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讲2025高考一卷读后续写
之情绪描写技巧
Ways of Describing Emotions
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience (良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
注意: (1)续写词数应为150个左右； (2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
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In life, it's common to have conflicts with relatives and friends. The key is to learn to handle them correctly.
2025年全国一卷读后续写“兄弟矛盾—和解”的亲情主题，与新人教版（2019）选择性必修第二册Unit 1 Relationships（人际关系） 高度契合，该单元聚焦人际沟通、冲突解决与情感共情，和续写“矛盾—反思—和解”主线完全匹配。此外，必修第三册Unit 2 Morals and Virtues（道德与美德）的包容、谅解主题也呼应。
文 体：记叙文
题 材：亲情与和解
主题语篇：人与自我
Read to set the tone
1. When and where, who did what for what purpose
When
Where
Who
What
Why
P1: My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
P2: There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
Story line and emotional line
After supper, rain came. “I” didn’t want Toby inside. “My” brother left. Later, “I” texted to “my” brother but got a “Not a chance” reply.

Two months later, “I” thought of “my” brother faced health issues and lost his wife. “I” realized “I” hurt him.
My wife and “I” hosted a home-gathering. “my” brother brought his dog Toby, which might knock over kids, so Toby was kept outside.
excited;
busy
worried
embarrassed;
guilty;
sympathetic
uncaring
upset
concerned; worried
2. Why did the author write this passage What did the author want to convey （要考我们什么）
We should be more empathetic and timely resolve conflicts;
We should repair the relationships between family, and family ties is important.
亲属之间的彼此关怀（例如：节日里的意外惊喜、赠送心意礼物、日常暖心问候、长辈教导晚辈生活本领与处世准则、晚辈协助长辈化解难题、家庭成员共同拥有的温馨时光等）；还包含亲属间的矛盾冲突（或是沟通不足，或是陪伴缺失，或是彼此误解等），这类文章需着重融入个人的欣喜、愤怒、悲伤、快乐、恐惧、焦虑、孤独、自豪、愉悦等细腻的情感刻画。
这类以亲情为主题的文章，目的是引导中学生思考怎样构建和谐的家庭关系，从而深刻体会到要珍视亲情，认识到家庭和谐、亲属间的关爱与相互敬重以及高效沟通的重要价值。
家庭亲情话题解读
解题技巧
阶段 情节发展 情绪刻画
第一阶段 矛盾冲突 误解、疏离
第二阶段 反思内省 愧疚、清醒
第三阶段 筹谋行动 忐忑、期待
第四阶段 破冰和解 释怀、温暖
Think to plan your plot.
I realized it was me who was at fault. _________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
五定十句
Paragraph 1 Paragraph 2 1 衔接para1 首句 6 衔接para2 首句
2 7
3 8
4 9 结局（正能量）
5 衔接para2 首句 10 升华主题
Step 3 剩余内容3大补充原则：
1）动作-反应-其他角色反应 所感，所做，所想
2）人物对话及对话后的反应
3）人物心理活动及做出反应
适当用上衔接词：immediately, without hesitation, then, after a while, on arrival, with all the work done, however, instead, on/ upon doing…..
Think to plan your plot.
P7: I realized it was me who was at fault.
P8: With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
What was “my” reflection How was “I” feel
What did “I” decide to do
What preparation did “my” wife and “I” make？
Think to plan your plot.
P8: With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
What did “I” do
What did “I” say
What was “my” brother reaction
What was the ending What lesson did “I” learn？
①angry ②frightened ③depressed ④amused ⑤scared
⑥mad ⑦ delighted ⑧disappointed ⑨annoyed ⑩pleased
frustrated cheerful heartbroken upset fearful
Let’s learn some sentence patterns to describe emotions vividly and accurately.
Two
Useful skills
1.使用无灵主语
2.形容词作状语
Skills learning
I was angry.
无灵主语句：
用无生命的事物来做主语.
(换主语) : “愤怒(的情绪)抓住了我。 ”
(加介短) :“ 一股愤怒(的情绪)抓住了我。”
(加并列): “愤怒与怀疑(的情绪)抓住了我。”
我很愤怒。
Anger seized me.
A wave of anger seized me.
Anger and doubt seized me.
Skill 1: 无灵主语
(加副词): “突然地，一股愤怒(的情绪)抓住了我。”
Suddenly, a wave of anger seized me.
(加时间状从): “突然地，听到那些话时，一股愤怒(的情绪)即刻抓住了我。”
Suddenly, a wave of anger seized me as I heard those words.
Skill 1. 无灵主语:
“a wave/sense of + 情绪名词+动词+sb"+as/when sb do sth
当某人做某事时，一股...情绪涌上心头
例句: 当我听到那些话的那一刻，一种强烈的愤怒感抓住了我。
A strong wave of anger seized me when I heard those words.
情绪名词
sb
动词
时间状从
情绪名词
happiness/joy/delight
anger/annoyance
sadness/sorrow
fear/terror/fright
regret/guilt astonishment/shock
nervousness/anxiety
固定动词
seize 抓住
catch (过去式caught)
strike (过去式struck)
surround 围绕着
take hold of 控制
wash over 袭来
come over 包围/支配
envelop 笼罩
overwhelm 使难以承受
sb
+as/when sb do sth
Skill 1. 无灵主语: 当某人做某事时，一股...情绪涌上心头
“a wave/sense of + 情绪名词+动词+sb"+as/when sb do sth
练习1．(2023·新高考卷Ⅰ) (兴奋和怀疑涌上我心头) when I learned that my essay had ranked first in the contest.
