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2021新高考一卷读后续写写作指导
一：原文呈现
A
MOTHER’S
DAY
SURPRISE
The
twins
were
filled
with
excitement
as
they
thought
of
the
surprise
they
were
planning
for
Mother’s
Day.
How
pleased
and
proud
Mother
would
be
when
they
brought
her
breakfast
in
bed.
They
planned
to
make
French
toast
and
chicken
porridge.
They
had
watched
their
mother
in
the
kitchen.
There
was
nothing
to
it.
Jenna
and
Jeff
knew
exactly
what
to
do.
The
big
day
came
at
last.
The
alarm
rang
at
6
a.m.
The
pair
went
down
the
stairs
quietly
to
the
kitchen.
They
decided
to
boil
the
porridge
first.
They
put
some
rice
into
a
pot
of
water
and
left
it
to
boil
while
they
made
the
French
toast.
Jeff
broke
two
eggs
into
a
plate
and
added
in
some
milk.
Jenna
found
the
bread
and
put
two
slices
into
the
egg
mixture.
Next,
Jeff
turned
on
the
second
stove
burner
to
heat
up
the
frying
pan.
Everything
was
going
smoothly
until
Jeff
started
frying
the
bread.
The
pan
was
too
hot
and
the
bread
turned
black
within
seconds.
Jenna
threw
the
burnt
piece
into
the
sink
and
put
in
the
other
slice
of
bread.
This
time,
she
turned
down
the
fire
so
it
cooked
nicely.
Then
Jeff
noticed
steam
shooting
out
of
the
pot
and
the
lid
starting
to
shake.
The
next
minute,
the
porridge
boiled
over
and
put
out
the
fire.
Jenna
panicked.
Thankfully,
Jeff
stayed
calm
and
turned
off
the
gas
quickly.
But
the
stove
was
a
mess
now.
Jenna
told
Jeff
to
clean
it
up
so
they
could
continue
to
cook
the
rest
of
the
porridge.
But
Jeff’s
hand
touched
the
hot
burner
and
he
gave
a
cry
of
pain.
Jenna
made
him
put
his
hand
in
cold
water.
Then
she
caught
the
smell
of
burning.
Oh
dear!
The
piece
of
bread
in
the
pan
had
turned
black
as
well.
注意：
1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
As
the
twins
looked
around
them
in
disappointment,
their
father
appeared.
The
twins
carried
the
breakfast
upstairs
and
woke
their
mother
up.
二：思路指导
原文分析：本文以第三人称，描述了一对双胞胎在母亲节为妈妈做早餐，送上一份惊喜的故事。这也是新高考的第一次续写真题。整体难度不大，所描述事件贴近生活，是每个孩子都可能经历过的事情，故事情节的发展也一目了然。如何在平淡的情节上增加故事色彩，则是本篇文章写作的更高境界。
明线：A
surprise
暗线：love
between
families
根据续写部分第一段的首句，可以知道正在双胞胎失望之时，父亲的出现给他们带来了希望。可以从以下的几个方面入手去考虑问题：
呈上：
How
did
father
feel
on
seeing
the
mess?
细节：
What
did
father
do
to
help?
启下：
Who
cooked
the
breakfast
at
last?
在第一段的描写当中，同学们可以充分的利用原文中的信息，描写做饭的场景。以达到对原文呼应的目的。父亲帮忙后，怎样还让母亲感觉到惊喜呢？这是父亲和孩子们之间的一个小秘密。
第二段则是向妈妈献上惊喜的时刻了。
呈上：What
did
they
say?
细节：How
did
mother
react
and
feel?
点题:
What
a
surprise!
第二段可以运用到平时练习用过的表示惊喜、感动的情感描写。
三：下水文写作
续写下水文1：
As
the
twins
looked
around
them
in
disappointment,
their
father
appeared.
Seeing
the
mess,
their
father
froze
with
shock,
as
if
rooted
on
the
ground.
But
soon
he
realized
their
intention.
In
consequence,
he
joined
the
twins
in
preparing
the
Mother’s
Day
surprise.
Though
he
had
never
been
seen
cooking,
actually,
he
was
expert
in
doing
so.
The
twins
assisted
their
father
with
the
breakfast
with
great
curiosity,
and
it
was
a
pleasure
to
team
up
with
their
father.
Eventually,
they
could
smell
how
good
the
dishes
were.
The
twins
carried
the
breakfast
upstairs
and
woke
their
mother
up.
They
said
“Happy
Mother’s
Day”,
with
their
eyes
twinkling
with
excitement.
Their
father
laughed
heartily
and
told
her
the
twins
had
prepared
breakfast
for
her.
Then
the
twins
whispered
to
her
that
they
loved
her
so
much
and
they
were
eager
to
see
her
smile
every
day.
Hearing
the
words,
so
glad
was
she
that
her
face
beamed
and
his
bright
smile
lit
up
the
room.
At
that
moment,
they
all
sensed
how
beautiful
something
living
could
be.
What
a
sweet
surprise!
