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专题二　读后续写
专题概览·思维导航
三年考情·透视规律
(辨模式 Patterns)
【分析考情考题】
年份 卷别 体裁 主题 话题 考查方向
2025 全国Ⅰ卷 记叙文 人与自我 兄弟因狗结怨, 后来冰释前嫌 立德树人、传递正能量;宣扬中国文化、增强文化自信
全国Ⅱ卷 记叙文 人与社会 留学生用名字传播中国文化
2024 新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷 记叙文 人与社会 司机热心相助, 作者守信还钱
2023 新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷 记叙文 人与自我 老师鼓励作者参加写作比赛
课标
解读 读后续写主要关注学生以下四个方面的能力:
1. 把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力;
2. 语言运用的准确性和丰富性;
3. 对语篇结构的把控能力;
4. 创造性思维能力
辨识命题特征
命题
特征 1. 以记叙文为主, 选材贴近生活, 主题语境基本是“生活与学习、做人与做事”, 内容大多关于亲情、友情、成长、冒险、善良等;
2. 故事具有一定的曲折性、延展性和教育性, 能够给人以启迪和思考, 传递正确的人生观和价值观;
3. 故事情节多按照时间顺序, 在冲突矛盾中展开, 但连贯性较强, 便于考生进行脉络梳理和想象力的发挥, 有助于学生思维品质的培养和发展;
4. 故事多按照时间线和情感线两条线索展开, 但有的会有伏笔的设置, 即文章的暗线, 暗线一般是在文中反复出现的人物性格、物品细节或环境描写等;
5. 续写部分多是故事发展、高潮或结局, 考生可结合常理常识和对文本的理解进行合理的推测和想象, 并通过细节的描写使续写部分具有完整性和可读性, 但续写内容需具有向上性
真题再现·探究技法
(明实例 Examples)
　　 (2025·全国Ⅰ卷)
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order.
There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn’t counted on: My brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece’s small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
It was an awkward moment. I didn’t want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn’t happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn’t heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually: “Not a chance. ”Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he’ll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience(良心) kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother’s shoes. He was facing health issues and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
注意: 续写词数应为150个左右。
　　I realized it was me who was at fault. _____________________________
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　　With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. _____
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考场答题四步成文(读→定→写→誊)
第一步: 理情节: 阅读文本, 找出要素, 厘清脉络, 挖掘主题
读: 通过阅读, 找出文本所包含的记叙文的要素(5W1H), 理顺故事脉络、主要情节以及文章主题。
1. 基本信息
Elements
(要素) Who I、my wife、my brother、Toby(my brother’s dog)
When In the early summer、two months later
Where at my house、at my brother’s house
Why I refused Toby to enter the house when it rained.
What There appeared a gap between my brother and I because I once refused to let Toby in when it was raining. He refused to come to my house again.
How I realized my mistake and went to apologize to him.
Theme
(主题) 1. Core message: Treasure family ties
2. Sub-theme: Put yourself in other’s shoes
2. 情节梳理
第二步: 巧构思(找寻线索, 层层设问, 构建框架)
定: 在阅读中抓住明线和暗线, 通过设问的方式, 确定写作方向, 构建续写的框架。
具体步骤如下:
Step 1. 根据第一段首句, 确定第二句
Step 2. 根据第二段首句, 确定第一段末句
Step 3. 根据第二段首句, 确定第二段的第二句
Step 4. 结合故事主题, 确定第二段末句
线索与框架
Clue
线索 时间线: 初夏聚会→几天后→两个月后
情感线: 担心(Toby隐患)→满意(计划顺利)→尴尬(不想让Toby进屋)→不安(哥哥离开)→震惊(哥哥冷淡回复)→不在意, 固执(妻子劝告)→困扰(自尊心博弈)→懊悔(换位思考, 共情理解)
(expectant→ worried→satisfied →embarrassed→ upset→shocked
→stubborn →bothered →regretful →determined→happy)
暗线: 人与动物的冲突→人际冲突→内心冲突→矛盾冲突被化解
Direction
写作方向 内心活动→妻子再次劝告→登门道歉→哥哥的反应→最后关系恢复
Frame
框架 Para. 1　I realized it was me who was at fault.
利用“问题链”预判情节:
1. How did he feel when he realized his fault (衔接首句)
2. What did he think about his previous behavior towards his brother and Toby
3. Does he have any plan to make amends If so, what is it
4. How might his wife react to his realization (第一段末句, 呼应第二段首句)
Frame
框架 Para. 2　With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door.
