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Lewis was an experienced swimmer with 23 years of training behind him. He had also served in the British army, where he had learned one golden rule: speed and aggression win every time. He had applied this rule to every competition in his life, and it had never failed him.
Last year, after hearing about the melting of the Himalayas caused by climate change, he decided to swim in a small icy lake at the foot of Mount Everest. He was confident — perhaps too confident. He told his team, “I’ve swum in cold waters before. This will be no different.”
When they reached the lake, Lewis prepared exactly as he always did. He put on his iPod, stuck the earphones in, and turned up the music — the same intense playlist he had used for every major race. He paced back and forth, repeating to himself: speed, aggression, speed, aggression. Without a moment’s hesitation, he threw himself into the freezing water.
For the first hundred meters, he swam as quickly as he could. His old method seemed to be working. But then, something went terribly wrong. His fingers began to swell, growing to the size of sausages. A frightening thought crossed his mind: water expands when it freezes, and his body was mostly water. He had never considered this before — because he had never faced such extreme cold.
Soon, he could barely breathe. He began to choke and even vomited (呕吐) in the water. His speed and aggression had turned against him. He sank underwater. Luckily, the lake was shallow, and he pushed himself off the bottom to safety.
Back at camp, he expected comfort. Instead, his team gave it to him straight. One of them said, “Your old rules don’t apply here. You need a complete shift if you want to make it.”
续写要求
（1）续写词数应为 150个左右；
（2）按所给开头续写两段，构成完整短文。
一、文本分析
1．角色
________________________________________________________
2．视角
第________人称
3．时空线
Lewis believed in the rule of speed and aggression→ He decided to swim in an icy lake near Mount Everest→ _________________ → His aggressive method failed in extreme cold→ He suffered physical failure and barely survived→ _________________ → His team reminded him to change his way
4. 细节问答
What was Lewis’s lifelong golden rule ：___________________________________
Why did Lewis decide to swim in the icy lake ：_________________________________
What was Lewis’s attitude before swimming ：________________________________________________
What physical problems did Lewis meet in the icy water ：__________________________________________
Why did his previous method fail him ：_____________________________________________
What advice did his team give him ：_________________________________________________
What does the story tell us ：________________________________________________
5．情节线
刘易斯信奉“速度与冲劲制胜”的人生准则，屡试不爽→听闻喜马拉雅冰川融化，他决定挑战珠峰脚下冰湖→_________________ →极端低温下，激进方式彻底失效，他身体严重不适、险些遇险→脱险后本想得到安慰，却被队友直言劝诫→_________________ →（续写）他彻夜反思，幡然醒悟，决定改变方式→（续写）调整心态与方法后再次挑战，顺利完成游泳，获得人生顿悟
6．情感线
Lewis: confident and arrogant→___________→scared and confused→___________→calm and thoughtful→___________（续写）
7. 综合概括（中英各一句）
中文：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
英文：______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
8. 句式积累
宾语从句；定语从句；状语从句；非谓语；并列句
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
9. 本文主题
人生感悟类：_______________________________________
二、情节构造
Paragraph 1: Lewis sat by the lake that night, staring at the dark water, deep in thought.
衔接句1——What did Lewis reflect on What change did he decide to make
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2: Two days later, Lewis stood at the edge of the lake again.
衔接句2——What did he do differently What was the result What lesson did he learn
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
三、段落续写框架
第一段：那天晚上，刘易斯坐在湖边，望着幽深的湖水陷入沉思。
→①__________________→②__________________→③_______________；
第二段：两天后，刘易斯再次站在了湖边。
→④__________________→⑤__________________→⑥_______________。
四、段落续写
Lewis sat by the lake that night, staring at the dark water, deep in thought.
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Two days later, Lewis stood at the edge of the lake again.
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
参考答案
文本分析
1．角色
Lewis（经验丰富、自信自负、善于反思成长的游泳运动员）；His team（清醒理智、敢于直言、真诚帮助队友的团队）
2．视角
第三人称
3．时空线
Lewis believed in the rule of speed and aggression→ He decided to swim in an icy lake near Mount Everest→ He prepared aggressively and jumped into the icy water→ His aggressive method failed in extreme cold→ He suffered physical failure and barely survived→ He received frank criticism from his team→ His team reminded him to change his way
4. 细节问答
What was Lewis’s lifelong golden rule ：Speed and aggression win every time.
