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巧设情节、伏笔和结尾，创建续写思维
一、情节构思
做读后续写时,对所给材料后面的故事情节进行构思是写好续写的关键。高考所
给的读后续写形式是半开放性的,这种形式既可以让考生充分发挥想象力,又能让考生
有章可循。考生在推测后续情节时,可以按照“7+7”续写思路和模板进行。
第一段 开头提 示语 情节安排（对话描写、动作描写、情感描写、冲突描写、心理活动描写、
环境描写）
第一句 1.回答第一段提示语内容，第一句在内容上必须衔接提示语并联系原文最
后的情节，可以描写人物的情感及人物做了什么事情（情感描写+动作描
写）
第二句 2.主要（次要）人物的反应，可以通过动作描写推动情节的发 展 ↓情节合
围↑
第三句 3.出现问题与矛盾冲突（冲突转折） 第四句 4.为解决问题，主要（次要）人物说了什么、做了什么以及心 理活动如何 第五句 5.为解决问题，主要（次要）人物还做了什么 第六句 6.但问题没有得到解决（冲突转折） 续表
第七句 7.衔接第二段开头提示语，作为第一段的最后一句
第二段 开头提 示语 情节安排（对话描写、动作描写、情感描写、冲突描写、心理活动、环境
描写）
第一句 1.回答第二段开头提示语内容，可以通过动作描写推动情节的发展
续表
第二句 2.主要（次要）人物说了什么、做了什么来推动情节发展 ↓情节合
围 ↑
第三句 3.主要（次要）人物的反应、心理、情感或动作描写 第四句 4.主要人物在什么情况下做了什么，促使问题得到解决，凸显 主要人物（转折） 第五句 5.问题终于得到解决 第六句 6.主要人物与次要人物在问题解决以后还做了什么 第七句 7.呼应原文开头，或是主要人物的感情，或是点题的语句 续表
［注意］除了每一段的第一句与最后一句以外，其他几句在情节安排上，可以根据
需要灵活运用。内容可以涉及对话描写、动作描写、情感描写、冲突描写、心理活
动描写、环境描写。近几年高考中读后续写的文章都是问题解决类，因此，在情节
的安排上可以凸显主要人物是如何解决问题的，而次要人物只起衬托作用
续表
Reading about the marathon brought back a flood of memories from my first marathon. It was an experience that I will truly never forget as long as I live. I'll sum it up by saying this: my first marathon was the toughest physical challenge of my life and I was not prepared for all of the things that my body would do and feel during the race.
I was living in Birmingham at the time. My parents came to Birmingham for the race weekend and my best friend Meghan called to encourage me. Several of my co-workers were doing the half marathon and we all planned to meet up before the race and to run the half together. It was so nice to have friends to run the
first half of the race with. It was a great distraction to chat and really motivating to have friends running alongside me. The crowd support was also great in the first loop around the course.
I was all smiles when I broke off from my friends at mile 12.I met my family and friends to pick up my iPod since I ran without it for the first half of the race. At this point I felt like I really needed to find a restroom but it was a couple of miles before that happened. My stomach was really starting to suffer at this point in the race.
By mile 15 my body was still hanging strong （minus the stomach issues） but my mental state was starting to slip. My hands were swelling so I handed off my rings to my dad. I was pretty much running on my own at this point since the majority of the racers were half marathoners. There were long stretches during the race where I was running solo through the downtown industrial streets of Birmingham.
One thing that saved me was how much I was able to see my family on the course. They were amazing and managed to catch me at least 5-6 times. This is a benefit of a smaller race and a double loop （环形） course.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
For the last 6 miles I tried to keep my mind off the fact that I was dying.
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I was just hanging up the phone when I tripped to the ground. _____________
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Exhausted as I was, I just kept running and tried to walk as little as possible.
When I was nearing the finish line, my friend Meghan called to congratulate me.
Crying, I told her I was still on the course and that I was almost done. She talked
to me for a few minutes, which fueled my strength to push forward.
Visualizing
crossing the finish line and thinking about how it would feel, I dragged myself up
with tears in my eyes. Crossing the finish line was everything I dreamed. With my
family right there yelling at me, I got a burst of energy at last. Finally I crossed
the finish line, though it was slower than I had hoped. I was still incredibly proud
of my accomplishment.
【情节构思】
情节安排（对话描写、动作描写、情感描写、 冲突描写、心理活动描写、环境描写） Para.1 开头提示语
#b#
For the last 6 miles I tried to
keep my mind off the fact that
I was dying.
1.回答第一段提示语内容，第一句在内容上必须 衔接提示语并联系原文最后情节，可以描写人 物的情感并写出人物做了什么（情感描写&动 作描写） Exhausted as I was, I just kept
running and tried to walk as little
as possible.
2.主要（次要）人物的反应，可以通过动作描写 以推动情节的发展 3.出现问题与矛盾冲突（冲突转折） When I was nearing the finish
line, my friend Meghan called to
congratulate me.
