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Unit 7 Feel the Rhythm 感受韵律
Unit 7 Section B 3a–3c
Writing 音乐故事写作探究学案
2026—2027学年人教版九年级英语上册
Name 姓名 __________ Class 班级 __________ Date 日期 __________
Our challenge 探究任务
Write a music story for a teen magazine. Show what happened and why it mattered; a list of favourite songs is not yet a story. You do not need to play an instrument to have a music story. Time: two 45-minute lessons, including revision.
Textbook model 教材范文
My Music Story 我的音乐故事
The present that changed my life was the guitar my father bought me for my eighth birthday. I spent the next several months learning to play the guitar. I often sat next to my father while he showed me how to play a song. Then I went to my room and practised until my fingers hurt. I had a lot of trouble at first. But gradually, I became good at playing the guitar.
Some of my schoolmates invited me to join their band. At first, I was too shy to play in front of people. Then I realized that I enjoyed music more when I shared it with others. We had great fun playing music and I made good friends with those in the band. Nowadays, our band is getting more and more popular. We often take part in performances both inside and outside our school.
Although I have become busier this year, I still love playing the guitar and manage to find time for it. Music makes me happy when I am feeling sad, and relaxes me when I am stressed. It will always be part of my life.
Jack, age 15
W1 Trace the change 追踪变化 8 min
Put the five events in textbook 3a in order. Draw a line under the moment when Jack’s attitude to sharing music changes. Which changes depend on practice, and which depend on people
The story moves from an important beginning, through difficulty and change, to music’s meaning now. Find one sentence for each stage.
Writing 写作探究
Find the moment worth telling 寻找值得讲述的瞬间
W2 Read as a writer 像作者一样阅读 8 min
Writer’s choice 作者选择 Evidence in Jack’s story 范文证据 Effect on readers 阅读效果
A specific beginning 具体开端 ______________________ ______________________
Action 行动 ______________________ ______________________
A turning point 转折点 ______________________ ______________________
A link to life now 联系现在 ______________________ ______________________
Notice the tenses. Past events mainly use the simple past; current habits and feelings use the present. “Have become” connects a change with now. Choose a tense for meaning, not to display every tense you know.
W3 Choose your own story 选择自己的故事 8 min
Use 3b. Choose a real experience involving a song, a musician, a performance, an instrument or listening with someone. A small moment can carry a clear change.
Possible starting points: a song that helped you feel less lonely; a family tune; a first performance; a musical disagreement; a friend who shared a piece with you. If you create a fictional story, label it as fiction.
Planning question 构思问题 My notes 我的记录
Where and when did it begin 何时何地 ________________________________
What difficulty or need did I have 困难或需求 ________________________________
What did someone actually do 具体行动 ________________________________
What changed and what did not 变化与未变 ________________________________
Why does it matter now 现在的意义 ________________________________
W4 Tell it before writing 先说后写 4 min
Tell your partner the story in one minute. The listener asks one question that needs a concrete detail: “What did you do next ” or “How could I see that you felt different ” Add the missing detail to your notes.
Writing 写作探究
Make the change visible 把变化写具体
W5 Compare two drafts 比较两种写法 6 min
These short examples are written for this task.
A. I was nervous. Music was helpful. It was an unforgettable experience.
B. My hands shook before the class song. Mei tapped the beat beside me. I joined her on the second line and finally looked up at the class.
Which details let the reader notice the change without being told “Music was helpful” Improve A with one action of your own. Keep it believable.
W6 Draft your story 起草故事 18 min
Write about 100–120 words. Give a clear beginning, a difficulty or need, an action or turning point, and what music means to you now. Include a relative clause where it helps identify a song, person or moment.
Optional support: “The song that …”; “At first …”; “When …”; “Then I noticed …”; “Since then …”. Choose only the phrases that fit your experience.
My Music Story 我的音乐故事
Before sharing, underline the action that causes or shows the change. If you cannot find one, add a specific moment.
Writing 写作探究
Revise for a reader 为读者修改
W7 Give useful feedback 提出具体反馈 7 min
Read a partner’s draft once for the story. Read again for the language. Give evidence for your comment rather than writing only “Good”.
