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“十句五定法”
搞定读后续写
Continuation Writing
Lead-in: Watch a video and make a prediction预测.
读后续写解题步骤
一、读什么
二、续什么
三、怎么写-- 续写微技能
读后续写
一、读情节（人物&事件）、情感、伏笔
读什么
主要人物： I（作者）、Elli（作者妻子）、 polar bear、camp manager
事件：作者夫妇在加拿大Churchill的营地拍摄北极熊，一只熊被大蒜面包吸引，攻击营地围栏；夫妇尝试吼叫、敲锅、用胡椒喷雾驱赶，熊暂时跑向湖边；直升机30分钟后到达，需续写“熊返回”和“直升机到来”的情节。
情感：amazing（拍摄时）→terrified（遇熊攻击）→anxious（等待救援）→relieved（预判直升机救援后）。
伏笔: 第一段： 1. “the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes”为 熊返回后围栏可能破损埋下伏笔。
第二段：2. “helicopter was on its way”为直升机救援铺垫。
五句定框架
二、十句五定法
Para 1：A few minutes later, the bear came back.
Para 2：At the very moment, the helicopter arrived.
描写熊返回后的状态（如眼睛仍受胡椒喷雾影响、攻击性是否变化）、对围栏的继续破坏。
提炼“人与自然需保持安全距离”“冷静应对危机”“团队协助的重要性”等主题。
第一定：衔接para1首句
第二定：衔接para2首句
第三定：衔接para2首句
第四定： 结局（正能量）
第五定：主题升华
续什么
直升机如何驱赶熊（如低空盘旋、发出噪音、工作人员引导）、熊最终离开的结果。
写出作者夫妇看到熊持续攻击的焦急，或围栏出现破损危机，自然引出直升机到来。
描写直升机到来的场景（如飞行状态、发出的声音）、对熊的初步影响。
五句定框架+五句细节描写（构思续写思路）
二、十句五定法
Para 1：A few minutes later, the bear came back.
Para 2：At the very moment, the helicopter arrived.
续什么
写作思路：
续写第一段的开头语“几分钟后，熊返回了”。由此可知，接下来先描写熊的状态（如“眼睛泛红但饥饿感未消”），体现其仍有攻击性； 再补充细节：熊对围栏的攻击动作（“撕咬铁丝、撞击木柱”），作者夫妇的反应（“紧握胡椒喷雾、紧张呼喊”）；第一段结尾句需衔接第二段“直升机到来”，可写“听到直升机轰鸣声”。
续写第二段的开头语是“就在关键时刻，直升机到来”，描写直升机的动作（“低空盘旋、发出巨响”），熊的反应（“受惊停攻、抬头张望”）；再补充细节：营地经理的救援行动（“探出机身、挥舞工具”），熊的离开过程（“缓步走向湖边、消失在树林”）。
结尾句升华主旨，结合“北极熊”“安全距离”等关键词，点明人与野生动物相处的启示。
1. 熊捡起蒜香面包，咬一口并跑向湖边。
动作描写
微技能
公式1：Sb did 1,did 2 and did 3
动作链，体现动作先后顺序
续写
三、续写微技能
2. 熊摇摇头，退后几步，然后盯着那架飞机。
The bear shook its head, stepped back and stared at the helicopter.
The bear picked up the garlic bread, bit it and ran to the lake.
动作描写
微技能
练一练
续写
The bear_____(bite)the fence, _____(hit) the wooden posts and _____ (roar)towards the sky.
1.熊撕咬围栏，撞击木柱，朝天怒吼。
I _____(hold)the pepper spray tightly, _______(step)back a few steps and _______(stare)at the bear’s movements.
2. 我握紧胡椒喷雾，后退几步，紧盯着熊的动作。
bit
hit
roared
stared
stepped
held
动作描写
微技能
公式2：Sb did 1 and did 2, doing 3
伴随状态
续写
三、续写微技能
1.我小心翼翼地靠近那只熊，举起胡椒喷雾，屏住呼吸。
I approached the bear slowly and raised the pepper spray, holding my breath .
2.艾利毫不犹豫地抓住了我的胳膊，把我拉了回去，并大声呼救。
Without thinking twice, Elli grabbed my arm and pulled me back, shouting for help.
动作描写
微技能
练一练
续写
Elli and I________(yell)at the polar bear,______(hit)pots hard ________(fire) a blank shotgun into the air.
