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---构造“动作链”和 “动作面”
让动作描写更生动
Action Description
in Continuation Writing
How many steps are needed to put an elephant into a fridge
Open the door
Put the elephant in the fridge
Close the door
action chain
动作链 action chains
将结果性的动作，分解成更细致的连贯性的几个微动作（通常2-3个），形成动作链，使动作结果过程化。这样的描写更具有画面感，使人物更立体。
Strategy 1: sb. did sth., did sth. and did sth.
动作三连结构
(可添加adv.修饰)
分解动作方法一：庖丁解牛法
把大动作按发生顺序分解成几个小动作
Mr. Bean attempted to cheat in the exam.
环顾四周
靠近同桌
试图瞥一眼答案
During the exam, Mr. Bean looked around, slowly moved towards his deskmate and attempted to glance at his answers.
looked around
moved towards his deskmate
attempted to glance at his answers
动作分解：
pre-action (先前动作)
trans-action (过渡动作)
post-action (后续动作)
The boy jumped into the water for fun.
冲向湖边
脱掉衣服
跳入水中
The boy rushed excitedly to the lake, took off the clothes hurriedly and jumped into the water for fun.
What specific actions should be taken before jumping into the water
rushed to the lake
took off the clothes
jumped into the water
Describe:
She dashed forward, jumped up and hugged the boy tightly.
向前冲
She hugged the boy.
dashed/ rushed forward
跳起来
hugged the boy
拥抱
jumped up
Describe:
He shot the ball.
He ________ toward the basket, _______ high, ______ his arm and ______ the ball.
dashed
jumped
lifted
shot
Describe:
how to eat a spicy strip
I tore up the package, squeezed out one spicy strip, and took a big bite.
撕开包装
挤出一根
大咬一口
tear up the package
squeeze out one spicy strip
take a big bite
1
2
3
Describe:
how to order a taxi
She stopped the car, got into it and told the driver the destination.
stop the car
get into the car
tell the driver the destination
拦下车
上车
告诉司机目的地
1
2
3
Describe:
我走近我爸爸，骄傲地拿出我自己的钱递给他。
双胞胎准备好早餐托盘，加上一张他们做的漂亮的卡片，走出厨房。
I __________ Dad, proudly ___________ my own money and _______ it to him.
The twins _________ the breakfast tray, ______ a beautiful card they had made, and _____________ the kitchen.
approached
took out of
handed
prepared
added
stepped out of
Practice
Determined not to let tragedy happen again, Jonda swiftly _______ into the car, _____ her arms around Sandy’s waist and ______ her out with all her might.
为了不让悲剧再次发生，琼达迅速把手伸进车里，双手环住桑迪的腰，用尽全力将她拉了出来。
reached
held
pulled
He _______________,________________________, and ____________________.
他走上前，拍了拍他的肩膀，轻声提醒道。
Linda走到窗前，打开窗户，往外看夜空。
Linda _________________, ________ and _______________________.
stepped forward
patted him on the shoulder
reminded him softly
came to the window
opened it
looked out at the night sky
分解动作方法二：以点带面法
以一个动作为核心创建几个伴随动作
站在空旷的山上
仰望星空
感受着这份珍贵的和平
stand on the empty mountain
look up into the sky
feel the precious peace
_____________________________, he looked up into the sky,
_______________________.
Strategy 2: doing…, sb. did sth., doing…
Standing on the empty mountain
feeling the precious peace
听到这个好消息，她的妈妈笑了， 温柔地拍了拍她的背。
____________________, her mother smiled, ____________________.
走到舞台上，Jenny瞥了一眼观众，然后深吸了一口气。
____________________, Jenny glanced at the audience, __________________.
Practice
Hearing the good news
patting her back gently
Walking onto the stage
taking a deep breath
__________________________, we sat on the beach,
______________________.
沐浴在温暖的阳光下
坐在沙滩上
享受新鲜的海上空气
be bathed in the warm sunshine
sit on the beach
enjoy the fresh sea air
Strategy 3: done…, sb. did sth., doing…
Bathed in the warm sunshine
enjoying the fresh sea air
Encouraged by his parents, he decided to pursue his dream, promising to become an astronaut.
受到父母的鼓励，他决定追求自己的梦想，承诺成为一名天文学家。
被突如其来的雷暴吓到， Tom紧紧抱住母亲，大声哭泣。
Frightened by the sudden thunderstorm, Tom hugged his mother tightly, crying loudly.
Practice
Strategy 4: sb. did sth., 独立主格
The children ___________________along the sandy beach, _________________________________.
沿着沙滩欢快地跑着
笑声在人群中回荡
run happily along the sandy beach
Laughter lingered around the crowd.
were running happily
laughter lingering around the crowd
主语1 + 谓语，主语2 + 非谓语 (v-ing)
Hearing the words, I laughed, my eyes twinkling/ sparkling/ shining with happiness.
我被他的所作所为深深打动了，泪水情不自禁地夺眶而出。
听到这些话，我笑了起来，眼中闪烁着幸福的光芒。
I was deeply moved by what he had done, tears rolling down without control.