4.为解决问题，主要（次要）人物说了什么、做了什么以及心理活动如何 5.为解决问题，主要（次要）人物还做了什么 Crying, I told her I was still on
the course and that I was almost
done.
6.但问题没有得到解决（冲突转折） She talked to me for a few
minutes, which fueled my strength
to push forward.
7.衔接第二段开头提示语，作为第一段的最后一句 续表
情节安排（对话描写、动作描写、情感描写、 冲突描写、心理活动描写、环境描写） Para. 2开头提示语
#b#
I was just hanging up the
phone when I tripped to the
ground.
1.回答第二段开头提示语内容，可以通过动作描 写以推动情节的发展 Visualizing crossing the finish
line and thinking about how it
would feel, I dragged myself up
with tears in my eyes.
2.主要（次要）人物说了什么、做了什么来推动 情节发展 续表
3.主要（次要）人物的反应、心理、情感或动作 描写 Crossing the finish line was
everything I dreamed.
4.主要人物在什么情况下做了什么，促使问题得 到解决，凸显主要人物（转折） With my family right there
yelling at me, I got a burst of
energy at last.
5.问题终于得到解决 I crossed the finish line.
6.主要人物与次要人物在问题解决以后还做了什 么 It was slower than I had hoped！
7.呼应原文开头，或是主要人物的感情，或是点 题的语句 I was still incredibly proud of
my accomplishment.
续表
二、巧设伏笔和照应
读后续写要求续写内容和所给短文是一脉相承的，那么最好的方式就是呼应所
给短文中的细节。抓住可以呼应的细节，有助于我们打开思路，而且有些时候，前
文的细节对续写部分会起到限定作用，忽略了重要的细节，很可能导致“故事续写”
变成前后矛盾的“续写事故”。
找准伏笔，续写照应。什么是伏笔？什么是照应？作者在文章的什么地方设置
伏笔与照应？伏笔与照应在读后续写中的作用是什么？
典例1（2023·新高考卷）——作者参加写作比赛
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a
writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came
from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and
painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking
of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed
harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to
fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you're willing to apply yourself, I
think you will have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to
give it a try.
Paragraph 1:A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the
news.
Paragraph 2: I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.
解读：原文中第一段写到他来自巴西，英语是他的第二语言，写作对他来说很
困难；第二段写到最开始他的疑惑，紧接着出现了老师的鼓励“Because I love your
stories.”，这些都为后面的内容埋下了伏笔。后面续写第一段作者在作文比赛中获奖
的消息传来，第二段颁奖结束后作者去老师办公室，都应该和上文的伏笔照应。
典例2（2021·浙江1月卷）——南瓜套头
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-
year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them
before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us
were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I'm
unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the
matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
Paragraph 1: It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer.
Paragraph 2: The video was posted the day before Halloween.
解读：在2021年浙江1月卷的读后续写题中，所给短文中其实提到了“我们在忙
碌的时候，妈妈在拍摄记录这一年度活动”，这就解释了第二段首句中The video的
出处。如果没有注意到这个细节，就有可能会出现失误，会设置其他人来拍摄视频，
导致“续写事故”。
典例3（2023·广东深圳外国语学校月考）——买铃寻亲
“Well, let's see,” Pappy said, “who is this present for ”
“My grandpa. It's for my grandpa. But I don't know what to get.”
Pappy began to make suggestions. “How about a pocket watch It's in good
condition.” The little girl didn't answer. She had walked to the doorway and put
her small hand on the door. She shook the door gently to ring the bell. Pappy's
face seemed to glow as he saw her smiling with excitement.
“This is just right,” the little girl said. “Momma says grandpa loves music.”
Just then, Pappy's expression changed. Fearful of breaking the little girl's heart,
he told her, “I'm sorry, Missy. That's not for sale. Maybe your grandpa would like
this little radio.”
The girl looked at the radio, bowed her head, and sadly sighed, “No, I don't
think so.”
In an effort to help her understand, Pappy told her that the bell had been his
only companion, for the rest of his family were all gone now, except for his
estranged（疏远的） daughter whom he had not seen for nearly a decade.
Paragraph 1:With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him.
Paragraph 2: Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop, he heard a
familiar ringing.
解读：有一个小女孩想买一个礼物送给自己的祖父，她看中了店门口的铃铛。
我们从前文可以找到一些细节。比如，文章中提到“小女孩买铃铛是送给自己的祖父
的”“小女孩的妈妈说祖父喜欢音乐”“Pappy现在孤身一人，只有一个将近十年未见的
已经疏远了的女儿”。通过上述这些细节，我们可以大胆推测——小女孩的祖父就是
Pappy。这样可以很好地把文章的前后情节串联起来，而且给后文的续写指出了可能
的正能量结局。
三、设计衔接与结尾
“自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间连接成分，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义
连贯”是读后续写最高档水平的评分细则之一。根据此标准，考生在备考时必须注意
从以下几处设计续写语言：首句接续、情节叙述、细节描写、段落过渡和故事结尾。
本讲主要从首句接续、段落过渡和故事结尾三个方面讲解。
（一）首句接续
续写部分所给的两段的首句控制着故事的基本情节和发展方向，因此分析段首
句以及如何由此入手开始续写至关重要。该部分我们一般可采用一些语法结构（分
词、形容词短语、介词短语作状语等）或者进行一些细节描写（心理描写或者对话
描写居多）。
典例1（2023·新高考卷）
（续写第一段） A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there
came the news. What amazed me was that I won first place! Hearing the news, I
stood there, frozen. I couldn't believe my ears. Had I heard right （心理描写）
（续写第二段） I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation.
