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高三读后续写 主题：人与自我，个人成长
如何写好续写：情节和主题
叙事和写作技巧
语料库
一、DAVID腿脚不便但是完成越野赛跑 22年高考
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,”he explained uncomfortably.“I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well – he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer – that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
写作指导：
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
我鼓励---david的反应---david走向赛场
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
比赛开始---david努力---我（群众）反馈---david成功---升华
②Perceiving that he was feeling embarrassed and hurt, ①I placed my hand on his shoulder and said in a soft voice，③“David, it’s okay. You don’t have to run if you don’t want to. But remember that you’ve worked really hard for this. You should be proud of yourself for even trying.”④Slowly, he raised his head and a small smile appeared on his face. ⑤I could see the determination in his eyes indicating that he was going to give it a try.②看到他感到尴尬和受伤，①我把手放在他的肩膀上，用柔和的声音说，③：“David，没关系。如果你不想跑，你就不必跑了。但请记住，你为此工作得很努力。你应该为自己的尝试而感到骄傲。④慢慢地，他抬起头来，脸上露出了一丝微笑。⑤：我能从他的眼睛里看出这个决心，这表明他要试一试。
①在呈现核心动作（say）之前，加入一些前置的动作，使得整体动作细致而连续，即“动作链”,此处用“手部动作+语言”。
②在某人做动作之前，加入“想到了什么”，因为人往往是认知先到位，才会指导行动。
③用言语安慰人时，先肯定对方的想法，表示理解，再给予对方信心。运用同理心。
④”慢慢地“，该快的时候快，该慢的时候慢，这是叙事的节奏感。比如”突然想到了什么“和”做出艰难决定“就是不同的节奏。想象你自己是个导演正在剪辑。slowly，in a flash, after what seemed a century
⑤这句是从”我“的角度写的，或者”他告诉我他准备去试一试“，同样的一件事或一个动作，可以有不同的写作视角，最好能让角色双方交叉进行。
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
比赛开始---david努力---我（群众）反馈---david成功---升华
⑥I could feel excitement surging through him as he stared firmly into the distance. ⑦The whistle blew and the race began. David took off, wildly making his way through the forest. I ran alongside him, cheering him on as he pushed through the pain and exhaustion. Finally, David crossed the finish line with a huge smile on his face, while the other children cheered and clapped for him. It was definitely a moment that would flash repeatedly in David’s mind, especially in face of all future obstacles and barriers along the road.⑥，当他坚定地盯着远方时，我感到一阵兴奋。⑦哨声吹响了，比赛开始了。大卫起飞了，疯狂地穿过森林。我在他旁边跑，在他度过痛苦和疲惫时，我为他欢呼。最后，大卫脸上灿烂的微笑冲过终点线，而其他孩子为他欢呼鼓掌。这绝对是一个在大卫脑海中反复闪现的时刻，尤其是面对未来的障碍和障碍。
⑥关键情节开始以前，可以（不必须）加入心理活动做铺垫。
⑦每个人的语料库（单独整理的一份笔记，小标题分类，留白以不断添加，话题覆盖面尽量广，每种熟练掌握2-3个表达即可，用更好的覆盖旧的）
来源：范文，练习中的完形填空
【比赛场景】
【安慰】placed my hand on one’s shoulder and said in a soft voice
【有信心】stared firmly into the distance // clench one’s fist
【比赛开始】The whistle blew and the race began.
【跑步】make his way，pushed through the pain and exhaustion，crossed the finish line
【观众加油】cheer sb on
【祝贺】cheered and clapped for him
【有意义的时刻】It was definitely a moment that would flash repeatedly in David’s mind, especially in face of all future obstacles and barriers along the road.
