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读后续写微技能之
细节描写
To-do list:
● tell the difference between telling and showing
● taste and write “to show ” sentences
● appreciate and assess “to show ”scenes
“To Show,
not to Tell.”
硬核必杀技
A slogan
VS
To Tell
To Show
To show : to write with more sensory(感官的) detais ,allowing your readers to hear,see,taste,touch and smell the same things your characters are experiencing .
概括描写
细节描写
My mother was hopeful.
My mother’s eyes were shining with hope brilliantly.
to tell:
to show:
Example 1
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写作建议：可以对眼、嘴、手、脚等身体部位的具体描述来传递人物的情绪和心理， 会更加传神！
shine v. reflect brightly 发光，闪光
brilliantly adv. very brightly 光亮地，灿烂地
Holy is sad and discouraged.
After coming back home, Holly sat on the sofa motionlessly, crossing her fingers in her lap, with sorrow and regret written on her tear-stained face.
to tell:
to show:
Example 2
亮点:
> 词汇：v. 、adj.及adv.运用
>语法结构： “with+n.+-ed”
写作建议：抓住人物主要特征如动作、神态等详细刻画，运用动词、形容词和副词及高级句式来更加立体地呈现所需要表达的任务、情绪和状态。
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It was raining hard.
Thunders roaring and icy biting rain violently beating
against the windows, I could barely hear any voice.— Christopher was nowhere to be found.
to tell:
to show:
Example 3
写作建议： 环境描写要抓住风雨、河流、阳光等自然景象具体描述，采用拟人的修辞，借助具体动词，会更加生动！
roar v. /n. 咆哮，轰隆 the roar of the traffic
biting adj. 刺骨的 the biting wind
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高级写作词汇
Advanced vocabulary
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Build up your vocabulary
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Whose business
Show Time
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1. He covered his mouth to hide his yawn.
2. Our mouths dropped open in surprise.
3. She folded her arms and stared at him.
4. He jumped to her feet at the news.
5. He sat with his head in his hands.
6. She shivered, rubbing her hands together fiercely.
feelings
actions
tired
surprised
angry
excited
regretful
chilly
高级写作句式
Advanced sentence patterns
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Sharpen your eye
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in mother’s arms
fall asleep
have a deep sleep
sleep soundly
head on the shoulder
within a few seconds
Tom
He felt very tired.
to tell:
to show:
1.Tom _____（get) tired , ____（lie)in Mother’s arms and ____（fall) asleep.
Sharpen your mind
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Tom 感到很累（ exhausted), 就在妈妈怀里睡着了，小脑袋靠在妈妈的肩膀上。
写作高级句式: 1. 三连动（3verbs) 2. 主句+“with 复合结构”
got
lay
fell
2.Tom felt exhausted and slept in Mother’s arms，
_______ his head on her shoulder.
lie v. 撒谎 lied, lied
躺着 lay ,lain
with
Give it a try
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1.Tom felt so ________ that he lay in Mother’s arms , _______ soundly.
写作高级句式: 3.“So+ adj./adv. + be动词or助动词+主语 + that...”
2._____ exhausted did Tom feel that he lay in Mother’s arms , sleeping soundly.
3. 病毒传播得如此快，以致于我们必须勤洗手。
Tom felt so …that…
sleeping
exhausted
So
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____________________, Tom threw himself into Mother’s arms and fell into a deep sleep in a few seconds .
写作建议： 动作描写可以表现人物性格特征，反映其心理活动，推动故事情节。要选择特定场景，抓住人物特定的动作反应，采用活跃具体的动词，搭配高级句式，细致描述，更具画面感！
写作高级句式: 5.双形容词作状语
safe and sound, cold and wet
depressed and worried
delighted and shocked
___________________________(感到又饿又累) , Tom lay in Mother’s arms and fell asleep.
Feeling hungry and exhausted
写作高级句式：4.非谓语动词作状语
”-ing /-ed/ to do ”
to show:
Hungry and exhausted
Summary
1.三连动 （verb1+verb2+and+verb3)
2. 主句+ with复合结构
3“So+ adj./adv.”倒装句
4. 非谓语动词“-ing/-ed/to do”做状语
5.“Two adjectives” 做状语
1. Hearing the news, so ____________ ___________ ___________ (他是如此悲伤) that he drowned sadness in wine.
2. He stood silently, _________ tears __________ (滚落) down his cheeks.
3. Tom __________ (感觉) exhausted, ___________ (躺在) in his mother's arms and __________ asleep.
4. __________ ___________ (感到沮丧)， Jane threw himself on the bed, weeping.
5. To our great joy, the lost child cam back home, _________ and __________ (安然无恙)
sad was he
with
rolling
felt
lay
fell
Feeling depressed
safe
sound
运用本节课所学语法句式，完成下面五个句子（每空只填一词）
1.在经典名著阅读中寻找优美语言，诵读与欣赏。
2.在读后续写精彩范例中汲取描写灵感，背诵与仿写。
3.在平时的阅读文本中挖掘好词佳句，积累与模仿。
4.在日常的读写训练中找到改进方向，打磨与提升。
刘老师支招： “To Show ”修炼法则
advanced vocabulary+advanced sentence patterns
Appreciate and Assess
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No Details , No Story !
No Shows , No Art!
I Learn, I Practice, I Conquer!
学习 + 练习 = 逆袭
Assignment
2021年1月浙江高考首考
2021年1月浙江首考读后续写真题
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节和所给段落开头语进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。续写词数应为150左右。
Pumpkin(南瓜）carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage --I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I'm unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞） forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I'm going to set it down, now," I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straight forward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can't get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
Paragraph 1：
It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer._______________________________________________
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Paragraph 2：
The video was posted the Monday before Halloween. _____________________________________________
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To be continued…
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