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“十句五定法”
搞定读后续写
Learning objectives：
1. Master the skill “十句五定法” and use this technique to create a reasonable plot.
2. Create your own writing accoring to giving sentenes, and ensure that the plot is resonable and the expression is correct and rich.
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Lead-in
Task1: Watch a video and make a prediction预测.
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Lead-in
1. Who are the main characters
2. Is there any conflict(冲突) between them What is it
3. What will happen next
Task2: Are following predictions are all suitable when creating continuation writing 在创作续写时，以下预测是否都适用？
So angry and surprised was her mother that they have a fight(争吵) and her mother never let her play with the other boys.
Though angry and surprised, the mother have a talk with the girl finally and help her to recognise(辨别) her own feeling towards the boy.

Logic and detailed information are very important.
逻辑和细节信息非常重要。
1.5W1H
2. 十句五定法
3. 3个原则
who人物, when时间, where地点, why原因, what情节, how感受/解决
五五拍戏法
What skills can we use to get detail information and write down a suitable writing when having examination
考试时，我们应运用哪些技巧来获取详细信息并撰写合适的答案？
Action—Response 行为--回应原则
Conflict—Solution 冲突--解决原则
Negative—Positive 消极--积极原则
1 2 3
Three steps
Text Analysis
文本分析
Plot design
情节设计
Language expression
语言表达
Text analysis
Task1: Read your text and five the “5w1h” on your text paper.
阅读文本后，在文本纸上找到“5w1h”内容
One day after school, Lily was walking home along the park path. She noticed a small, brown leather wallet lying on the ground. She picked it up and opened it. Inside were 200 yuan in cash, a student ID card, and a few bank cards. Lily thought of the new shoes she had wanted, but then she remembered her parents’ words about being honest. She looked around, but there was no one nearby. She decided to take the wallet home first and ask her parents what to do.
When she got home, her mother was cooking in the kitchen. Lily showed her the wallet and told her what had happened. Her mother smiled and said, “You did the right thing, Lily. We should try to find the owner.” They looked at the student ID card and saw that the name was “Tom”. There was also an address on the back of the card, which was not far from their home.
Paragraph 1: Lily and her mother decided to go to the address on the ID card to return the wallet.
Paragraph 2: When they found Tom’s home, Tom’s mother opened the door.
（要求：续写两段，每段 80—100 词左右，使文章完整）
5w1h
who
when
where
what
why
how
Lily, mom, Tom
after school
park path, in the kitchen,
found wallet, return wallet
be honest
take back home, go to address
Task2: Reread your text and finish the plot mountain. 重读你的文本，完成情节山
Build Up
Conflict
Solution
Beginning
Ending
Lily found a along the park path and there were cash，
inside.
Lily thought of the new shoes she had wanted, but then she remembered her parents’ words about .
Finally Lily took the wallet home and asked her parents. Her mother praised her behavior and want to the wallet together.
续写：
What will happened
接下来会发生什么？
Would she returned the wallet successfully
她能成功归还钱包吗？
wallet
a student ID card
being honest
return
Conflict-Solution priciple
冲突-解决原则
Negative-Positive priciple
消极-积极原则
Task3: Create plot according to giving sentence and the writing skill “十句五定法”. 根据给定的句子和写作技巧“十句五定法”创设合理的情节。
Lily放学路上捡到装有现金、学生证和银行卡的钱包，克制了买新鞋的想法，带回家告知妈妈。母女俩通过学生证得知失主Tom的地址，决定上门归还。
续写提示句
Paragraph 1: Lily and her mother decided to go to the address on the ID card to return the wallet.
Paragraph 2: When they found Tom’s home, Tom’s mother opened the door.
接下来可描写Lily和妈妈在寻找失主Tom过程中的心理、动作、情感。
接下来可描写Tom的妈妈看到Lily和她妈妈时的心理、动作、情感和失主Tom的回应
Para 1.Lily and her mother decided to go to the address on the ID card to return the wallet. Para 2. When they found Tom’s home, Tom’s mother opened the door.
定 句1: 定句6:
句2、3、4: 句7、8：
定句5: 定句9、10: （结局升华）
1
2
3
4
5
6
Step2: Which sentence should be the priority in writing Please give correct order
1-6 to the following sentence. 在写作时应该优先创设哪几句话？请为以下定句排序。
Para 1.Lily and her mother decided to go to the address on the ID card to return the wallet. Para 2. When they found Tom’s home, Tom’s mother opened the door.
定 定句6:
句2、3: 句7、8：
定句4、5: 定句9、10: （结局升华）
句1: （衔接上句）情感描写，体现Lily的兴奋心情。
莉莉紧紧攥着钱包，心里非常激动。
（衔接下句）衔接第二段开门情节
站在门口前，莉莉就明白该归还钱包了。
她惊讶得用手捂住嘴，得知来意后连连道谢，还邀请他们进屋喝茶。
莉莉心中涌起一股自豪感，她明白诚实能温暖人心、带来快乐，这才是人生最珍贵的礼物。
路上场景、动作及心理细节补充。
沿着熟悉的街道走着，母女俩聊得热火朝天，莉莉还好奇地想着汤姆会是什么样。转眼来到一栋高楼前，莉莉手心微微发抖，心里紧张。找到正确的门牌号后，她深吸一口气十分紧张，妈妈给了她一个温暖的微笑。
就在这时，汤姆冲了出去，眼睛一亮——钱包就在眼前！他这才想起今天下午在公园玩耍时弄丢了钱包。拿回钱包后连连感谢。莉莉连说不客气，
Step3: Finish the detail plot information. 完成情节创设的细节信息
Action-Response priciple
行为-回应原则
（衔接上句）衔接第二段汤姆妈妈开门情节
汤姆妈妈家场景、动作及心理补充、
Game time
Level up game
Game Rules: The game has ten levels, and you can get a silver coin for each correct answer. At the end of the game, you can exchange the silver coin for a secret gift.