二、不爱写作但是被老师磨练去参赛并获奖 23年高考
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said,“Great. Now, write it again.”I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
写作指导：
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
得知获奖---颁奖仪式---领奖，感受--台下反应
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
老师祝贺---我表示感谢---总结升华
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. ①On that seemingly ordinary day, my teacher suddenly informed me that I won the second prize and there would be an award presentation for the writing contest winners. ②It was really a delightful surprise. ③When the day finally arrived, I found myself standing among a group of talented writers. As each winner was called to the stage, applause and cheers filled the air. Walking up to receive my award, I felt a surge of pride and accomplishment, knowing that my hard work and dedication/devotion/commitment had been recognized.①在那个看似普通的日子里，我的老师突然告诉我，我获得了二等奖，并将为写作比赛的获奖者举行一个颁奖典礼。②，这真是一个令人愉快的惊喜。③当这一天终于到来时，我发现自己站在一群才华横溢的作家中间。当每个获胜者都被召集到舞台上时，空气中弥漫着掌声和欢呼声。走上去接受我的奖项，我感到一阵骄傲和成就，因为我知道我的努力工作和奉献/奉献/承诺已经得到了认可。
笔记：①一种故事感
②惊讶的情绪，略
③描写重要场景：基本动作+环境描写+心理活动；骄傲的情绪，详
语料【颁奖仪式，取得成就】When the day finally arrived, I found myself .... As each winner was called to the stage, applause and cheers filled the air. Walking up to receive my award, I felt a sense of pride and accomplishment, knowing that my hard work and dedicationhad been recognized.
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation. On seeing me, he gave me a sincere congratulation ④（and shared his joy in seeing me succeed）. I expressed my heartfelt appreciation⑤（for pushing me beyond my comfort zone, for believing in my ability to tell stories, and for exploring my love for writing）. ⑥(It was a moment of deep connection and mutual respect.) ⑦That day, I left the office with a sense of confidence, inspired to continue pursuing my passion for writing, and the knowledge that with determination/persistence, even the most difficult and painful challenges could be conquered.见到我，他向我表示了衷心的祝贺（并分享了他看到我成功的喜悦）。我表达了我衷心的感激⑤（我让我超越了舒适区，我相信我讲故事的能力，我探索我对写作的热爱）。⑥（这是一个有着深刻的联系和相互尊重的时刻。）⑦那天，我带着一种自信离开了办公室，激励我继续追求我对写作的热情，并且知道通过决心/坚持，即使是最困难和痛苦的挑战也可以被克服。
笔记：④扩句
⑤扩句。亮点：在内容层面上，有不一样的思考。
语料
【感谢，帮助】I expressed my heartfelt appreciation for pushing me beyond my comfort zone, for believing in my ability to tell stories, and for exploring my love for writing.
⑥角色A,B互动后的总结
⑦升华：自信+热爱+决心=更好的我。打动人的好作文，本质上还是说真话，与实际生活产生关联，基于我们自己对生活的热爱、观察和思考。
语料
【特写镜头做结尾：更好的自我】（安排一个合理的动作，让主人公产生动态，这样镜头就可以跟随）某人离开了某地/朝家里走去/重新开车上路/又一次站上舞台/推开了一扇门，带着...(自信，决心，坚毅，坚持...)。
sb left s.p./hit the road again/stood on the stage，with a sense of confidence, inspired to continue pursuing my passion for ..., and the knowledge that with determination/ persistence, even the most difficult and painful challenges could be conquered.
三、爱篮球却不幸坐上轮椅，但转变人生态度
Bob and I hung out the whole summer, running in the field, swimming in the lake and exploring everywhere joyfully.
It was a typical summer afternoon. Bob suggested we skip a language lesson to play basketball. Aha! I would show my defense, lay-ups and three-point shooting. I loved to explore, I loved sports, and I loved basketball most. I believed I would be the next LeBron James.
But my passion for sports came to a sudden stop when I began experiencing extreme back pain later that day. After several visits to doctors, finally I was told that a spine (脊柱) surgery was necessary. Unfortunately, the surgery accidentally damaged my spinal cord (脊髓). I was in the ward hanging face down to relieve the pressure on my spine.
