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课件13张PPT。 May七年级提优课程-书面表达
常见错误分析
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1用词不当信息提示
????????李华平时总是忙于功课,很少做家务。母亲节这一天,她想帮妈妈做饭,却不小心切了手指,本想让妈妈在节日期间好好休息,却未能如愿。以“On Mother’s Day”为题写一篇词数为80-100的短文。要求条理清晰、意思连贯、语句通顺、标点正确。
1习作? On Mother's Day
??????I'm usually busy with my studies and do few (1) housework when I come back from school. It was Mother's Day yesterday. I wanted Mum to have a good rest and I did all instead (2) her. I got up early yesterday morning and bought a lot of vegetables, fish and meat in the market. I washed them and then began to cook. I was sure I could do as well like (3) Mum. Bad luck! I cut one of my fingers and cried out. Mum and Dad rushed into (4) and Mum asked Dad to take me to the hospital. When we came back, dinner (5) ready. I felt sorry and said, “Mum had a busy Mother's Day again!”
(1)housework是不可数名词,应用little来修饰。(2)instead是副词,后不能接宾语,这儿应该用instead of。(3)like虽然可用作介词,意为“像”,但这儿是as... as...结构,因此此处应改为as well as...。(4)into是介词,其后要接宾语,但句中无宾语,所以改为副词in。(5)ready是形容词,不能单独作谓语,所以其前要加was。1★ 精品范文 On Mother’s Day
I'm usually busy with my studies and do little housework when I come back from school. It was Mother's Day yesterday. I wanted Mum to have a good rest and I did all instead of her. I got up early yesterday morning and bought a lot of vegetables, fish and meat in the market. I washed them and then began to cook. I was sure I could do as well as Mum. Bad luck! I cut one of my fingers and cried out. Mum and Dad rushed in and Mum asked Dad to take me to the hospital. When we came back, dinner was ready. I felt sorry and said, “Mum had a busy Mother's Day again!”2 句型结构、固定搭配错误信息提示
?????? 众所周知吸烟有害健康。请以“Smoking is harmful to health”为题写一篇至少100词的英语短文,来介绍一下吸烟的危害,以唤起人们戒烟。
2习作 Smoking is harmful to health
As (1) is known to all that smoking is bad for health. In China there have (2) millions of smokers. Each year millions of people die from smoking.
Smoking makes many people ill. Those who often smoke have black teeth. Lots of smokers cough day and night. Lung cancer is one of the most serious illnesses that are caused by smoking. Many people suffer from this terrible disease and lose their lives.
Smoking does harm not only to smokers themselves, but also to non-smokers, especially women and children. They may have their health harm (3) because of the smoke caused by cigarettes.
Everyone agrees that smoking is not good for health, but it is not easy for smokers to giving up smoking (4). I hope all the smokers will stop smoking for the good of their own health and also for the people around them. Let’s enjoying (5) clean and fresh air together.
(1)将As改为It。“It is known to all that+从句”是一个固定结构。意思是“众所周知……”。(2)句型there is/are表示“某地有某物”，该句型强调“存在”，而have/has常用来表达“某人有某物”，强调“所有”，其主语通常是人。因此，将have改为are。(3)将harm改为harmed。“have sth. done”是一个固定结构,意思是“使 / 让某物遭受……”。本句的意思是“吸烟产生的毒气很可能使他们(妇女、儿童)的健康遭受到侵害”,因为health被smoke损害,因此,要用过去分词harmed,以表示被动的含义。(4)英语中表达“某人做某事很不容易”常用句型“It is not easy for sb. to do sth.”。 应将giving up smoking改为give up smoking。(5)let’s后要跟动词原形构成“Let’s do sth.”结构。应将enjoying改为enjoy。2★ 精品范文?? Smoking is harmful to health
???????? It is known to all that smoking is bad for health. In China there are millions of smokers. Each year millions of people die from smoking.