闯关游戏
游戏规则：一共4个关卡，每答对1个关卡即可获得1-3分，游戏结束时可根据手中的分数兑换神秘小礼品。
Language expression
一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。
第一关
第二关
第三关
第四关
一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。
that she couldn't help covering her mouth.
that she hold the wallet tightly.
闯关提示：“So...that... “倒装结构，强调情绪。
例如he was so sad that...变成 So sad was he that...
第一关
翻译：她非常惊讶，忍不住得用手捂住嘴。
翻译：她非常紧张，用手紧紧攥着钱包。
So surprised was she
So nervous was she
一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。
as she held the wallet tightly.
when hearing his gratitude.
闯关提示： “a wave of + 情绪名词 + welled up in one’s heart”
一股***情绪涌了出来”
第二关
well v.涌出
翻译：莉莉紧紧攥着钱包，心里激动得直打鼓。
翻译：听到他的感谢，莉莉的心中有一股自豪感油然而生。
A wave of excitement welled up in Lily's heart
A wave of pride welled up in Lily's heart
一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。
After knowing their purpose, she expressing her gratitude, them to come in for a cup of tea.
第三关
闯关提示：sb did sth, doing sth. 某人做某事，又做某事
翻译：在知道他们的目的后，她不停地表达她的感激之情，邀请他们进来喝杯茶。
翻译：汤姆冲了出去，一看到钱包，眼睛就亮了起来。
Tom , his eyes up when he saw the wallet.
inviting
kept/could’t stop
ran out
lighting
一种温暖的感觉涌上某人的心头。
闯关提示：It was at that moment that.....就在那一刻 ，锁定关键信息，闭合叙事。
, Lily knew they were ready to return the wallet.
It was that Tom realized he had lost it this afternoon while playing in the park.
It was at the moment that She understood that .
which was the most precious gift in life.
第四关
翻译：就在那一瞬间，莉莉就明白该归还钱包了
翻译：就在那一刻，汤姆意识到自己在公园玩耍时丢失了钱包。
翻译：就在那一刻，她明白诚实能为他人带来温暖与喜悦，这正是人生最珍贵的馈赠
It was at that moment
at that moment
honesty could bring
others warmth and joy
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恭喜通关
Writing Time
Para 1.Lily and her mother decided to go to the address on the ID card to return the wallet. Para 2. When they found Tom’s home, Tom’s mother opened the door.
定 定句6:
句2、3: 句7、8：
定句4、5: 定句9、10: （结局升华）
句1: （衔接上句）情感描写，体现Lily的兴奋心情。
莉莉紧紧攥着钱包，心里非常激动。
（衔接下句）衔接第二段开门情节
站在门口前，莉莉就明白该归还钱包了。
她惊讶得用手捂住嘴，得知来意后连连道谢，还邀请他们进屋喝茶。
莉莉心中涌起一股自豪感，她明白诚实能温暖人心、带来快乐，这才是人生最珍贵的礼物。
路上场景、动作及心理细节补充。
走在熟悉的街道，母女俩聊得热火朝天，莉莉还好奇地想着汤姆会是什么样。转眼来到一栋高楼前，莉莉手心微微发抖，心里紧张。找到正确的门牌号后，她深吸一口气十分紧张，妈妈给了她一个温暖的微笑。
就在这时，汤姆冲了出去，眼睛一亮——钱包就在眼前！他这才想起今天下午在公园玩耍时弄丢了钱包。拿回钱包后连连感谢。莉莉连说不客气，
汤姆妈妈家场景、动作及心理补充、
Useful sentences Walk along the street 沿着街道走
Knock the door 敲门
stand in front of the door 站在门前
cover her mouth with her hand 用手捂住嘴巴
the most precious gift 最珍贵的礼物
考试技巧： step1 读原文，梳理信息(5w1h)，3-5分钟
step2 构思、初稿（十句五定法、3大原则），10-15分钟
step3 补充细节，写剩下五句，润色，定稿，10-15分钟
step4 誊写到答题卡上，5分钟
Summary
Homework
1. Role play the process of returning wallet with your group members. You should find 4 performers to play:Lily, Lily’s mom, Tom, Tom’s mom and narrator.
请分组进行角色扮演。需要4名演员分别扮演：莉莉、莉莉的妈妈、汤姆、汤姆的妈妈以及旁白。
2. Copy the example writing on your exercise book and try to remember it. 把练习本上的范文抄下来，然后试着背下来。
3. (选做)Create your own writing and check your writing whether meet the following standards.
（选做）撰写个人作品，并自评是否符合以下标准。
情节逻辑 续写是否衔接原文？有无逻辑断层？ □1 分（有断层） □ 2 分（衔接流畅）
句型运用 是否用了至少 1 个本节课学的句型？ □1 分（未用） □ 2 分（用了且正确）
细节描写 有无动作 / 心理描写（如 “攥钱包”“紧张发抖”）？ □1 分（无） □ 2 分（有 1 处及以上）
Self-check table
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