After four-month rehabilitation training (康复训练) in hospital, reality slowly set in – I was unable to walk again. I couldn’t believe this should have happened to me, that it wasn’t possible to recover, that I wouldn’t become a famous basketball player, that my life as I had known it, was over. My future would be chained to a wheelchair. I was just 16 years old!
Back home, I learned how hard it was going to be to get around in a wheelchair. I withdrew from my friends and my basketball. At Bob’s repeated invitation, I agreed to go to our regular swimming hole. Unable to make it down the riverbank alone, I was too proud to ask for help. When I finally realized my pride would keep me away from people and sports I loved, I let Bob carry me on his back to the river’s edge.
Allowing others to help was a turning point. I realized my attitude was the biggest barrier I had to face. How could I expect others to see my potential if I didn’t see it myself How could I realize my basketball dream if I withdrew into myself
写作指导：
One day, Bob took me to a wheelchair basketball game.
我看到的篮球比赛场景---我的感受，情绪产生了巨大变化---bob鼓励我去找到自身价值
With Bob’s encouragement, I decided to have a try at my dream.
怎么尝试---做的过程中的心理活动---做的结果---升华，道理
One day, Bob took me to a wheelchair basketball game.
①It was an eye-opening experience for me. ②As I watched the players controlling their wheelchairs with incredible speed and precision, my admiration for them grew. ③They displayed a level of determination and resilience that inspired me. Bob ④quietly told me that⑤ everything depended on my own attitude towards my disability, that physical limitations didn’t have to be a barrier to pursuing my dreams, and that the love for life could triumph over any difficulty. His words ignited a spark within me.①这对我来说是一次大开眼界的经历。②当我看着球员们以令人难以置信的速度和精确度控制他们的轮椅时，我对他们的钦佩越来越大。③他们表现出了一种激励着我的决心和韧性。Bob④悄悄地告诉我，⑤的一切都取决于我自己对残疾的态度，身体上的限制不一定是我追求梦想的障碍，对生活的爱可以战胜任何困难。他的话在我心中点燃了一股火花。
笔记：①先整体评价某事物（这次观赛经历），再详细描述。
②当我在做()某事时，我油然而生了某种情绪。As I did（saw/heard/thought of/picked up） sth, my 情绪 grew.如：看着亲手打理好的花园...，听到他们在身后嘲笑我...，看着乱糟糟的厨房...
③某人展现出的某种品质激励了我。Sb displayed a level of ...that inspired me.
(美好品质如：determination决心 resilience弹力，快速恢复的能力 persistence坚持不懈 perseveranceu不屈不挠)
④平静而有力，深思熟虑后的发言。这同slowly, quickly一样也是一种叙事的节奏。
⑤ 语料：鼓励他人（需要我们自己也具备这样的人生态度，真实的最动人）
【一切取决于态度】
【某个缺陷或不利条件未必是追逐梦想的障碍】
【对生活的热爱能战胜困难】
【点燃火花】
With Bob’s encouragement, I decided to have a try at my dream.
