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题目剖析
这个题一个很大的亮点在于文本中的矛盾很贴近学生的现实生活。“有矛盾但一直忍气吞声”这一设定很真实。现实生活中，像Andy这样为了维护友情，默默忍受室友Eric杂乱生活习惯的人并不少见(应该吧)。而且很多人确实不能妥善处理这种问题，虽然这个续写题目不能提供一种确定的解法，但或许能给在纠结的朋友们带去一点小小的启发。
另外一个小亮点是这道题的两位人物都没那么“扁平”。Andy身上展现出明显的矛盾，前文已经说过，他出于对友情的珍视以及害怕引发冲突，一直压抑自己对Eric杂乱习惯的不满，甘愿默默收拾残局。而Eric同样是一个“矛盾体”。他生活随性，处于一种“happymess”的状态。但另一方面，他本质又十分善良，在校园生活中给予Andy诸多帮助。这也进一步加剧了Andy的左右为难，也给大家在写二人互动的
时候增加了难度。基于以上，这个题很大的一个难点是如何妥善处理二人间的矛盾。像Andy这样一直默默忍受并非长久之计，而直接指责好像又并不全是Eric的错，况且Eric也不是一个“心思不纯”的人。所以，在具体构建情节和人物互动的时候，还蛮考验学生情商的。
题目剖析
具体来说，在写作时，第一段为第二段做好情感线铺垫很重要。要让读者理解为什么第二段段首句“两人都意识到仅打扫一次不行”。这需要我们在第一段除了描述清理过程这个场景，也需要推进两人的感受转变。例如，可能在清理过程中，Andy和Eric发现房间杂乱的根源在于Eric长期随意的生活习惯，即便这次清理干净，很快又会恢复原状，从而自然而然地引出需要制定规则的想法。
第二段写清楚新规则是重点。Andy要怎么提出新规则 新规则内容是什么 二人如何协商 这些问题大家都可以从现实生活出发，去想一想解法。例如，规则可能包括明确各自的卫生区域、规定垃圾清理时间、制定物品摆放标准等等，可以写的很具体。
对于很多同学来说，可能最后的罚金如何处理是一个纠结点。一方面，罚金是因Eric的行为导致，但Andy也受到了牵连;另一方面，两人是室友兼朋友，如何在不影响友情的前提下妥善处理罚金，需要综合考虑多方面因素。大家可以站在自己的角度，权衡一下情感与利益。无论是共同承担，还是Eric独自承担以承认错误，笔者觉得都是可以接受的。
总而言之，这道题的情感线和人物互动值得大家静心下来多思考一下，也希望大家在生活中不会收到这么一张300块的罚单。就算收到了，也祝大家找到自己的解。
文本问题引导
Andy stared at the white envelope on his desk. The Student Affairs Office logo in the corner made his stomach sink. He opened it slowly.
Health and Safety Warning.
Fine(罚款):$300.
Three hundred dollars - his entire summer earnings,meant for books and a winter coat. Now gone, all because of a messy room!
1.Andy看到罚款信封时有什么反应 反映出他是一个什么样的人
2.Andy用来交罚款的钱是从哪里来的 这笔罚款对Andy原本的计划有什么影响
3.代入Andy，他对房间杂乱，以及罚金的态度可能是怎样的
4.这300美元罚款在故事中可以象征什么
文本问题引导
Andy was a quiet international student who kept his side of the dorm perfectly organized.For him,neatness brought calm and control.His roommate,Eric,was the opposite:he lived in what could only be described as a happy mess.Clothes piled on his chair,empty snack bags collected on the floor,and the shared waste bin always overflowed But Eric was kind —he’d shown Andy around campus,helped with his homework,and lifted his spirits when he was homesick.
