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　　读后续写融合了阅读和写作, “读” 是 “写” 的基础和前提, 决定了写作的方向、边界与语言特色;“写” 是 “读” 的深化与升华, 是基于原文内容的“输出”或“再创作”。
因此在写作部分时除了注意三大原则外, 还需注意续写的一些写作技巧。
开头
(吸睛) 词汇、短语 形容词、副词
非谓语动词、with复合结构
独立主格结构
句型 三大从句(名词性从句、状语从句、定语从句)
特殊句式(倒装句、强调句)
主体
(情节) 内部心理 情绪变迁
提出新想法
外部情节 对话、动作
事件线索
结尾
(创新) 回归阅读材料 点题式结尾
首尾呼应式结尾
超越阅读材料 主题升华式结尾
留白式结尾
第1节　故事开头四大绝招
技法探究 强化意识
　　柏拉图曾说过: “良好的开端是成功的一半。(Well begun is half done. )”如何衔接好已给的段落首句, 写出一个亮眼的开头非常重要。那么如何写出靓丽的开头呢 我们可以从语法手段和写作内容两方面来精心设计故事开端。
绝招1 副词或形容词开头
副词或形容词放在句子开头是写作中比较经典的用法, 不仅可以烘托出主人公的心理活动及变化、对主语作重要的补充, 还可以让语言更生动传神, 达到烘托和渲染气氛的作用。此外, 还可以起到强调作用, 也可以作为情感线索的信息提示词。
【典例展示】1
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. Unexpectedly, I beat a lot of participants and won the first prize.
典例剖析: 该段首句内容为: “几个星期后, 当我几乎忘记比赛的时候, 传来了消息。” 接下来用了副词 Unexpectedly 描述了当时我的意外心情, 能够立即引起读者的情感共鸣。
【典例展示】2
(2021·浙江高考)
I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. Excited and overjoyed, I rushed into my room and lay in bed thinking about how to spend the money.
典例剖析: 该段首句内容为: “我很惊讶, 我爸爸允许我按照我的意愿使用这笔钱。” 接下来就用 Excited and overjoyed 准确地描写了作者的兴奋心情, 起到烘托出主人公的心理活动及变化、对主语作重要的补充以及强调作用。
绝招2 短语开头
　　短语往往包括非谓语动词短语、介词短语或独立主格等, 非谓语动词短语能够有效地连接多个动词, 形成动作链, 这样的效果不仅能够使表述更加简洁, 表达更加生动、形象, 同时还可以保持信息量的丰富。
【典例展示】1
(2024·新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷)
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. Giving him another apologetic smile, I asked him for a delay in payment and promised to call him and return the money I owed him when I was back.
典例剖析: 首句内容是“我跑回甘特那里, 告诉他这个坏消息。”接下来作伴随状语的动词-ing形式短语“带着歉意的微笑”说明“我”对带给他的坏消息的愧疚, 语义衔接更加紧密, 同时也使句子信息更加丰富, 增强了画面感。
【典例展示】2
(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. With excited tears in my eyes, I thanked him again, adding that it was he who let me get a taste for writing.
典例剖析: 该段首句内容为: “颁奖典礼结束后, 我去了我老师的办公室。”作者接着使用了with复合结构和动词-ing形式作伴随状语, 增加了文章表达的简洁性和语言表达的丰富性。
绝招3 特殊句式开头
　　特殊句式包括倒装句、强调句和感叹句。这些句子可以强调特定内容、平衡句子结构或承接上文语境, 能够突出句子的重点信息, 增强语言的节奏感和表现力, 使句子更具感染力, 引起读者或听众的注意。
【典例展示】1
(2022·浙江高考)
As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. Nervous as I felt, I did my utmost to keep myself calm and hand out the delicately-wrapped meal to those in need, with my hands trembling.
典例剖析: 该段首句内容为: “当他们朝我走来的时候, 我露出了最灿烂、最幸福的笑容。” 接下来作者用了倒装句 “Nervous as I felt”, 表达出: 尽管心里很紧张, 但“我”还是尽力保持冷静, 双手颤抖着, 将精心包装的餐食分发给那些需要的人。
【典例展示】2
(2021·浙江1月高考)
That video was posted the day before Halloween. It was my brother who did that for amusement.
典例剖析: 该段首句内容为: “那段视频是在万圣节前一天发布的。” 接下来作者使用了强调句, 突出了发布之人正是 brother, 明确指出句子中最重要的信息, 让读者或听众清晰了解说话者想要强调的内容, 增强句子的表达力度。
绝招4 对话或独白开头
“未见其人, 先闻其声”这种“先声夺人”的写作手法可以使人物一出场就吸引人们的注意, 给人们留下鲜明的性格烙印。对话描写还可以反映人物的心理与情感, 刻画人物的性格。
【典例展示】1
(2022·新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷)
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. “David, are you sure you don’t want to run ” I asked David gently, but he just stared at the floor and kept silent.
