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(共26张PPT)
以高考真题为例
以高考真题为例
读后续写——
情节梳理与内容构思
读后续写——
情节梳理与内容构思
2. 定主题
3. 巧构思
1. 审要素
1. 审要素
[2023年 新高考Ⅰ/Ⅱ真题]
① When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
② So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
③ I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
④ What did the horse think, as sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I cheeked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
⑤ When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win. I wouldn’t care.
[2023年 新高考Ⅰ/Ⅱ真题]
① When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
六要素分析法 When
Where
Who
What
How
Why
Step1: 审要素
When I was in middle school
I, my social studies teacher
My social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, but I said no without thinking.
例1: “写作比赛”
② So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
③ I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
④ What did the horse think, as sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I cheeked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
⑤ When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win. I wouldn’t care.
Why
How
Why
I did not love writing.
Writing was so difficult and painful for me...
Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard.
When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.”
[2023年 新高考Ⅰ/Ⅱ真题]
① When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
② So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
③ I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
④ What did the horse think, as sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I cheeked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
⑤ When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win. I wouldn’t care.
Para1:
My teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, but I said no.
painful
Para2:
My teacher encouraged me, and I decided to give it a try.
encouraged
Para3:
I prepared
Para4:
I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit.
self-doubted
Para4+5:
I kept going. I worked hard. I handed in.
determined & enjoyable
Did I win
Plot Mountain
Rising Action
Climax
Falling Action
Exposition
Resolution
Para1:
My teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, but I said no.
painful
Para2+3:
My teacher encouraged me, and I decided to give it a try.
encouraged
Para4:
I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit.
self-doubted
Para4+5:
I kept going. I worked hard. I handed in.
determined & enjoyable
Did I win
绘制情节山（情节发展）
[1] It was a typical Monday morning for Jenny, a hard-working high school senior. The sound of her alarm clock woke her up, a rude awakening from her sweet dreams. She unwillingly opened her eyes, knowing what waited for her—another 5 long days at school.
[2] Dragging herself out of bed, Jenny went through her usual morning routine. She hurriedly got dressed, grabbed her backpack, and rushed to the kitchen for breakfast. Her mother had prepared a nutritious meal, but Jenny didn’t want to eat. She was too busy with thoughts of an upcoming exam in her most challenging subject, mathematics.
[3] As Jenny walked to school, her mind wandered back to the countless hours she had spent studying and practicing equations (方程式). She had put in lots of effort, hoping to improve her grades. However, despite her efforts, she was struggling to achieve the desired results. Doubts started crawling in, and anxiety stayed in her mind like dark clouds.
例2: “诚信考试”
[4] As students settled into their seats, Mr. Johnson, their math teacher, announced that the exam would take place that afternoon. Jenny started to feel afraid. She suddenly realized that she had forgotten her calculator at home, an essential tool for the exam. Panic turned into hopelessness, as she knew that borrowing one during the test would be impossible.
[5] Jenny’s friends, Emma and David, noticed her worry and approached her after class. They offered their help. Emma suggested that Jenny be honest to Mr. Johnson and explain her situation. David, however, had a different plan. He proposed sneaking (偷拿) his calculator to her during the exam, risking punishment for cheating.
Para 1: Jenny’s heart sank. ________________________________.
Para 2: The exam started. _________________________________.
1-2
艰难起床
3
努力
4-5
计算器
作弊
优异的
[1] On a freezing, snowy, and windy morning in February, young Maddox Pierce awoke before four in the morning and found himself living every small child’s nightmare: he was home all alone. Except that of course the five-year-old had not been left alone, he had simply forgotten that his teenaged aunt was babysitting him while his mother worked in the early morning.
[2] Not finding his mom where he expected her and not realizing his aunt was there asleep in the house, Maddox panicked and left. He planned to make his way by foot to his grandfather’s house, but being just five, he failed to realize how life-threatening the conditions he would face on the walk would be.
[3] When Maddox emerged from his family’s townhouse, he was wearing nothing but thin pajamas(睡衣). The temperature out was well below freezing, it was snowing, and it was windy. The conditions would have been dangerous even for an able-bodied adult of sound, mature mind—for a little kid, it was very likely a death sentence.
