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高中英语读后续写微写作的技能提升
神态描写1
CONTENTS
SectionⅠ神态描写的释义和作用
Section Ⅱ聚焦面部表情描写
Step1：语段赏析
Step2：分类积累
Step3：例句优化
Step4：练习仿写
SectionⅠ神态描写的释义和作用
百度百科对神态描写的释义：面部表情，神色和姿态的描写。
神态描写的作用：当我们能描写人物丰富、细腻、恰当的面部（包括脸、眼、眉、嘴、泪）表情，神色和姿态时，我们就更能刻画人物的性格与思想感情，我们的作品就更富有感染力，对突出文章主题也会有至关重要的作用。
Section Ⅱ 聚焦面部表情描写
Step1：语段赏析
1、In his hand was a flower, and what a pitiful sight, with its petals(花瓣）all worn. Wanting him to take his flower and go off to play, I faked a small smile and then turned to the other side.
Faked a small smile,“慢镜头”式的面部表情描写，把作者因自己心情不好，想要独处疗伤，但又不想对热心的小男孩表现无礼的情感，生动形象地跃然眼前。
Step1：语段赏析
2、I heard my voice quiver（轻微颤抖）,and at the same time my tears shone like the sun.
my tears shone like the sun,作者被感动受感染于眼前这位虽盲但乐观阳光的男孩，自己忽然拨云见日的豁然开朗跃然纸上。
Step2：分类积累
1、借助词典。
如：朗文字典：各种“tears”
The children were all in tears. She came home in floods of tears. I could see that Sam was close to tears. Bridget suddenly burst into tears and ran out. He was fighting back tears as he spoke.
A lot of people were moved to tears by his story.
He kissed her cheek, a gesture that brought tears to her eyes.
I must admit I shed a few tears when the school closed.
Step2：分类积累
2、借助阅读文本
喜：
1、The smile on her face shone like a diamond.她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。
2、A smile of understanding flashed across his face.他脸上露出了一种理解的微笑。
3、His eyes twinkled with pleasure.他的眼睛闪烁着快乐。
Step2：分类积累
2、借助阅读文本
怒：
1、He gave me a look of burning anger.他愤怒地看了我一眼。
2、He glared at me with burning eyes.他用灼热的目光怒视着我。
3、His face clouded with anger.他气得脸色阴沉。
Step2：分类积累
2、借助阅读文本
哀：
1、Her hands were shaking. She was on the verge of tears.她的手在颤抖。她快哭了。
2、She burst into tears and ran out of the room.她突然哭了起来，跑出了房间。
3、They sat there with glum looks on their faces. 他们坐在那里，带着一脸忧郁。
Step2：分类积累
2、借助阅读文本
惧：
1、He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror.他转过身来，眼里充满了恐惧。
2、Her face turned pale and she stood there tongue-tied.她脸色苍白地站在那里，舌头打结。
3、At the sight of the ferocious wolf, his face froze with terror.一看到凶狠的狼，他吓得脸都僵住了。
Step3：例句优化
1、She is smiling.
The smile on her face shone like a diamond.
她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。
Unforgettable were her eyes that shone like diamonds
and lips held in a steady smile.
令人难忘的是她的眼睛像钻石一样闪闪发光，嘴角保持着稳定的微笑。
Step3：例句优化
2、He was sad and stood there.
He stood silently, tears rolling down his cheeks.
他静静地站着，眼泪顺着面颊流了下来。
He sat there with glum looks on their faces.
他坐在那里，带着一脸忧伤。
Step4：练习仿写
1、The boy was grateful.
2、The boy was frightened.
3、My father was angry.
参考答案：
1、Tears filling the boy’s eyes, he offered his heartfelt gratitude.
男孩热泪盈眶，表示衷心的感谢。
2、The boy turned to me, with his eyes full of horror. 男孩转过身来，眼里充满了恐惧
3、My father’s face turned purple with anger and he stood there tongue-tied.
