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读后续写
框架模版
句式汇总
Para 1. Para 2.
定句1: 情感描写 定句6:感情深化
句2:动作展开 句7:动作完成
句3:对话推进 句8：对话和解
句4:情节转折 定句9:结局圆满
定句5: 铺垫伏笔 定句10:主题升华
框架
十句五定
情动说转垫
感动说结升
续写五定法技巧2：人物+看/听/说/做/思
所感：Sb felt……
所看：Seeing this/At the sight of sth, sb did...(介词短语)
所听：On hearing sth, sb did ...(介词短语)
所说：“...”sb said ________(对话简洁有意义)
所做：...,sb did A,did B and did C(连动并列)
sb did A and did B, doing sth(非谓语)
所思：It was at that moment that
sb realized that ...(强调句型)
所看：At the sight of sth, sb did...(介词短语)couldn’t help crying/laughing/smiling
①一看见妈妈，她忍不住哭了起来。
所听：Hearing sb/sth, sb did ...(介词短语)
②一听到他说的话，她一下子站了起来。
所说：“...”said sb, “...”(对话简洁有意义)
③“非常抱歉，”她说，“我不该偷懒的。”
所做：...,sb did A,did B and did C(连动并列)
④听到铃声，他抓起书包，冲出教室，向家奔去。
sb did A and did B, doing sth(非谓语)
⑤爱丽丝走上前，握着我的手，让我感到很温暖。
所思：It was at that moment that sb realized that ...(强调句型)
⑥就在那一刻，我意识到患难之交才是真正的朋友。
Practice:注意谓语动词以一般过去时(did, was, were)为主
At the sight of her mother, she couldn’t help crying.
Hearing what he said, she stood up at once.
“I’m terribly sorry,” said she, “I shouldn’t be lazy.”
Hearing the ring, he caught the bag, rushed out of the classroom, and headed home.
Alice came up, and shook my hand,
making me feel warm.
It was at that moment that I realized that a friend in need is a friend indeed.
Para 1. Para 2.
定句1: 情感描写 定句6:感情深化
句2:动作展开 句7:动作完成
句3:对话推进 句8：对话和解
句4:情节转折 定句9:结局圆满
定句5: 铺垫伏笔 定句10:主题升华
框架
十句五定
情动说转垫
感动说结升
同学们感到非常兴奋和激动。他们把自己的心形糖果拿出来
(情感描写)They felt excited and thrilled.（动作展开）Each student carefully took a candy heart from their own New Year's gifts.
Mr.Robins拿一个红色袋子在办公室取得红色袋子，然后悄悄地快速地在教室里收集糖果。
（动作推进）Quickly but quietly, Ms Robins, with a red paper bag she fetched from her office, was walking around the classroom to collect the candy hearts.
坐在旁边，Chase感觉心跳加速手心出汗。他假装问Eva数学问题“下一步呢”
（动作及对话推进）Sitting beside Eva, Chase felt his heart racing and palms sweating. He pretended to ask Eva, “What is the next step ”
Mr.Robins 悄悄地地走到Chase旁边，然后把袋子递给Chase.
（铺垫伏笔）Ms Robins walked silently towards him and placed the paper bag on his hands.
Chase小心地接过袋子，心里松了一口气。
Chase took the bag carefully with relief
Meanwhile, her new classmates were busy working on something.
看到袋子，Eva感到惊讶和难以置信。
（感情深化）Seeing the bag, Eva felt surprised and unbelievable.
她轻轻地接过礼物，扭过头来，看到了同学们灿烂的笑容
（动作推进）She gently took the gift,turned around and saw the sunny smiles on classmates’ faces.
“快打开它！”Chase 鼓励。Eva一打开纸袋，同学们都大声喊道“新年快乐”
(对话推进)“Open it quickly!”Chase said encouragingly. The moment Eva opened the paper bag,all the students cheered “Happy New Year!”
看到纸袋中的心形糖果，她太感动了以至于忍不住哭了起来。泪眼旺旺，她站起身，向她的友善的新同学们鞠躬，说“谢谢大家！这是我收到的最好的礼物！”
(结局圆满)Seeing the candy hearts in the bag, she was so moved that tears welled up in her eyes. With watery eyes, she stood up and bowed to her new but kind classmates,“Thank you! This is the best gift I have ever received.”
