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沪外教七下Unit6写作精讲
My Favourite Classic Character
适用水平：七年级下册
字数要求：60—100词
教材依据：Unit 6 经典文学人物描写 + have to/had better/needn’t/used to 语法 + 用例子支撑观点（Using examples to support ideas）
第一步：审（审题）
审任务：写一篇短文介绍你最喜欢的经典文学人物，要包含人物出处、核心品质、具体事例，并使用品质形容词和例子支撑观点，体现“如何欣赏经典文学”的单元主题。
审体裁：人物描写类短文，结构清晰：开头（总起介绍）→ 正文（品质+事例）→ 结尾（总结感受）。
审人称：以第三人称（he/she/it/the character）为主，客观介绍人物，结尾可加入第一人称（I）表达感受。
审时态：
一般现在时：描述人物的性格、品质和故事中的行为（如：Charlotte is kind. She helps Wilbur.）。
一般过去时：讲述书中具体发生的事件（如：She wove words into her web to save Wilbur’s life.）。
审技能：要学会用具体事例支撑观点（先写品质，再举书中例子证明），并正确使用品质形容词（如 kind, wise, brave 等）。
第二步：列（列提纲）
三段式结构（Intro—Body—Conclusion）
第一段：开头（Introduction）
人物出处：点明人物来自哪本书（如：Charlotte from Charlotte’s Web is my favourite classic character.）。
总评：用1-2个核心品质形容词概括你喜欢他/她的原因（如：She is kind and wise.）。
第二段：正文（Body）
分点论述（品质+事例）：
观点1：第一个核心品质（如：She is very kind.）
事例1：具体书中行为（如：She makes friends with Wilbur, the lonely pig on the farm.）
观点2：第二个核心品质（如：She is also very wise and creative.）
事例2：具体书中行为（如：She thinks of a clever plan to weave words into her web to save Wilbur’s life.）
第三段：结尾（Conclusion）
总结：再次强调人物的可贵之处（如：Although she is small, she has a big heart and great wisdom.）。
感受：表达这个人物对你的影响（如：She teaches me to be kind and brave. She touches my heart deeply.）。
完整提纲示例（以《夏洛的网》Charlotte为例）
段落 详细要点 关键词
开头 人物：Charlotte（蜘蛛） 出处：Charlotte’s Web 3. 总评：kind, wise, creative Charlotte, Charlotte’s Web, kind, wise, creative
正文 品质1：kind - 事例：和孤独的小猪Wilbur交朋友 2. 品质2：wise & creative - 事例：织网写字救Wilbur make friends, lonely pig, weave words, save life
结尾 总结：虽小但充满智慧与善良 2. 感受：教会我善良勇敢，触动内心 small, great wisdom, big heart, teach me, touch my heart
第三步：连（连句成篇）
用连接词和“观点+事例”结构把要点连成通顺的短文，符合七下水平。
常用连接词（七下重点）
并列：and, also, as well as
转折：although, but
因果：because, so
连句示范
要点：Charlotte is kind. She helps Wilbur.
→ 升级：Charlotte is very kind. She makes friends with Wilbur, the loneliest pig on the farm, and always stays with him when he is sad.
要点：She is clever. She saves Wilbur.
→ 升级：She is also very wise and creative. She thinks of a perfect plan to weave magic words into her web, so that Wilbur’s life is saved.
要点：She is small. She is great.
→ 升级：Although Charlotte is a small spider, she has great wisdom and a warm heart. She is a true hero in the story.
第四步：美（美化语言）
在保证语法正确的基础上，用品质形容词和具体事例让人物形象更生动，符合教材“用例子支撑观点”的要求。
1. 词汇升级（品质形容词）
普通词 升级词 例句
good kind / warm-hearted She is a kind friend.
smart wise / clever / creative She is very wise and comes up with a clever plan.
brave brave / courageous She is brave enough to face difficulties.
important great / amazing / touching She is a touching character.
2. 句型升级（观点+事例结构）
基础句：She is kind. She helps Wilbur.
→ 高分句：She is so kind that she makes friends with Wilbur, the loneliest pig on the farm, and cheers him up every day.
基础句：She saves Wilbur.
→ 高分句：She is creative enough to weave wonderful words into her web, which successfully saves Wilbur from being killed.
基础句：I like her.
→ 高分句：Although she is small, Charlotte has a big heart. She teaches me the meaning of kindness and friendship, and she truly touches my heart.
3. 格式美化
段落清晰：开头、正文、结尾各一段，逻辑分明。
主题句明确：每段第一句点明核心，后面用具体事例支撑。
用词精准：多用描述品质的形容词，让人物形象更立体。
第五步：查（检查纠错）
写完后逐项检查，避免扣分：
格式检查：
确认结构清晰（开头—正文—结尾）。
确认每段有主题句和支撑的具体事例。
语法检查：
确认人称一致（第三人称为主）。
确认时态正确（一般现在时讲品质，一般过去时讲事件）。
确认品质形容词使用恰当，没有拼写错误。
内容检查：
确认字数在60—100词之间。
确认要点齐全（人物出处+品质+事例+感受）。
确认用具体事例支撑了观点，不是空泛评价。
完整范文
英文范文
My Favourite Classic Character
The spider Charlotte from Charlotte’s Web is my favourite classic character. She is so kind and wise that she touches my heart deeply.
Charlotte is very kind. She makes friends with Wilbur, the loneliest pig on the farm, and always stays with him to cheer him up. She is also very creative and brave. She thinks of a perfect plan to weave magic words into her web, which successfully saves Wilbur’s life.
Although Charlotte is small, she has great wisdom and a warm heart. She teaches me the true meaning of kindness and friendship. She is a hero in my eyes.
中文对照
我最喜欢的经典人物
《夏洛的网》里的蜘蛛夏洛是我最喜欢的经典人物。她善良又智慧，深深触动了我的心。
夏洛非常善良，她和农场里最孤独的小猪威尔伯交朋友，总是陪在他身边鼓励他。她还富有创造力和勇气，想出了一个绝妙的计划，在蛛网上织出神奇的文字，成功救下了威尔伯的生命。
虽然夏洛很小，但她拥有伟大的智慧和温暖的心。她教会了我善良和友谊的真正含义，在我眼里她就是一位英雄。
核心素材
好词
品质类：kind, wise, clever, creative, brave, honest, warm-hearted, loyal, determined
动作类：make friends, cheer up, help, save, protect, teach, weave, plan
评价类：touch one’s heart, a true hero, teach me a lesson, have a big heart, great wisdom
好句
... from ... is my favourite classic character. He/She is so ... and ... that ...
He/She is very ... He/She ... (具体事例).
He/She is also ... He/She ... (另一个事例).
Although ... is small/weak, he/she has ...
He/She teaches me the true meaning of ... and ...
学生填空练习版
My Favourite Classic Character
________ from ________ is my favourite classic character. He/She is so ________ and ________ that he/she touches my heart deeply.
He/She is very ________. He/She ________ (具体事例). He/She is also ________. He/She ________ (另一个事例).
Although ________ is ________, he/she has ________. He/She teaches me the true meaning of ________ and ________. He/She is a hero in my eyes.

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