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高考应用文写作—求助信
绵阳一诊
（2026绵阳一诊）假设你是李华。你和英语角的同学们制作了一段英语短视频，旨在宣传你家乡有着100多年历史的古村落。请你给外教Mr.Smith 写一封邮件，请他对视频提出建议，内容包括：
1.具体求助内容；
2.表达感谢。
注意：80词左右
Dear Mr.Smith,
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Best regards,
Li Hua
写作步骤：
审题：
构思：
写作:
三审一列
布局要点
规范书写
三审：
体裁：
时态：
人称:
求助信
整体以一般现在时为主，符合 “介绍当前完成的视频、请求建议” 的场景，逻辑通顺。
关键动词时态准确：made（一般过去时，体现视频已完成）、appreciate（一般现在时，表达当前的请求）、will help（一般将来时，说明建议的作用），无混用问题。
第一人称复数 “We/Our” 贯穿，对应 “我和英语角同学们” 的主语，一致无偏差。称呼 “Mr. Smith” 搭配第二人称 “your”，礼貌且人称对应准确，无指代混乱。
一列：列要点
1、背景信息完整：点明 “英语角制作”“宣传百年古村落”“英语短视频” 核心背景，无遗漏。
2、求助内容具体：明确提及英语表达、叙事逻辑、文化元素呈现三个方向，符合要求。
3、感谢表达到位：通过 “really appreciate”“Thank you so much” 两次强化，兼顾礼貌与真诚。
布局：三段式
para. 1 背景信息
para. 2 求助内容
para. 3 表达感谢
学生作文最常见的失分点 & 问题
一、内容要点缺失（最主要失分）
1. 没写清 “视频用途”
只说介绍古村，没点明：宣传家乡、推广古村落，要点不完整。
2. 求助内容太笼统
只说提建议，没具体说明希望老师从哪些方面修改：
如语言表达、语法、用词、语速、画面搭配、字幕等，内容不够具体。
3. 缺少背景信息
没体现：英语角同学合作完成、古村落有 100 多年历史，信息交代不完整。
学生作文最常见的失分点 & 问题
二、语言表达问题（中档失分）
1. 句式简单，缺乏高级句型：通篇简单句，几乎无复合句，连接词少，显得口语化、幼稚。
2. 用词普通、重复：如 advice、help、thank you 多次重复，缺乏多样表达。
3. 逻辑衔接弱：句与句之间缺少连接词：so, therefore, however, in order to, would appreciate it if… 等。
4. 礼貌程度不够
外教邮件应更委婉正式，如：I would be grateful if you could…
学生常写成：Can you give… 不够得体。
学生作文最常见的失分点 & 问题
三、格式与规范问题
1. 邮件格式不完整
缺少合适的开头问候、结尾祝福语（如 Best wishes）。
2. 字数控制不当
要么太短（要点不全），要么啰嗦超字数。
3. 书写 / 卷面隐患
大小写、标点、人名拼写（Mr. Smith）错误会直接扣分。
1.Beginning（背景信息）
I’m Li Hua. Together with my partners in the English Corner, we have produced a short English video to promote our ancient village with a history of over 100 years.
I’m writing to ask for your professional guidance on a short English video, which was made by my English Corner partners and me to introduce our century-old village.
1.Beginning（背景信息）
My classmates and I from the English Corner have created an English video to publicize our ancient village with more than 100 years of history.
Recently, the members of our English Corner have made a short English video aimed at introducing our time-honored village to more people.
2.Body（求助内容）
We would appreciate it if you could offer some valuable advice on our language expressions, grammar and overall design of the video.
Could you please point out our mistakes in pronunciation and wording, and give us some suggestions to improve the video
2.Body（求助内容）
As we are not sure about the proper expressions and logic in the video, we sincerely expect your professional comments and improvements.
We would be extremely grateful if you could check our video carefully and give us some constructive advice on its content and language.
3.表达感谢
Thank you for your time and kind help. We are looking forward to your early reply.
I would like to express my sincere thanks to you for your advice, which will be of great help to us.
3.表达感谢
Your professional suggestions will be highly valued and we will make full use of them to perfect our video.
Thanks again for your generous help. We would greatly appreciate your reply at your convenience.
Dear Mr. Smith,
①I am writing to ask for your advice on a short English video that my classmates from the English Corner and I have made. The video is about an ancient village with a history of over 100 years in my hometown, and we plan to share it on social media to let more people know about it.
②Since the video is in English, we would appreciate it if you could help check whether our expressions are natural and the overall presentation is clear and attractive to international viewers. Any advice on how to make the video more engaging would be very helpful to us.
③Thank you very much for taking the time to guide us. Looking forward to your suggestions.
Yours,
Li Hua

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