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湘少版五年级上英语 Unit 1 What does she look like?
写作训练：描写老师、朋友或家人的外貌
主题句型：He/She is ... He/She has ...
一、写作目标
· 能用 What does he/she look like? 引出人物外貌描写。
· 能用 He/She is ... 写身高、年龄或整体印象。
· 能用 He/She has ... 写头发、脸、眼睛、鼻子等外貌特征。
· 能补充 He/She is kind/active/nice. 让人物更生动。
二、课文仿写思路
原文指路
课文先问：What does she look like? 这是询问人物外貌的核心问题。
回答时先写整体：She's tall. / She's not very tall.
再写细节：She has long hair. She has a round face and big eyes.
读写部分还会补充性格：She looks serious, but she is kind.
核心词汇
tall 高的 short 矮的 young 年轻的 old 年老的
long hair 长头发 short hair 短发 short brown hair 棕色短发
round face 圆脸 bright eyes 明亮的眼睛 big eyes 大眼睛
nice 好看的/友好的 kind 和蔼的 active 活跃的 serious 严肃的
wears glasses 戴眼镜 white teeth 洁白的牙齿
可套用句型
This is my ______.
His/Her name is ______.
He/She is tall/short/young/kind.
He/She has long hair, a round face and bright eyes.
He/She looks nice and kind.
I like him/her very much.
易错点提示
写“他/她很高”用 He/She is tall；写“他/她有长头发”用 He/She has long hair。
hair 一般不可数，不写 hairs；long hair 和 short hair 前面不加 a。
eyes 通常用复数，如 big eyes, bright eyes。
介绍女性用 she/her，介绍男性用 he/his，不要前后混用。
三、写作练习
练习 1 基础写作：My Teacher
写作题目：请写 4-5 句话介绍你的一位老师，写出姓名、身高和 1-2 个外貌特点。
写作提示：可用 His/Her name is... He/She is... He/She has...
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练习 2 提升写作：My Friend
写作题目：请写一段话介绍你的朋友，写清楚他/她的外貌和性格。
写作提示：可写 tall/short, long hair/short hair, bright eyes, kind, active。
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练习 3 挑战写作：A Special Teacher
写作题目：请仿照课文中的 Judy 和 Lingling，介绍一位特别的老师或你喜欢的人。
写作提示：可写身份、外貌、性格和你喜欢他/她的原因，句式要有变化。
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四、参考范文与讲解
参考范文 1 My Teacher
This is my English teacher. Her name is Miss Li. She is tall. She has short hair and bright eyes. She is kind. I like her very much.
范文讲解
这篇范文先用 This is my English teacher 点明人物。
接着用 Her name is... 写姓名，再用 She is... 和 She has... 描写外貌。
最后补充 She is kind 和 I like her very much，人物形象更完整。
参考范文 2 My Friend
I have a good friend. His name is Peter. He is not very tall, but he is active. He has a round face and big eyes. He has short hair, too. He looks nice and kind. We often play together after school.
范文讲解
开头先介绍关系和姓名，读者马上知道写的是谁。
范文用了 He is not very tall, but he is active. 句式有一点变化，不只是简单罗列。
外貌描写后加入 We often play together after school，文章更像真实介绍。
参考范文 3 A Special Teacher
We have a special teacher. Her name is Wang Yaping. She is an astronaut. She is tall and beautiful. She has long hair, big eyes and a nice nose. She gives science lessons from the China Space Station. She looks kind and brave. I like her because she teaches us many interesting things.
范文讲解
挑战范文仿照课文中 Lingling 介绍 Wang Yaping 的内容，先写身份，再写外貌。
中间使用 She is... 和 She has... 两种核心句型，符合本单元写作重点。
最后用 because 写喜欢她的原因，比只写 I like her 更具体。
五、写作小结
写人物外貌时，可以按“人物身份-姓名-整体特点-外貌细节-性格或喜爱原因”的顺序来写。先用 He/She is... 写整体，再用 He/She has... 写细节，句子会更清楚。
完成后请检查：he/she 是否一致？is 和 has 有没有用对？hair 和 eyes 的形式是否正确？

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