绘制情节山（情感发展）
例3: “铲雪车司机”
[4]Thankfully, when the worst of winter’s weather struck, that’s when a snowplow (铲雪车) driver named David Gehrke got to work.
[5]When David Gehrke climbed into his snowplow that windy morning, the conditions were awful. “It was snowing, blowing and miserable,” said David. He set to work on a route clearing the streets near the southeastern end of town and it was there that he came across a sight he had never expected to see: a child wandering alone in the snow. David only spotted the boy by luck, Maddox being briefly illuminated (照亮) by the lights shining off the side of the truck.
Para 1: But it was enough—instantly David knew this was a bad situation. ____.
Para 2: The exam started. ___________________________.
1
2-3
惊慌失措
刮风
危险的
4-5
庆幸
担心
救助
家
震惊
感激
2. 定主题
主题语境 高考真题 话　题 主　题
人与自我 2024·浙江卷1月 伊娃运用正向迁移方法，熟悉校园建筑 运用方法迁移，克服困难
2022·浙江卷1月 与学霸合作，历经曲折完成任务 克服困难，实现成长
2021·新高考全国卷Ⅰ 一对双胞胎在母亲节那天为妈妈做早餐 孩子对母亲的爱
2021·浙江卷6月 暑假给邻居家的田地除草挣钱 学会承担家庭的责任
2021·浙江卷1月 “我”被南瓜卡住头的生活趣事 温馨的家庭氛围
2017·浙江卷11月 与健忘母亲一起去旅游 家人的理解与爱
人与社会 2023·新高考全国卷Ⅰ 老师鼓励“我”参加写作比赛 老师助“我”成长
2022·新高考全国卷Ⅰ 鼓励残障学生参加赛跑 帮助学生成长
2021·八省联考1月 墨西哥家庭帮“我”修车 世界充满善意
2020·新高考全国卷Ⅰ 约翰卖爆米花的主意助力伯纳德一家渡过难关 帮助他人
人与自然 2023·浙江卷1月 “我”与蜂鸟的不解之缘 人与自然和谐相处
2020·浙江卷7月 与北极熊面对面 尊重野生动物
2020·浙江卷1月 宠物狗波比的新朋友 人与宠物的爱
2018·浙江卷6月 “我”骑马度假时在山上迷路 脱离困境的勇气和智慧
2017·浙江卷6月 麦克狼口脱险 九死一生及救援
2016·浙江卷10月 简野外过夜时迷路并自救 野外生存的一课
“写作比赛”
人与自我
Never let self-doubt define our life.
人与社会
We should never forget those who have ever helped us.
Theme（正能量原则）
Step2: 定主题

【原文依据】
[2] His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to _____ yourself, I think you _________________ at this.”
[5] When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the ___________ of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t ______．
have a good shot
enjoyment
care
apply
√
√
√
【主题及结局】
合理推测：My teacher had faith had no faith in me and encouraged discouraged me to enter the writing contest. With my tireless efforts, I finally succeeded failed.
例1 ：“写作比赛”
3. 巧构思
五五拍戏法
I：带上奖杯+冲向老师
1
2
3
4
5
1
2
3
4
5
Para.2: I went to the teacher’s office after the award presentation.
Para.1: When I almost forgot the contest, the news came.
承上
T: 告知消息
（我赢了+参加颁奖典礼）
I：参加颁奖典礼
Classmates: 鼓掌+祝贺
I：开心
承上
永远忘不了老师的鼓励
I：继续写作+成为一名优秀作家
Teacher: 再次祝贺+激励
故事结局
演员:my teacher/classmates & I
演员：my teacher & I
I: 感谢老师
启下
情感/态度/价值观升华
Tip 2：确定拍摄顺序
①
⑥
⑦
②
③
⑧
⑩
④
⑤
⑨
Tip 3：戏份不够，细节/环境来凑。
Step3: 巧构思
Tip 1：确定演员
Basic requirements:
the first person
basic tense: the simple past tense
reasonable plot
a positive ending
Advanced requirements:
interesting and vivid story
beautiful handwriting
Finishing continuation writing.
Homework

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