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读后续写：Evan送花给妈妈
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。 Eight-year-old Evan stood by the sidewalk watching as Mrs. Carter opened her flower shop. He felt relieved that the shop hadn't closed forever. Two days ago, when he passed by, there was a closed sign on the door and a note saying Mrs. Carter was sick. Evan was worried that he would never be able to get his “dream job” if the shop remained closed for too long.Mrs. Carter, an 85-year-old woman, spotted Evan looking in her shop's direction and waved hello to him. Excitedly, Evan ran up to her and expressed his desire to work at the shop. Mrs.Carter laughed quietly, finding it amusing that an eight-year-old wanted a job. Evan confidently explained that since his dad passed away, he had learned how to do various tasks, like taking out the rubbish, making sandwiches, and assisting his mom, Stacey, with groceries. He didn't want any payment for his work; instead, he simply wanted a bouquet (花束) for his mom' s upcoming birthday. He believed in working hard for what he wanted, just as his mom had taught him.Impressed by Evan's determination, Mrs. Carter agreed to hire him. She asked if he knew how to tie ribbons around flowers, and when she heard Evan's affirmative(肯定的) response, they got down to making bouquets. Evan was excited to assist Mrs. Carter every evening for a whole week, and his presence brought joy to her boring work.Customers found Evan adorable and entertaining, which resulted in increased flower purchases and booming business for Mrs. Carter.On Evan's last day, Mrs.Carter felt emotional. Their bond had grown strong, and she saw him as a grandchild. As she prepared a splendid bouquet for Evan's mother, tears welled up in her eyes. She invited him to visit her shop in the future, and Evan promised to tell his mom about her.注意: 1. 续写词数应为150左右；2. 请按如下格式在相应位置作答。With the bouquet in hand, Evan rushed home to celebrate Mom's birthday.________ As Evan handed his mom the bouquet, they were surprised to discover an envelope with several hundred-dollar bills inside. ________________________________________
回顾
主题：
情节设计&情绪：
Previous plot：
Evan的妈妈的生日要到了，Evan想送一束花作为生日礼物，所以他选择到Mrs. Carter的花店做帮手来赚取一束花。
Mrs. Carter很喜欢Evan，把他当做自己孙子看待。
生日这天到了，Evan也如愿拿到了Mrs. Carter给他的一大捧花。
With the bouquet in hand, Evan rushed home to celebrate Mom's birthday.
As Evan handed his mom the bouquet, they were surprised to discover an envelope with several hundred-dollar bills inside.
妈妈看到花束，询问由来（吃惊情绪）
Evan的解释（笑容灿烂，骄傲情绪）
母子的爱意流动（拥抱，泪光，感动情绪）
母子去花店归还钱并解释要靠劳动所得（急切情绪，感激情绪）
Mrs.Carter被孩子对妈妈的爱感动（①没收钱②收下了，以后去花店帮忙作为交换）（感动情绪）
母子邀请Mrs.Carter一起庆生
劳动教育 One should earn what he wanted by working hard.
爱的教育 Love :sacrifice, willingness, deeds, to share
With the bouquet in hand, Evan rushed home to celebrate Mom's birthday.
当那束夺目的花跃入眼帘，他的妈妈惊呆了。并没有表达出喜悦，相反地，她想知道Evan 是从哪里得到的花，并说出了她的困惑和担忧。
灿烂的微笑照亮了他的脸，Evan带着压抑不住的骄傲和满足向她讲了整个事情的来龙去脉。
听到这些真诚的话语，他的妈妈被深深地感动了，紧紧地拥抱着男孩，不断地表达她的爱和感谢。
As Evan handed his mom the bouquet, they were surprised to discover an envelope with several hundred-dollar bills inside.
在妈妈的陪同下，Evan 疾步走向花店，想让卡特太太知道他们是多么感谢她的好心，但却不能接受这些钱，因为他妈妈的坚定信念——一个人应该通过努力工作来挣到他想要的东西。
卡特太太眼睛里闪烁着对男孩的钦佩，她提出了一个解决方案：男孩可以在他方便的时候来花店帮忙。
作为对她慷慨的回报，母亲和男孩好客地邀请卡特太太来吃饭。这是真的，分享的爱就是加倍的爱。
回溯&仿写
分句练习：
With the bouquet in hand, Evan rushed home to celebrate Mom's birthday.
1. 当那束夺目的花跃入眼帘，他的妈妈惊呆了。并没有表达出喜悦，相反地，她想知道Evan 是从哪里得到的花，并说出了她的困惑和担忧。
When the bunch of gorgeous flowers emerged into her line of sight, his mom was astonished. Contrary to expressing joy, she wondered where Evan had gotten it and poured out her puzzle and concern.
回溯&仿写：(1)某人因看到/听到...而感到...
