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雅礼中学2026届高三月考（五）英语试卷
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Nine-year-old Jaxx Robertson found the world outside his window both fascinating and intimidating(令人生畏的). Diagnosed with autism(自闭症), he often felt most comfortable in the quiet predictability of his own routines. Every Wednesday, however, a special event broke the stillness--- the arrival of the big green bin lorry(垃圾车)on his Greenock street.
From behind the safety of the glass, Jaxx would watch, utterly attracted. He knew the two binmen, Brian and David, by the sound of their laughter and the rhythm of their work. A secret wish grew in his heart-to walk up close to the big green lorry one day, and perhaps even climb aboard like a real binman and take a turn at the wheel.Yet for now, he would simply press his plan against the cool window as they passed, a silent observer of their world.
His mother noticed his quiet fascination. One particularly wet Wednesday, seeing the men working in the rain,she had an idea. "What if we made something warm for them, Jaxx " she suggested gently. "Something to thank them for working in the rain for us."
The idea sparked a light in Jaxx's eyes. As the next Wednesday approached, a new routine was born. In the warmth of their kitchen, Jaxx and his mother prepared simple treat---- shot rolls and packets of biscuits. The carefully wrapped little gifts were waiting on the kitchen table when the bin lorry's familiar noise sounded in the street.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:With his mom's encouragement, Jaxx walked outside.
Paragraph 2: Hearing their story, the local depot(环卫站)manager invited Jaxx for a visit.
2、 原文审读 红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，从句斜体；下划线+标黄单词+斜体 为需掌握积累单词、短语；黑体标黄，非谓语；可积累部分为 embody； 注释(定语从句)
雅礼中学2026届高三月考（五）英语试卷
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Nine-year-old Jaxx Robertson found the world outside his window both fascinating and intimidating(令人生畏的)(伏笔). Diagnosed with autism(自闭症) (过去分词短语做后置定语), he often felt most comfortable in the quiet predictability of his own routines. Every Wednesday, however, a special event broke the stillness(无灵主语句)---- the arrival of the big green bin lorry(垃圾车)on his Greenock street.
From behind the safety of the glass(刻画塑造人物), Jaxx would watch, utterly attracted (过去分词做adj). He knew the two binmen, Brian and David, by the sound of their laughter and the rhythm of their work. A secret wish grew in his heart (无灵主语句)---to walk up close to the big green lorry one day, and perhaps even climb aboard like a real binman and take a turn at the wheel. Yet for now, he would simply press his plan against the cool window as they passed, a silent observer of their world(同位语做伏笔).
His mother noticed his quiet fascination. One particularly wet Wednesday, seeing the men(现在分词短语做伴随动作) working in the rain,she had an idea(伏笔). "What if we made something warm for them, Jaxx " she suggested gently. "Something to thank them for working in the rain for us."
The idea sparked a light in Jaxx's eyes(无灵主语句，伏笔). As the next Wednesday approached, a new routine was born(无灵主语句). In the warmth of their kitchen, Jaxx and his mother prepared simple treat---- shot rolls and packets of biscuits. The carefully wrapped little gifts were waiting on the kitchen table(无灵主语句) when the bin lorry's familiar noise sounded in the street.(无灵主语句)
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:With his mom's encouragement, Jaxx walked outside.
Paragraph 2: Hearing their story, the local depot(环卫站)manager invited Jaxx for a visit.
