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2026届重庆市巴蜀中学高三9月适应性月考（二）
英语读后续写——解析与范文
【1】写作题目
第二节（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
We walk to the harbor, the early morning sun just beginning to burn pink through the fog. We've come to say goodbye.
“Bye, sailboats,” Mom says. My little brother, Ben, waves his fist. “Goodbye, harbor,” Dad says. I remember clouds of seagulls (海鸥) following the fishing boats, hoping to snap up shellfish tossed overboard. “Any last farewells, Marissa ” Dad asks me. I bite my lower lip. Goodbye, home.
When mom and dad announced we were moving, Dad said we were going “home.” He meant out west, where Grandma and Grandpa raised him along with lots of chickens and cattle. “The desert is beautiful in its own way,” Dad said. I tried to smile. But I knew mountains would only stand between me and the rosy sun rising over the ocean. “We'll find new things to love,” Mom promised. But I knew I'd never love anything as much as waking up to the sound of a seagull's cry.
After five days of driving across rolling prairie, we see mountaintops on the horizon. On day six, we pull into Grandpa’s dusty driveway. I sigh. Now this is our house, until Mom and Dad can find a new one to buy.
I take the attic (阁楼) bedroom with pink wallpaper covering the ceiling. The night before I go to school, I pull my notebook out from under the bed. I've started a list of Old Things I Miss: the salt scent instead of farm stink, seagulls instead of chickens, friends to play with instead of only Ben. I flip the page over, where I've started another list: New Things I Love. It’s still blank. That night I dream of seagulls calling, their cries rising and falling with the wind. They sail across the sky, following the fishing boats.
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写作词数应为150个左右；
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The next morning, I open my eyes to the ceiling, but I still hear seagulls.
Dad tells me that these desert seagulls came here 150 years ago.
【2】写作简析
题目分析：
①理解原文：
首先，需要仔细阅读并理解原文内容，把握故事的主旨和情感基调。原文讲述了主人公Marissa因家庭搬迁而离开熟悉的海边，来到陌生的沙漠地区，心中充满了不舍和迷茫。
②续写方向：
根据给定的段落开头语，续写部分应围绕Marissa在沙漠中的新发现、新感受以及她如何逐渐适应新环境展开。
③情感表达：
续写过程中，要注重表达Marissa的情感变化，从最初的迷茫和不舍，到逐渐发现新环境的美好，再到最终的接受和喜爱。
写作框架：
第一段：
根据段落开头语，想象Marissa在沙漠中的新发现，如听到海鸥声、看到海鸥等。
构思Marissa与父亲的对话，了解沙漠海鸥的历史和背景。
第二段：
表达Marissa的情感变化和发现过程。
注意段落之间的衔接和过渡，使短文更加连贯和流畅。
构思参考：
构思阶段 具体内容 实施要点
主题定位 从抗拒到接纳的情感转变
通过“沙漠海鸥”这一象征物，实现从怀念海洋到发现沙漠之美的认知转变 清晰设定主人公最初的情感状态（抗拒）与最终状态（接纳），确保象征物“沙漠海鸥”贯穿全文，承载情感转折
段落布局 第一段：惊喜发现
第二段：理解接纳 保持情感发展的自然递进，避免跳跃；每一段围绕一个核心情感展开，层层推进
情节设计 听见海鸥声→寻找声源→父亲解释→情感释然 确保每个情节环环相扣、逻辑连贯；通过细节描写增强场景真实感，推动情节自然发展
情感弧线 疑惑→惊讶→好奇→理解→接纳 细致刻画每个情感节点的心理活动，借助内心独白、动作描写等手法，使情感转变真实可感
【3】范文欣赏
The next morning, I open my eyes to the ceiling, but I still hear seagulls.I jump out of bed, looking around the unfamiliar attic room, half expecting to see the seagulls outside my window. But all I see is the dusty driveway and the vast desert stretching out. Yet, the sound persists. I follow it, my heart pounding with a mix of hope and disbelief. As I reach the edge of the property, I see them – a flock of seagulls soaring above the desert, just like in my dreams.
