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外研版八年级英语下学期期末写作提升训练
Unit1 Career talks
一、命题与考点说明
常考文体：记叙短文、英文书信、课堂发言稿；
写作必备要素：理想职业、选择缘由、具体行动规划；
本单元写作核心语法：动词不定式、宾语从句、时间/条件状语从句。
二、标准范文与考点标注
原文 考点
Everyone has a wonderful dream about future jobs. As for me, I want to be an engineer in the future. 不定式作宾语
The reason why I decide to be an engineer is that I’m interested in science and building things. The reason why…is that 引导宾语从句
When I was little, I enjoyed making small model toys. It made me fall in love with engineering. when 引导时间状语从句；make sb. do 不带to不定式结构
I know it takes lots of knowledge and hard work to become a good engineer. it 作形式主语，不定式作真正主语
To make my dream come true, I will pay more attention to math and physics at school. 句首不定式表目的
Besides, I plan to read more science books in my free time to open my mind. 不定式作目的状语
I believe as long as I keep trying, my dream will come true one day. 宾语从句内嵌条件状语从句
行文思路
开头：As for me 开门见山，点明理想职业；
主体：结合童年爱好说明择业原因，从课内学习、课外阅读两方面阐述追梦行动；
结尾：借助条件状语从句抒发期许，升华主题、收束全文。
易错警示
1. hope 后仅可接 hope to do 结构，无 hope sb. to do 错误用法；
2. 句首表目的只能用 To do 不定式，不可直接使用动词原形。
三、同话题变式范文
变式1 书信（写给外教寻求职业规划建议）
Dear Mr. Smith,
I’m writing to share my future career plan with you. I hope to work as an engineer after finishing school.
I have loved making model machines since I was a child, so I decide to learn science well. To get better grades, I spend spare time learning math every weekend.
I wonder whether you can offer some useful advice. I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
变式2 课堂发言稿
Hello everyone!
My ideal career is to be an engineer. I became fond of building different models in my childhood.
In order to realize my dream, I will put more energy into science courses and read related books in my free time. No success comes without efforts. I’m confident that my dream will come true step by step.
四、词句积累板块
（一）基础表达→进阶替换
want to be（想要成为）→ hope to become（立志成为）
like（喜欢）→ be interested in（对……感兴趣）
many（许多）→ plenty of（大量的）
study hard（努力学习）→ make an effort to study（奋力钻研）
in the future（将来）→ in the coming years（在未来几年）
keep trying（不断尝试）→ keep making continuous efforts（持之以恒付出）
realize a dream（实现梦想）→ achieve one’s goal（达成目标）
spare time（空余时间）→ free leisure time（闲暇时光）
（二）单元实用句式
As far as I’m concerned, choosing a suitable career plays an important role in our life.（在我看来，合适的职业选择对人生至关重要。）【作文开头引入观点】
It is necessary for teenagers to stick to their dreams in daily study.（青少年在日常学习中坚守梦想十分必要。）【中间阐述做法】
I hold the view that constant efforts will bring us closer to our targets.（我认为坚持不懈的努力会让我们靠近目标。）【结尾升华】
It takes plenty of time and energy to realize a meaningful dream.（实现有意义的梦想需要大量时间与精力。）【中间阐述追梦不易】
五、分层练习设计
练习1 原文填空巩固
__________ (对我来说), I want to be an engineer in the future.
__________ (我选择成为工程师的原因是) I’m interested in science and building things.
__________ (当我小时候), I enjoyed making small model toys.
It made me __________ (爱上) engineering.
I know it takes plenty of knowledge __________ (成为) a good engineer.
__________ (为了实现梦想), I will pay more attention to math and physics at school.
__________ (此外), I plan to read more science books in my free time to open my mind.
I believe __________ (只要) I keep trying, my dream will come true one day.
练习2 句式改写训练
中文提示：我的理想是成为医生，我十分喜欢生物，我需要每天努力学习去实现目标。
采分提示：必须使用 hope to become、make an effort、It’s necessary to… 三个短语。
要求：选用指定词汇完成句子写作。
练习3 写作训练
题目：My Dream Job
写作要点：①自己理想的职业；②选择这份职业的理由；③今后的学习计划
简易写作提纲
开头：________________________________________
中间：________________________________________
结尾：________________________________________
参考答案
练习1
1. As for me
2. The reason why I decide to be an engineer is that
3. When I was little
4. fall in love with
5. to become
6. To make my dream come true
7. Besides
8. as long as
练习2 改写参考
I hope to become a doctor in the future. I am deeply interested in biology. It’s necessary for me to make an effort every day to realize my dream.
练习3 三档范文
低档（5分）
I want to be a doctor. I like biology. I study hard every day and want to help sick people. I think I can make it.
【错点标注：用词简单无进阶表达，句式单一，无语法亮点】
中档（8分｜嵌入一处进阶短语）
My dream job is a doctor. I am interested in biology and I want to help sick people. I study biology and chemistry hard at school. I read books about medicine in my free leisure time. I hope my dream can come true in the coming years.
【亮点：进阶短语替换基础词汇，句式工整，要点齐全】
高分（10分｜2个进阶短语+1个结尾加分句）
My dream job is to be a doctor in the coming years. I am interested in medical knowledge and I hope to help sick people.
The reason why I want to be a doctor is that doctors can save people’s lives. To make my dream come true, I make an effort to learn biology and chemistry well at school. I also read medical books in my free leisure time.
I hold the view that as long as I keep making continuous efforts, my dream will come true one day.
【亮点：两处进阶短语精准运用，结尾高分句型升华主题，贴合核心语法，零语法错误】

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