故事山模式 ：
衔接点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
衔接点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
衔接点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
衔接点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。
对提示句P1,P2做逐词逐句的解读，理解其背后深意；
回溯原文，找到对应的文本，确定基本元素，时间，地点，人物，所涉及的物品，细节等信息；
试图对时间线，地点线结合P1,P2的提示句，看是否有所变化，以确定是否需要展开；
构思情节
读懂最后2段尤其是最后1段的信息，合理结合生活实际，构思文章，并完成
成长前的困扰
情境描写+消极情绪的累积→高潮 成长中的蜕变 成长的动机+过程中变化的心情成长后的升华 成长后的收获+积极情绪(喜悦、满足和骄傲等)
动作描写
如何描述
所见
所闻、所说
所思
所做
环境描写
人物描写
语言描写
心理活
动描写
增加细节，展开续写
两种构思方法
“四到一行”
“线索呼应”
看 听 想 说 做
找出线索，前后呼应
“两法六句”
一、读后续写类型与整体构思
1. 读后续写类型分类
分类角度 判定结果
情节类型 社会温情及个人成长类（暖心社会互动型）
核心主题 理解、善意、接纳、勇气、自我突破
情节走向 由“旁观”→“走出舒适区”→“被社会回应与认可”
结局倾向 正向圆满、情感升华
高考常见母题：
特殊群体 / 弱势视角
小行动引发大温暖
社会善意的正反馈
2. 续写整体思路与布局（两段法）
段落 功能定位 写作任务
第一段 行为突破 + 情绪释放 走出家门 → 递礼物 → 情绪变化 → 他人回应
第二段 事件升级 + 主题升华 邀请参观 → 圆梦体验 → 社会接纳 → 情感收束
3. 构思实施四步法
步骤 操作要点
① 承接 紧扣“encouragement / walked outside”
② 放大 动作细节 + 心理变化（紧张→勇敢）
③ 转折 他人回应（善意放大）
④ 升华 梦想实现 + 社会理解 + 情感总结
4.承接原文
人物性格一致：Jaxx依然敏感、谨慎，但在“母亲支持下”前进
行为合理升级：不能突然“健谈、自信爆表”
情绪变化渐进：害怕→ 犹豫 → 尝试 → 安心
主题呼应：从“隔着玻璃”到“走进世界”
二、故事山
故事阶段 原文 / 续写内容
开端 Jaxx在窗后观察垃圾车
发展 内心渴望靠近，却不敢行动
冲突 自闭症带来的社交与环境焦虑
高潮 走出家门、递出礼物
解决 被理解、被邀请
结局 参观车，梦想被温柔接住
三、伏笔、冲突与隐含线索分析
项目 内容
伏笔 secret wish / press his plan against the window
核心冲突 内心渴望 vs. 行为障碍
隐含线索 母亲的引导、重复出现的“Wednesday”
解决方案 善意行为 → 社会回应 → 自我成长
四、原文情绪、动作与转折点提取
类型 原文体现
心情描写 fascinating and intimidating / utterly attracted
动作描写 watch / press his plan against the window
关键转折 mother had an idea
情绪转向 idea sparked a light in Jaxx’s eyes
五、读后续写分析总表
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 内向、敏感、渴望靠近社会 felt most comfortable in routines
情感层次 好奇 → 渴望 → 犹豫 → 期待 utterly attracted / secret wish
关键情节点 母亲提出“感谢”想法 she had an idea
语言特色 温和、细腻、富有画面感 quiet predictability
关键词分析 routine / safety / warmth from behind the safety
心理描写 对外界的畏惧与向往并存 intimidating
动作描写 观察、准备礼物 watch / prepared treats
环境描写 安静的家 vs. 湿冷的街道 wet Wednesday
隐含主题 善意是最安全的桥梁 something to thank them
情感转折 从“旁观”到“参与” new routine was born
空间转换 窗内 → 户外 → 环卫站 window → outside
时间过渡 每周三形成节奏感 Every Wednesday
六、续写设计
第一段：
多写慢动作（hesitated, clutched, took a deep breath）
用“母亲眼神 / 点头”作为心理支点
第二段：
场景升级（驾驶室、制服、方向盘）
结尾回扣主题：世界并不总是可怕的
七、动作、环境、心理描写
动作描写
He hesitated at the doorway, his fingers tightly gripping the edge of his coat.
他在门口犹豫着，手指紧紧攥着外套边缘。
Taking a deep breath, he forced himself to take a small step forward.
他深吸一口气，逼自己向前迈出一小步。
He held out the bag with trembling hands.
他用微微颤抖的双手递出袋子。
His feet felt heavy, as if glued to the ground.
他的脚仿佛被粘在地上，沉重得无法移动。
He slowly lifted his head and met their eyes for the first time.
他慢慢抬起头，第一次与他们对视。
He followed them onto the lorry, his steps cautious but determined.
