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4RTP读后续写法
4RTP读后续写法
4R:读寻故事概要
4T:确定续写骨架
4P:必遵续写原则
1. Read for characters 人物&角色
2. Read for the conflict/theme 冲突&主题
3. Read for the plot 情节
4. Read for emotional changes 情感变化
“4R”读寻故事概要
Theme sentence：先写主题句,要呼应并升华原文主题；
Transitional sentence 2：后写第2个衔接句,要上下段落连贯；
Transitional sentence 1：再写第1个衔接句,要和首段所给的提
示句相连贯；
Transitional sentence 3：最后写第3个衔接句,要和第二段所给
的提示句相连贯.
“4T”确定续写骨架(一主题,三衔接)
Principle 1: Action→Response(角色A的”言、行、思”给
自己或他人带来的反应；对话不宜多);
Principle 2: Conflict→Solution(原文里的问题或冲突在续文
里必须得到解决)；
Principle 3: Negative→Positive(从原文到续文，情绪的变
化一般遵循消极到积极这么一个过程）;
Principle 4: Continuation→Original(续文和原文要语言、
风格协同一致)
“4P”必遵续写原则
Do My Stuff 露一手
读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两端，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mike licked the last of the mint chocolate chip ice cream. It was almost time to leave. He jumped into the car with his parents and headed off to the Olympic-sized pool for the big swim meet.
When his race came up, Mike was confident. He was strong and swift. Mike climbed out the pool, smiling. He had just won first place, making him the fastest boy in his age group.
“Congratulations, son,” his father said. His mom gave him a hug, even though he was soaking wet.
A week later, it was time for another swim meet. Like before, Mike decided to enjoy his favorite ice cream flavor. Mike remembered that the last time he had won a race, he also ate mint chocolate chip ice cream first. Maybe he’d win again.
He’s taken first place again in his race. Mike was feeling pretty good. As it turned out, Mike decided to have some mint chocolate chip ice cream before every one of the next few swim meets. He began to think of it as his lucky charm. After several months of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable. And he wouldn’t admit it, but all that ice cream was adding a few pounds to his athletic swimmer’s build.
It didn’t take long after that for Mike to start coming in second place-and then third-and then last place in his races. The lucky mint chocolate chip ice cream had lost its magic.
On the day of his next swim meet, his mother sat down at the table with him. “Mike, we all love ice cream, but it's not healthy for your body to eat so much of it. Maybe it's time to quit the sweet treats for a while, especially before you go swimming.
Mike unwillingly agreed. He went to the swim meet, and didn’t perform well. His father offered to go running with him a few days a week to help him feel better and strengthen his muscles. The extra weight soon disappeared, and Mike found himself breathing easier at swim practices.
It was the last meet of the season, and Mike wasn’t sure what to expect. He felt healthy again, but he didn’t know if he still had any speed in the
pool.
Paragraph1: As he dived into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as
he could.
Paragraph2:
His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone
else too.
第一步：“4R”读寻故事概要
1.Read for characters: ____________________________________________;
2. Read for the conflict/problem:____________________________________;
3.Read for the theme:____________________________________;
4.Read for the emotional changes (To see the table below)
5. Read for the plot (To see the table below)
Mike, his parents, ice cream, audience(未指明的)…
He lost a few races in a row despite eating his lucky charm:ice cream.
So what`s his real lucky charm
Time Plot Line Emotion Line
a week later(another swim meet)
won first again; thinking of his
mint ice cream as his lucky charm
feeling pretty good
for months of swim races
placing in the top positions;
the ice cream added a few pounds
to his athletic swimmer`s build
felt unbeatable
Not long after that
came in second to last;
the ice cream lost its magic
On one day of his next swim meet
didn't perform well;
quit the ice cream; extra training; regained his athletic swimmer`s build
unwillingly
the last meet of the season
He felt healthy again and breathed
easier at swim practices
unsure
the first race
won the first place
confident, smiling
第二步：“4T”确定续写框架(一主题,三衔接)
Paragraph Starter1:As he dived into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched
his arms as far as he could. 首段续写句1(围绕原句里的重点信息设4个左右问句)
....
首段续写末句
Paragraph Starter 2:Mike’s jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else’s too. 第二段续写句1(围绕原句里的重点信息设4个左右问句)
….
尾句(Theme sentence，要呼应并升华原文的主题)
transitional 1
transitional 3
transitional 2
Paragraph 1:
1.How did he feel in the water this time compared to prior races
2.What feeling did he have inside while swimming
3. How did the extra running impact his performance positively
4. Was Mike eager to win this time, and did he have a growth mindset
Paragraph 2:
1. How did he respond when realizing he had finished first in the race
2. What was the crowd's response to Mike's performance
3. What did his parents do to celebrate his victory, and what was his response
4. What did he realize about his "lucky charm" after winning the race
Step 1: 先写Theme sentence(防偏题，要呼应并升华原文主题)
Step 2: 后写Transitional 2(上下两段相衔接)
Step 3: 再写Transitional 1（和首段提示句相衔接）
Step 4:最后写Transitional 3（和第二段提示语句相衔接）
Mike’s jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else’s too.
