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2026届苏州市高三第一学期期末考试（苏州零模）
英语应用文写作——解析与范文
【1】写作题目
第一节 （满分15分）
假定你是李华，你班最近开展了用视频日志（vlog）记录校园美好瞬间的活动，请你给英国朋友Moss写一封邮件，内容包括：
介绍你制作的视频日志；
你的感受。
注意：
写作词数应为80左右；
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Dear Moss,
How is everything going

【2】写作解析
第一步：审题
对象：英国朋友 Moss，语气应友好、亲切。
内容：
介绍视频日志：涵盖内容、形式等方面。
分享感受：制作过程中的心情、收获等。
格式：邮件格式，有称呼、正文、结束语和署名。
第二步：写作提纲
开头：简单问候 Moss，引出要分享的校园 vlog 话题。
中间：介绍 vlog：说明记录了校园哪些美好瞬间，如课堂上的有趣互动、课间的欢乐活动、校园的美丽风景等；也可以提及制作形式，如运用了哪些拍摄手法、剪辑技巧等。分享感受：表达制作过程中的兴奋、期待，以及看到成品后的满足、自豪等，还可以说说通过制作 vlog 对校园生活有了新的认识。
结尾：询问 Moss 的近况，表达希望他也能分享自己的生活，最后友好道别。
第三步：选词组句
可能用到的词语及中文解释：
vlog
视频日志，a video blog that records daily life or experiences.
highlight
精彩部分，the most interesting or important part of something.
capture
捕捉，to record or take a picture of something.
editing
剪辑，the process of selecting and arranging parts of a film or video.
fulfilling
令人满足的，making you feel satisfied that you have achieved something.
cherish
珍惜，to value something highly and keep it safe.
【3】佳作欣赏
高分范文一：
Dear Moss,
How is everything going I'm thrilled to tell you that our class recently launched an activity of recording wonderful campus moments with vlogs, and I made one myself!
In my vlog, I captured the highlights of our daily campus life. There were lively classroom discussions where we exchanged ideas freely, and funny moments during breaks when we played games together. I also used some creative editing techniques to make it more attractive.
Making this vlog was a truly fulfilling experience. It allowed me to see the beauty of campus life from a new perspective and cherish every moment here.
How about you Do you have any interesting activities recently I'm looking forward to your reply.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
亲爱的莫斯：
一切还好吗？我很高兴地告诉你，我们班最近开展了一项用视频日志记录校园美好时刻的活动，我自己也做了一个！
在我的视频日志里，我捕捉到了校园日常生活的精彩部分。有我们自由交流想法的热烈课堂讨论，还有课间一起玩游戏时的有趣瞬间。我还运用了一些有创意的剪辑技巧，让它更具吸引力。
制作这个视频日志是一次真正令人满足的经历。它让我从新的角度看到了校园生活的美好，也更加珍惜在这里的每一刻。
你呢？你最近有什么有趣的活动吗？我期待着你的回信。
祝好！
你的，
李华
高分范文二：
Dear Moss,
How's it going I couldn't wait to share with you the vlog I made as part of our class activity to record the lovely campus instants.
My vlog focuses on both academic and recreational aspects. In the classroom, I recorded the passionate speeches of teachers and the eager responses of students. Outside the class, I captured the beautiful scenery of the campus and the joyful faces of students playing sports. I tried my best in editing to present a vivid picture.
I felt so excited and proud during the whole process. It made me realize how colorful and meaningful our campus life is.
What's new with you I hope you can also share your life stories with me.
Take care!
Yours,
Li Hua
亲爱的莫斯：
最近怎么样？我迫不及待地想和你分享我作为班级活动一部分制作的视频日志，这个活动是为了记录校园的美好瞬间。
我的视频日志聚焦于学习和娱乐两方面。在教室里，我记录了老师们充满激情的演讲和同学们急切的回应。在教室外，我捕捉到了校园美丽的风景和同学们进行体育运动时开心的面容。我在剪辑上尽了最大努力，以呈现出一幅生动的画面。
在整个过程中，我感到非常兴奋和自豪。这让我意识到我们的校园生活是多么丰富多彩和有意义。
你有什么新情况吗？我希望你也能和我分享你的生活故事。
保重！
你的，
李华
【4】高分表达积累
以下是高分范文摘取的优秀的表达：
范文一
I'm thrilled to tell you that...
“thrilled”一词生动地表达出兴奋、激动的情绪，比单纯用“happy”更强烈，能让对方感受到写信人急切分享的心情。
In my vlog, I captured the highlights of our daily campus life.
“capture”有“捕捉、抓取”之意，用在此处形象地表达了通过视频记录下精彩瞬间的意思；“highlights”准确地指出是生活中最精彩、最值得关注的部分。
Making this vlog was a truly fulfilling experience.
“fulfilling”强调满足感，说明制作视频日志不仅是一个创作过程，更让写信人在精神上获得了极大的满足，丰富了表达的内涵。
范文二
I couldn't wait to share with you...
“couldn't wait to do sth.”是常用且生动的表达，强烈地传达出写信人急切想要分享的心情，使情感表达更真挚。
My vlog focuses on both academic and recreational aspects.
“focus on”明确地指出视频日志的核心内容；“both...and...”结构清晰地列举出两个方面，使读者对视频日志的主题有清晰的了解。
I tried my best in editing to present a vivid picture.
“try one's best”体现了写信人的认真态度；“present a vivid picture”形象地说明了剪辑的目的，让读者能想象到视频的效果。
【5】语料库拓展
(一) 摄影词汇相关：
1. 镜头动作库
(1) 开篇: The vlog opens with a wide shot of... / It begins with a fast-forward clip showing...
(2) 聚焦: I framed the shot to highlight... / The close-up on [细节] tells its own story.
(3) 运动: I panned slowly across... / The camera follows... as [他/她做某事].
2. 剪辑思维句
(1) To create contrast, I cut from the noisy [场景A] to the serene [场景B].
(2) The sequence is edited to the rhythm of [背景音乐或心跳声], building up to the moment when...
(二) 交代“怎么拍”与“为什么拍”:
1. 创作动机句
(1) I was drawn to film this because it captures the essence of [某种品质，如: quiet companionship].
(2) My goal was to record not the event, but the emotion behind it—the [情感，如: palpable tension, great joy].
2. 拍摄选择句
(1) Instead of a narration, I let the natural sounds—the [声音1], the [声音2]—tell the story.
(2) I chose to shoot from a low angle to make the moment feel more immersive/intimate.
(三) 调动多感官：
1. 声音描述词库
(1) 笑声：soft laughter, uninhibited giggles, a chorus of chuckles
(2) 自然声：the rustle of leaves, the distant whistle of the wind, the gentle patter of rain
(3) 环境音：the muffled murmur of the crowd, the rhythmic squeak of a swing, the sharp blast of the starting gun
2. 多感官融合句
(1) The video isn’t silent; it’s alive with the sound of [声音], making you almost feel the [触感，如: warmth of the sun].
(2) You can’t just see the excitement. You can hear it in the rising cheers and feel it in the vibration of the ground.
(四) 整体交代与背景刻画：
1. 场景速写句
(1) Set against the backdrop of [地点，如: our sun-drenched courtyard], the scene unfolds...
(2) The entire clip is bathed in the golden light of dusk, giving it a dreamlike quality.
2. 一句话概括句
(1) My vlog captures a slice of life: [核心画面].
(2) Think of it as a two-minute documentary on [抽象主题，如: finding joy in the ordinary].

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