Why did Lewis decide to swim in the icy lake ：He heard about the melting Himalayas caused by climate change and wanted to challenge the icy lake.
What was Lewis’s attitude before swimming ：He was overly confident and believed his old method would work.
What physical problems did Lewis meet in the icy water ：His fingers swelled, and he could hardly breathe, choking and vomiting in the water.
Why did his previous method fail him ：The extreme cold of the high-altitude lake was totally different from what he had experienced before.
What advice did his team give him ：He needed to completely change his old rules and methods to adapt to the new environment.
What does the story tell us ：We cannot blindly stick to past experience. We should adjust ourselves flexibly to adapt to new situations.
5．情节线
刘易斯秉持“速度与冲劲制胜”的准则，凭借此法则屡获成功→为挑战自我，他决定横渡珠峰脚下的极寒冰湖，内心极度自负→他沿用以往比赛的激进方式准备并下水→极端低温打破固有经验，激进方式反噬自身，身体严重不适险些溺水→脱险后队友直言点醒他经验不再适用→他彻夜反思、放下固有认知→（续写）他领悟顺势而为的道理，决定放缓节奏、顺应环境→（续写）调整心态与方法后成功完成挑战，彻底明白灵活变通远比固守经验重要
6．情感线
Lewis: confident and arrogant→panicked and helpless→scared and confused→ashamed and awake→calm and thoughtful→enlightened and mature（续写）
7. 综合概括（中英各一句）
中文：资深游泳运动员刘易斯固守“速度与冲劲”的成功经验，在珠峰冰湖挑战中惨败，经队友点醒后反思顿悟，懂得了遇事要灵活变通、顺势调整，而非固守旧经验。
英文：Lewis, an experienced swimmer who always believed in speed and aggression, failed terribly in an icy lake challenge due to blind adherence to old experience. After sincere reflection, he learned to adapt flexibly to new circumstances instead of sticking to fixed rules.
8. 句式积累
定语从句：He had learned one golden rule that guided all his competitions.
时间状语从句：When they reached the lake, Lewis prepared in his usual way.
宾语从句：A frightening thought crossed his mind that his body would freeze and expand in icy water.
非谓语动词：He paced back and forth, repeating his golden rule to himself.
并列句：He expected comfort, but his team told him the truth directly.
9. 本文主题
人生感悟类：过往的成功经验并非万能，面对全新环境要学会灵活变通、顺势而为，懂得调整与适配，方能突破困境。
二、情节构造
Paragraph 1: Lewis sat by the lake that night, staring at the dark water, deep in thought.
衔接句1：他认真复盘失败的原因，意识到极端环境无法用激进的旧方法应对，决定放下执念，放缓节奏、顺应湖水与身体状态。
Paragraph 2: Two days later, Lewis stood at the edge of the lake again.
衔接句2：他摒弃音乐与激进心态，平稳下水、匀速游动，顺利完成挑战，最终领悟变通与敬畏自然的人生真谛。
三、段落续写框架
第一段：那天晚上，刘易斯坐在湖边，望着幽深的湖水陷入沉思。
→①他回想白天的惊险经历，终于认清自负与固守旧经验的问题→②他明白极端环境需要顺应与克制，而非一味追求速度→③他下定决心调整策略，以全新心态再次尝试；
第二段：两天后，刘易斯再次站在了湖边。
→①他摒弃以往激进的准备方式，保持平静放松的状态下水→②他放缓速度、平稳呼吸、顺应身体节奏，从容游动→③成功完成挑战，他彻底顿悟：灵活变通远比固有经验更重要。
四、段落续写（满分范文）
Lewis sat by the lake that night, staring at the dark water, deep in thought. He reflected on his terrible failure repeatedly. He realized that his blind pride and rigid adherence to the old rule had almost cost him his life. The extreme icy environment was totally different from ordinary swimming pools. Blind speed and aggression only exhausted his body. He finally understood his team’s words: he needed to respect nature and adapt to the new environment instead of dominating it. He made up his mind to stay calm, move gently and follow his body’s rhythm this time.
Two days later, Lewis stood at the edge of the lake again. He took a deep breath without his iPod and crazy pre-match tension. He walked slowly into the freezing water calmly. Rather than rushing forward, he swam steadily with gentle strokes and regular breathing. Surprisingly, he felt much more comfortable. He smoothly finished the whole swim safely. This precious experience taught him a lifelong lesson: true strength lies not in blind aggression, but in flexibility and humility in the face of unknown challenges.
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