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(共18张PPT)
Continuation Writing——
Skills to Form an Action-Chain
and Action-Scene
形成动作链/动作面的技巧
She hugged the boy.
She dashed forward, jumped up and hugged the boy.
hug=_________________+______________+______
run/dash forward
向前猛冲
jump up
hug
在描写动作时，把结果性动作分解成更细致的连贯性的微动作，使动作过程化，形成动作链,给读者画面感。
主语+动作1, 动作2 and 动作3（表示同一个主语，三个动作接连发生）
Skill 1：Action-chain(动作链)
She dashed forward, jumped up and hugged the boy.
句式：
She ate spicy strips （辣条）.
tear up the package撕开包装
squeeze out one strip挤出一根
take a bite咬一口
She tore up the package, squeezed out one strip, and took a bite.
结果性的动作
连贯性的动作
eat=______________________+
__________________________+
__________________________
2021年新高考一卷：兄妹俩想给妈妈做一顿早餐作为母亲节礼物，可是他们把厨房弄的乱七八糟。爸爸得知情况后，没有发火安慰了兄妹？
How did their father comfort them （think of an action chain）
comfort=___________+____________+_________
walk towards them---kneel down---comfort
kneel down---pat them on the shoulders---comfort
touch their heads---look at them with smile---comfort
...
Their father walked towards them, knelt down and comforted, “It doesn’t matter. Let’s do it together”.
Their father knelt down, patted them on the shoulder and comforted, “Time is on our side. Let’s do it together”.
Their father touched their heads, looked at them with smile and comforted, “It’s OK. Let’s do it together”.
我们需要在同一时间，安排多个相机在不同角度拍摄，然后把不同的镜头剪在一起，构成一个饱满的动作面。
---邵田田《中国科技经济新闻数据库》
动作链是一个人的动作的依次连贯。但是若是想要描述更具有画面感，可以通过构造“动作面”来让语言更丰富。比如我们可以从肢体、面部、语言和心理等多个维度来刻画场景。
Mr. Bean attempted to cheat in the exam.
憨豆先生试图在考试中作弊。
Please describe the following picture and video.
During the exam, Mr. Bean looked around, finding everyone writing papers seriously, and he slowly moved towards his deskmate, attempting to glance at his answers.
在考试期间，憨豆先生环顾四周（look around）,发现（find）每个人都在认真写试卷，然后他的身体慢慢地向他同桌移动（move）,试图瞥一眼（glance at）他的答案。
动作分解后的画面：
Skill 2: 丰富动作链，形成动作面
侧重从不同角度描绘同一个画面，让画面“满”起来，使读者在阅读时脑海中自然而然地建构出电影画面。
主语+动作, doing (and doing).
（表示同一个主语，同时发生不同动作，且表主动）
动作面 Action scene
情境：在送妹妹上学的路上遇见朝他们叫的狗。
肢体
面部
语言\心理
脸上露出令人恐惧的表情
捡起一个大石头
希望可以吓跑狗
They picked up a big stone and a look of horror spread across their faces, hoping to scare away the dog.
How did they react （think of an action scene）
面部
肢体
语言/心理
成句：Widening his eyes in extreme horror, he fled away, screaming, “Mom, help!”
他惊恐地瞪大了眼睛，转身就跑，一边尖叫着:“妈妈，救命!”（非谓语+心理短语, 精准谓语动词,语言描写）
Widening his eyes in extreme horror
fled away
screaming, “Mom, help!”
动作面 Action scene
在全班面前进行演讲Tom gave a speech in front of the whole class.
Writing
1.故事情节完整，正能量结局
2.动作描写要形象生动
3.多角度描述动作，形成动作面
4.词数：50词左右
Discussion
1. How did Tom feel before making his speech
2. How did he solve the problem
3. How did the audience react after he finished his speech
4. How did he feel after finishing his speech
Show Time
The things I did 1-5 point(s)
1. I understood and applied action chains/scenes.
2. I built up action scenes properly in my writing.
3. I arranged the plot logically.
4. I used accurate words to describe the actions.
5. I performed well in class.
Evaluation
Tom was very nervous when he stood on the stage. However, an inner voice told him“You can do it well because you have been well-prepared.” So he glanced through the audience off the stage, took a deep breath to calm down, and began his speech. With his speech finished, all the audience burst into thunderous applause with wide eyes. The teacher looked at Tom, nodding with satisfaction and thumbing up at him.
Possible version
Summary
Skills
S+V1, V2 and V3 （表示同一个主语，三个动作接连发生）
S+V, doing (and doing).（表示同一主语同时发生不同动作，且表主动）
Action-chain
Action-scene
Homework：迁移应用
假设Jack误会了最好的朋友Tom说出他的秘密，想与Tom和好。根据下列所给句进行续写。
要求：体现正能量，情节合情合理，字数50字左右。
A few days later, Jack knew that he misunderstood Tom. _________________
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