（送Brendan回家）My words caught Brendan off guard, who was dumbfounded. With disbelief and gratitude written on his face, he bit his lips, trying to hold back tears.“Thank you.” he said in a choked voice.我的话让布兰登猝不及防，他目瞪口呆。脸上满是难以置信和感激之情，他咬着嘴唇，试图眨回泪水。“谢谢你。”他哽咽着说。
(门票该给谁)At the sight of the ticket held in my hand, they looked at each other questioningly with their eyes rounded .这时，两个男孩又回来了。看到我手里拿的票，他们睁大眼睛疑惑地看着对方。
回溯&仿写：(2)没有做某事，而是做了某事...
(轮椅篮球)Instead of withdrawing into myself, I focused on what I could achieve. 我没有退缩，而是专注于我所能实现的目标。
分句练习：
With the bouquet in hand, Evan rushed home to celebrate Mom's birthday.
1. 当那束夺目的花跃入眼帘，他的妈妈惊呆了。并没有表达出喜悦，相反地，她想知道Evan 是从哪里得到的花，并说出了她的困惑和担忧。
When the bunch of gorgeous flowers emerged into her line of sight, his mom was astonished. Contrary to expressing joy, she wondered where Evan had gotten it and poured out her puzzle and concern.
2. 灿烂的微笑照亮了他的脸，Evan带着压抑不住的骄傲和满足向她讲了整个事情的来龙去脉。
A radiant smile illuminating his face, Evan told her the whole story with irrepressible pride and contentment.
回溯&仿写：(3)“表情+动作+情绪”句型
（拾钱包的Jenny）She held it to her chest tightly and then pulled Jenny into her arms, tears streaming down her face. “You are the real angel. No one knows what the wallet means to the children.” She sobbed out her heartfelt gratitude. 她把它紧紧地放在胸前，然后把珍妮拉进怀里，眼泪顺着脸流下来。“你是真正的天使。没人知道这个钱包对孩子们意味着什么。”她哭着表达了她衷心的感激之情。
回溯&仿写：(4)用“整个故事/来龙去脉/简短交谈后”代替前文已交代过的情节
（帮助Bernard卖爆米花）在了解了爆米花背后的故事后，那些可爱的邻居，虽然自己并不富有，却伸手掏钱来支持这个男孩。Having learned the story behind the popcorn, those lovely neighbors, though not rich themselves, dipped into their pockets in support of the boy.
（拾钱包的Jenny）After a brief conversation, it turned out that Mrs. Green lost her wallet on her way to the store with the money to buy gifts for some poor children. 简短交谈几句之后，原来格林太太在去商店的路上丢的钱包，里面有给一些贫苦孩子买礼物的钱。
2. 灿烂的微笑照亮了他的脸，Evan带着压抑不住的骄傲和满足向她讲了整个事情的来龙去脉。
A radiant smile illuminating his face, Evan told her the whole story with irrepressible pride and contentment.
3. 听到这些真诚的话语，他的妈妈被深深地感动了，紧紧地拥抱着男孩，不断地表达她的爱和感谢。
Hearing the heartfelt words, his mom was deeply moved, embracing the boy tightly and murmuring her love and thanks repeatedly.
回溯&仿写：(5)某人听到/看到...而感到（转换）某种情绪，与此同时做了某种动作
(不好看的妈妈) Regretful tears streamed down his face when he recalled how much he had ignored and hurt her all these years and realized the amount of pain and agony she had endured. After the ceremony, he found his mum and hugged her, saying “Sorry” again and again. 当他回忆起这些年来他对她的忽视和伤害，意识到她忍受了多少痛苦和折磨时，悔恨的泪水从脸上流下来。仪式结束后，他找到妈妈，拥抱她，一遍又一遍地说“对不起”。
回溯&仿写：(5)某人听到/看到...而感到（转换）某种情绪，与此同时做了某种动作
(女孩和邮递员)Scarcely had he seen this when his tears brimmed over, with a mixture of thankfulness and contentment overwhelming him. Never in his life had he received such a heartwarming present.他一看到这个礼物，就热泪盈眶，既感激又满足。他一生中从未收到过如此温暖人心的礼物。
3. 听到这些真诚的话语，他的妈妈被深深地感动了，紧紧地拥抱着男孩，不断地表达她的爱和感谢。
Hearing the heartfelt words, his mom was deeply moved, embracing the boy tightly and murmuring her love and thanks repeatedly.
回溯&仿写：(5)某人听到/看到...而感到（转换）某种情绪，与此同时做了某种动作
（拾钱包的Jenny）Jenny’s soft heart was touched because her grandma often called her little angel, all her previous inner struggle giving way to the pure pride in her right choice. 珍妮柔软的心被感动了，因为她的奶奶经常称她为小天使，她之前所有的内心挣扎都让位于她对自己做了正确选择的纯粹骄傲。
3. 听到这些真诚的话语，他的妈妈被深深地感动了，紧紧地拥抱着男孩，不断地表达她的爱和感谢。
Hearing the heartfelt words, his mom was deeply moved, embracing the boy tightly and murmuring her love and thanks repeatedly.