他跟着他们登上垃圾车，步伐小心却坚定。
He nodded slightly, unable to find the right words.
他轻轻点头，却找不到合适的语言。
His shoulders relaxed as he sensed their kindness.
当他感受到善意时，肩膀渐渐放松下来。
He clutched the gift closer to his chest, gathering courage.
他把礼物抱得更紧，积攒勇气。
A shy smile crept across his face.
一抹羞涩的微笑悄悄爬上他的脸。
心理描写
His heart pounded wildly as the world outside suddenly felt too big.
当外面的世界突然显得过于庞大时，他的心狂跳不止。
Fear and excitement battled within him.
恐惧与兴奋在他心中交织。
He longed to step forward, yet anxiety held him back.
他渴望向前，却被焦虑牵制。
A wave of uncertainty washed over him.
一阵不安涌上心头.
He felt exposed, as if everyone could see his nervousness.
他感觉自己毫无遮掩，仿佛所有人都能看出他的紧张。
Warmth spread through him when he realized he was not being judged.
当他意识到没有人评判他时，一股温暖在心中蔓延。
For the first time, the outside world didn’t seem so frightening.
第一次，外面的世界不再那么可怕。
Relief replaced tension little by little.
紧张逐渐被放松取代。
Pride quietly rose within him for having tried.
因为尝试过，他的心中悄然升起自豪感。
He felt seen, understood, and accepted.
他感到被看见、被理解、被接纳。
环境描写
Rain tapped softly against the pavement, blurring the street.
雨水轻敲着人行道，使街道变得模糊。
The grey sky hung low, wrapping the street in silence.
灰色的天空低垂，笼罩着整条街。
Steam rose from the lorry as it paused by the curb.
垃圾车停在路边，热气缓缓升起。
The familiar rumble of the engine broke the quiet morning.
熟悉的引擎轰鸣打破了清晨的寂静。
The warmth from the kitchen lingered behind him as he stepped outside.
他走出家门，厨房的温暖仍在身后萦绕。
Wet air clung to his skin, making him shiver.
潮湿的空气贴着他的皮肤，让他不禁打了个寒颤。
The street looked different when seen from outside the window.
当他真正走到街上时，街景和窗内所见截然不同。
The depot was alive with sounds and movement.
环卫站里充满了声音与忙碌的身影。
Sunlight filtered through the clouds, soft and reassuring.
阳光穿过云层，柔和而令人安心。
The world felt quieter, kinder, and closer.
世界仿佛变得更安静、更温柔、更贴近。
常见词的高级替换
① “紧张 / 害怕”
nervous → anxious / uneasy / apprehensive / tense / on edge
② “看 / 观察”
look → observe / watch intently / gaze at / peer at / take in
③ “慢慢地”
slowly → hesitantly / cautiously / step by step / with care / at a measured pace
④ “开心 / 温暖”
happy → relieved / comforted / warmed / reassured / encouraged
⑤ “勇气”
courage → bravery / determination / resolve / inner strength / confidence
高频地道搭配
step out of one’s comfort zone
走出舒适区（全文隐含核心）
gather the courage to do sth
鼓起勇气做某事
be drawn to sth
被某物吸引（原文 utterly attracted）
sense the kindness in sb’s eyes
从某人眼神中感受到善意
replace fear with warmth
用温暖取代恐惧（情绪转折万能句）
重点词汇与短语
1. intimidating
词性：adj.
词义：令人生畏的
近义词：frightening, daunting, overwhelming
反义词：comforting, reassuring
例句：The outside world felt intimidating to him.
What once seemed intimidating slowly became familiar.
2. hesitate
词性：v.
词义：犹豫
近义词：pause, falter, waver
反义词：decide, act
例句：He hesitated before stepping forward.
She didn’t hesitate to offer help.
3. fascination
词性：n.
词义：着迷，强烈兴趣
近义词：attraction, interest, obsession
反义词：indifference
例句：His fascination with the lorry never faded.
The child watched with fascination.
4. encouragement
词性：n.
词义：鼓励
近义词：support, reassurance, motivation
反义词：discouragement
例句：With his mother’s encouragement, he stepped outside.
A simple smile offered him encouragement.
5. acceptance
词性：n.