⑥Instead of withdrawing into myself, I focused on what I could achieve. ⑦Through endless training and firm commitment, I began to adapt my skills to the world of wheelchair basketball.⑧ It wasn’t an easy journey, but with each milestone I reached, my confidence improved, and I rediscovered my passion for the game. I set off on a new chapter of my life, proving to myself and the world that a positive attitude can conquer any obstacle.⑥：我没有退缩，而是专注于我所能实现的目标。⑦通过无尽的训练和坚定的承诺，我开始让我的技能适应轮椅篮球的世界。⑧这不是一个简单的旅程，但随着我每达到一个里程碑，我的信心都提高了，我重新发现了我对比赛的热情。我开始了我人生的新篇章，向自己和世界证明，积极的态度可以克服任何障碍。
笔记：⑥接上句，决定尝试，那么就要付诸行动。在付诸行动之前，先转变观念。观念先行，行动跟上。人物发生变化句型：instead of doing
⑦怎么改变？客观（练习）+主观（投入）
⑧语料
【改变与进步，自信与热爱】It wasn’t an easy journey, but with each milestone I reached, my confidence improved, and I rediscovered my passion for the game.（其中journey旅途/过程）
【人生新篇章】 set off on a new chapter of my life
【积极的心态可以克服任何障碍】a positive attitude can conquer any obstacle
高三读后续写 ：人与自我，个人成长 （学生版）
如何写好续写：情节和主题
叙事和写作技巧
语料库
一、DAVID腿脚不便但是完成越野赛跑 22年高考
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened.“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,”he explained uncomfortably.“I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well – he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer – that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
写作指导：
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
情节设计：___________________________________________________________
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
情节设计：____________________________________________________________
范文：
PARA1__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
笔记：
①____________________________________________________________________
②____________________________________________________________________
③____________________________________________________________________
④____________________________________________________________________
⑤____________________________________________________________________
PARA2__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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笔记：
⑥____________________________________________________________________
⑦____________________________________________________________________
语料：
【安慰】______________________________________________________________
【有信心】____________________________________________________________
【比赛开始】__________________________________________________________
【跑步】_______________________________________________________________
【观众加油】___________________________________________________________
【祝贺】______________________________________________________________
【有意义的时刻】________________________________________________________
二、
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest. I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny; and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said,“Great. Now, write it again.”I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
写作指导：
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
情节设计：________________________________________________________
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
情节设计：________________________________________________________
范文：
PARA1__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
笔记：
①____________________________________________________________________
②____________________________________________________________________
③____________________________________________________________________
PARA2__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________________
笔记：
④____________________________________________________________________
⑤____________________________________________________________________
⑥____________________________________________________________________
⑦____________________________________________________________________
语料：
【颁奖仪式，取得成就】____________________________________________________
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【感谢，帮助】____________________________________________________________
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【特写镜头做结尾：更好的自我】_____________________________________________
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三、
Bob and I hung out the whole summer, running in the field, swimming in the lake and exploring everywhere joyfully.
It was a typical summer afternoon. Bob suggested we skip a language lesson to play basketball. Aha! I would show my defense, lay-ups and three-point shooting. I loved to explore, I loved sports, and I loved basketball most. I believed I would be the next LeBron James.
But my passion for sports came to a sudden stop when I began experiencing extreme back pain later that day. After several visits to doctors, finally I was told that a spine (脊柱) surgery was necessary. Unfortunately, the surgery accidentally damaged my spinal cord (脊髓). I was in the ward hanging face down to relieve the pressure on my spine.
After four-month rehabilitation training (康复训练) in hospital, reality slowly set in – I was unable to walk again. I couldn’t believe this should have happened to me, that it wasn’t possible to recover, that I wouldn’t become a famous basketball player, that my life as I had known it, was over. My future would be chained to a wheelchair. I was just 16 years old!
Back home, I learned how hard it was going to be to get around in a wheelchair. I withdrew from my friends and my basketball. At Bob’s repeated invitation, I agreed to go to our regular swimming hole. Unable to make it down the riverbank alone, I was too proud to ask for help. When I finally realized my pride would keep me away from people and sports I loved, I let Bob carry me on his back to the river’s edge.
Allowing others to help was a turning point. I realized my attitude was the biggest barrier I had to face. How could I expect others to see my potential if I didn’t see it myself How could I realize my basketball dream if I withdrew into myself
写作指导：
One day, Bob took me to a wheelchair basketball game.
情节设计：________________________________________________________
With Bob’s encouragement, I decided to have a try at my dream.
情节设计：________________________________________________________
范文：
PARA1__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
笔记：
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PARA2__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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笔记：
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语料：
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