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最宝贵的物品是帮助别人所获得的成就感
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was a bright and sunny Saturday morning, and Emily was filled with expectation as she prepared to ride bikes with her friends. The destination was a newly opened park in their town, a place that had gained much excitement and curiosity among the local people. Emily’s bike, a stylish black mountain bike, was her most cherished possession, one she had saved up for over several months to purchase.
Upon arriving at the park, the group was immediately attracted by its breathtaking beauty. The green trees stretched up towards the sky, with their leaves shining in the sunlight. Colorful flowers decorated the landscape, their petals (花瓣) dancing gently in the breeze. The winding paths, lined with charming scenery, waved them to explore and discover the wonders that lay within. Emily and her friends eagerly rode their bikes along these paths, their laughter echoing through the air.
However, their joy was suddenly covered by a loud noise that came from behind Emily. She swiftly turned her head to witness her friend Jack, who had unfortunately fallen off his bike and was now lying on the ground, holding his knee in obvious pain. Emily, without any delay, got off her bike and rushed to Jack’s side. Her voice, with great concern, echoed through the air as she asked, “Are you okay ”
Jack, with his face pale and tears in eyes, shook his head in response. “I think I have injured my knee,” he said, with the pain in his voice. Emily, realizing the bad situation, knew that they needed to seek help immediately. Yet, she was also aware that Jack was in no condition to walk or ride his bike.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Without hesitation , Emily made a quick decision. __________
Paragraph 2:
Shortly after, the rescue arrived. _______________________
读后续写的标准解读
评分 解释 其他
1. 内容丰富（内容完整） 有情节，有细节，有推动，有变化 不拘泥于单一结局，有逻辑，有层次地内容创作
2. 情感基调一致,人物和时态一致 与原文情感氛围匹配，如温暖，感人，正向，正能量 不改变人物性格，不违背原有氛围
3. 合理性（逻辑连贯） 人物行为，心理，对话符合逻辑和人物特征 只要写的内容合理就行，就能得分
4. 衔接自然（语言衔接+情节衔接） 与结尾句无缝衔接，有过渡，有回应，有首尾呼应 不一定局限于一种走向，但是都需要自然铺垫和前后呼应来结尾
如何读？
Read the passage quickly and decide the genre of the passage.
A.narration 记叙文
B.exposition 说明文
C.argumentation议论文
主题
a story
英语阅读的三大主题语境 本文属于哪一个主题语境
人与自我
人与社会
人与自然
人与自我
三大主题语境
学习与生活
做人与做事
社会服务与人际沟通
人与自我
人与社会
文学、艺术与体育
宇宙探索
科学与技术
人与自然
自然生态
环境保护
灾害防范
历史、社会与文化
Analysis of the plot
Para 1: It was a bright and sunny Saturday morning, and Emily was filled with expectation as she prepared to ride bikes with her friends. The destination was a newly opened park in their town, a place that had gained much excitement and curiosity among the local people. Emily’s bike, a stylish （时髦的）black mountain bike, was her most cherished（宝贵的） possession（财产；物品）, one she had saved up for over several months to purchase.
a stylish black mountain bike was her most cherished
possession
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Analysis of the plot
Para 2: Upon arriving at the park, the group was immediately attracted by its breathtaking beauty. The green trees stretched up towards the sky, with their leaves shining in the sunlight. Colorful flowers decorated the landscape, their petals (花瓣) dancing gently in the breeze. The winding paths, lined with charming scenery, waved them to explore and discover the wonders that lay within. Emily and her friends eagerly rode their bikes along these paths, their laughter echoing through the air.
Analysis of the plot
Para 3: However, their joy was suddenly covered by a loud noise that came from behind Emily. She swiftly turned her head to witness her friend Jack, who had unfortunately fallen off his bike and was now lying on the ground, holding his knee in obvious pain. Emily, without any delay, got off her bike and rushed to Jack’s side. Her voice, with great concern, echoed through the air as she asked, “Are you okay ”
回扣
Analysis of the plot
Para 4: Jack, with his face pale and tears in eyes, shook his head in response. “I think I have injured my knee,” he said, with the pain in his voice. Emily, realizing the bad situation, knew that they needed to seek help immediately. Yet, she was also aware that Jack was in no condition to walk or ride his bike.
回扣
Some useful information about the story.
Main characters:
Main ideas:
Emily and Jack
relationship
friends
Emily was riding her cherished mountain bike with her friends. Unfortunately, her friend Jack’s knee was injured, so she made a fast desicion to get help.
续写情节设计：续写步骤
第一步
第二步
第三步
第四步
设计好第一段结尾，留空间衔接第二段，避免写到后面发现没有空间写衔接内容。
设计好第二段结尾升华。
写好与第一段提示句衔接的首句；
写好与第二段提示句衔接的首句。
根据每段内容合理地补充中间细节。
如何想？
Analysis of the coherence
Paragraph 1: Without hesitation, Emily made a quick decision.
