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沪教版五四七下unit 5作文专练
A letter asking for help on behalf of wild animals
题目一：求助信（写给动物保护协会）
题目：
假设你是李华，你发现家乡附近的山林里有人捕杀野生鸟类，你非常担心。请你给当地的野生动物保护协会写一封求助信，请求他们帮助。内容包括：
1. 介绍你看到的伤害野生动物的现象（时间、地点、具体行为）；
2. 说明为什么必须马上采取行动（对生态、对动物数量的影响）；
3. 请求协会提供具体帮助（至少2条），并表达感谢。
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教师思路精讲
一、题目整体分析
本题为求助信，属于应用文中的书信类。初一学生写这封信的核心是：现象要清楚、理由要充分、请求要具体。学生需要以一个小公民的身份，向权威机构反映问题并请求帮助。写求助信不是告状，而是表达对野生动物的关心和对问题的担忧。语气要诚恳、礼貌，有紧迫感但不夸张。
二、写作要点分析
第一段：描述伤害现象
写出你看到了什么、在哪里看到、什么时候看到的。例如：“I live in a small village near the mountains. Last Sunday, I saw some people setting up nets in the forest to catch wild birds. They took the birds away, and I saw some birds got hurt.” 这部分要让读者清楚知道发生了什么问题。
第二段：说明采取行动的必要性
分析这种行为会带来什么后果，为什么需要马上帮助。例如：“If people keep catching wild birds, soon there will be no birds left in our village. Birds eat insects and help farmers. Without birds, the forest will be damaged. We must stop this now.” 说明危机会让协会更愿意伸出援手。
第三段：提出具体请求并感谢
写出你希望协会提供哪些具体帮助，至少2条。例如：“Could you please send some people to our village to teach us how to protect birds Can you put up some signs in the forest to warn people not to catch birds Also, could you give a talk at our school about wild animals ” 最后表示感谢，并留下自己的联系方式（可选）。
三、语言与格式提醒
求助信格式：称呼（Dear Sir or Madam, / To the Wildlife Protection Association,）、正文、结束语（Yours sincerely,）、签名。语气要礼貌、诚恳。请求帮助时用“Could you please...”“I would be grateful if you could...”等句式。描述现象用过去时，请求用一般现在时。
重要句型与词组
· I am writing to ask for your help to protect wild animals.
· Last week, I saw something terrible near my home.
· Some people are catching wild birds and hurting them.
· This is very bad for the environment.
· Birds are important to us because they eat insects.
· If we don’t stop this, there will be fewer and fewer birds.
· Could you please take action to help us
· Please send someone to our village to stop the hunting.
· I hope you can help us save the wild birds.
· Thank you for your time and care.
· on behalf of, wild birds, set up nets, be harmful to, take action
高分范文
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to ask for your help on behalf of the wild birds in my hometown. I live in a small village near the Green Mountains. Last Sunday, I saw some people setting up large nets in the forest to catch wild birds. They took the birds away, and I saw several birds with broken wings. This made me very sad and worried.
We must take action now. Birds are very important to nature. They eat insects that harm crops. If people keep catching them, soon there will be no birds left in our forest. The insect population will grow, and the plants will die. We cannot let this happen.
Could you please help us I have two requests. First, please send some people to our village to stop the hunting and remove the nets. Second, could you put up warning signs in the forest that say no hunting Also, a talk at our school about protecting wild birds would be very helpful. Thank you for caring about these poor birds. I hope to hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
题目二：倡议书（呼吁全校同学帮助野生动物）
题目：
假设你是学校动物保护社团的社长，你发现很多同学不了解野生动物的困境，也不知道自己能做什么。请你以社团名义写一份英文倡议书，呼吁全校同学行动起来，帮助野生动物。内容包括：
1. 介绍一种或几种濒危野生动物的现状（如数量很少、家园被破坏）；
2. 说明同学们可以帮助的具体方式（至少2种，如捐款、宣传、节约用纸等）；
3. 呼吁大家立即行动，并表达对未来的希望。
教师思路精讲
一、题目整体分析
本题为倡议书，属于应用文中的公开号召类文体。初一学生写这份倡议书的核心是：用事实触动心灵，用具体行动指引方向，用真诚的呼唤凝聚力量。同学们可能想帮助野生动物但不知道怎么做，所以倡议书要给出简单可行的方法（如节约用纸=保护森林=保护动物家园）。语气要温暖、坚定，让人感到“我能做到，我愿意做”。
二、写作要点分析
第一段：介绍濒危动物现状
用简短有力的事实让同学们意识到问题的严重性。例如：“Did you know that there are only about 1,800 giant pandas left in the wild And tigers One hundred years ago, there were 100,000. Now, fewer than 4,000. These beautiful animals are disappearing.” 数字对比能让人印象深刻。
第二段：说明同学们能做什么
至少写出2种具体、易行的帮助方式。例如：“First, you can save paper. When you save paper, you save trees. Trees are the homes of many animals, like pandas and monkeys. Second, never buy things made from animal fur or bones. Third, you can join our club and help make posters to tell more people about endangered animals.” 每条建议都要让对方觉得“这个我能做到”。
第三段：呼吁行动并表达希望
用有号召力的语言让大家立刻行动。例如：“You don’t need to be a hero to help. Just a small change in your daily life can save lives. Let’s work together. Today, one small action. Tomorrow, a big change for our animal friends.” 结尾要给人希望，而不是绝望。
三、语言与格式提醒
倡议书开头用“Dear schoolmates,”，结尾用号召句。用“Did you know...？”引起注意。建议部分用“First, Second, Third”使条理清晰。多用“Let’s...”“Join us...”等句式。数字对比可以让观点更有说服力。
重要句型与词组
· Dear schoolmates, I am writing to call on everyone to help wild animals.
· Many wild animals are in great danger today.
· For example, there are only... left in the wild.
· They need our help, and we can do something.
· Here are some small things that can make a big difference.
· First, save paper to protect the forests where animals live.
· Second, never buy things made from animal parts.
· Third, tell your friends and family about endangered animals.
· Every little action helps.
· Together, we can save these beautiful creatures.
· Don’t wait. Start today.
· endangered animals, in the wild, save paper, make a difference, on behalf of
高分范文
Dear schoolmates,
I am writing to call on everyone to help wild animals on behalf of our Animal Protection Club. Many wild animals are in great danger today. Did you know that there are only about 1,800 giant pandas left in the wild And tigers One hundred years ago, there were 100,000 tigers. Now, fewer than 4,000. These beautiful animals are disappearing forever. They need our help.
You might think, “What can I do I am just a student.” But even small actions can make a big difference. Here are some things you can do. First, save paper. When you save paper, you save trees. Trees are the homes of many animals, including pandas, monkeys and birds. Use both sides of your notebook paper. Second, never buy things made from animal fur, bones or ivory. If nobody buys them, nobody will kill animals for them. Third, tell your family and friends about endangered animals. The more people know, the more help we can give.
You don’t need to be a hero to help wild animals. Just a small change in your daily life can save lives. Let’s work together. Today, one small action. Tomorrow, a big change for our animal friends. Don’t wait. Start today. Join us and be a friend to wild animals!
Animal Protection Club

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