典例剖析: 该段首句内容为: “我们挨着坐了下来, 但大卫不看我。” 接下来作者通过 “提问—沉默” 的互动模式, 传递出David“拒绝沟通” 的信号, 有效地推进了情节, 营造出当时压抑的氛围。
【典例展示】2
(2021·浙江1月高考)
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. “Keep calm, ” Jason said, his voice steady and reassuring, “ We’ll figure this out. ”
典例剖析: 该段首句内容为: “我被困了五六分钟, 虽然感觉时间更长。” 接下来作者通过对话和独立主格进行续写, 展现了Jason沉着冷静的性格特点, 在塑造人物方面起到了重要的作用。
精练新题 提升素养
Passage 1
(2025·广东模拟)
In the winter of 1998, five-year-old Emily was sent to live with Mr and Mrs Fisher, who had no children, in the Scottish Highlands because her parents were busy with their business. Mrs Fisher was very kind to Emily. She would make hair bows and sew dolls for her. Mr Fisher also loved Emily very much. He saved money by eating less and bought new clothes for her.
One night, Emily had a high fever. Her foster parents(养父母) took turns carrying her for miles through the mud to get medical help. They fell repeatedly and got injured but protected Emily well. When they reached the clinic at dawn, the doctor treated her, and she recovered quickly.
When Emily was nine, she wanted a tape recorder like her classmates. She knew her foster family wasn’t rich, so she didn’t ask her foster parents for that. But Mr Fisher noticed she wanted to have one very much, and he went to work at a coal mine despite his lung disease. He worked nine hours every day and bought her a new recorder with his hard-earned money. Emily was moved to tears.
Although the family was poor, Emily lived a joyful life, surrounded by Mr and Mrs Fisher’s devoted care. However, when Emily was 11, her birth parents found them based on the address they’d always kept to take her back. As Emily left, she cried hard, holding a doll made by her foster mother. Even worse, on the way back, her birth parents accidentally lost the note with her foster parents’ address. This made it almost impossible for Emily and her parents to visit her foster parents again.
In the following twelve years, Emily and her parents tried hard to find them. During college, she visited the Scottish Highlands three times, but each trip ended with disappointment and tears. After graduating, Emily worked in the big city, Edinburgh. She became more determined to find her foster parents. In the winter of 2016, she posted her story online for help.
注意: 续写词数应为150个左右。
　　A kind netizen offered her foster parents’ exact address based on her account. _________________________________________________________
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　　Emily moved her elderly foster parents into Edinburgh to care for them. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
　　A kind netizen offered her foster parents’ exact address based on her account. Arriving at the village that evening, Emily was moved to tears by the familiar sight. Her heart raced as she knocked on the wooden door. An elderly woman opened it slowly, holding a half-finished doll. “Mum. . . ” Emily said softly. For a moment, Mrs Fisher looked puzzled, and then her eyes lit up. Behind her stood Mr Fisher. His rough hands gently touched Emily’s cheek. With tears in her eyes, Emily realized they’d never stopped waiting for her.
Emily moved her elderly foster parents into Edinburgh to care for them. Every morning, Emily made breakfast while Mrs Fisher made dolls for kids nearby. Neighbors often brought them sweet cookies, smiling at the reunited family. At night, they listened to old songs on the tape recorder, its red cloth now old. Emily invited doctors to check the Fishers often, and Emily felt lucky. In her room hangs a photo: young Emily with a hair bow, held by her smiling foster parents. Home, as she always knows, is where love lives.
外刊原创 高考同源
Passage 2
　　I was walking my dog when a friend pulled up and rolled down her car window. “Oh, my God!” she said. “I’ve wanted to do that for ages! You are so brave!”
It was the first time Elyse had seen me since I let my hair go gray.
I’d been thinking about taking the risk for a couple of years. I was sick of coloring my hair and sick of the waste of time and money.
I was also weary of colluding with(沆瀣一气) a culture that saw a sixty-year-old man’s silver-gray crown as “distinguished” but expected women of the same age to have hair that was impossibly golden or brilliantly brunette. I was fed up with the cultural expectation that I look younger than my age.
About twelve weeks passed between the day I stopped coloring my hair and the day I left the salon. During those awkward months when the top of my head looked like a vanilla cupcake with chocolate frosting, I felt like a walking Rorschach test. What did my friends see in this new design
Many women, some good friends and some barely acquaintances, decided that my decision was sufficiently universal that they had to share their thoughts and feelings with me. They voiced many concerns: What would my kids think Would my husband like it When I look in the mirror, would I see my mother Or worse, my grandmother
What happens when one ignores cultural norms I was struck by how many women ended their conversations about my hair with “It’s so great that you’re doing this. Good luck!” They vicariously wished to live the dream but also recognized that, for the granny who suits up to cross sky diving off her bucket list, a little luck couldn’t hurt. Like the canary in the coal mine, they collectively waited to see if I would survive.