衔接：
过渡：
衔接：
What was Emily’s quick decision
What did Emily do for helping Jack What did Emily say to Jack
They waited for the rescue with patience.
Analysis of the coherence
如何想？
Paragraph 2: Shortly after, the rescue arrived.
衔接：
过渡：
主题：
After the rescue arrived, what did the doctors do for Jack
What was the process of the rescue
How did Emily feel after she saw Jack treated by the doctors
From this experience, Emily realised that timely help for Jack would be of importance. Actually, a sense of achievement which came from helping others was her most cherished possession.
根据汉语意思，将下列句子翻译成英语：
Para 1:
1. 她决定向医生寻求帮助，所以她急切地掏出手机，拨打了120寻求帮助。 (pull out; dial 120)
She decided to turn to the doctors for help, so she eagerly pulled out her cellphone and dialed 120 to get help.
2.然后她详细地描述了他们所处的位置和Jack的情况 。 (in details)
Then she described the place where they were staying and the situation about Jack in details.
根据汉语意思，将下列句子翻译成英语：
Para 1:
3. 为什么他们非常需要救护车的原因是Jack膝盖受伤了，不能走也骑不了自行车。
( The reason why...was that...; badly need;)
The reason why they badly needed an ambulance was that Jack injured his knee and was in no condition to walk or ride his bike.
根据汉语意思，将下列句子翻译成英语：
Para 1:
4. 在挂断电话之后，Emily尽最大努力来照顾Jack ，轻声地安慰他, “ 不要担心。救护车很快就到了。”
( hang up; comfort him softly)
After hanging up the phone, Emily tried her best to take care of Jack , comforting him softly, “ Don’t be worried. The ambulance will come soon.”
5. Jack感谢她的及时帮助。他们耐心地等到救援 。 (timely help; with patience)
Jack thanked her for her timely help. They waited for the rescue with patience.
根据汉语意思，将下列句子翻译成英语：
Para 2:
1. 医生们走出救护车，走向Jack并仔细地检查了他的膝盖。 (step out of; ambulance; come up to sb)
Stepping out of the ambulance, the doctors came up to Jack and examined his knee carefully.
2.之后,他们简单地处理了一下伤口。 (treat the wound )
After that, they treated the wound simply.
根据汉语意思，将下列句子翻译成英语：
Para 2:
3.Emily如释重负地站在一旁边。(stand by ; with a relief)
Emily stood by, with a relief .
4.医生们轻轻地把Jack抬上来救护车。 (load ...into... )
The doctors gently loaded Jack into the ambulance.
5. 随着救护车门的关闭，Emily向Jack挥手，希望他能快快好起来。 (with+O+O.C; wave to sb )
With the door of ambulance closed, Emily waved to Jack and hoped he would get well soon.
根据汉语意思，将下列句子翻译成英语：
Para 2:
6.通过这次经历，Emily 意识到对Jack的及时帮助是很重要的。实际上，帮助别人获得的成就感是她最宝贵的物品。 (be of importance; a sense of achievement )
From this experience, Emily realised that timely help for Jack would be of importance . Actually, a sense of achievement which came from helping others was her most cherished possession.
Writing Sample:
Without hesitation, Emily made a quick decision. She decided to turn to the doctors for help, so she eagerly pulled out her cellphone and dialed 120 to get help.Then she described the place where they were staying and the situation about Jack in details.The reason why they badly needed an ambulance was that Jack injured his knee and was in no condition to walk or ride his bike. After hanging up the phone, Emily tried her best to take care of Jack , comforting him softly, “ Don’t be worried. The amulance will come soon.” Jack thanked her for her timely help. They waited for the rescue with patience.
Writing Sample:
Shortly after, the rescue arrived.
Stepping out of the ambulance, the doctors came up to Jack and examined his knee carefully. After that, they treated the wound simply. Emily stood by him with a relief . The doctors gently loaded Jack into the ambulance. With the door of ambulance closed, Emily waved to Jack and hoped would get well soon. From this experience, Emily realised that timely help for Jack would be of importance. Actually, a sense of achievement which came from helping others was her most cherished possession.
Writing Sample:
Without hesitation, Emily made a quick decision. She pulled out her phone and dialed the emergency number, her fingers trembling slightly. She explained where they were and the situation. “My friend has fallen off his bike and hurt his knee. He can’t walk or ride, and we need an ambulance as soon as possible,” she said. After that, Emily tried to keep her voice soothing and comforting, as she gently helped him lean back against a nearby tree, supporting his injured leg with her own.
Shortly after, the rescue arrived. The doctors quickly exited from the ambulance, their faces serious and focused. They approached Jack, asking him questions about his pain and carefully examining his knee. Emily stood by with a mix of relief and anxiety. The doctors gently loaded Jack into the ambulance. As the ambulance doors closed, Emily waved, sending a silent prayer for Jack’s quick recovery. She knew that their adventure had taken an unexpected turn, but she was grateful for the timely actions.
Goodbye!
Thank you!

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