回来吗？”
Paragraph 2 可写要点
雪突然降临（呼应全文）
集体反应：惊讶、沉默、笑
象征升华：童年虽远，但从未消失
教师总结金句
This is not a story about snow.
It is a story about time, memory, and the things that briefly return to remind us who we once were.
动作描写
He paused for a moment, fingers hovering over the phone screen.他停顿了一下，手指悬在手机屏幕上方。
I leaned back in my chair, staring out of the rain-streaked window.我靠在椅子上，望着被雨水打湿的窗外。
A slow smile spread across my face as the memories returned.当记忆涌上心头时，我的脸上慢慢浮现出笑容。
I scrolled through old names, some familiar, some almost forgotten.我滑动着那些熟悉又几乎被遗忘的名字。
We stood there silently, watching the first flakes touch the ground.我们静静地站着，看着第一片雪花落地。
Someone laughed softly, breaking the long silence.
有人轻声笑了出来，打破了长久的沉默。
I pulled my coat tighter as the cold air brushed past me.
冷风掠过，我把外套裹得更紧。
Heads tilted upward, as if we were boys again.
我们仰起头，仿佛又回到了少年时代。
I stepped outside without thinking, drawn by something familiar.
我几乎没多想就走了出去，被一种熟悉的感觉吸引着。
We exchanged glances, saying more without words than with them.
我们彼此对视，无声却胜过千言万语。
心理描写
The idea stirred something deep inside me.
这个想法在我内心深处激起了波澜。
A wave of nostalgia washed over me.
一阵怀旧的情绪涌上心头。
Part of me longed to go back, while another part hesitated.
我的一部分渴望回到过去，另一部分却犹豫不前。
I wondered whether time had changed us more than the city itself.
我不禁怀疑，时间是否比这座城市改变了我们更多。
The past suddenly felt closer than it had in years.
过去突然变得比这些年任何时候都更近。
For a moment, the years between then and now seemed to disappear.
有那么一瞬间，过去与现在之间的岁月仿佛消失了。
I felt both warmth and sadness at the same time.
温暖与伤感同时涌上心头。
The silence carried more meaning than words ever could.
那种沉默比任何语言都更有力量。
I realized some memories never truly fade.我意识到，有些记忆从未真正消失。
It wasn’t about the reunion itself, but what it represented.重要的不是重聚本身，而是它所象征的意义。
环境描写
The cold rain had finally given way to falling snow.
冷雨终于让位给了飘落的雪花。
The streetlights glowed softly through the thickening snow.
路灯在渐密的雪幕中散发出柔和的光。
The city seemed quieter, as if holding its breath.
城市仿佛屏住了呼吸，变得格外安静。
Snowflakes drifted down, erasing the lines of the past.
雪花缓缓落下，抹去了过去的痕迹。
The empty park slowly turned white before our eyes.
空荡的公园在我们眼前渐渐变白。
The familiar streets looked different under a blanket of snow.
熟悉的街道在雪的覆盖下变得陌生。
The air felt sharp, clean, and strangely comforting.
空气清冽而干净，带着一种奇异的安慰感。
Footsteps softened as the snow covered the ground.积雪让脚步声变得轻柔。
The world seemed smaller, closer, and more personal.世界仿佛变小了，也更亲近了。
For the first time in years, winter felt real again.多年来第一次，冬天重新变得真实起来。
词汇的高级替换
① “想 / 记起”
remember → recall / recollect / bring back
think of → reflect on
memory → reminiscence
② “改变”
change → transform / alter / reshape
different → unrecognizable / unfamiliar
③ “情感”
sad → bittersweet / heavy-hearted
happy → content / quietly joyful
surprised → taken aback
④ “看 / 感觉”
see → catch sight of / notice
feel → sense / experience
地道搭配
a wave of + 情绪名词
a wave of nostalgia / relief / sadness
抽象情绪具象化，高分标志
give way to + 新状态
rain gave way to snow
常用于环境或情节转折
for a moment / for the first time in years
时间压缩，制造情绪张力
as if + 过去状态
as if we were boys again
怀旧类续写必杀结构
not … but …
not about the reunion, but what it represented
生词与短语
1 nostalgia
词性：n.
词义：怀旧，思乡
近义词：longing, sentimentality
反义词：indifference
例句：A sense of nostalgia filled the room.
The photo stirred deep nostalgia in him.
2 linger
词性：v.
词义：逗留；挥之不去
近义词：remain, stay
反义词：fade, vanish
例句：The memory lingered long after the call ended.
A smile lingered on her face.
3 drift
词性：v.词义：缓缓移动 / 飘落
近义词：float, glide反义词：rush
例句：Snowflakes drifted through the air.
His thoughts drifted back to childhood.
4reunite
词性：v.词义：重聚近义词：gather again
反义词：separate例句：Old friends reunited after many years.
The idea was to reunite the group.
5symbolize
词性：v.
词义：象征
近义词：represent, stand for
反义词：conceal
例句：The snow symbolized a return to the past.
The event symbolized change.
六、 Possible Versions（4）Version 1 Paragraph 1
Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion.
The suggestion spread quickly, pulling us out of our separate lives and back into a shared past(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Messages piled up, half jokes and half disbelief, until plans began to take shape. When we finally gathered, time seemed to soften its grip(无灵主语句). Familiar faces looked older, yet strangely unchanged. Matt still carried himself with the quiet confidence of a captain, and Jimmy, true to form, talked more than anyone else. We laughed about jobs, families, and aches that had replaced bruises. Someone mentioned the weather, and I repeated my usual complaint about Spokane winters losing their edge. Outside, the sky hung low and gray(无灵主语句), as if listening. We were mid-conversation when the room suddenly went quiet. Someone pointed toward the window, voice rising with surprise(独立主格)—snow was falling at last.
Paragraph 2
We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets.
Without a word, we headed toward the old field behind our high school, moving(现在分词做伴随动作)slower than we once had but smiling all the same. Jimmy brought out a football we still didn’t know from where, and Matt naturally took charge, keeping things simple(现在分词短语做伴随动作). No tackling, no rushing—just passing, laughing, and catching our breath. For a short while, the years loosened their hold(无灵主语句). Eventually, the cold crept in, reminding us of our limits.(现在分词短语做伴随动作) We dusted off the snow and went our separate ways. Later that night, back home, I stood by my window watching the snowfall settle. Somewhere out there, I imagined new boys choosing teams. The snow would melt, but the memory stayed, warm and quietly complete.
