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情感描写——生气
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必备单词 _______ adj. 生气的 ______ adj. 很生气的
_________ adj. 气恼的 ______ adj. 恼怒的
_________ adj. 狂怒的 _________ n. 恼怒
_______ n. 愤怒；激怒 ___________ n. 愤慨
____________ v. 怒目而视
____________ adj. 生气的
_____ n. 狂怒 _____ v. & n. 怒吼
积累素材
angry
mad
annoyed
cross
furious
irritation
wrath
indignation
glare
disgruntled
rage
roar
高级词块 ________ 生气地，愤怒地
_________________ 怒气冲冲
______________在盛怒中
___________________________ 因某事生某人的气
___________ 怒目而视
_____________________________ 因某事生某人的气
in anger
in a burst of anger
be in a passion
be angry with sb at/about sth
glare at sb
be mad with/at sb for doing sth
高级词块 _____________ 勃然大怒
____________________________ 因某事生某人
的气
_____________________ 勃然大怒
_____________________________ 因某事生某人的气
________________ 大发雷霆
______________________ 因某事对某人大发雷霆
fly into a fury
be annoyed with sb about sth
fly/get into a passion
be cross with sb for doing sth
fly off the handle
be furious with sb at sth
高级词块 ____________________ 充满愤怒
_____________________ 怒火中烧
______________________ 气得打哆嗦
___________________________ 怒不可遏
______________________ 使某人大动肝火
____________________ 像火山一样爆发
shine with irritation
burn with rage/anger
tremble with rage/fury
be beside oneself with anger
make one’s blood boil
erupt like a volcano
1. 萨姆气得直跺脚。
2. 克莱尔对苔丝感到非常愤怒，因为她逼得
他欺骗他的父母。
句子赏析
Sam stamped his foot in anger.
Clare felt furious with Tess, because she had
forced him to deceive his parents.
3. 他想赶紧换一个与校长无关的话题，每次一想到邓布利多，哈利的内心就又呼呼地冒怒火。
He cast around for a topic to change the subject
of Dumbledore, the very thought of whom made
Harry’s insides burn with anger again.
4. 他终于按捺不住地停了下来,气得声音发颤。
5. 他勃然大怒，捶打着胸口，咄咄逼人地瞪着
我们。
Finally, he could no longer stand it. He stopped, his voice trembling with rage.
He flew into a rage and hit his chest, glaring at
us aggressively.
哈利努力把注意力集中在他的食物上，但是他
的手在颤抖，他的脸因为愤怒而开始发红。记
住礼节，他告诉自己。想想霍格莫德。不要说
任何东西。
精彩片段
Harry tried to concentrate on his food, but his
hands shook and his face was starting to burn
with anger. Remember the form, he told himself.
Think about Hogsmeade. Don’t say anything.
运用素材
一、完成句子 运用晨读表格中的必备单词/高
级词块，把下面的句子补充完整。
1. 她的回复加重了汤姆的愤怒，他像火山一
样爆发了。
Her reply fueled Tom’s anger and he________
_____________ .
2. 他气得浑身发抖，向我挥舞着拳头。
__________________, he shook his fist at me.
erupted
like a volcano
Trembling with rage
3. 他非常生气，用快冒出火的眼睛瞪着我。
He was so angry that he __________ me with burning eyes.
4. 她像火山一样爆发了，眼泪哗哗地流下来，眼
睛里闪着愤怒的光芒。(分词短语作状语)
She erupted like a volcano, tears streaming down and ___________________________.
glared at
eyes shining with irritation
5. 她怒吼着，抓起桌子上的画，将其撕成两半。(并列动词)
She _______, grabbed the painting on the table and tore it in half.
roared
二、篇章练习 阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写词数应为150左右。
(2020届山东济宁二模) With a broad smile on her lips, 15-year-old Sirin rushed to her mom to show off her new painting. But mom raised her eyebrows with eyes wide open, and spoke in an impatient tone, “No time, baby. Right now I am busy with an important talk. Just wait for some time, OK ”
Holding her oil painting, she frowned (皱眉), and then searched for her dad.
“Dad, see what I have done,” Sirin announced
aloud in a thrilling voice. Her dad turned around while adjusting his tie, grinned at her, and showed his thumbs up!
Immediately, blowing her two cheeks, Sirin replied angrily, “Dad, you haven’t seen it yet.”
He smiled at her saying, “No time, baby. I will see
it later.” He just patted her back lovingly, kissed her forehead, and rushed for his office.
She was not a kid to be pleased with simple gesture
or smile. She stood there for a few seconds, and then stormed off to her own bedroom.
Hot air was blowing from her nostrils (鼻孔); her face turned into apple red. She threw the painting on the table, slammed the door and threw herself on her bed.
“Why is everybody so busy ” She recalled thousands of incidents that hurt her in pre-school, middle school and even in high school too! She assumed at least her own family members would give some values to her thoughts, but they were no exception. Unconsciously, her eyes were filled with tears.
