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The “321” Principle（十句五定法）
Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared..
Para.2 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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3--three cohesive sentences
三衔接
1--one theme sentence
一主题
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2--two parts of transition sentences 两过渡
壹 原文解码
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读原文
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
when (time) 初夏举办小型聚会前 what （conflict 冲突） 筹备聚会，妻子准备零食，“我” 整理后院
where(setting场景) emotional change 期待
who(character) 我、妻子 theme
读原文
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn‘t counted on（依靠；期望；料想到）: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50 pound ball of fire（比喻精力旺盛，充满激情，有时候甚至难以控制的人，尤指小孩儿）. Though friendly, he could easily knock over （撞到） my niece's small boys and my six month old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
when (time) 聚会进行时，哥哥到达后 what （conflict 冲突） 哥哥带狗 Toby 赴约，“我” 因担心狗撞到孩子心狗撞到孩子，要求哥哥看住狗并让其待在后院
where(setting场景) emotional change 担忧、谨慎
who(character) 我、哥哥、Toby theme
读原文
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors.
when (time) 聚会期间，晚饭后 what （conflict 冲突） 起初一切顺利，Toby 在后院消耗精力，后天下雨，大家进屋
where(setting场景) emotional change 平静转突发
who(character) 我、哥哥、众人、Toby theme
读原文
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
when (time) 众人进屋后，因 Toby 去留问题产生分歧时 what （conflict 冲突） 就 Toby 是否进屋陷入尴尬，哥哥最终决定离开
where(setting场景) emotional change 尴尬、不悦
who(character) 我、哥哥 theme
A few days passed, and I hadn‘t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise — a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted（离开）. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over（克服，恢复，原谅） it, I reasoned.（推断）
when (time) 聚会结束几天后 what （conflict 冲突） “我” 联系哥哥希望他再来，遭拒后认为他会消气
where(setting场景) emotional change 意外、不以为意
who(character) 我、哥哥 theme
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience(良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother's shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
when (time) 聚会结束两个月后 what （conflict 冲突） 妻子建议 “我” 联系哥哥，“我” 起初抗拒，后良心不安，换位思考理解哥哥处境及 Toby 对他的意义
where(setting场景) emotional change 愧疚、醒悟
who(character) 我、妻子、哥哥 theme
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我、妻子
我、哥哥、Toby
我、哥哥、众人、Toby
我、哥哥
我、哥哥
我、妻子、哥哥
筹备聚会，妻子准备零食，“我” 整理后院
哥哥带狗 Toby 赴约，“我” 因担心狗撞到孩子，要求哥哥看住狗并让其待在后院
起初一切顺利，Toby 在后院消耗精力，后天下雨，大家进屋
就 Toby 是否进屋陷入尴尬，哥哥最终决定离开
“我” 联系哥哥希望他再来，遭拒后认为他会消气
妻子建议 “我” 联系哥哥，“我” 起初抗拒，后良心不安，换位思考理解哥哥处境及 Toby 对他的意义
初夏举办小型聚会前
聚会进行时，哥哥到达后
聚会期间，晚饭后
众人进屋后，因 Toby 去留问题产生分歧时
聚会结束几天后
聚会结束两个月后
期待
担忧、谨慎
平静转突发
尴尬、不悦
意外、
不以为意
愧疚、醒悟
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I realized it was me who was at fault.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
I realized it was me who was at fault._______________________
本段要详细描写“我”是如何认识到自己错误的，最终内心的愧疚感必须转化为“必须去道歉”的具体行动决心。
① what was my fault
② how did I do
③what did I decide to do and what did we prepare
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.______
本段描写和解场面：抵达时的紧张、真诚的道歉、哥哥渐进的反应，并可以利用Toby的动作作为“催化剂”来打破僵局，最终以一个象征和解的开放式动作（如开门邀请）结尾。
① who answered the door What were their reaction
② what did I say and do What was my brother’s response
③what did we do together
④ what was the theme
忽略哥哥 “妻子去世、健康不佳” 的背景，续写时仅简单道歉，未体现对哥哥情感需求的理解，导致情节单薄。例如：只写 “我向哥哥说对不起”，未提及 Toby 对哥哥的特殊意义，偏离人物动机。
常见误读案例
贰 构思逻辑
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情节构思三原则
逻辑连贯：___________________________________________________________
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细节支撑：___________________________________________________________
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呼应主旨：___________________________________________________________
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“我” 意识到错误后主动道歉，符合前文 “良心不安” 的铺垫；带妻子做的饼干（呼应前文妻子的角色）和对 Toby 的关怀，体现诚意。
通过 Toby 的反应（摇尾巴、嗅饼干）缓和气氛，用哥哥 “眼神软化”“声音沙哑” 等细节展现情绪变化。
结尾以拥抱和解，强调亲情的修复，呼应 “换位思考与包容” 的主题。
续写线索：反思过错——电话留言道歉——约定见面——带饼干登门——拥抱沉默——谈心和解——领悟亲情
叁 语言提升
(how to write)
Paragraph 1
Paragraph 1 ：
I realized it was me who was at fault._______________________
I let them leave in the rain without being understood.