It was on that day that Mike realized that his lucky charm was not his favorite ice cream but his diligent practice plus the encouragement and help from his parents.(呼应文章主旨)
His mind was focused, his goal clear - not to win, but to do his best. (衔接上下句)
The water felt different this time, as if each stroke propelled him faster than ever before.(呼应breathing easier at swim practices)
As he touched the wall, the cheers(欢呼声) of the crowd broke through the water's surface surface, and he emerged to a sea of applause. (隐形角色观众的反应→he won the race)
“4P”必遵续写原则
Principle1:Action—Response：
Principle2:Conflict—Solution：
Principle3:Negative—Positive：
Principle4:Continuation--Original：
confident-unbeatable-unsure →
kick/ stretch→what feeling;what thought ;
beat his own best time→ (himself;parents;
audience)
lost games&unsure→ ？
come out on top again
confident
①He had just won first place, making him the fastest boy in his age group. 介绍背景
②Mike remembered that the last time he had won a race, he also ate mint chocolate chip ice cream first.误以为赢得比赛跟吃ice cream有关
③After several months of placing in the top positions of every race he swam, Mike was feeling unbeatable. 为下文遭受教训埋下伏笔
④The lucky mint chocolate chip ice cream had lost its magic.拟人加比喻的手法：ice cream的神奇不再
⑤The extra weight soon disappeared, and Mike found himself breathing easier at swim practices.
实实在在训练带来的积极变化，与故事的寓意相符。
⑥He felt healthy again, but he didn’t know if he still had any speed in the pool.
身体上准备好了，但心理上还不那么confident,为续文留下施展的空间，并预示了故事的结局。
续写情节设计 Plot Line
Para1 As he dived into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he could. 衔接句1 要点2 要点3 要点4 要点5 衔接句2 The water felt different this time, as if each stroke propelled him faster than ever before.(呼应breathing easier at swim practices)
“This is where I belong. I can win the race,” he whispered, his teeth clenched and his eyes fixed on the finish line ahead. (内心独白,unsure→confidence)
With each powerful stroke(划水动作), he could feel his strength returning.(呼应“He felt healthy again”)
The extra running had paid off(取得回报), for his confidence was also back. (confidence重获)
As he flipped and pushed off the wall, he felt lighter than before, no longer weighed down.当他翻身并从池壁推开时，他感觉比以前轻盈了，不再感到被压迫.(呼应“The extra weight soon disappeared….”)
His mind was focused, his goal clear - not to win, but to do his best. (衔接上下句)
续写情节设计 Plot Line
Para2 Mike’s jaw dived as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else’s too. 衔接句3 要点2 要点3 要点4 要点5 衔接句4 As he touched the wall, the cheers(欢呼声) of the crowd broke through the water‘s surface, and he emerged to a sea of applause. (隐形角色观众的反应→he won the race)
He couldn‘t believe his eyes when he saw the results - he had finished first! (Mike的反应)
His parents came up and gave him a high five, grinning from ear to ear. (次要角色的回应)
“Hey, why not try your favorite ice cream and celebrate!” his father said jokingly, patting him on the shoulder. (对话1,向主题靠拢)
“Thanks, Dad, but I have quit the ice cream.”(对话2,呼应原文)
It was then that Mike realized that his lucky charm was not his favorite ice cream but his diligent practice and the encouragement and help from his parents.(呼应文章主旨)
As he dived into the water, he kicked his legs and stretched his arms as far as he
could. The water felt different this time, as if each stroke propelled him faster than ever before.“This is where I belong. I can win the race,” he whispered, his teeth clenched and his eyes fixed on the finish line ahead. With each powerful stroke, he could feel his strength returning. The extra running had paid off, for his confidence was also back. As he flipped and pushed off the wall, he felt lighter than before, no longer weighed down. His mind was focused, his goal clear—not to win, but to do his best.
His jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best time, and everyone else too. As he touched the wall, the cheers of the crowd broke through the water's surface, and he emerged to a sea of applause. He couldn't believe his eyes when he saw the results - he had finished first! His parents came up and gave him a high five, grinning from ear to ear.“Hey, why not try your favorite ice cream and celebrate!” said jokingly his father, patting him on the shoulder. “Thanks, Dad, but I have given up the ice cream.” It was then that Mike realized that his lucky charm was not his favorite ice cream but his diligent practice and the encouragement and help from his parents.(呼应文章主旨)
首1、首2定一框,首2、尾句也一样;
先尾句防偏题,主题升华正能量；
再衔接可设问,情节发展要合理；
情绪动作及反应(环境),对话独白一两句;
角色不增事解决,风格语言要协同!

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