注意: 续写词数应为150个左右。
　　Most of them, like Elyse, applauded my courage. ___________________
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I think the most honest answer to this question is: not ready to look old. ____
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【参考范文】
　　Most of them, like Elyse, applauded my courage. They admired me for my having traveled somewhere they were still too timid to go. Still, I was struck by the number of women who ended the conversation by reminding me, “You can always color it again if you don’t like it. ” It was a sisterly gesture of unconditional acceptance should my silly experiment turn out to be a bust. Even my older friends who color their hair admit that they’ve been thinking about going gray for years, but feel they just aren’t ready. Ready for what
I think the most honest answer to this question is: not ready to look old. This is particularly true of my women friends who work in corporate settings. They have earned their high-level positions through years of study and hard work. Still, they are afraid that to look their age would somehow affect them. However, as time passes, I am increasingly comfortable with my decision. Being gray suits the way I live the rest of my life. Simple. Quiet.
【备选习题】
Passage
(2025·湖北模拟)
Over twenty years ago, Virginia Squier was guiding a group of middle school students on a trip to England. She brought along her 8-year-old daughter Sarah.
One evening, near the end of the visit, Squier, her daughter and the school group were on a platform in the London Underground getting ready to head to their next destination. It was 5 p. m. and the station was packed. Squier took hold of Sarah’s hand and began counting her students. Just then, a train pulled up to the platform.
“Suddenly, my daughter let go of my hand, jumped on the train, and the doors began to close, ” Virginia recalled. “As the train gathered speed, I ran alongside trying to force the door open by digging my fingers into the black rubber seal. Through the window, I could see my daughter’s panicked face. ”
The last thing she saw before the train pulled out of the station was her daughter crying and pounding her small fists against the glass. Behind her, a young man dressed in black leather with a spiked(有尖刺的) collar stood up and moved toward her. Virginia’s heart raced—his rough appearance matched every warning she’d ever heard about “dangerous” strangers. His black leather jacket with sharp-looking decorations, messy hair, even the way he walked—everything about him screamed “trouble”. She imagined the worst—what if he was a thief What if he took Sarah somewhere she couldn’t find her
Terrified, Virginia searched for help but struggled to explain the emergency to a station worker who didn’t speak English well. “My daughter—the train!” she cried, but he didn’t understand. She tried speaking slowly, then louder, even gesturing wildly, but the language barrier made her panic grow. Each failed attempt left her more desperate as the train disappeared into the tunnel. The young man on the train had witnessed what had happened and immediately stepped in to help.
注意: 续写词数应为150个左右。
　　He bent down and gently wiped Sarah’s tears with his sleeve. ___________
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　　As Virginia hugged Sarah tightly, the young man disappeared into the crowd.___________________________________________________________
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【参考范文】
　　He bent down and gently wiped Sarah’s tears with his sleeve. “Shhh, it’s okay, little one, ” he murmured in a voice much softer than his tough appearance suggested. His large hands moved with unexpected tenderness as he carefully wiped Sarah’s tear-streaked cheeks. When she continued to sob, he reached into his pocket and pulled out a slightly crumpled candy. “Here, ” he said with a small smile that crinkled the corners of his eyes, “this always helps me feel better. ” Keeping a protective arm around her, he guided Sarah off at the next stop, using his broad shoulders to protect her from the jostling crowd as they waited for the returning train.
As Virginia hugged Sarah tightly, the young man disappeared into the crowd. With her arms trembling, Virginia clutched Sarah to her chest—her relief was so overwhelming that she barely noticed the young man slipping away. “Wait!” she called out, but her voice was lost in the station noise. Looking down at Sarah’s calm face, Virginia felt a wave of shame. That dangerous-looking stranger, the one she’d judged instantly by his rough appearance, had shown more kindness than anyone else today. Wiping her tears, Virginia made a silent promise to herself: never again would she let appearances cloud her judgment so completely.
反复精读 识记积累
亮词 even worse更糟糕的是 (Passage 1)
美句 This made it almost impossible for Emily and her parents to visit her foster parents again.
分析: 此句是it作形式宾语, 不定式是真正的宾语。
翻译: 这使得埃米莉和她的父母几乎无法再去探望她的寄养家庭了。(Passage 1)
Terrified, Virginia searched for help but struggled to explain the emergency to a station worker who didn’t speak English well. (Passage)
本句是形容词作描述性状语。
主题升华句 Home, as she always knows, is where love lives. (Passage 1)
Wiping her tears, Virginia made a silent promise to herself: never again would she let appearances cloud her judgment so completely. (Passage)

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