正是那个时刻她意识到了集体的真正的温暖
It was at that moment that she realized the real warmth of a community.
“Here’s your New Year’s gift, Eva. It’s from everyone,” said Chase.
练
阅读下面短文，根据提示和要求，续写150词左右的两个段落。
Jenny was the only child in her home. She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and she ran out of the house angrily. She couldn't help weeping sorrowfully when she thought of the scolding from her
mother. Having wandered aimlessly in the street for hours, she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat, but it was not even possible for her, since she had nothing with her. She stood beside a stand（货摊） for a while, watching the middle-aged seller busy doing his business. However, with no money in hand, she sighed and had to leave．
The seller behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked，"Hey, girl, you want to have the noodles？"
"Oh， yes…but I don't have money on me…" she replied．"That's nothing．I'll treat you today，" said the man, "come in．" The seller brought her a bowl of noodles, whose smell was so attractive．As she was eating，Jenny cried silently．"What is it？" asked the man kindly．"Nothing，actually I was just touched by your kindness!" said Jenny as she wiped her tears，"Even a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles，while my mother drove me out of the house. She showed no care for me．She is so merciless compared to a stranger!"
Hearing the words，the seller smiled， "Girl， do you really think so？Your mother has raised you since you were a baby. Can you number the times she cooked for you Have you expressed your gratitude to her "
Jenny sat there, speechless and numb with shock; she remembered mother's familiar face and weathered hands. "Why didn’t I think of that A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel indebted, but I have never thanked my mum for what she has done for me．"
On the way home，Jenny made up her mind to make an apology to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home．
Paragraph 1：
Nearing the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath．
Paragraph 2：
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.
要求和注意：
1．所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好，不计词数。
四、十句五定法1：
Para1 Para2 1 6
2 7
3 8
4 9
5 10
整个读后续写分10句话，每段各5句，其中第1、5、6、9、10句已经先确定
衔接para1提示句
Nearing the doorway, Jenny
took a deep breath．
A gentle touch on her hair
called her mind back
衔接para2提示句
衔接para2提示句
结局（解决问题 正能量）
升华主题
What did she decide to do
Who touched
和解 微笑
第一次意识到面条的美味
What to do
一起吃饭
To come in
尽可能小心地，她走进去，
既渴望见到妈妈，又有些害怕。
抬头，她看到妈妈，脸上满是
担心和疼爱
What was she thinking about
所思：就在那一刻，她第一次意识到妈妈做了多么多
四、十句五定法1：
Para1 Para2 1 6
2 7
3 8
4 9
5 10
整个读后续写分10句话，每段各5句，其中第1、5、6、9、10句已经先确定
衔接para1提示句
Nearing the doorway, Jenny
took a deep breath．
A gentle touch on her hair
called her mind back
衔接para2提示句
衔接para2提示句
结局（解决问题 正能量）
升华主题
What did she decide to do
Who touched
What to do
To come in
尽可能小心地，她走进去，
既渴望见到妈妈，又有些害怕。
抬头，她看到妈妈，满是担心和疼爱
看到她手里的面条，她再也控制不住
What was she thinking about
所思：就在那一刻，她第一次意识到妈妈做了多么多
所听：
所看：
所做：
所做：
所说：
静悄悄的
声音从厨房传来
餐桌上
各种好吃的
坐 伏
忍不住哭起来
站起来
给妈妈一个拥抱
对不起错了
“能原谅我吗”
和解 微笑
第一次意识到面条的美味
一起吃饭
“快洗手吃饭”
妈妈微笑说
四、十句五定法1：
Para1 Para2 1 6
2 7
3 8
4 9
5 10
整个读后续写分10句话，每段各5句，其中第1、5、6、9、10句已经先确定
衔接para1提示句
Nearing the doorway, Jenny
took a deep breath．
A gentle touch on her hair
called her mind back
衔接para2提示句
衔接para2提示句
结局（解决问题 正能量）
升华主题
What did she decide to do
To come in
as..as possible，stepped in
both eagar and afraid to do
looking up，saw，with...
at the sight of , couldn’t control
What was she thinking about
所思：It was at that moment that one realized how much...