词义：接纳
近义词：recognition, inclusion, understanding
反义词：rejection
例句：He finally felt acceptance from the world.
Acceptance can be life-changing.
适合结尾升华
Sometimes, all it takes is a small step to change a whole world.
Kindness can open doors fear once kept closed.
The world becomes less frightening when met with understanding.
八、 Possible Versions(4)
Version 1
Paragraph 1
With his mom's encouragement, Jaxx walked outside.
Jaxx stepped beyond the doorway that had always marked the boundary of his world. The glass window behind him reflected the place where he usually stood watching, safe and silent(adj做主语补语). Now, standing on the wet pavement(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he felt exposed and uncertain. Clutching the small packaging bag, he focused on the familiar sight of Brian and David, whose laughter he had learned to recognize from indoors. His feet hesitated, but the quiet wish he had carried for so many Wednesdays pushed him forward(无灵主语句). When he finally held out the treats and whispered his thanks, the binmen paused, surprised yet warmly accepting(过去分词及现在分词刻画人物). Their smiles softened the moment(无灵主语句), easing his fear(现在分词短语做伴随动作). As the lorry pulled away, Jaxx realized that the world beyond the window had welcomed him.
Paragraph 2
Hearing their story, the local depot manager invited Jaxx for a visit.
Walking among the green lorries(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Jaxx felt a sense of familiarity mixed with wonder. This was the world he had studied from a distance, now open and alive around him(adj短语做补语). With gentle guidance from Brain and David and his mother’s gentle smile, he climbed into the cab, his hands resting on the steering wheel(独立主格) he had dreamed of touching. The engines, the space, and the people no longer felt overwhelming. Instead, they felt reassuring.(衔接原文人物的刻画) As he and his mother left the depot, Jaxx glanced back, knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作)that the window was no longer a barrier, but simply a memory of how far he had come.
Version 2
Paragraph 1
With his mom's encouragement, Jaxx walked outside.
Once a boy trembling at the thought of outside, Jaxx broke a routine that had kept him safely indoors for years. Wednesdays had always followed the same pattern: standing by the window, watching the lorry come and go. Today felt different. The rain tapped softly around him as he held the small bag tightly against his chest, unsure(adj短语做主语补语)whether he could complete this new step. His eyes stayed fixed on Brian and David, whose familiar movements gave him comfort. After a long pause, he gathered his courage and offered the treats, his voice barely above a whisper(独立主格). Their sincere thanks and patient smiles changed the rhythm of the moment(无灵主语句). For Jaxx, that Wednesday no longer ended at the window, but continued into a shared exchange of kindness.
Paragraph 2
Hearing their story, the local depot manager invited Jaxx for a visit.
At the depot, Wednesdays seemed to take on a new meaning(无灵主语句). Jaxx watched the workers move with purpose, no longer as an observer but as a welcomed guest. With the help of David and Brian, sitting in the driver’s seat(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he felt calm rather than anxious, as if the routine he once admired had slowly opened itself to him. His mom noticed the confidence growing in his quiet posture. From that day on, Wednesdays were no longer just about watching; they became a reminder that new routines can begin with one brave step.
Version 3
Paragraph 1
With his mom's encouragement, Jaxx walked outside.
With his mom’s steady presence beside him, carrying with him a quiet wish that had grown over countless Wednesdays. The street felt louder than the world behind the glass, and his heart beat unevenly as he held the small packaging bag, full of the kindly made treats for the Binmen(adj短语做补语). For a moment, he froze, unsure(adj做主语补语) if his courage would fail him. Yet the memory of watching the binmen week after week gave him strength. He stepped forward and offered the treats, his words simple but sincere(独立主格). Brian and David responded with warmth rather than urgency, allowing him the time(现在分词短语做伴随动作) he needed. Their kindness met his courage halfway, turning a silent wish into a shared moment(现在分词短语做结果状语) Jaxx would never forget.
Paragraph 2
Hearing their story, the local depot manager invited Jaxx for a visit.