1.艾利和我对着北极声喊叫，用力敲打锅具，并向空中发射空弹。
The camp manager_________(receive)my call,_________(inform)me about the helicopter __________(suggest)using pepper spray.
2.营地管理员收到了我的电话，告知了我有关直升机的情况，并建议我用胡椒喷雾。
yelled
hit
firing
suggesting
informed
received
1.我们绝望又焦虑地盯着那快坍塌的围栏。
Hopeless and anxious, we stared at the breaking fence.
公式3：情绪adj1+情绪adj2,sb did sth.
情绪前置
情绪+动作描写
微技能
2.感到恐惧和无助，作者握紧胡椒喷雾。
Frightened and helpless, I held the pepper spray tightly.
续写
三、续写微技能
情绪描写
微技能
练一练
续写
_______and __________, the polar bear_________(keep)hitting the fence with its massive paws.
1.北极熊生气又恼怒，不停地用它那巨大的爪子敲击着围栏。
__________and__________ , we _______(radio)the camp manager to ask for urgent help.
2.我心急又无助，于是通过无线电向营地管理员请求紧急援助。
Angry
annoyed
kept
radioed
helpless
Worried
公式4：情绪adj+as sb+was/were, sb did sth
让步关系
Translate the following sentence.
1.尽管这只熊已经疲惫不堪，但它仍然没有停止试图冲破那道围栏。
Tired as the bear was,
情绪+动作描写
微技能
续写
2.尽管我们非常害怕，但我们并没有放弃，而是继续观察那只熊的举动
Scared as we were, we didn’t give up and kept watching the bear’s movements.
Although the bear was tired, it still didn’t stop trying to break the fence.
三、续写微技能
情绪+动作描写
微技能
练一练
续写
____________as I was, I slowly___________(approach)the bear to spray the pepper into its face.
1.尽管我很紧张，但我还是慢慢靠近那只熊，然后将胡椒喷向它脸上。
____________as the polar bear was, it didn’t ___________even after we yelled and hit pots.
2.尽管北极熊很饿，但在我们大叫并猛敲锅具后，它仍然没有放弃。
Nervous
approached
give up
Hungry
1.我们双手颤抖着，眼睁睁地看着熊把一段围栏弄松了。
With our hands trembling, we watched the bear pull a piece of the fence loose.
2.随着熊的咆哮声渐渐消失，我们终于松了一口气。
With the bear’s roar fading away, we finally felt a sense of relief.
公式5：With +n+doing, sb did sth
伴随状语
动作描写
微技能
续写
Read the sentences and try to summarize the structure.
三、续写微技能
练一练
续写
With the helicopter_________(get)closer, the couple_________(show)a smile of hope on their faces.
1.随着直升机越来越近，夫妇俩脸上露出了希望的笑容。
With the garlic bread________(give off)a strong smell, the polar bear________(find)our camp easily.
2.随着蒜香面包散发出浓烈的气味，北极熊很快找到了我们的营地。
getting
showed
giving off
found
动作描写
微技能
情绪+动作描写
微技能
续写
1.当看到围栏断裂时，一阵恐慌涌上心头。
A sense of panic washed over me when I saw the fence start to break.
2.当熊转身离开时，Elli 满心欢喜。
A sense of joy washed over Elli when the bear turned to leave.
公式6：a sense of 情绪名词+washed over+sb+when sb did sth
瞬间情绪
三、续写微技能
练一练
续写
A sense of__________washed over Elli and me when we_________the helicopter was coming.
1.当我们听到直升机要过来时，我和艾利心中顿时涌起一股轻松之感。
A sense of____washed over me when the bear_______________the fence harder.
2.当熊咆哮并用力撞向围栏时，我心中涌起一股恐惧感。
relief
heard
roared and hit
fear
情绪+动作描写
微技能
续写
公式7：So +adj+was/were sb that...
强调情绪强度
1.熊如此凶猛，以至于旧围栏开始剧烈摇晃。
So fierce was the bear that the old fence began to shake violently.
2.我们如此兴奋，以至于直升机到来时忍不住欢呼。
So excited were we that we couldn’t help cheering when the helicopter arrived.
情绪描写
微技能
sb was/were so +adj+that
三、续写微技能
练一练
续写
So_________was the polar bear that it ignored the loud noises.
1.这只北极熊实在太饿了以至于没有理会那些嘈杂声音。
So_________were Elli and I that we could barely speak a word.