利用“问题链”预判情节:
1. How did he feel at the door (衔接首句)
2. Was the atmosphere embarrassing when they saw each other
3. How did he apologize to his brother
4. What role do the biscuits play in this situation
5. What kind of communication happens between the brothers (段尾句, 紧跟主题)
第三步: 慎写作
　　写: 精细打磨, 细节描写, 把握“言”值。
(1)在进行续写的过程中, 需要丰富细节填补框架中的内容, 运用多种描写来增加写作的生动性和可读性;
(2)运用丰富的词汇, 多种句式结构, 力求使语言生动形象, 语言连贯顺畅, 文章内容衔接紧凑;
(3)在写作时还需注意三大原则, 从语言风格、人物特点、情感变化等方面做到和原文的一致性, 让文章结尾顺理成章且内容积极向上。
三大原则
Coherence
协同性原则 续写部分的主题、情节、情感、语言风格、人物性格特点要和原文相同, 具有协同性、连贯性
Conflict-Solution
矛盾解决原则 续写部分的故事应跌宕起伏或矛盾冲突, 因此, 在续写部分中, 需要设计矛盾冲突, 但最后需要被解决, 而不能悬而未决
Negative-Positive
正能量原则 续写内容应该围绕“真善美”的主题, 以传递正能量、弘扬社会主义核心价值观为宗旨
续写成文
续写段 语言分析 情感分析
Para. 1
I realized it was me who was at fault. ①I had been so focused on keeping the party under control that I ignored Toby’s importance to my brother during his difficult time. Thinking of this, I was deeply ashamed of my behavior. “You should ②swallow your pride and apologize to our brother, ” my wife said one evening. ③I hesitated and finally picked up the phone and left him a voice message, apologizing for my behavior. To my relief, he called back the next day, and invited me to his home that night. My wife was very happy and made some biscuits for our meet. ①so. . . that 复合句是典型的长句, 能够显示出作者语言运用的功底;
②形象化的动词swallow增强了画面感, 体现了作者对用词的精准把握;
③生动、细化的动作链的使用让人物变得多元而立体, 人物形象跃然纸上 regretful
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ashamed
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hesitant
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relieved
续写段 语言分析 情感分析
Para. 2
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother’s door. ④My heart pounded with nervousness. Taking a deep breath, I rang the bell. Then my brother came and opened it with an embarrassed smile. For a moment, neither of us spoke. Then we hugged—something we hadn’t done since before his wife passed away. We sat on the porch ⑤with Toby resting beside us, and I handed him the box of biscuits. “Thank you, ” he said quietly. As Toby gently rest his head on my brother’s leg, I knew we were finally on the path to healing. ④简洁明快的短句可以增强语言的表达效果, 增强文章的可读性, 让文章读起来朗朗上口;
⑤ with复合结构的使用避免了句式结构的单调, 给文章增加了色彩, 是写作得分的提分点 nervous
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embarrassed
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relieved
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happy
第四步: 慢誊写
誊: 除了续写的故事句式多样、用词巧妙、语言流畅、逻辑性强等“言值”以外, 我们还要有“颜值”意识, 做到字迹工整, 卷面清晰, 给人赏心悦目的视觉效果。
所以在誊写前要注意检查作文是否存在以下问题以及时纠正, 避免出现涂抹勾画等。
1. 篇章结构方面: (1)语言逻辑混乱;(2)表达重复;(3)增加了无关信息;(4)人物关系混乱。
2. 词汇语法方面: (1)时态人称错误;(2)连接词错误;(3)词汇拼写错误;(4)句子结构错误;(5)标点符号错误。
评分标准
一、评分原则
1. 本题总分为25分, 按不同档次进行评分。
2. 评分时, 应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑, 具体为: ①续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度; ②所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性; ③语句间的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3. 评分时, 应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次, 然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量, 确定或调整档次, 最后给分。
4. 评分还应注意: ①词数少于120的酌情扣分; ②书写较差而影响理解的, 酌情扣分; ③单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面, 评分时应视其对理解的影响程度予以考虑, 英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
二、各档次的给分范围和要求
第五档
(21~25分) (1)创造了丰富、合理的内容, 富有逻辑性, 续写完整, 与原文情境融洽度高;
(2)使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构, 有个别小错, 但完全不影响理解;
(3)有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段, 全文结构清晰, 语义连贯
第四档
(16~20分) (1)创造了比较丰富、合理的内容, 比较有逻辑性, 续写比较完整, 与原文情境融洽度较高;
(2)使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构, 错误较少, 但不影响理解;