所听：
所看：
所做：
所做：
所说：
quiet
except that,busy doing
on the table
various delicious
sat, cover
couldn’t help doing
stood up
throw/bury oneself into one’s arms
sorry, wrong
forgive me
for the first time, noodles, love
“wash hands,have dinner, must be hungry”
Paragraph 1（除段首句外，带序号的五个句子）
段首句：Nearing the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath．
1.As quietly as possible, she stepped in, both eagar and afraid to see her mother.（衔接第一段段首句）
2.The room was clean and quiet as before. On hearing some cooking sounds coming from the kitchen, she knew her mother was preparing dinner for her.（所闻）
3.At the sight of the various delicious foods on the table, she couldn’t control her feeling.（所见） （所做）
4.She came up, sat down, covered her face and couldn’t help crying.
5.It was at that moment that Jenny had realized how much love and care her mother had given her for so many years.（衔接第二段段首句）
Paragraph 2（除段首句外，带序号的五个句子）
段首句：A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.
6.Looking up, she found her mother by the side. At the sight of her mother's loving eyes, Jenny couldn't control her feeling any more.（所见）衔接第二段段首句
7. She stood up and threw herself into her mother's arms. （所做）
8."I am so sorry, mum.” said Jenny, “I am wrong. Can you forgive me ”（所说）
9. “Silly child, I was also too anxious. Wash your hands and let's have dinner. You must be hungry," smiled the mother.（好的结局或结果）
10.It was the first time that Jenny had tasted mum’s love in the delicious noodles.Family love is like a warm harbor, always waiting for us to return.（升华主题）
Attention：
一不增加人物
二不增加旁支情节
三不用过多对话
四不用负能量结局
五不在文末设置悬念
六不偏离原文主题
七不违背逻辑常理（情感态度价值观）
原文一致原则
正能量原则
曲折性原则
七个“不”
三个原则
第一句定句: 情感＋动作
句式汇总：
初级：After it, he felt 情绪
进阶：After it ,主语 was so 情绪 that 主语 couldn’t help doing
高级：After it, extremely 情绪 and 情绪, 主语 did something
高兴的，兴奋的：joyful, cheerful, excited；
悲伤的:upset, depressed, sad
生气的，愤怒的:angry, annoyed
害怕的:afraid, scared
感动的:thankful, moved, touched
紧张的:nervous, tense
震惊的:surprised, shocked,
满意的:satisfied, content
担忧的:concerned,worried
初级：After that, he felt 情绪
听到后，他感觉很害怕。
进阶：After that ,主语 was so 情绪 that 主语 couldn’t help doing
看到后，我太伤心了以至于我忍不住哭泣
高级：After that, extremely 情绪 and 情绪, 主语 did something
看到后，极度震惊和担忧，Mike立刻挣扎着站起来。
第二句定句: 细节描写（非谓语）句式汇总：
Doing A, 主语 did something
前情提要：Hearing/Seeing it, he felt angry.
怒火燃烧着
有什么动作表现呢？
怒视着，大喊大叫
怒火燃烧着，他瞪着（glared at/watched）我，大喊道“你真傻”
Burning with anger, he glared at me , screaming “You are stupid.”
听到铃声，他抓起书包，冲出教室，向家奔去。
Hearing the ring, he caught the bag, rushed out of the classroom, and headed home.
第三句定句: 细节描写（with的复合结构）
With …doing, 主语 did something.
眼泪流下来，我忍不住颤抖起来。
With tears rolling down, I couldn’t help shaking.
心脏跳的很快，她冲向前面。
With heart beating fast, she ran to the front.
第四句定句: 细节描写（The moment）
The moment 主语 did sth, 主语二 did sth
我一完成表演，观众爆发掌声
The moment I finished my performance, the audience started clappinig.
第五句定句:过渡句
When sb did sth, sth changed.
As the days slipped away, things began to change.
当他看到后，事情改变了
When he saw that, things changed.
第七句 升华句
1. sb realized that/I finally knew that……
2. The unforgettable experience taught sb that ……
她意识到真正的友谊建立在信任和理解的基础上。
1.She realized that the true friendship is built on the trust and understanding.
2.The unforgetable experience taught her that the true friendship is built on the trust and understanding.
Hearing/Seeing it, he felt 情绪.Doing A, he did something.With …doing, he did something.The moment he did sth, I did sth.“...”, he said，his/her/my voice filled with + 情感n.As the days slipped away, things began to change.
The unforgettable experience taught sb that ……

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