The knocking sound on the door put a sudden brake to her thought. Her mom was calling her
for dinner. Sirin deliberately came late to join them. She kept silent and didn’t look at anyone, scratching the table mat with her nail. Her mom was puzzled at the unusual behaviour. Suddenly, the morning incident clicked in her mind. Softly, she asked, “Honey, did I do anything wrong ”
Paragraph 1：
At this very moment, Sirin could no longer resist her anger. __________________________________ ___________________________________________
Paragraph 2：
When back from school the next day, Sirin was surprised to see her beautifully-decorated paining
on the wall. ________________________________
___________________________________________
写作步骤
第一步，通读全文，理清脉络
1. 读要素，弄懂故事大意
本文大意：______________________________
2. 读人物，理清人物关系
________________________________________
3. 读时态，确定主体时态
________________________________________
某天，Sirin向父母炫耀自己的新画作，
父母由于忙而无暇顾及，导致Sirin非常生气，晚饭时故意迟来。在饭桌上闷闷不乐的Sirin终于引起了妈妈的注意。
Sirin and her parents
一般过去时
4. 读结构，了解叙述方式
第____段：__________________________________
第____段：__________________________________
续写部分：__________________________________
这几段的故事都是在早上发生的
这一段则是到了当天的晚餐时间
续写第一段是接着上一段，在晚餐发生的事情；第二段则是到了第二天放学回家
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由此可见，材料是按照________________来划分的。我们在构思续写时应从这个叙述方式去进行拓展。
时空变化（时间）
5. 读语言，把握语言特色
原文中的语言特色：
(1) with复合结构
With a broad smile on her lips, 15-year-old Sirin rushed to her mom to show off her new painting.
But mom raised her eyebrows with eyes wide open, and spoke in an impatient tone, “No time, baby.
(2) 并列动词来描述人物的动作
Her dad turned around while adjusting his tie, grinned at her, and showed his thumbs up!
She threw the painting on the table, slammed the door and threw herself on her bed.
He just patted her back lovingly, kissed her forehead, and rushed for his office.
(3) 分词短语作状语
Holding her oil painting, she frowned (皱眉), and then searched for her dad.
Immediately, blowing her two cheeks, Sirin replied angrily, “Dad, you haven’t seen it yet.”
第二步，依据首句，构思框架
1. 读懂两段首句
第一段首句译文：________________________
第二段首句译文：________________________
第一段框架：____________________________
第二段框架：____________________________
此时此刻，Sirin再也无法抑制
她的愤怒。
第二天放学回来，Sirin惊讶地看到自己的画被挂在墙上，而且还装饰得很漂亮。
Sirin向父母表达不满，认为他们一直
看到墙上的画，Sirin很高兴，同时
以忙为理由，不关心自己。父母感到震惊和愧疚，Sirin回房间生闷气。
意识到自己先前的行为是不对的，于是跟父母道歉，且意识到相互理解的重要性。
第一段首句后的衔接句：
第一段尾句(须与第二段首句衔接)：
2. 写好三个衔接句
“You are always busy!” she erupted like a volcano, tears streaming down and eyes shining with irritation.
Sirin went back to her room and kept her door shut the whole night.
第二段首句后的衔接句：
Not only was it beautifully framed but there were some words below the painting, saying “We are proud of you, Baby!”
3. 写好一个升华句
即第二段的尾句(即文尾句)。能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故事给我们的启示的句子：
It dawned on them that though everything came and went, mutual (相互的) understanding would stay forever in their family.
第三步，增加细节，展开续写
基于第一段的框架，我们可以补充以下细节：
Sirin的语言描写(________) →Sirin的神态描写(______________) →Sirin的心理描写(________
_____________) →Sirin的动作描写(____)→
父母的神态描写(___________) →Sirin的动作描写(_______)
责备父母
流泪+满脸怒气
震惊和惭愧
父母重视和理解
渴望得到
撕画
回房间
基于第二段的框架，我们可以补充以下细节：
周围的环境描写(________________) →Sirin的动作描写(_______________) →Sirin的心理描写(________________________) →Sirin动作和语言描写______________)
墙上父母裱好的画
低下头诚恳道歉
哭，冲去找父母
理解爸妈，反思自己的错误
Paragraph 1：
At this very moment, Sirin could no longer resist
her anger. “You are always busy!” she erupted like a volcano, tears streaming down and eyes shining with irritation (愤怒). She assumed that her parents would feel proud of her great talent but they only said “no time” to her. “I hate you!” She roared (怒吼), grabbed the painting on the table and tore it in half. Shocked and guilty, mom and dad couldn’t say a word. Sirin went back to her room and kept her door shut the whole night.
第四步，检查优化，整洁誊写
Paragraph 2：
When back from school the next day, Sirin was surprised to see her beautifully-decorated painting on the wall. Not only was it beautifully framed (裱框)
but there were some words below the painting, saying “We are proud of you, Baby!” On reading them, Sirin burst out crying. She ran to her parents and hugged them tightly. Recalling her parents’ stress from work and daily life, she deeply regretted her previous behaviour. She ducked her head, apologizing, “Daddy, Mommy, I’m so sorry!” It dawned on them that though everything came and went, mutual (相互的) understanding would stay forever in their family.
[范文亮点]
本文情节设计合理完整，逻辑衔接到位，感情线丰富细腻，主题明确。第一段中的设计主要是Sirin向父母表达不满，认为他们一直以忙为理由，不关心自己。第二段中Sirin看到自己的画被装饰得很漂亮挂在墙上后，意识到自己先前发火的行为是不对的，再想到爸妈工作和生活上的压力，她更愧疚。因此跟父母道歉。
It dawned on them that though everything came and went, mutual (相互的) understanding would stay forever in their family.这句话对主题理解准确，情感加哲理的结尾方式升华了文章主题。此外，文章句式丰富，语言漂亮，如现在分词作状语、非谓语动词、副词修饰动词、名词性从句和with复合结构等，值得学习。
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