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(共34张PPT)
第2节　梳理情节, 探索波折
技法探究 强化意识
　　清代袁枚曾说过“文似看山不喜平”, 这句话在读后续写中同样适用, 不喜欢平淡无奇、缺乏变化的内容, 而像观赏山峰一样, 人们喜欢山峰的层峦叠嶂, 故事情节的一波三折、内容的跌宕起伏。所以我们要在续写中努力去构想戏剧性的矛盾冲突与悬念, 以设置矛盾—制造障碍—激化高潮为基本创作模式。但是在有限的时间以及限定的字数内很难做到故事情节的一波三折, 因此我们可以采用“一波二折”的叙事结构来构建跌宕起伏的情节, 使故事情节更富有戏剧性, 确保故事的吸引力和情感张力, 达到引人入胜、吸引读者的效果。
“一波”指一个矛盾或冲突, 通过阅读确定故事的核心矛盾, 给主角制造亟待解决的难题, 推进情节的发展。“二折”指故事的反转、升级, 让冲突螺旋上升, 让情节二次跌宕, 突破读者预期。在创设情节转折时, 要遵循“既出人意料, 又在情理之中”的原则, 通过一波二折构建引人入胜的情节, 我们可以借助以下技巧来提升和优化读后续写。
技巧1 建立足够的铺垫
在情节转折发生之前, 给读者一些暗示, 让读者在面对情节转折时不会感到太突兀。通过描写人物的行为、语言或环境等方面的细微变化, 为之后的转折作铺垫。
【典例展示】
(2025·全国Ⅰ卷)
There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
典例剖析: 上文描写作者没想到哥哥会带他的狗托比来参加家庭聚会, 而且这只50磅重的狗精力充沛, 就像一个火球。虽然狗很友好, 但是作者担心狗会轻易地撞倒孩子们, 所以让哥哥看着托比, 让它待在外面玩。这段就为下文兄弟二人因为下雨不让狗进屋作了铺垫, 为下文产生矛盾埋下伏笔。
技巧2 巧用外部因素
外部因素也可以成为情节转折的原因, 如突然发生的自然灾害、社会变革、神秘的陌生人等都可以成为改变故事进展的因素。
【典例展示】
(2024·新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷)
Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry. ”
典例剖析: 故事讲述了作者匆忙打车去车站, 但是到达后却发现自己没有现金, 于是掏出银行卡, 司机试了几次, 但那台卡片机就是不配合。这时司机发现在车站入口处, 有一台取款机, 作者试了之后发现取款机出故障了, 不能使用。这一连串发生的事情推进了故事的发展, 也让读者随着不断出现的状况心情时而放松, 时而紧张, 达到了一波二折的效果。
技巧3 考虑人物的情感变化
人物的情感和动机是推动情节发展的重要因素。在创设情节转折时, 要把人物的情感变化看作一条隐形的线索, 以有效地设立情节, 让故事跌宕起伏, 推动故事的发展、高潮和结尾。
【典例展示】
(2025·全国Ⅱ卷)
Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates. I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter. I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me. After all, I did care about how others would think of me. I realized that if I didn’t stop, the entire lecture would be ruined. “It’s okay, professor, ” I shrugged(耸肩). The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter. I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further.
典例剖析: 故事讲述了作者之前因为名字被念错而不断地解释, 当再次在课堂上被老师念错时犹豫是否该纠正, 而最终引得全班哄堂大笑, 而自己也非常尴尬。这些情感的变化一直推动着作者通过分享并解释名字的寓意而最终达到了满意的结果。
精练新题 提升素养
Passage 1
(2025·江苏模拟)
Chase watched the countdown on the video screen. There were only twelve minutes left, and his family wasn’t even close to repairing the damaged spaceship before it would crash into the ground. Even worse, while his family was here in the escape room, he was missing his friend Jayden’s birthday party! Why did his family have to take a winter vacation this year
“You used to love things like this!” Chase’s mom patted his shoulder. “Just look at how excited your brother is. ” Chase’s younger brother, Max, was rushing around the room looking for clues. “You know, your dad and I put a lot of thought into this vacation, ” Mom said. “We picked the escape room because we thought you’d like the challenge. ” Chase nodded toward the countdown. “Well, I don’t think there’s any way we’re escaping in eleven minutes. ” Mom pointed to the slogan(标语) printed in block letters over the exit. “Escaping is only half the fun, ” she read out loud. Chase sighed. “The other half is bonding with your lovely family, of course. ” Mom laughed.