Check 检查点 Reader’s evidence or question 读者证据或问题
I can follow the events. 我能读懂事件顺序 ________________________________
I can see a change and its cause. 我能看见变化及原因 ________________________________
The ending grows from the story. 结尾呼应经历 ________________________________
The relative clause is clear. 定语从句指向清晰 ________________________________
My strongest detail: _______________________________________________
One part that needs a clearer link: _____________________________________
W8 Revise the most important part 修改关键部分 14 min
Revise the turning point or ending first. Then check tense, pronoun reference, spelling and punctuation. Write a clean final version below or on a separate sheet if you need more room.
W9 Explain a revision 说明一次修改 3 min
I changed __________________ to __________________ because the reader needs to understand __________________.
My next writing goal is ______________________________________________.
Publication check: the story is mine or is labelled as fiction; the details fit together; I have not copied Jack’s life into my own.
Writing answers 写作参考答案
From the model to a personal story 从范文走向自己的故事
W1 / Textbook 3a Event order 事件顺序
E → C → B → D → A. In the printed A–E list, write 5, 3, 2, 4, 1. Jack receives a guitar, learns from his father, becomes good at playing, joins a band and enjoys friendship through shared music.
The key attitude change is “Then I realized that I enjoyed music more when I shared it with others.” Practice supports skill; his father and schoolmates provide teaching, opportunity and companionship. These influences work together.
W2 Writer’s choices 作者的选择
Choice 选择 Evidence and effect 证据及作用
Specific beginning The guitar on his eighth birthday gives a concrete starting point.
Action during difficulty He watches his father and practises; effort is shown through action.
Turning point Joining and enjoying a band changes his view of sharing music.
Meaning now Music brings happiness and relief from stress; the ending connects past experience with present life.
W3 and W4 Planning and oral rehearsal 构思与口头预演
Answers are personal. A complete plan should show the initial need, an action, a change and its present meaning. A student who only listens to music can write a strong story. Do not require lessons, expensive instruments, prizes or a public performance.
Useful follow-up questions include “Which line or sound did you notice ”, “What did your friend do ” and “What changed the next time ” A private experience may be simplified; a fictional one should be labelled.
W5 Why the second draft works 第二种写法的作用
Shaking hands show nervousness; Mei’s tapping gives support; joining the second line and looking up show increased confidence. Draft B gives actions that readers can connect, whereas A only names a feeling and gives general praise.
Another acceptable improvement: “I missed the first line, but my brother quietly sang it again beside me. I took a breath and joined him.” This gives a visible event and a reason for a change without making the moment unrealistically dramatic.
Teacher focus 教师关注点
Treat Jack’s “until my fingers hurt” as a detail in the story, not advice to practise through pain. The transferable writing technique is concrete detail and effort, not copying every action in the model.
Writing answers 写作参考答案
Model and revision guidance 范文与修改指导
W6 to W8 A model music story 故事范文
The following fictional model shows one possible response. Students should use their own experience or label fiction.
My Music Story 我的音乐故事
Last autumn, I joined a class performance because my friend Mei needed a partner. I liked the song, but I was afraid of singing in front of others.
During our first practice, I stopped whenever I made a mistake. Mei did not laugh. She tapped the rhythm and waited for me to begin again. On the day of the performance, I forgot a line. Then I heard her voice beside me and carried on.
We did not win a prize, but I felt less afraid. Now the song that we sang reminds me of her patience. Music has become a way for me to connect with people, not just something to listen to.
Why this works 范文分析
The beginning sets a situation and a difficulty. Mei’s action helps the narrator continue, so the change has a cause. The ending grows from the same event. “The song that we sang” identifies the song clearly; that is an object and may be omitted. The model is 113 words.
W7 and W8 Feedback guide 反馈与修改参考
Area 评价方面 Secure performance 达成表现 Useful revision 可采取的修改
Content 内容 A clear event, difficulty, action and change Replace a general comment with an action.
Organisation 组织 Events follow a clear order; the ending fits Add a missing cause or remove an unrelated event.
Language 语言 Tenses fit time; the relative clause is clear Rebuild the clause from two messages.
Voice 个人表达 Believable details and a personal meaning Replace copied claims with a detail that fits this story.
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