??????? Smoking makes many people ill. Those who often smoke have black teeth. Lots of smokers cough day and night. Lung cancer is one of the most serious illnesses that are caused by smoking. Many people suffer from this terrible disease and lose their lives.
????????Smoking does harm not only to smokers themselves, but also to non-smokers, especially women and children. They may have their health harmed because of the smoke caused by cigarettes.
????????Everyone agrees that smoking is not good for health, but it is not easy for smokers to give up smoking. I hope all the smokers will stop smoking for the good of their own health and also for the people around them. Let’s enjoy clean and fresh air together.3 文体格式错误
信息提示
???????? 2015年3月12日是星期一,也是植树节。那天天气晴朗,上午8点半,老师和同学们在校门口集合,步行去西山植树。植树前,老师告诉同学们树木可以净化空气、防风固土、美化环境,并要求每人栽五棵小树。同学们干得都很卖力。班长林涛不顾生病,完成自己的任务后,又帮助其他人,他是我们学习的好榜样。请根据提示内容,写一篇日记。
3 习作 2015.3.12? Monday (1)???????
????????????????? Sunny (2)?????????????????????????
Dear friends (3),
　　It is March 12th today. At half past eight, all the teachers and students in our school gathered in front of the school gate. Then we went on foot to the Western Hill to plant trees. Before we started working, the teacher gave us a talk on the importance of planting trees. He said that trees can help to keep the air clean, protect us from strong wind and sand and make our city more beautiful. Then he showed us how to plant trees and asked each of us to plant at least five trees.

???????(1)将日记的日期2015.3.12 Monday 改为 Monday, March 12th, 2015或March 12th, 2015, Monday。写英文日记时应注意以下两点:英文日记的格式与中文日记的格式相差不大。日期和星期应写在第一行的左上角顶格位置,日期和星期的写法应注意:年、月、日俱全时,可按月、日、年或日、月、年的次序写。如:March 12th, 2015或12th March, 2015; 只有月、日时,其顺序为月、日,月份可用缩略式。如:September 20th或Sept. 20th;如果要写明星期几,可将其放在日期的前面或后面。如:Friday, Oct. 20, 2015或Oct. 20, 2015, Friday。（2)写日记时,天气状况应写在日期的右边且靠右顶格,而不是写在日期的下面。天气状况一般用形容词表示。如:Fine (晴),Sunny(晴), Rainy(雨), Snowy (雪), Windy(多风), Cloudy(多云)等。(3)本文要求写一篇日记,而不是书信。Dear friends是用在写信时的称呼语,在写日记时应去掉。1 习作
??????? After that we started working. Some strong boys dug holes, some carried water and some girls put trees in the holes. We all worked hard. Among us, Lin Tao, our monitor set a good example to us. Though he was ill, he worked harder. When he finished his task, he went on to help others. He was wet all over after work. Looking at the lines of the young trees, we smiled happily.
????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? Truly yours, (4)??
????????????????????????????????????????????????????? Mary Baker (5)???
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(4)和(5)都是书信的落款格式,不能用在日记的写作中,要去掉。在写作文时,同学们一定要熟练掌握书信和日记的写作格式,不能混淆。3★ 精品范文Monday,March12th, 2015?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????? Sunny
?????? It is March 12th today. At half past eight, all the teachers and students in our school gathered in front of the school gate. Then we went on foot to the Western Hill to plant trees.?
??????Before we started working, the teacher gave us a talk on the importance of planting trees. He said that trees can help to keep the air clean, protect us from strong wind and sand and make our city more beautiful. Then he showed us how to plant trees and asked each of us to plant at least five trees.
??????1★ 精品范文??
???????After that we started working. Some strong boys dug holes, some carried water and some girls put trees in the holes. We all worked hard. Among us, Lin Tao, our monitor set a good example to us. Though he was ill, he worked harder. When he finished his task, he went on to help others. He was wet all over after work. Looking at the lines of the young trees, we smiled happily.

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