1.两人性格与生活习惯有哪些差异 从文中找答案，并思考这对塑造人物形象有什么作用。
补充：Andy和Eric不同的生活习惯，之前在宿舍可能引发过哪些情节
2.Eric都在哪些方面帮助过Andy 这会如何改变Andy的行动
3.罚款事件作为情节转折点，会怎样促使Andy和Eric之间的关系发生变化
文本问题引导
Andy was grateful. He never complained. He didn'twant to start a fight. So, he'd sigh and quietly take out the garbage, thinking it was a small price for such a good friend.But he'd been home for two weeks - and returned to this.Now, holding the letter, he felt it was a big mistake. "I've been cleaning up his mess, and I get fined too " he thought in frustration. This wasn't fair. His usual "avoid trouble"plan had failed.
1.Andy之前不抱怨并帮忙清理，体现他对这段友情怎样的态度 这个处理方式从长期看，是合理的吗
2.从认为是“small price”到觉得是“big mistake”,Andy的心态发生了怎样的变化
3.Andy这次感到不公平，这种心态是正常的吗 思考这会如何处理卫生问题。
4.通过Andy的经历，故事可能在传达关于处理人际关系矛盾的什么样的主旨
文本问题引导
Just then, the door flew open. "Andy! You won't believe the game today..." Eric's energetic entry stopped short. "Whoa. You look pale as a sheet. What's wrong "Without a word, Andy held out the warning letter. Eric took it, his smile fading as he read. "Oh, no. A fine Three hundred I'm... I'm really sorry." He looked from the letter to the pile of pizza boxes in the corner, which he'd meant to throw out for days, then to Andy's spotless desk. Real guilt washed over his face. "I've been completely careless about this. I'm sorrv Andv..."
1.Eric进门时的状态与看到Andy脸色后的反应，
体现出他怎样的性格特点
2.Andy的脸色后面可以如何协同
3.Eric看到罚款单后的愧疚表现，是否是真心的 从哪些细节可以看出
4.这一段反映出Eric是一个什么样的人 他是故意邋邋遢遢还是神经大条 基于这种性格，后文会有什么表现
续写分析
Paragraph 1: "It's okay," Andy said quietly, "but let's clean it together now.
1.Eric听到Andy的提议后，他可能会有怎样的心理活动和动作
2.Andy提出一起清理，接下来他们清理房间时可能会发生哪些具体的事情 从文中寻找目前的宿舍环境，并思考如何构建清理场景。
3.在共同清理的过程中，Andy会更生气，还是会更平静 他的心路历程可能是怎样的
4.从一起清理到第二段两个人都意识到需要规则，情节是如何过渡的 有没有可能出现小插曲
续写分析
Paragraph 2: They both knew that one-time cleaning was not enough -they needed rules.
1.Andy会一上来就接着说规则吗 有什么更“真诚”的表述方式
2.在制定规则过程中，以Andy一贯的性格，他可能提出哪些规则建议
3.Eric之前生活随性，面对制定规则，他可能会有怎样的态度和表现
4.300美元的罚金最终如何处理 Andy需要承担吗
5.规则制定完成后，对宿舍后续生活会产生什么影响 结尾可以停在哪个场景
6.文章的主旨是什么 思考对日常校园生活的启示。
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Paragraph 1: Noah's aching hands seemed to agree with his brother's words. He let his shovel drop with a thud, rubbing his numb fingers together. Every muscle in his body screamed for rest. Maybe Lucas is right, he thought, looking at the long stretch of untouched snow still covering half the driveway. She’ll never know. We could just go now, and still have the twenty dollars. But as he slipped his hand into his pocket, his fingers brushed against the bill. Suddenly, he saw again Mrs. Williams’s encouraging smile and heard her words: “I’ll leave it in your capable hands.” A wave of shame washed over him, hot against the cold. He took a deep breath, the frosty air stinging his lungs. “No,” he said, his voice firm despite his exhaustion. “We made a promise. We finish what we start.” He bent down, picked up his shovel, and drove it into the snow. Lucas hesitated for a moment, then, with a sigh that was more resignation than frustration, he too picked up his shovel.
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