资源简介

(共25张PPT)
An Elephant at My Door
一场人象奇缘的
构思、语言与赏析
01
写作思路深度解析
02
高级语言表达汇总
03
范文展示与标注
04
多维度文本赏析
目录
第二节（满分 25 分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
There was a knock at the door. It was a delivery man. “Sign here, please,” he said. I signed. “It’s for you,” he added, and handed me an elephant. Never in my wildest dreams could I have imagined receiving an elephant, and he couldn’t be one of those prizes I had won in a contest, because I had never got involved in those. But the elephant was addressed correctly, and the shipping charges had been paid in full.
“Is this a shipping error And I don’t want him,” I said, but the delivery man was firm: I had signed; the elephant was mine. I had to keep him.
And so began my life with the elephant. The first few days I kept him in the apartment, but it was hard for him to get up and down the stairs when he needed a breath of air and he couldn’t fit in the elevator. Besides, he took up the rest of my dining room.
Then I tried putting him in the garage of the building, but other neighbors complained. Each was allowed one parking space. I had to choose between my car and the elephant. So I parked the elephant in the garage and left my car out on the street.
I did not have enough money to buy gas and fifty pounds of food a day for the elephant, so I began driving the elephant to work in the morning. He was most kind, and, as it turned out, much faster and more comfortable than a bus.
I outfitted him with an elegant blanket, but even so, the first few days I was embarrassed when I went out with him. Everyone pointed at me. Many people laughed. “Look at that crazy man with the elephant,” they said. And the traffic police gave me such dirty looks that I was ashamed. I would leave the elephant in the office parking lot, and then pick him up at the end of the day. He always waited for me patiently, without complaining.
注意：
(1) 续写词数应为 150 个左右；(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
续写开头：
Being clever, good-natured and very handsome, he became my best friend soon.
It was the most enjoyable time of my life, but unfortunately it had to end.
写作思路深度解析
拆解两段续写的情节构建与情感脉络，揭示从友谊升温到温情告别的完整故事链。
故事前情（Watch a video）
深入理解两段首句，明确续写核心任务。
第一段首句
01
"Being clever, good-natured and very handsome, he became my best friend soon."
第二段首句
02
"It was the most enjoyable time of my life, but unfortunately it had to end."
题目要求回顾
围绕人象互动，描绘一段从陌生到亲密的友谊历程。
核心主题
友谊的升温与信任的建立。
场景一：职场助手
描述大象如何用鼻子灵巧地卷起文件角落，帮助主角拿到高处的资料或者取公文包，展现其聪明才智，化解主角的职场小尴尬。
01
场景二：邻里破冰
讲述大象与小区保安从最初的戒备到后来每天用鼻子轻触问好，甚至配合保安指挥交通的趣事，体现其温和友好的性格。
02
场景三：城市漫步
描绘在黄昏的金色光辉下，大象在城市街道上配合路人合影、礼貌接受投喂的场景，主角从最初的羞怯变为骄傲，人象和谐共处。强化“挚友”设定
03
第一段：友谊升温
构建一个充满情感张力的离别故事，实现主题升华。
动物保护机构的工作人员登门，解释说大象本是计划送往保护区的，因运输失误才流落至此，现在需要带它回归自然。
告别契机
1
大象似乎听懂了什么，用它宽大的前额轻柔地抵住主角的肩膀，眼中闪烁着泪光。主角则将一条陪伴自己多年的旧毯子系在大象的脖子上作为纪念。
情感高潮
2
描写大象一步三回头地离开，最终登上货车。数月后，主角收到保护区寄来的照片，照片上大象在洒满阳光的草原上自由漫步，已融入象群。
圆满结局
3
真正的友谊超越物种界限，虽然相伴是短暂的，但记忆是永恒的。放手，是为了它更好的未来。
主旨升华
4
第二段：温情告别
高级语言表达汇总
将文中亮点语言按功能分类呈现，提升语言迁移能力。
精准传达复杂心绪，使文章情感饱满、富有层次。
温暖与自豪
01
"A warmth welled up in my chest."
(一股暖流涌上心头。)
喜悦与不舍
02
"It was the most enjoyable time of my life."
(那是我生命中最快乐的时光。)
情感表达类
聚焦大象行为细节，体现其灵性与亲和力。
展现灵巧
"He curled the trunk around the file corner and gently lifted it down." (它用鼻子卷起文件一角，轻轻把它拿下来。)
01
表达友好
"He would exchange gentle trunk taps with the security guard." (它会和保安轻轻地用鼻子互相轻触。)
02
配合互动
"He would pose steadily for photos." (它会稳稳地摆好姿势让人拍照。)
03
温柔接受
"He would accept snacks gently from strangers." (它会从陌生人手中温柔地接受零食。)
04
动作描写类
营造强烈画面感，构建故事发生的生动背景。
城市生活图景
"Beneath the golden glow of dusk." (在黄昏金色的光辉下。)
自然理想归宿
"In the sun-dappled grassland." (在阳光斑驳的草原上。)
场景描写类
提炼故事深层立意，引导读者思考人与自然的关系。
"True friendship needs no words." (真正的友谊无需言语。)
关于友谊
01
"It was a fleeting yet eternal bond." (这是一段短暂却又永恒的联系。)
关于成长
02
主旨升华类
范文展示与标注
完整呈现高分范文，并高亮标注关键句式与高级表达。
职场默契 (独立主格结构)
One day, needing a file from a top shelf, I struggled in vain. He, sensing my frustration, gently curled his trunk to take the file down.