(3)比较有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段, 全文结构比较清晰, 语义比较连贯
第三档
(11~15分) (1)创造了基本合理的内容, 有一定的逻辑性, 续写基本完整, 与原文情境有关联;
(2)使用了简单的词汇和语法结构, 有一些错误和不恰当之处, 但基本不影响理解;
(3)基本有效地使用了语句间的衔接手段, 全文结构基本清晰, 语义基本连贯
第二档
(6~10分) (1)内容和逻辑有一些重大问题, 续写不完整, 与原文情境有一定程度的脱节;
(2)所使用的词汇有限, 语法结构单调, 错误较多, 影响理解;
(3)未能有效地使用语句间的衔接手段, 全文结构不够清晰, 语义不够连贯
第一档
(1~5分) (1)内容或逻辑有较多重大问题, 或部分内容抄自原文, 续写不完整, 与原文情境基本脱节;
(2)所使用的词汇有限, 语法结构简单, 错误较多, 严重影响理解;
(3)几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段, 全文结构不清晰, 语义不连贯
0分 未作答, 所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判; 所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关
三、始于颜值——书写的重要性
书写就如同人的外貌, 是给阅卷老师的第一印象。在紧张的阅卷过程中, 工整、清晰的书写能够让阅卷老师心情愉悦, 也便于他们快速准确地理解所写的内容。若考生书写潦草, 阅卷老师在快速浏览时难以辨认单词和句子, 即便内容写得不错, 也可能会因为书写问题而被降低印象分, 进而影响最终的评分档次。相反, 书写规范、字迹漂亮的作文, 会让阅卷老师更愿意去仔细阅读内容, 在同等条件下, 自然会更倾向于给予较高的分数。
四、终于言值——语言表达等核心要素
1. 内容方面: 续写内容要与原文融洽度高, 情节合理且有逻辑性, 能够有效推动故事发展。以2022年新高考Ⅰ卷为例, 原文讲述了一个关于友情和成长的故事, 要求考生续写的部分需要围绕主人公的经历和情感变化展开。如果考生续写的情节与原文的人物性格、故事背景脱节, 如突然出现一个与原文毫无关联的新角色且占据大量篇幅, 就会被判定为内容不完整或与原文情境不融洽, 从而影响得分。
2. 语言表达: 词汇和语法结构的丰富性、准确性至关重要。如在描述人物情感时, 能够准确使用ecstatic、dejected等高级词汇, 而非仅仅用happy、sad等简单词汇, 会让阅卷老师眼前一亮。同时, 正确运用各种复杂句式, 如定语从句、状语从句、非谓语动词等, 展示出考生扎实的语法功底, 也能为作文增色不少。若考生能熟练运用这些语法结构来描述故事中的场景和人物, 会使故事更加生动形象, 更符合高分要求。
3. 篇章结构: 文章要有清晰的开头、发展和结尾, 段落之间过渡自然。合理使用连接词, 如however、therefore、meanwhile 等, 能够使文章的逻辑关系一目了然。考生如果能通过这些连接词清晰地展现故事的发展脉络, 让阅卷老师轻松理解文章的结构和思路, 就更容易在篇章结构方面获得高分。
高考英语读后续写的评分标准是一个全面、细致的体系。考生要在书写上做到工整清晰, 给阅卷老师留下良好的第一印象;在内容、语言表达和篇章结构等核心方面, 要严格按照评分标准的要求, 做到内容丰富合理、语言准确多样、结构清晰连贯, 这样才能在高考英语读后续写中取得优异的成绩。
范文展示
五档作文(优秀) 名师点评
本篇文章很好地完成了试题规定的任务:
1. 覆盖所有要点, 内容充实。开篇直接以 “How could I have been so unfeeling to my brother’s pain ” 表明自责情绪, 迅速切入主题。
2. 表达流畅, 词汇丰富。使用unfeeling、guilt等高级词汇精准传递情感, rub against、tail wagging等动作描写短语让场景更生动。短语filled with guilt、make up for等的运用, 使表达更具层次感, 体现了词汇运用的丰富性与准确性。
3. 语法结构多样。运用宾语从句、时间状语从句等复合句式, 同时通过“Filled with guilt, I decided to make up for it. ”等非谓语结构丰富句式变化, 避免表达单调。
4. 连接成分有效, 结构紧凑。I remembered引出回忆, Filled with guilt衔接情感与行动, Before he could say anything推动道歉场景, As I watched升华主题, 逻辑连接词自然融入情节发展, 使段落过渡流畅, 全文结构清晰。
5. 无语法错误或拼写瑕疵, 符合卷面整洁的隐含要求。
真题演练·巩固提升
(会实践 Practice)
(2024·新高考Ⅰ、Ⅱ卷)
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.
Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue(队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it, ” he said.
Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry. ”
注意: 续写词数应为150个左右。
　　I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. _____________________
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　　Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. __
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【参考范文】
　　I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. Giving him another apologetic smile, I asked him for a delay in payment and promised to call him and return the money I owed him when I was back. To my surprise, Gunter wrote down his phone number without hesitation and gave it to me. “Just keep your promise, sir. ” A feeling of gratitude washed over me. I gave him a firm handshake, jumped out of the car, made a mad dash for the bus and jumped onto it just before it left.
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. We met at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before. Upon seeing each other, we embraced like long lost friends. I told him that thanks to his kindness and timely help, everything had gone smoothly. I paid him for the ride, along with a generous tip, which he declined. Before leaving, I took a picture of Gunter and me laughing heartily, a constant reminder of my restored faith in humanity.

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