I headed to my brother’s home.
I felt guilty (内疚的）.
词汇：guilty； ashamed；embarrassed； awkward.
How to show guilt in different ways
情绪描写
表情描写（五官）
动作描写（肢体语言）
语言描写
词块和句的积累
scene 1:
Discovering the truth, the old man realized his misjudgment,
he was deeply ashamed of his behavior
A wave of ______ washed over him,
making it hard for him to breathe.
tip1 ：具体描写使文章内容更生动，更
有表现力。
shame
The next few days _________ his conscience being tortured deeply, feeling like sitting in pins and needles.(如坐针毡）
witnessed
scene 2:
The old man failed to keep his promise and didn’t know what to do next.
he was ashamed.
He _______his face with his hands in shame for what he had done.
covered
scene 3:
The old man misunderstood his son.
tip2 ：动作描写使表达多样化。
第一段情节细化（围绕 “I realized it was me who was at fault.”）
1. 愧疚感加剧，回忆冲突细节
短语：sink in（逐渐意识到）、
replay the scene in my mind（在脑海中回放场景）
hurt his feelings deeply（深深伤害他的感情）
act without thinking（不假思索地行动）
a thought struck me（我突然想到）
1.这只狗对他来说不仅仅是宠物，这是他的家人。
The dog wasn’t just a pet for him; it was his family.
2.我的不体谅迫使他和托比冒雨离开，无人理解。
My inconsideration forced him and Toby to leave
in the rain without being understood.
第一段情节细化（围绕 “I realized it was me who was at fault.”）
一. 愧疚感加剧，回忆冲突细节
3.他离开时失望的表情一直萦绕在我脑海。
The memory of his disappointed face when he left kept haunting me.
4.一想到这，我就感到内疚和羞愧，呼吸困难。
At the thought of this, a feeling of guilt and shame
washed over me, making it hard for me to breathe.
5.一个内心的声音一直在我的脑海中回荡，我不能再拖延这个道歉了。
An inner voice kept echoing in my mind that I
couldn’t delay this apology any longer.
二. 理解哥哥的处境，自责情绪加深
6.当我告诉妻子我的计划时，她表示支持并建议烤一些哥哥最喜欢吃的饼干。
When I told my wife my plan, she was supportive and suggested baking some of my brother’s favorite biscuits
7.我抓起钥匙，跳进车里，毫不犹豫地往哥哥家去。
I grabbed my keys, jumped into the car and headed to my brother’s home without a second thought.
三.下定决心道歉，计划行动
8.我不能让这个误会毁掉我们的关系。
I couldn’t let this misunderstanding ruin our relationship.
Paragraph 2
Paragraph 2 ：
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.______
My brother opened the door.
I apologize to my brother.
Toby wagged his tail.
We sat together in the living room.
tips: every creature has a soul/spirit (万物有灵）
第二段情节细化（围绕 “With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.”）
1. 到达门前的紧张与犹豫
短语：heart racing（心跳加速）、
hesitate for a second（犹豫片刻）、
gather my courage（鼓起勇气）、
knock on the door（敲门）、
pray for forgiveness（祈求原谅）
1.我的心因紧张砰砰直跳。我深吸一口气，敲了门。
My heart pounded with nervousness. Taking a deep breath, I knocked at the door.
1.我抬手敲门时，手在颤抖。
My hands trembled as I lifted them to knock.
2. 见面时的互动（哥哥开门，Toby的反应）
短语：open the door slowly（慢慢开门）、
a look of surprise（惊讶的表情）、
Toby bark softly（Toby轻轻吠叫）、
wag his tail（摇尾巴）、
stare at me silently（静静地盯着我）
3. 我看到了一个惊讶的表情，夹杂着哥哥的冷漠和恼怒。
I saw a look/expression of surprise, mixed with indifference and annoyance from my brother.
2.托比冲了出来，疯狂地摇尾巴。
Toby rushed out, wagging his tail wildly.
2. Toby立刻认出了我，用鼻子蹭我的手，仿佛在劝他原谅。
Toby recognized me at once and nuzzled my hand, as if urging him to forgive.
真诚道歉，解释自己的疏忽
短语：say sorry from the bottom of my heart（发自内心道歉）、admit my mistake（承认错误）、
explain my carelessness（解释我的疏忽）
、ask for forgiveness（请求原谅）、
express regret（表达后悔）
5. 他接过饼干，示意我进去。
He took the biscuits and signaled me to enter.