“I found something!” cried Max. He was across the room waving a small white card over his head. “It appears to be part of a combination. But we’ll need two more cards to solve it. ” The rest of the family jumped into action, but not Chase. As he collapsed back in his chair, he felt something under his hand. He held it up to the light of the screen.
“Chase found one of the cards!” Max shouted. Chase shrugged(耸肩) and handed it to Dad. For the first time all weekend, Jayden’s birthday party was put to the back of his mind.
“Oh boy, ” Mom said, “Two minutes left and we still need another card!” “We can do this, ” Chase said with a smile. His mind was racing now. He was on a mission, together with his brother and parents. The birthday party might as well have been on another planet. Suddenly the screen went blank. “Time is up, ” Max said, pointing to the countdown. “Mission failed. ”
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　　Chase collapsed in the chair and stared at the blank screen. _____________
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　　“You didn’t ruin anything, ” Mom said, sitting beside him. ____________
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【参考范文】
　　Chase collapsed in the chair and stared at the blank screen. A heavy sigh escaped him, but surprisingly, he didn’t feel as disappointed as he thought. His brother Max plopped down next to him, saying, “That was so close! Did you see how fast we worked together at the end ” Chase nodded, realizing he’d actually enjoyed the last few minutes of teamwork. Mom and Dad started gathering their things, and Chase noticed the slogan over the exit again: Escaping is only half the fun. Maybe Mom was right about the other half.
“You didn’t ruin anything, ” Mom said, sitting beside him. “We had a great adventure, didn’t we Even if we didn’t escape, we laughed, worked together, and made memories. ” Chase looked at his family—Max was still chatting excitedly, and Dad was pretending to be a spaceship captain to make Max giggle. “You’re right, ” Chase said, smiling. “Jayden’s party would’ve been fun, but this was. . . different. Good different. ” Mom hugged him, and Chase thought maybe winter vacations with his family weren’t so bad after all. The blank screen no longer seemed like a failure but a reminder of a day he’d remember.
外刊原创 高考同源
Passage 2
Life-Changing Decision
I had been on my own for a couple of years, and life had settled into a comfortable pattern. One night, I sat in front of the TV watching The Dying Rooms, a documentary on the horrific plight of many baby girls in some poor Indian areas.
Those images played in my head for weeks afterward. One morning, my sister called from Israel to chat. I told her about the show and how I felt.
“Go, ” she said. “Go and bring at least one home. ”
“Are you crazy ” I replied.
“You love kids, ” she said.
I turned my sister’s words over in my mind. It was ridiculous, I thought. My life was good, full and very busy. I couldn’t do anything other than send money to some organizations.
But the thoughts and images persisted until I finally picked up the phone and called the government to find out more information.
The first step was to complete a home study. These were done by a specialized social worker who would evaluate if I was suitable to parent. I decided to schedule the home study and then determine afterward whether or not to go through with the process.
During that time, a local Shoppers Drug Mart held a contest. I filled out the ballot and won. The prize was a full box of items to make a home baby safe.
They had another contest. This time, it was for a toddler’s Little Tikes rocking horse. I won that, too. Were these signs
From that moment forward, I began to tell myself, I can do this.
I was still afraid and worried about whether I could manage financially or whether I’d be able to handle the changes in my life.
But, despite these concerns, there was now a strong determination in me to bring a child home and give her a safe, loving environment to grow up in.
My doctor was a big support, and so were many others. To help pay the high cost that was involved, I sold many items around my home that I would never have parted with previously. I asked myself, “What is the life of a child worth ”
注意: 续写词数应为150个左右。
　　Nine months later, I was on a plane to India with my doctor. ___________
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　　I asked my doctor if she could cure the baby because I loved her at the first sight.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
　　Nine months later, I was on a plane to India with my doctor. It was a long flight, and I was grateful for the young businessman sitting next to me. I poured out everything to him: what I was doing, my fears, and also my faith. But when the seven-month-old baby girl was placed in my arms, my heart melted. She was tiny for her age. She cried and threw up. All day long, she twirled her little fingers in front of her face, a sign, I was told, that something was wrong with her.