Hoping to show him how far that quiet courage could carry him, they even arranged a small welcoming. At the depot, Jaxx stood among the lorries he had once admired in silence. As he sat in the cab, guided patiently by the manager(过去分词做后置定语),accompanied by his mom(过去分词做后置定语), a new feeling settled within him—not excitement alone, but confidence. The world no longer demanded that he hide behind routines or windows. Instead, it waited for him to engage at his own pace. Leaving the depot,(现在分词短语做伴随动作) Jaxx understood that his quiet wish had grown into something stronger: a confidence that connected his inner world to the wider one outside.
Version 4
Paragraph 1: With his mom's encouragement, Jaxx walked outside.
With the cool air brushing against his face(环境描写), his heart raced as the familiar green lorry stood just a few steps away, far closer than it had ever been through the glass. Holding the small bag tightly(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he hesitated, unsure(adj短语做主语补语)whether to move forward or retreat. Sensing his fear(现在分词短语做伴随动作), his mom softly reminded him that he was safe. Gathering his courage(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Jaxx slowly approached the two binmen and held out the treats with trembling hands. For a moment, silence hung in the air(无灵主语句), before warm smiles spread across their faces. Their laughter, once distant, now sounded friendly and close. As they thanked him kindly, Jaxx felt the tension in his body ease. For the first time, the world beyond the window felt welcoming rather than overwhelming.
Paragraph 2: Hearing their story, the local depot manager invited Jaxx for a visit.
Standing among the lorries,(现在分词短语做伴随动作) Jaxx watched with wide eyes as engines rumbled and workers moved with purpose. One of the binmen lifted him into the driver’s seat, letting him gently place his hands on the steering wheel(现在分词短语做伴随动作). A shy smile appeared on his face(无灵主语句), brighter than any(adj短语做补语) he had worn before. With his mom watching proudly nearby, Jaxx listened carefully as they explained how the lorries worked. In that moment, he realized that the world he once feared could also be kind and patient. As they left, Jaxx glanced back at the depot, knowing(现在分词短语做伴随动作) he had taken a small but meaningful step into a bigger, warmer world.
地道搭配
step out of the doorway
gather one’s courage
ease the tension
sound friendly and close
step outside one’s comfort zone
情绪描写亮点
heart raced
felt overwhelming
tension eased
felt welcoming
动作描写亮点
held out the treats
approached slowly
glanced back
升级替换积累
afraid → apprehensive / uneasy
happy → relieved / reassured
look → glance / gaze / watch intently
例句积累
He gathered his courage and took a step forward.
Relief washed over him as he realized he was accepted.
What once seemed frightening now felt familiar.
官方：
With his mom's encouragement, Jaxx walked outside. Clutching the small bag(现在分词短语做伴随动作), he kept his eyes on Brian and David, who paused their work with warm expressions. For a heartbeat,he stood frozen, but the quiet wish to connect, to step beyond his window, pushed him gently forward(无灵主语句)."Thank you... for working in the rain,"he said softly, holding out the treats(现在分词短语做伴随动作). The binmen's faces lit up with genuine surprise and thanks. From that day on, every Wednesday bloomed with shared smiles(无灵主语句)-a weekly rhythm of unique friendship that Jaxx cherished deeply, and one that soon caught the attention of their depot.
Hearing their story,the local depot(环卫站) manager invited Jaxx for a visit. There, among the rows of lorries,his dream came true.Brian helped him climb into the cab, and David guided, his hands on the wide steering wheel of the parked truck(独立主格). Other workers gathered, drawn by his quiet joy(过去分词做原因状语). That day, Jaxx didn't just see the truck; he became part of their world. Before leaving, Jaxx was given a small badge ---- a token of thanks for his kindness.But the truest reward was the confidence quietly growing within him. This special bond, woven from kindness(过去分词做后置定语), turned a weekly hello into a thread(无灵主语句) connecting his quiet world to the wider one outside(现在分词短语做后置定语).
环境描写
高分技巧
情绪描写
心理描写
介词+情绪词，in/with/out of /to
无灵主语句
状语从句/定语从句
非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作
副词或形容词做状语；adv,或 a.+ a.
强调/倒装/感叹句
独立主格，with复合结构
非谓语动词 doing / feeling做伴随动作
亮点动词; mirror/ linger / echo etc.

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