6. 当我们坐在舒适的客厅时，尴尬慢慢消失了，取而代之的是故事，笑声和泪水。
As we sat in the living room, the awkwardness slowly faded, replaced by stories, laughter and tears.
4. 我来真诚地道歉，非常抱歉给你造成的痛苦。
I came to apologize sincerely. I’m so sorry for the Pain I caused you.
4.抱歉让你陷入那样的境地，我本该想到你有多不容易。
I’m sorry I put you in that position. I should’ve thought about how hard things have been for you.
4. 哥哥的回应与和解
短语：soften his tone（语气缓和）、
let out a sigh（叹了口气）、
admit his own stubbornness（承认自己的固执）、
invite me in（邀请我进屋）、
patch things up（修复关系）
5. 关系缓和的温馨细节
短语：share a cup of tea（一起喝茶）、
chat like old times（像以前一样聊天）、
Toby curl up nearby（Toby在旁边蜷着）、
a sense of relief（如释重负）、r
estore our bond（修复我们的关系）
8. 通过坦诚的对话，我们逐渐治愈了伤口，打破了我们之间的僵局。
Through open-hearted conversations, we gradually healed the wound and broke the icy wall between us.
7.他拍了拍我的肩膀说：“或许我们都被自尊困住了。”
He patted my shoulder and said, “I guess we both let our pride get in the way.”
8.我们聊天时，我知道我们之间的隔阂终于在消除。
As we talked, I knew the rift between us was finally healing.
亲情友情主题升华
As the saying goes, “Honesty is the best policy. /No pains, no gains. /A friend in need is a friend indeed.”
俗话说：“诚实是上策。/不劳无获。/患难见真情。”
2. It was at that moment that I had a full understanding of the significance of family.
就是在那一刻，我完全明白了家庭的重要性。
3. Their friendship grew stronger as they embraced each other's imperfections and stood by each other's side.
随着彼此接纳对方的不完美并始终相互支持，他们的友谊变得更加牢固。
4. There is no shame in admitting our mistakes or forgiving each other because we are a family.
承认错误或原谅彼此并不可耻，因为我们是一家人。
I realized it was me who was at fault. The dog wasn‘t just a pet for him; it was his family. My inconsideration forced him and Toby to leave in the rain without being understood. At the thought of this, a feeling of guilt and shame washed over me, making it hard for me to breathe. An inner voice kept echoing in my mind that I couldn’t delay this apology any longer. when I told my wife my plan, she was supportive and suggested baking some of my brother's favorite biscuits. I grabbed my keys, jumped into the car and headed to my brother's home without a second thought.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door. My heart pounded with nervousness. Taking a deep breath, I knocked at the door. The door creaked open and out rushed Toby, with his tail wagging wildly. Then I saw a look of surprise, mixed with indifference and annoyance from my brother. I took a deep breath and began, "Brother, I came to apologize sincerely. I’m so sorry for the pain I caused you. Toby is as much a part of your family as any human member, and I should have shown greater empathy." Almost instantly, his eyes wet with tears as he took the biscuits and signaled me to enter. As we sat in the cozy living room, the awkwardness slowly faded, replaced by stories, laughter and tears. Through open - hearted conversations, we gradually healed the wound and broke the icy wall between us, (proving that empathy, forgiveness and communication are the true bridges to mend broken bonds.)
肆 实践演练
写作示例
I realized it was me who was at fault. How could I have been so selfish My brother had already lost so much, and I’d pushed him away over a silly rule. Toby wasn’t just a dog—he was the only warmth in my brother’s lonely days. I paced the room, my heart heavy with regret. “Let’s make amends,” I told my wife, who nodded, already reaching for the flour.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door. My hands shook as I knocked. The door opened, and Toby bounded out first, nose twitching at the bag in my hand. “For him,” I mumbled, holding out the biscuits. My brother’s eyes softened. “Toby’s been moping,” he said, voice thick. I stepped closer. “I’m sorry—I was wrong.” He pulled me into a hug, and Toby jumped up, licking both our hands. The rain of that day had long stopped, but a new warmth was just beginning.
（得分点：心理描写体现愧疚；Toby 的动作推动情节；兄弟对话简洁却饱含情感；结尾用 “雨停” 与 “温暖开始” 呼应主旨，象征关系修复。）
Grade
Logical plot (情节合理）
Complete and advanced sentences（句子完整，高级表达）
Coherence and consistency (衔接与连贯)
Accurate spelling （拼写准确）
Beautiful handwriting （书写工整）
Final score
Standard
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Assessment
1. 续写第一句是否与第一段首句相衔接？
2. 续写第一段的尾句是否与第二段首句衔接？
3.是否利用 “FACT” 对人物进行描述？
4. 拼写是否正确？
5. 书写是否工整？
续写第一段评价表
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