I asked my doctor if she could cure the baby because I loved her at the first sight. She examined her carefully and smiled, “It’s just a habit from lack of stimulation. She’ll be fine with love. ” The baby stopped crying when I took hold of her fingers softly. That baby is now twenty-three years old. She is healthy, strong and brilliant, and completing her master’s degree on a full scholarship. My life did change dramatically—all for the better. Three years after I adopted Shel, I returned to India to bring another baby home.
【备选习题】
Passage
(2025·浙江模拟)
There’s an image of big cities as soulless places, where everyone appears to be looking out only for themselves. However, my own experiences tell a different story. During some of the most challenging times of my life, when I was struggling to find proper housing, I worked as an artist on the street. For years, I played my flute(长笛) there, and in doing so, I discovered the natural kindness of people. They showed compassion without expecting anything in return, driven purely by human goodwill.
This profound realization took hold when I was 21, living in Sydney. I worked at a local pub, feeling lost and directionless. Amid the chaos of my life, playing the flute was my only constant source of comfort. Looking back, my connection with the flute began when I was 16. Earning a mere $2. 35 an hour at the supermarket, I saved for two long years to buy it. Every day after work, playing the flute became my way of processing the day’s emotions.
One day, while working at the pub, someone asked me what I was doing that night. “I’m going to be playing the flute at—” I started to say, but then it struck me: I had forgotten to pick up my flute when I got off the train. Panic set in immediately. In a fit of frustration, I threw the plastic chair I was holding across the room.
I rushed to the train station, hoping someone had handed in my flute. No luck. Still, I left my number, clinging to the slim hope that it would turn up. Convinced that it was gone forever—after all, I hadn’t even written my name on the case—I spent the next week drowning in self-blame, drinking heavily and feeling sorry for myself.
Then, out of the blue, I received a call from CityRail. They had my flute. I hurried to the lost property office at Central Station. And there it was, among all the other lost items.
注意: 续写词数应为150个左右。
　　As I went to grab it, the guards there asked for my ID. _______________
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　Desperate and anxious, I said, “What if I play you a tune ” ______________
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【参考范文】
　　As I went to grab it, the guards there asked for my ID. I froze in my tracks, a wave of panic washing over me. I stammered, telling them I didn’t have any ID on me, and that getting it would be a huge hassle. Despair filled my eyes as I pleaded with them, explaining how precious this flute was to me. It wasn’t just an instrument; it was my connection to a better time, a source of comfort in my otherwise chaotic life. But the guards said, “Well, sorry—you’ve got to have ID to get your flute back. ” I stared at the flute, so close yet so out of reach, and held back the tears of frustration that threatened to spill.
Desperate and anxious, I said, “What if I play you a tune ” The guards hesitated, but then nodded. I closed my eyes and started playing Greensleeves. As the first notes filled the air, a rush of emotions surged through me. I could feel the guards’ attention on me, and for a moment, the world around us seemed to stand still. When I opened my eyes, I saw that the guards’ expressions had softened. “That’s your flute, ” one of them said softly. Without hesitation, I grabbed my flute and walked away, my heart swelling with gratitude. It was a double kindness—first from the person who handed my flute in, and then the guards who broke the rules to let me take it. This experience only reaffirmed my belief in the goodness of people, even in the bustling heart of a big city.
反复精读 识记积累
亮词 jump into action 匆忙行动 (Passage 1)
美句 His mind was racing now.
分析: 动词racing形象生动地描绘了当时他大脑的思绪。
翻译: 此刻他的思绪飞速转动着。(Passage 1)
Convinced that it was gone forever—after all, I hadn’t even written my name on the case—I spent the next week drowning in self-blame, drinking heavily and feeling sorry for myself. (Passage)
句中分词短语作状语, 使句子更加有层次感, 丰富了句式结构。
主题升华句 The blank screen no longer seemed like a failure but a reminder of a day he’d remember. (Passage 1)
This experience only reaffirmed my belief in the goodness of people, even in the bustling heart of a big city. (Passage)

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