A wave of excitement and doubt washed over me
练习2. (2022全国Ⅰ卷) 当大卫终于下定决心继续赛跑时,我被欣慰和开心给包围了。
when David finally became determined to continue the race.
Consolidation
Relief and delight surrounded me
Skill 1. 无灵主语:
“a wave/sense of + 情绪名词+动词+sb"+as/when sb do sth
大卫继续奔跑。（2022全国1卷)
David kept on running.
“情绪adj1+情绪adj2, sb did sth，doing sth"
感到...和..., 某人做某事1, 并做某事2
大卫信心满满的和充满决心的，继续奔跑。
Confident and determined , David kept on running .
大卫信心满满的和充满决心的，继续奔跑，奋力冲向终点线。
Confident and determined , David kept on running, struggling to reach the finish line.
后加非谓语
前加情绪形容词
Skill 2:形容词作状语
1.既开心又激动
2.既难过又沮丧
3.既紧张又焦虑
4.既担心又害怕
5.既坚定又自信
6.既惊讶又感动
7.既生气又失望
8.既疲倦又饥饿
delighted and excited
sad and frustrated
nervous and anxious
worried and scared
determined and confident
surprised and touched
annoyed and disappointed
exhausted and hungry
Tips: 使用两个意义相近的形容词进行搭配。
Have a try
1. __________________ (感到坚定和受到鼓舞的）, David raised his head , _______（look）at me with gratitude . （2022全国1卷）
____________________(既激动又坚定的) , David waved at me
immediately after crossing the finish line , __________（express）
his happiness and gratitude.（2022全国1卷）
3. _________________(既开心又激动), she finally got the admission letter from her ideal university, _________ (dream)her colorful life in the future . (2023广东一模）
Determined and inspired
Excited and determined
Delighted and excited
looking
expressing
dreaming
Consolidation
“情绪adj1+情绪adj2, sb did sth，doing sth"
感到...和..., 某人做某事1, 并做某事2
Po is surprised, _______its mouth open and eyes __________(widen).
widening
with
The kids _______with joy, _________their arms.
jumped
waving
他把肉扔向狼.
He________ (拿出)the meat, ________(瞄准)the wolf and ______(扔)it straight to the fierce animal.
aimed at
threw
took out
Skill 3: 动作链
“主语+V1，V2 and V3...
主语+ verb, doing
With +doing, 主语+verb.
paragraph 1
第一句 情感描写，使用情感万能句：Sb. felt a sense of+情绪名词+welling up in sb’s heart and surging through sb.
第二句 细节描写，使用非谓语结构：
Doing/Having done/Done by A, 主语+谓语 B, doing C
第三句 细节描写，使用with复合结构
第四句 细节描写，使用倒装句：
No sooner had sb done than sb did
第五句 过渡衔接句，使用从句或形容词作状语
1-4句式顺序可根据需要进行调整
paragraph 2
第一句 情感描写: 情绪名词A was replaced first by 情绪名词B, and then by 情绪名词C
第二句 细节描写
第三句 所感、所悟
第四句 结局（正能量）
第五句 主题升华句，使用强调句/倒装句
适当用上衔接词：immediately, without hesitation, then, after a while, on arrival, with all the work done, however, instead, on/ upon doing…..
其他可供选择的句式：
Not only+部分倒装， but also +陈述句
强调句: It is/was….that/ who…
虚拟语气
without/ but for+n., 主语+would/ could have done
要不是….某人就会….
4. An idea occurred to/ struck/ hit sb…某人突然想到…
5. The sight/ though of+ n. made sb.+ 情感形容词/ filled sb. with + 情感名词
6. adj. and/but adj., sb. did sth.
7. As +n./ adj.+主语+be，主语+谓语.
“反思”主题下的“后悔”与“愧疚”。请把下面的语篇补充完整。（2025年全国I卷）
I realized it was me who was at fault. 1. ___________________________ (我懊悔地低下了头。运用形容词+with的复合结构), I thought how I’d been so focused on worrying about the kids’ safety that I’d ignored my brother’s feelings—especially when lost his wife and had health issues, with Toby as his only comfort. 2. _____________________________ ____________________________________ (如果我当时设身处地为他着想，我就不会让他感到如此不受欢迎。运用虚拟语气), I thought regretfully. 3. ____________________
________(负罪感沉重地压在我的胸口。运用无灵主语句) as I told my wife how sorry I was. With a warm smile, she then went to the kitchen and baked his favorite chocolate chip biscuits—just like our mom used to make, hoping the familiar taste would soften the mood.
Regretful with my head hung low
I wouldn’t have made him feel so unwelcome
If I had put myself in his shoes then,
Guilt weighed heavy on
my chest
考点二
情感描写
“道歉”主题下的“忐忑”与“真诚”。请把下面的语篇补充完整。（2025年全国I卷）
With the biscuits my wife had made tucked in my arm, I arrived at my brother’s door. 4. __________________________________ (我手心冒汗, 心跳加速。运用独立主格结构), I knocked, and Toby’s soft bark from inside made my nerves ease a little. When my brother opened the door, his eyes looked tired, but they softened a little at the sight of the biscuits. “I’m sorry,” 5. ___________________ (我真诚地说。运用in+...+voice结构) before he could speak. “I was selfish that day. I didn’t think about how much Toby means to you, not when you needed someone most.” My brother let out a sigh that carried months of frustration. He stepped aside and let me in. As we sat on his couch, the sweet smell of biscuits filling the air, we talked about mom, about the old days, and about how I’d been wrong. In that moment, I knew we’d finally fixed what I’d broken.
My palms sweaty and my heart beating fast
I said in a sincere voice
THANK YOU
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