邻里友好 (现在分词作状语)
On our walks home, he developed a fun ritual with the security guard, exchanging gentle trunk taps. The guard, initially startled, now welcomed us with a smile.
城市互动 (分词作状语)
Striding steadily through the city, he attracted crowds. But no longer did they laugh; instead, they gathered to take photos, and he happily obliged, making my heart swell with pride.
第一段 Being clever, good-natured and very handsome, he became my best friend soon.
范文一
第二段 It was the most enjoyable time of my life, but unfortunately it had to end.
One day, officials from an animal sanctuary arrived, explaining that he was meant for a reserve, a place where he could roam freely.
告别缘由 (同位语结构)
1
He pressed his forehead against my shoulder softly, his eyes glistening with unshed tears. I draped a well-worn blanket around his neck, a token of our time together.
动人瞬间 (独立主格结构)
2
With a final, lingering look, he was led away. Months later, a photo arrived where he, in a sun-dappled grassland, was embraced by his own kind. I knew he was home.
放手与祝福 (where引导定语从句)
3
范文一
范文二
Being clever, good-natured and very handsome, he became my best friend soon. Draped in the elegant blanket I’d prepared, he accompanied me to work every day, striding steadily along the bustling sidewalks. When waiting for me after work, he would squat down gently, curling his trunk to take the file bag from my hand smoothly. At the office gate, he developed a fun ritual with the security guard—exchanging soft trunk taps every morning, while the guard rewarded him with fresh fruit. Passers-by no longer laughed; instead, they gathered to take photos with him. He would lower his huge body slightly to match kids’ height, accepting snacks timidly and nodding as if to say thanks, which warmed my heart deeply.
范文二
It was the most enjoyable time of my life, but unfortunately it had to end. One day, a staff member from the wildlife reserve showed up, explaining the elephant was a precious rescued animal sent here by mistake due to a shipping label mix-up. Though reluctant, I knew the vast grassland, where he could roam freely with his fellows, was his true home. I presented the well-worn blanket to him as a memento before his departure; he pressed his forehead against my shoulder softly, his eyes glistening with unshed tears. Months later, I received a photo: he stood in a sun-dappled grassland, trunk raised to the sky among his kind. Our bond transcended species, leaving an indelible and warm mark on my memory forever.
多维度文本赏析
从细节、对比、情感和语言四个维度剖析范文高分要素。
大象的灵巧与体贴
squat down gently（轻轻蹲下）、curling his trunk（蜷起鼻子）、take...smoothly（稳稳接过）等动作描写，精准展现出大象的温顺与灵性，让读者仿佛亲眼看见这一暖心场景。
大象的友善与配合
"exchanging gentle trunk taps" (用鼻子轻触) 表现友好。lower his huge body slightly（微微俯下庞大的身躯）、accepting snacks timidly（怯生生地接过零食）的细节，刻画出大象温柔、腼腆的特质，传递出温暖治愈的氛围。
人的情感外化
"My initial awkwardness melted into quiet pride." (尴尬化作自豪) 揭示心理变化。
通过精准的动作刻画，塑造生动可信的形象。
细腻的细节描写
通过前后反差，凸显主题，深化情感表达。
路人态度的转变
从前是 "they laughed" (他们大笑)，可能包含着惊讶或不解。
01
生活场景的对比
"Bustling city sidewalks" (繁华的城市街道) 代表着喧嚣与束缚。
02
这种对比
有力地凸显了人与动物关系的升华，以及“放手”是为了“更好归宿”的主题。
03
巧妙的对比手法
避免直抒胸臆，借助神态与环境描写传递情感。
01
借物抒情
"A warmth welled up in my chest." (暖流涌上心头) 用身体感受表达喜悦。
02
神态传情
"His eyes glistening with unshed tears." (眼中含泪) 胜过千言万语。
03
动作代替语言
"I draped a well-worn blanket around his neck." (系上旧毯) 行动胜过告别的话语。
真挚的情感表达
精选词汇与多样句式结合，提升文章质感。
draped in（披着）、striding steadily（稳步走着）、developed a fun ritual（养成了一个有趣的惯例）、well-worn（磨旧的）、sun-dappled（阳光斑驳的），这些词汇精准且生动，让表达更富画面感。
高级词汇精选
01
文章运用现在分词作伴随状语（curling his trunk to take...）、独立主格结构（his eyes glistening with...）、定语从句（where he could roam freely...）等句式，使文章句式错落有致，符合高考英语写作 “句式多样” 的评分标准。
多样句式结构
02
高级的语言运用
Our bond, forged in the chaos of city life, transcended the boundaries of species, proving that true friendship needs no words—only patience, kindness, and the courage to embrace the unexpected.
我们的羁绊在城市生活的喧嚣中建立，跨越了物种的界限，证明真正的友谊无需言语 —— 只需耐心、善意，以及接纳意外的勇气。

展开更多......

收起↑