Version 2
Paragraph 1
Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion.
The idea felt unreal at first, like a message meant for someone else(过去分词做后置定语). Yet replies came quickly(倒装句), filled with excitement and hesitation in equal measure(过去分词做后置定语). When we met, the years between us shrank in unexpected ways. We noticed the changes—slower steps, softer laughter—but also the familiar rhythms beneath them. Matt still listened more than he spoke. Jimmy still claimed responsibility for anything involving a football. Stories circled the room(无灵主语句), touching briefly on the past(现在分词短语做后置定语)before drifting back to the present. I joked about how winters used to be colder, louder, better. The sky outside darkened, the rain thinning into something quieter(独立主格). Just as someone teased me for always talking about snow, a shout cut through the room(无灵主语句). We turned together. Snow was falling.
Paragraph 2
We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets.
It felt natural to walk toward the field we all remembered, even if we no longer ran. The Snow Bowl game we played now was careful and slow—short passes, easy catches, plenty of pauses. No one needed rules explained(过去分词短语做后置定语). We were there to feel it, not to prove anything. After a while, the cold settled into our bones, and we laughed at how quickly it chased us away. I drove home alone, snow brushing the windshield(独立主格). Parking outside my house(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I sat for a moment, letting the quiet sink in(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The snow didn’t just bring back our youth, my memory of boyhood; it reminded me of our friendship, feeling young again, even if only for a moment.
Version 3
Paragraph 1
Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion. At first, it sounded unreal, like a joke that had arrived twenty years too late. Still, the group chat grew active, filled with familiar names and unexpected enthusiasm(过去分词做后置定语). When we finally met, the years between us seemed to shrink with every shared story. We talked about work and families, about how the city had changed, and about how strange it felt to be back. Someone mentioned how winters used to feel longer, colder, more exciting. I laughed and said Spokane hardly saw real snow anymore. The words had barely left my mouth(无灵主语句) when a voice cut through the room, surprised and almost childlike(adj做补语), announcing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that snow had begun to fall outside.
Paragraph 2
We hurried outside, and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets. The sight alone felt like a gift. Before anyone could think better of it, we headed toward the familiar field following our Captain Matt, where countless afternoons had once disappeared. We tossed the football Jimmy had brought back and forth, moving carefully, aware of stiff joints and tired legs(adj做主语补语). There was no tackling, no competition—just laughter and breath rising in white clouds(独立主格). After a short while, the cold pushed us back(无灵主语句). Later, sitting alone at home(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I watched the snow continue to fall. I thought about how youth fades, but certain moments return when least expected. With a smile touching my lip, I realized that youth doesn’t stay, but friendships leave marks that time can’t erase. For this evening, snow had brought it all back.
【参考范文】
Last weekend, someone floated the idea of a 20-year high school reunion. At first, we hesitated, but within hours the group chat lit up with yeses. And as if to sweeten the deal(状从压缩), the forecast called for lots of snow in Spokane(为后文伏笔). Flights were booked, and by this weekend we were finally together again, grinning at familiar faces(现在分词短语做伴随动作) that time had edited but not erased(无灵主语句). Matt was still faster and stronger than the rest of us. Some of us had thinning hair and others had beer bellies and high blood pressure(真是把杀猪刀), but we still looked like boys in each other's eyes. We traded stories, and I complained — again — about the lack of snow, until suddenly someone shouted, “ It's snowing! ”
We hurried outside , and sure enough, snow was coming down in thick sheets . We erupted with joy. Jimmy White produced a football, of course, and we made it to the big field behind our high school. Matt and Jimmy were still captains. Too old to tackle(adj做主语补语), we wrapped each other in bear hugs, squeezing the breath out of one another's lungs(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Everyone laughed. Eventually, the cold won, and we drifted back inside, clapping snow from our sleeves(现在分词短语做伴随动作). Later, as I drove home, I found myself scanning vacant lots and schoolyards, imagining some new crew picking teams for a Snow Bowl(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The snow returned for the weekend and so did my boyhood.


环境描写
高分技巧
情绪描写
心理描写
介词+情绪词，in/with/out of /to
无灵主语句
状语从句/定语从句
非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作
副词或形容词做状语；adv,或 a.+ a.
强调/倒装/感叹句
独立主格，with复合结构
非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作
亮点动词; mirror/ linger / echo etc.

展开更多......

收起↑