2.艾利和我太惊恐万分以至于一句话说不出来。
hungry
terrified
情绪描写
微技能
动作描写
微技能
续写
公式8：No sooner had sb done sth than sb did
紧急衔接动作
1.我们刚听到直升机的声音就立即挥手示意工作人员能看见我们。
No sooner had we heard the helicopter’s sound than we waved our hands to let the crew see us.
2.这只熊一回到营地后，艾利就拿起胡椒喷雾，并做好了使用它的准备。
No sooner had the bear come back to the camp than Elli grabbed the pepper spray and got ready to use it.
三、续写微技能
练一练
续写
No sooner_____I__________(spray)the pepper spray at the bear’s face than the bear ran to the lake to wash its eyes.
1.我刚朝那只熊的脸喷了胡椒喷雾，那只熊就跑到湖边去洗眼睛。
No sooner______I________(take)some pictures of the bear than Elli reminded me to be careful of the bear.
2.我刚给那只熊拍了几张照片，艾利就提醒我要小心熊。
sprayed
had
had
taken
动作描写
微技能
语言+动作描写
微技能
续写
1.“直升机来了！我们得救了！”艾利兴奋地指着天空大喊道。
“The helicopter is here! We’re saved!” Elli cried, pointing at the sky excitedly.
公式9：“...”sb did sth(说话的动作),doing sth
对话+动作
2.“别害怕！我们还有胡椒喷雾！”我对艾利说道，紧紧地握住了她的手。
“Don’t be afraid! We still have the pepper spray!” I said to Elli, holding her hand tightly.
三、续写微技能
练一练
续写
“Be careful! The bear is coming back again!” I_________(shout)to Elli,_________(hold)the pepper spray tightly in my hand.
1.“小心！那只熊又要回来了！”我一边朝着艾利大喊，一边紧紧握着喷雾器。
“The fence is getting weaker! ” I______(say)to Elli,________(look)at the shaking fence.
2.“这栅栏越来越脆弱了！”我看着摇晃的栅栏，对艾利说道。
shouted
holding
said
looking
语言+动作描写
微技能
升华
脱险
1. 就在那一刻，我意识到小小的冷静之举帮我们度过了危险。
It was at that moment that realised that the small act of calmness helped us get through the danger.
结尾模板句（强调句）
2. 就在那一刻，我才意识到与野生动物保持安全距离是多么重要。
It was at that moment that I realize how important it is to keep a safe distance from wild animals.
公式10：It was at that moment that +句子剩余部分。
续写
三、续写微技能
公式11: Only+状语+did/can sb do sth
升华
脱险
1.只有当我们看到那只熊消失在远方时，我们才明白与野生动物共存不仅需要勇气，还需要尊重。
Only when we watched the bear disappear into the distance did we understand that coexisting with wildlife requires not just courage, but also respect.
2.直到那时我们才明白，在与像北极熊这样的野生动物打交道时，我们决不能冒险行事。
Only then can we understand that we should never take risks when dealing with wild animals like polar bears.
续写
结尾模板句（倒装句）
三、续写微技能
One Possible Version
Paragraph 1
A few minutes later, the bear came back. With its eyes glowing red , the bear walked straight to the wire fence. We shouted as loud as we could, hit pots hard, and shot another blank shell into the air. A sense of fear washed over me when I saw the wire fence start to break. So scared were Elli and I that we took the radio every minute, asking the camp manager how far the helicopter was. The bear didn’t care about our loud defenses at all—he just kept pulling the wire with his big paws, hoping to get in.
范文
With +n+doing, sb did sth
Sb did 1,did 2 and did 3
a sense of 情绪名词+washed over+sb+when sb did sth
So +adj+was/were sb that...
Sb did 1 and did 2, doing 3
Identify sentence patterns from the version
Paragraph 2
At the very moment, the helicopter arrived. No sooner had we heard its loud noise than we jumped up, waving our arms wildly to let the crew see us. “Over here! The bear’s by the fence!” I shouted, pointing excitedly at the bear, my voice shaking a little. The bear stopped for a second, lifting its head to look at the helicopter. It was at that moment that we felt a little hope—soon the bear would leave. The bear walked slowly toward the nearby lake as the helicopter flew lower, then we climbed into the helicopter. Only through this scary encounter did we realize that we must always keep a safe distance from wild animals.
范文
No sooner had sb done sth than...
“...”sb did sth(说话的动作),doing sth
It was at that moment that +句子剩余部分
Only+状语+did/can I do sth（倒装句）
homework:
1.Write down the 11 sentence structures in your notebook.
2.Make sentences by using these structures.
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