Dad tells me that these desert seagulls came here 150 years ago.He explains that they followed the fishing boats that once docked nearby, just as they did by the ocean. Over time, they adapted to the desert environment, becoming a unique part of this landscape. Hearing this, I feel a connection to this new place. Maybe, just maybe, I can learn to love it here too. As the seagulls cry out, their voices blending with the desert wind, I realize that home isn't just a place; it's where you find beauty and belonging.
中文翻译：
第二天早上，我睁开眼睛望着天花板，但仍然能听到海鸥的叫声。我跳下床，环顾着这个陌生的阁楼房间，一半期待能在窗外看到海鸥。但我只看到尘土飞扬的车道和一望无际的沙漠。然而，声音依然存在。我跟着声音走去，心中既充满希望又难以置信。当我走到财产边界时，我看到了它们——一群海鸥在沙漠上空翱翔，就像在我的梦中一样。
爸爸告诉我，这些沙漠海鸥是150年前来到这里的。他解释说，它们跟随曾经停泊在附近的渔船而来，就像它们在海洋边所做的那样。随着时间的推移，它们适应了沙漠环境，成为这片风景中独特的一部分。听到这些，我感到与这个新地方有了联系。也许，仅仅也许，我也能学会爱上这里。当海鸥的叫声与沙漠风声交织在一起时，我意识到家不仅仅是一个地方；它是你在那里找到美丽和归属感的地方。
佳句分析：
The next morning, I open my eyes to the ceiling, but I still hear seagulls.
这句话设置了悬念，让读者好奇为什么在沙漠中还能听到海鸥声。
I jump out of bed, looking around the unfamiliar attic room...
通过动作描写，展现了Marissa的急切和好奇。
Dad tells me that these desert seagulls came here 150 years ago.
这句话揭示了沙漠海鸥的历史背景，为后文Marissa的情感变化做了铺垫。
Hearing this, I feel a connection to this new place.
通过情感描写，展现了Marissa对新环境的逐渐接受和喜爱。
附：题目文本翻译
我们走向港口，清晨的太阳刚刚开始穿透雾气，染出一片粉色。我们是来道别的。
“再见，帆船。”妈妈说。我的小弟弟Ben挥着小拳头。“再见，港口。”爸爸说。我记得成片的海鸥跟在渔船后面，等着抢食被抛下船的贝类。“Marissa，有什么最后的告别吗？”爸爸问我。我咬住下唇。再见，家。
当初爸爸妈妈宣布我们要搬家时，爸爸说我们要回“家”了。他指的是西部，爷爷奶奶在那里养大他，还有好多鸡和牛。“沙漠有它独特的美。”爸爸说。我试着微笑。但我知道，山脉只会挡在我和大海上玫瑰色的日出之间。“我们会找到新的热爱。”妈妈许诺。但我知道，我永远不会像爱伴着海鸥鸣叫醒来那样热爱任何东西。
开车穿过起伏的草原五天后，我们看到了地平线上的山顶。第六天，我们驶进爷爷尘土飞扬的车道。我叹了口气。现在这是我们的房子，直到爸爸妈妈找到新的房子买下。
我选了阁楼的卧室，天花板贴着粉色墙纸。上学的前一晚，我从床下抽出笔记本。我已经列了一张“我怀念的旧事物”清单：咸咸的气息而不是农场的臭味，海鸥而不是鸡，可以一起玩的朋友而不是只有Ben。我把这一页翻过去，在另一面我开始列“我热爱的新事物”。那一面还是空白的。那晚我梦见了海鸥的鸣叫，它们的叫声随风起伏。它们翱翔在天空，跟随着渔船。
段落一：第二天早上，我睁开眼睛看着天花板，却依然听见海鸥的叫声。
段落二：爸爸告诉我，这些沙漠海鸥是150年前来到这里的。

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