Practice
我们围着篝火坐着，愉快地边谈边笑。
We sat around the camp fire, ____________________________.
Strategy 5: sb. did sth., doing… and doing…
talking and laughing delightedly
孩子们跑进教室，兴奋地笑着，喊着。
The children ran into the classroom, laughing and shouting excitedly.
Xiao Zhang sat there, listening and making some notes.
小张坐在那里，认真聆听并做着一些笔记。
Practice
Strategy 6: sb. did sth., with + n.+ doing…
When mother saw Tom, she hugged him tightly with tears filling her eyes.
He expressed his gratitude to her with tears blurring/ misting his vision.
当妈妈看到Tom时，她紧紧地抱住他，泪水盈满了她的眼眶。
他向她表达了感激之情,泪水模糊了他的视线。
Seeing Tom, mother embraced him tightly with tears welling up in her eyes.
action
scene
emotions
surroundings
inner thoughts
dialogues
分解动作方法三：动静法
---把动作和心理，语言，环境等结合
动作面
把动作链描绘出来以后，主人公的动作会牵扯到语言、心理、情绪、面部表情以及周围他人的反应，这就形成了一种画面感。
Consumed with excitement, mother hugged the twins,
saying “It is the best present I have received.”
心理----非常兴奋
肢体----拥抱
语言----说“这是我收
到的最好的礼物。”
妈妈拥抱双胞胎。
consumed with excitement
hug the twins
say “It is the best present I have received.”
Strategy 7: 情绪心理 + sb. did…, saying/ screaming + “语言”
Consumed/ Overwhelmed/ Overcome with + 情绪名词
Flooded/ Seized by + 情绪名词
adj. 作状语
心理
动作
语言
whispering
murmuring
crying
yelling
shouting
exclaiming
uttering
Flooded by extreme horror, Mary widened her eyes, turned around swiftly and fled away, screaming, “Help!”
Mary 惊恐大叫。
心理----惊恐万分
肢体----睁大眼睛+转身逃走
语言----大喊救命
flooded by extreme horror
widen her eyes, turn around, flee away
scream “help”
心理
动作1
动作2
动作3
语言
Lily 冲出了房间。
_______________, Lily stormed out of the room, _________, “I will not_______________!”
Lily stormed out of the room.
Lily 怒不可遏，冲出房间，尖叫道，
“我是不会道歉的！”
Practice
Boiling with rage
screaming
make an apology
Do you know how to describe an action vividly
Vivid writing
庖丁解牛法----动作链
2. 以点带面法----同时发生表伴随
3. 动静法
Done…, sb. did sth., doing…
sb. did sth., 独立主格
sb. did sth., with + n. + doing…
sb. did A, did B and did C.
情绪心理, + sb. did…, saying/ screaming + “语言”
sb. did sth., doing… and doing…
Doing…, sb. did sth., doing…
Consolidation
Fill in the blanks by applying the writing skills we’ve learned.
Children’s day is coming. Tom’s parents said that they would take him to the zoo. Hearing this, Tom jumped up with excitement. His face lit up and his eyes shone.
The next morning, they set out early. Tom was delighted all the way with the birds singing songs for him. When they got to the zoo, Tom saw many toys on sales at the gate of the zoo. He wanted to buy a car toy. His father wouldn’t buy it for him. Tom cried and rolled on the ground. _________________________________________________________________ _____________________________________________________________________________________________（他父亲又气又恼，怒视着他，想揍他一顿。看到发生的这一幕，他的母亲别无选择，只好给他买了一辆。他顿时欣喜若狂，他拿起汽车，把它放在地上，然后向前推在动物园里。）
There were many lovely animals and people in the zoo. He was attracted by the lions. Suddenly, he couldn’t see his parents. He was so scared that his face turned pale. _______________________________________________.（他不知道接下来该做什么，懊悔的泪水在眼眶里打转。)Fortunately, with the help of a kind person, he found his parents. ___________________________________________.（他内心充满宽慰，跑向父母，紧紧地拥抱他们，并说道：“对不起。”）
Children’s day is coming. Tom’s parents said that they would take him to the zoo. Hearing this, Tom jumped up with excitement. His face lit up and his eyes shone.
The next morning, they set out early. Tom was delighted all the way with the birds singing songs for him. When they got to the zoo, Tom saw many toys on sales at the gate of the zoo. He wanted to buy a car toy. His father wouldn’t buy it for him. Tom cried and rolled on the ground. Angry and annoyed, his father glared at him, wanting to beat him. Seeing what happened, his mother had no choice but to buy one for him. A wild joy took hold of him and he picked up the car, placed it on the ground and pushed it forward in the zoo.)
There were many lovely animals and people in the zoo. He was attracted by the lions. Suddenly, he couldn’t see his parents. He was so scared that his face turned pale. He wondered what to do next, tears of regret welling up in his eyes. Fortunately, with the help of a kind person, he found his parents. Consumed with relief, he ran towards his parents and hugged them tightly, saying “I’m sorry.”
Try to remember the strategies that you have learned in this class and apply them to your continuation writings.

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