父亲因生气而脸色铁青地站在那里，舌头打结。
The end.
See you next time!
高中英语读后续写微写作的技能提升
神态描写2
CONTENTS
Section III 聚焦神态描写句式优化
Step1语段分析
Step2 句式分类
Step3 例句优化
Step4 练习仿写
Section III 聚焦神态描写句式优化
Step1：语段赏析
1、While this was happening, a baby girl (perhaps one or one-and-a-half) was squirming excitedly in her mother’s arms, never once taking her eyes off the wonderful sight of her returning father.
借助句式：主1+谓...... , doing... 使语言不但有神态描写的生动表现力更有语言结构句式的美感。
Step1：语段赏析
2、Desperate and hopeless, Jane knelt down, tears streaming down her face.
借助句式：表情感类的形容词，主1+谓......，主2 +doing
Step2：句式分类
1. Doing..., 主+谓......
doing作状语，逻辑主语与句子的主语一致，构成主动关系；有时可以在doing前加before, after, while等; 但如果是被动关系，应该使用过去分词done作状语。例如：
1) Seeing tears in Mark's eyes, Annie decided to promise to the boy that she would let Mark cut her hair, too.
2) Wanting him to take his flower and go off to play, I faked a smile and then turned to the other side.
Step2：句式分类
2. 主1+谓......, 主2+doing ...
逻辑主语2与doing构成主动关系，构成独立主格，在句中作状语。该句型或以转化为并列句：主1+谓......and 主2+谓......。例如：
1)He stood there, tears of gratitude welling up in his eyes.
--He stood there and tears of gratitude welled up in his eyes.
2) "Don't stand in my way," Tim yelled out, his voice quivering with rage.
--"Don't stand in my way," Tim yelled out and his voice was quivering with rage.
Step2：句式分类
3. 表情感类的形容词, 主+谓......
情感类的形容词在句中作状语，说明主语的状态，可以转化为Feeling adj, 主+谓......。有时可以放在句后：主+谓......，表情感类的形容词。例如：
1) Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse, trying to attract others' attention.
2) Exhausted and scared, Jane lay down near a stone, missing her family at a distance.
Step2：句式分类
4、状语从句，主+谓......
1）When the host announced that she won the prize, her heart was thumping with excitement. (激动得心砰砰跳)
2）When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek, his face beamed and his bright smile lit up the room. (眉开眼笑；笑容照亮房间)
Step2：句式分类
5、-ed短语，主+谓......
1）Filled with fury, Sheldon was unable to utter a single word. (充满愤怒；说不出话)
2）To Annie's delight, surrounded by his classmates, Mark seemed like a rock star, cheerful and proud.
Step2：句式分类
6、倒装句
1）So ashamed was she that she could feel the blood rush to her face. (血液涌上脸颊)
2）So ashamed did she feel that she was close to tears. (快哭了)
Step3：例句优化
1、I saw the wolf and felt very scared.
Facing the ferocious wolf, I felt so scared that
my throat tightened and my knees felt weak.
(嗓子发紧，膝盖发软)
At the sight of the ferocious wolf,
I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch.
(吓呆了，不敢动弹)
Step3：例句优化
2、She won the prize and felt thrilled.
When the host announced that she won
the prize, her eyes twinkled with excitement.
（激动得两眼放光）
When the host announced that she won the
prize, her heart was thumping with excitement.
(激动得心砰砰跳)
Step4：练习仿写
1、The boy was grateful.
2、The boy was frightened.
3、My father was angry.
参考答案：
1、When the host announced that she won the prize, a wide excitement took hold of her.
(兴奋不能自已)
2、So ashamed was she that she could feel the blood rush to her face. (血液涌上脸颊)
3、Filled with fury, Sheldon was unable to utter a single word. (充满愤怒；说不出话)
Thanks for your listening
编制：浙江省余姚中学
2019.9.20.

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