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沪教牛津九年级上册 Unit6 Food and health 写作专项精讲
一、原题梳理
写作任务：Writing a restaurant review 餐馆点评
写作背景：校刊《Fine Foods》栏目征稿，要求撰写一篇探店评论，记述就餐经历，给出菜品、服务、价位的评价，文末做出推荐或者不推荐的结论。
课文范例划分文章六大固定板块 ：
Star ratings 星级评分：分别对菜品、服务、价格打出星级，放在文章最顶端
Introduction 开篇引入：写明就餐时间、同行人员，点明本次探店的餐厅
Basic facts about the restaurant 餐厅基础概况：餐厅主打菜系、人均消费、特色菜品
Review of the food 菜品评价：描述品尝的菜肴口感、口味，写作时主动嵌入本单元宾语从句作为得分句式
Review of the service 服务评价：点评店员态度、上菜速度、店内环境，可写优点，也可以客观指出不足之处
Recommendation 结尾推荐：总结整体体验，说明是否推荐，顺带给出小建议
单元核心语法：Object clauses 宾语从句
两类宾语从句考点，也是本篇作文必须运用的得分句型
that 引导的宾语从句
常用谓语动词：think, believe, hope, agree, feel, find, know, promise, suggest 等
语法规则：that 在口语和作文里大多可以省略；从句语序永远使用陈述句语序；主句为过去时态，从句时态需要对应往后推移
例句：I think (that) this restaurant provides healthy and delicious dishes.
我认为这家餐厅的菜品健康又美味。
wh - 类连接词引导的宾语从句（what/why/how/who/where）
常用谓语动词：wonder, explain, discuss, remember, ask, show, understand
核心考点：从句必须采用陈述语序，不能使用疑问语序
正确：I will tell you how you can keep a balanced diet.
错误：I will tell you how can you keep a balanced diet.
语法做题要点总结
that 从句侧重陈述观点、看法；wh - 从句侧重询问、解释具体内容
时态原则：主现从任意，主过从必过，客观真理永一现
语序原则：所有宾语从句一律陈述句语序
写作提纲
版本一（中式家常菜餐厅，正向推荐 ）
Star ratings
Food: ★★★★★ Service: ★★★★☆ Price: ★★★★☆
Introduction
Last Sunday evening, I had dinner with my parents at Green Home Restaurant.
Basic facts
It serves traditional Chinese home-cooked food. The average cost per person is around 40 yuan. Most dishes follow the idea of a balanced diet.
Review of the food（嵌入 that 宾语从句）
I find that nearly all dishes contain fresh vegetables and proper meat. My favourite tomato beef tastes tender and tasty.
Review of the service（嵌入 how 引导宾语从句）
The waiters are friendly and they know how they can serve customers well. The only shortcoming is that meals will take a little longer during dinner rush hours.
Recommendation
I strongly recommend this restaurant. If you want tasty healthy food, you can choose it.
版本二（西式简餐，优缺点并存 ）
Star ratings
Food: ★★★★☆ Service: ★★★☆☆ Price: ★★★☆☆
Introduction
I visited Sunlight Western Restaurant together with my classmates last Friday after school.
Basic facts
This shop mainly provides steak, pasta and fresh fruit salad. It costs about 60 yuan for each customer. It pays attention to nutritious food.
Review of the food
I believe that their fruit salad is the best choice. It uses fresh seasonal fruits and brings us balanced nutrition.
Review of the service
We wondered why the dishes came out slowly when many guests crowded into the shop. The waiters were polite yet understaffed.
Recommendation
I still recommend this restaurant. You had better book seats ahead of time to save waiting time.
三、分类万能句型
1. 开篇引入段落
I went to … with my family last weekend and I would like to share my dining experience with you.
上周末我和家人去往…… 就餐，在这里分享我的用餐体验。
I decide to write this review to introduce a nice restaurant I have found recently.
我写下这篇点评，介绍一家我近期发掘的餐厅。
2. 餐厅基础信息
This restaurant focuses on healthy food and builds its menu based on a balanced diet.
这家餐厅主打健康饮食，菜单依照均衡膳食搭配设计。
Its main dishes are local traditional food, and the average price is acceptable for students.
主打本地特色菜品，人均价位对于学生十分友好。
3. 菜品评价（核心，必写宾语从句）
I think that most dishes use fresh raw materials and do not add too much oil or sugar.
我认为绝大多数菜品用料新鲜，少油少糖。
We found that vegetables and meat are matched reasonably, which is good for our daily health.
我们发现荤素搭配十分合理，有益于身体健康。
4. 服务评价（优先使用 wh - 类宾语从句）
I could understand why lots of diners speak highly of their warm service.
我可以理解为什么很多食客都夸赞这里贴心的服务。
The waiters can show us how we can pick nutritious meals suitable for teenagers.
店员会告诉我们如何挑选适合青少年的营养餐食。
5. 结尾推荐段落
I sincerely recommend this restaurant to all students. It can let us enjoy delicious food without harming our health.