When I presented the award certificate to my teacher, his eyes glistening with
tears, he reached out his hands and hugged me tightly.（情绪&动作描写）
典例2（2022·新高考卷）
（续写第一段） We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at
me. Depressed and low-spirited, David sat silently with his head dropping.（形容
词短语作状语）
（续写第二段） I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the
other runners. With a whistle, everyone rushed up.（介词短语作状语）
（二）段落过渡
续写部分的两个段落在情节上是自然顺承、连贯一致的故事片段。因此，两个
段落之间的衔接过渡十分重要。续写过渡句时，要从时间、地点、人物心理变化和
事件推进过程等角度写好前后两段的过渡句。
典例 （2023·新高考卷）
（续写第一段段尾）At the award presentation, I accepted the award certificate,
extremely nervous and excited. At that moment, I couldn't help thinking of my
teacher.
解读：段尾和第二段首句“I went to my teacher's office after the award
presentation.”连接紧密，讲述了作者获奖之后想和老师分享的心情。
（三）故事结尾
续写的结尾应起到点睛的作用，给读者留下深刻的印象。写作时学生可以灵活
运用首尾呼应、引用名言、情感升华等多种方法进行结尾，对故事主题进行深化，
使人物情感得到升华，让文章的结尾更加出彩！
1.首尾呼应法
通过首尾呼应，利用文章伏笔完成主旨的升华。
典例 （2023·新高考卷）
（续写结尾） Looking into my eyes, he said, “I'm so proud of you. It's your
own hard work that paid off. Believe in yourself and you can write better in the
future.” I nodded determinedly. Since then, I have written many good works and
now I am a famous writer.
解读：文章最后写到了老师的鼓励以及作者坚持写作的决心，这些都和原文中
作者最开始不喜欢写作，是老师的鼓励让他参加比赛的内容相呼应。
2.名言结尾法
使用名言结尾往往能给文章增添文采，同时也能起到凝练中心、升华主旨的作用。
It is during our darkest moments that we must focus to see the light. 越是在
最黑暗的时刻，我们越要集中精神寻找光明。
解读：这则名言通过对比突出光明的重要性，引申的含义为在困境中要保持积
极乐观的生活态度。
It's not the years in your life that count. It's the life in your years. 重要的不
是你活了多少年，而是你活出的生命有多少分量。
解读：这则名言通过巧妙的词汇调换，改变句意，揭示了生活的真谛——只有
认真对待生活，人生才不会留下遗憾。
3.情感升华法
每一个故事的创作既要讲清楚一件事情的来龙去脉，又要包含作者想要表达的
思想感情和想与读者分享的感悟。在续写时，我们可以通过表现人生感悟、生活真
谛、生活哲理、人生观或价值观来达到结尾部分的情感升华。
（1）乐于助人型（皆大欢喜的结局）
（2022·浙江卷）I will never forget the way they looked at me when they were given food. I urgently appeal to the world to do everything possible to help those in need. 我永远不会忘记他们拿到食物时
看着我的样子。我急切地呼吁全
世界尽一切可能帮助那些需要帮
助的人。
（2021· 1 月八省联考）From then on, I made up my mind to pass on “love” to others. Just as a saying goes,“Roses given, fragrance in hand.” 从那时起，我就决定把“爱”传递
给别人。正如一句谚语所说:赠人
玫瑰，手有余香。
It is love that makes the world go around, which she really felt in her heart. 正是爱让世界转动，她在心里深
深地感受到了这一点。
（2）个人成长类（变化+升华）
It's never too late to learn. Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and make more attempts. 活到老，学到老。每个人都有权利
接受更多的挑战，进行更多的尝
试。
As long as we don't give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal finally. 只要我们不放弃希望，尽一切努力
克服所有困难，最终我们一定会实
现我们的目标。
（3）人间真情类（体会+升华）
（2023·新高考卷）I owe my success to my social teacher who is a beacon in my life on the road to writing. 我的成功要归功于我的社会老
师，他是我人生写作道路上的灯
塔。
It was on that very day that I truly realized the value of sincerity and honesty in friendship. 在那一天,我真正意识到友谊中真
诚和诚实的价值。
It was on that very day that I truly realized the most important thing in life is to spend time with family. 就在那一天，我真正意识到生命
中最重要的事情就是和家人在一
起。
That affection towards our family is like a touch of green tea, refreshing and heartwarming. 那份亲情就像淡淡的清茶，沁人
心脾，温暖人心。

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