续写下水文2：
As
the
twins
looked
around
them
in
disappointment,
their
father
appeared.
Seeing
the
the
black
bread
and
the
spilled
porridge,
Dad
suddenly
figured
out
their
secret.
A
smile
of
understanding
flashed
across
his
face.
Without
a
second
thought,
Dad
offered
to
help.
A
ripple
of
excitement
ran
through
them.
They
helped
clean
the
kitchen
while
their
father
cooked
a
sandwich
and
some
porridge
skillfully.
Soon,
the
delicious
smell
of
breakfast
filled
the
kitchen.
Dad
hinted
to
show
that
it
was
a
secret
and
went
back
to
the
bedroom,
asking
the
twins
to
go
on
to
carry
out
their
great
plan.
The
twins
carried
the
breakfast
upstairs
and
woke
their
mother
up.
They
yelled
“Happy
Mother’s
Day,
darling
Mummy!
A
big
surprise
for
you!”
When
she
saw
the
breakfast,
her
eyes
widened
up
and
twinkled
with
excitement.
Dad
was
pretending
to
be
surprised
to
see
such
delicious
food.
Mother
hugged
the
twins
and
showed
her
thanks.
She
tasted
and
praised
that
it
was
the
best
breakfast
she
had
ever
had.
The
twins
smiled
to
their
father
secretly.
A
feeling
of
love
filled
the
whole
room.
What
a
beautiful
surprise!
四：篇章原文及题源
https://www./other/mothers-day-celebration-with-twin-child-an-open-speech.html
Mother’s
Day
Celebration
with
Twin
Child
The
twins
rubbed
their
hands
with
glee
as
they
thought
of
the
surprise
they
were
planning
for
Mother’s
Day.
How
pleased
and
proud
Mother
would
be
when
they
brought
her
breakfast
in
bed.
They
planned
to
make
French
toast
and
chicken
porridge.
They
had
watched
their
mother
in
the
kitchen.
There
was
nothing
to
it.
Jenna
and
Jeff
knew
exactly
what
to
do.
The
big
day
dawned
atlast.
The
alarm
rang
at
6
a.m.
The
pair
crept
down
the
stairs
to
the
kitchen.They
decided
to
boil
the
porridge
first.
They
put
some
rice
into
a
pot
of
water
and
left
it
to
boil
while
they
made
the
French
toast.
Jeff
broke
two
eggs
into
a
plate
and
added
in
some
milk.
Jenna
found
the
bread
and
put
two
slices
into
the
egg
mixture.
Next,
Jeff
turned
on
the
second
stove
burner
to
heat
up
the
frying
pan.
Everything
was
going
smoothly
until
Jeff
started
frying
the
bread.The
pan
was
too
hot
and
the
bread
turned
black
within
minutes.
Jenna
threw
the
burnt
piece
into
the
sink
and
put
in
the
other
slice
of
bread.
This
time,
she
turned
down
the
fire
so
it
cooked
nicely.
Then
Jeff
noticed
the
pot
cover
starting
to
move.
The
next
minute,
the
porridge
boiled
over
and
putout
the
fire.
Jenna
panicked.
Thankfully,
Jeff
stayed
calm
and
turned
off
the
gas.
But
the
stove
was
a
mess
now.
Jenna
told
Jeff
to
wipe
up
the
sticky
stuff
so
they
could
continue
to
cook
the
rest
of
the
porridge.
But
Jeff’s
hand
touched
the
hot
burner
and
he
gave
a
yelp
of
pain.
Jenna
made
him
put
his
hand
under
the
tap.
Then
she
caught
the
smell
of
burning.
Oh
dear!
The
piece
of
bread
in
the
pan
had
turned
black
as
well.
As
the
twins
looked
around
them
in
dismay,
their
father
appeared
in
the
doorway.
One
look
and
he
knew
what
they
were
up
to.
Seeing
their
crestfallen
faces,
he
told
them
to
clean
up
the
kitchen
while
he
helped
them
make
breakfast
for
Mother.
The
twins
cheered
up
and
did
as
told.
Within
an
hour,
the
kitchen
was
cleaned,
and
Father
had
made
some
egg
sandwiches
and
cooked
some
oat
porridge.
Then
he
sneaked
back
to
bed.
The
twins
prepared
the
breakfast
tray,
adding
a
card
they
had
made,
and
then
carried
the
tray
upstairs
to
their
parents’
bedroom.
The
twins
woke
their
mother
up
by
hugging
her
and
yelling
‘Happy
Mother’s
Day,
darling
Mummy!’Mother
hugged
the
twins.
Her
eyes
widened
at
the
sight
of
the
breakfast
tray.She
shook
Father
who
was
pretending
to
snore.
He
feigned
astonishment
when
he
saw
the
breakfast.
Mother
bit
into
a
sandwich
and
said
it
was
the
best
she
had
ever
tasted.
Jeff
immediately
wanted
to
have
a
bite.
Jenna
caught
her
father’s
eye
and
they
winked
at
each
other
secretly.

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