我向同学们推荐这家餐厅，我们既能享用美食，又可以守护身体健康。
Though it has a few small flaws, it is still worthy of your visit.
尽管存在一点小缺憾，它依旧值得前去打卡。
四、范文
范文 1（推荐中式餐馆 ）
Wonderful Dinner at Green Home
Date: 12 June
Name of restaurant: Green Home
Food: ★★★★★ Service: ★★★★☆ Price: ★★★★☆
Last Sunday evening, I enjoyed dinner with my parents at Green Home Restaurant, and I want to share my experience here.
This restaurant offers traditional Chinese home cooking, and the average price is about forty yuan per person. Most dishes follow the rule of a balanced diet.
I find that the cooks choose fresh vegetables and lean meat to prepare meals. I ordered tomato beef and mixed vegetables, and they tasted amazing. The waiters are polite and they know how they can bring customers nice service. The only pity is that we waited nearly ten minutes for our food at peak dinner time.
I would definitely recommend this restaurant. If you hope to eat tasty and healthy food in your spare time, do not miss it.
中文译文
在绿舍餐厅的美好一餐
日期：6 月 12 日
餐厅名称：绿舍餐厅
菜品：五星 服务：四星半 价格：四星半
上周日傍晚，我和父母在绿舍餐厅用餐，接下来我分享我的就餐体验。
这家店主打中式家常菜，人均大约四十元，菜品都遵循均衡膳食的理念。
我发现厨师都会选用新鲜蔬菜和瘦肉制作菜肴。我点了番茄牛肉和时蔬拼盘，口感十分出色。店员待人友善，清楚该怎样给到顾客优质服务。唯一不足是晚餐高峰期我们等待了十分钟才上菜。
我十分推荐这家店铺。如果你想要吃到美味健康的饭菜，千万不要错过。
范文 2（带有客观缺点 ）
My Review of Sunlight Western Restaurant
Date: 18 June
Name of restaurant: Sunlight Western Restaurant
Food: ★★★★☆ Service: ★★★☆☆ Price: ★★★☆☆
Last Friday, my classmates and I had supper at Sunlight Western Restaurant after school. I am going to write my review for the school column.
The restaurant sells steak, pasta and fresh fruit salad, with an average cost of sixty yuan. It designs many nutritious meals for young people.
We believe that their fruit salad is the most wonderful dish. However, we wondered why the serving speed was quite slow that day. The waiters were polite but they did not have enough staff to serve all guests quickly.
I still recommend this restaurant to teenagers. I suggest that you arrive early or reserve seats in advance to cut down your waiting time.
中文译文
阳光西餐厅探店点评
日期：6 月 18 日
餐厅名称：阳光西餐厅
菜品：四星半 服务：三星半 价格：三星半
上周五放学后，我和同班同学前往阳光西餐厅就餐，我为本校栏目写下这篇点评。
这家餐厅主营牛排、意面以及鲜果沙拉，人均消费六十元，店内专为青少年设计多款营养餐。
我们都认为鲜果沙拉是店内最佳菜品。但我们也疑惑当天上菜速度十分缓慢。服务员态度友好，只是人手不足，难以快速接待全部食客。
我依旧向青少年推荐这家餐厅。我建议大家提早到店或者提前订座，减少等候时间。
五、通用写作模板
【星级】
Date:
Name of restaurant:________
Food: ★★★★☆ Service: ★★★★☆ Price: ★★★★☆
第一段（引入）
I went to this restaurant with________ on________. I am writing this review to talk about my dining experience.
第二段（餐厅基础信息）
This restaurant mainly serves________. Its average price is suitable for students, and it focuses on balanced and healthy food.
第三段（菜品 + 服务，嵌入宾语从句，得分核心）
I think that the food here tastes great with fresh materials. Meanwhile, I know how the waiters look after every customer carefully. There is one small shortcoming that________.
第四段（结尾推荐）
I recommend this restaurant. I hope that more students can enjoy nice and healthy meals here in their leisure time.
六、写作素材
素食餐馆
主句：I know that plenty of vegetables can bring us enough vitamins and keep our body fit.
句意：我了解足量蔬菜可以摄入维生素，维持身体健康。
特色火锅店（偏负面点评）
主句：I feel that too much spicy oil is bad for teenagers’ digestion, so I cannot fully recommend it.
句意：我认为过多油脂不利于青少年肠胃消化，因此我不会全力推荐这家店。
七、作文自查清单
文章包含星级评分、开篇介绍、餐厅概况、菜品点评、服务点评、结尾推荐六大板块，行文逻辑通顺
主动使用 that 引导和 wh - 引导两类宾语从句，从句语序、时态没有语法错误
运用本单元核心词汇：balanced diet, nutritious, healthy food, raw material 等单元短语
单词拼写、标点、时态格式无误
八、本单元高分短语整理
balanced diet 均衡膳食（单元核心短语）
nutritious food 营养食品
raw materials 原材料
eating habit 饮食习惯
keep fit /keep healthy 保持健康
dining peak hours 用餐高峰期
cut down oil and sugar 少油少糖
digest food 消化食物

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