1. 在妈妈的陪同下，Evan 疾步走向花店，想让卡特太太知道他们是多么感谢她的好心，但却不能接受这些钱，因为他妈妈的坚定信念——一个人应该通过努力工作来挣到他想要的东西。
Accompanied by his mom, Evan promptly strode toward the flower shop to let Mrs. Carter know how they appreciated her kindness but couldn't accept the money because of mom's firm belief－one should earn what he wanted by working hard.
回溯&仿写：(6)描写“急切”
（女孩与邮递员）Having made a resolution, he put on the shoes at once, trotted towards the little girl's house and knocked at the door again.他下了决心，立刻穿上鞋子，快步走向小女孩的家，又敲响了房门。
As Evan handed his mom the bouquet, they were surprised to discover an envelope with several hundred-dollar bills inside.
回溯&仿写：(7)细节同前文呼应
（小男孩的警车）里面是一辆涂着红色和蓝色的模型警车，正是他梦想得到的那个。Inside was a model police car, painted in red and blue, exactly the one in his dream.
As Evan handed his mom the bouquet, they were surprised to discover an envelope with several hundred-dollar bills inside.
1. 在妈妈的陪同下，Evan 疾步走向花店，想让卡特太太知道他们是多么感谢她的好心，但却不能接受这些钱，因为他妈妈的坚定信念——一个人应该通过努力工作来挣到他想要的东西。
Accompanied by his mom, Evan promptly strode toward the flower shop to let Mrs. Carter know how they appreciated her kindness but couldn't accept the money because of mom's firm belief－one should earn what he wanted by working hard.
2. 卡特太太眼睛里闪烁着对男孩的钦佩，她提出了一个解决方案：男孩可以在他方便的时候来花店帮忙。
Her eyes beaming with admiration for the boy, Mrs. Carter proposed a solution: the boy could assist at the flower shop at his convenience.
回溯&仿写：(8)独立主格结构（身体部位+分词）做状语
(我最好的一场考试)To my relief, she nodded in approval, a hint of surprise registering in her eyes. 使我松了一口气的是，她点头表示赞同，眼睛里露出一丝惊讶。
（奔跑吧David）Delighted to hear my encouragement, David lifted his head slowly, a big smile spreading across his face. 听到我的鼓励，大卫很高兴，他慢慢地抬起头来，脸上绽开了灿烂的笑容。
3. 作为对她慷慨的回报，母亲和男孩好客地邀请卡特太太来吃饭。没错，分享的爱就是加倍的爱。
In return for her generosity, the mom and the boy invited Mrs. Carter to dinner with hospitality. It was indeed true---love shared is love doubled.
回溯&仿写：(9)哲理点题结尾
(帮助过的男孩，如今的医生) It was true—life is not always a bed of roses but the good you put out into the world will find its way back to you. 没错---生活并不总是一张玫瑰的床（一帆风顺），但你对这个世界付出的善意终将回到你的身边。
结尾的几种设计方法
1) 与原文的开头呼应
2) 将关键词糅合起来
3) 人物离场但全新自我
4）某个时刻见证美好
1) 与原文的开头呼应
（我有超能力）The crowd scattering, I made for the toy store and played the process over and over again in my head. I came to realize that it changed me into a calmer person and I became more at ease with emergencies. I think I was meant to be there. 人群散开了，我走去玩具店，在脑海里一遍又一遍地演示着这个过程。我开始意识到，这件事把我变成了一个更镇静的人，我对紧急情况变得更轻松了。我想我来对了。
笑脸比鲜花更美
结尾
（小红罐）To this day, the can is still my most treasured possession because I don't want to lose touch with those happy memories of my childhood. It represents the love that is handed down from generation to generation.直到今天，这个罐子仍然是我最珍贵的财产，因为我不想跟那些童年的快乐记忆失去联系。它代表了代代传下来的爱。
2) 将关键词糅合起来
2) 将关键词糅合起来
(小男孩的警车)史密斯警官把他抱了起来，宣布：“当然。你现在是我们中的一员了！”艾伦笑了起来，紧紧地拥抱着那辆模型车，仿佛在拥抱自己的梦想。这一定是他年轻生命中最快乐的时刻！Officer Smith lifted him up, declaring, “Of course. You are now one of us!” Allen laughed and hugged the model car tightly, as if embracing his dream. It must be the happiest moment to shine in his young life!
这束花不仅是劳动的果实，也代表Evan的爱
结尾
3) 人物离场但全新自我
（被老师鼓励的写作）That day, I left the office with a sense of confidence to continue pursuing my passion for writing, and the knowledge that with determination/persistence, even the most difficult and painful challenges could be conquered. 那天，我离开了办公室，带着一种继续追求我对写作的热情的自信，并知道通过决心/坚持，即使是最困难和痛苦的挑战也可以被克服。
Evan和妈妈离开了花店，带着对彼此更深的了解和爱
结尾
4）某个时刻见证美好
（猎枪与野鸭）That special morning witnessed Jeremy and his father going home with not a duck but a new understanding of each other and the love for nature.在那个特别的早晨，Jeremy和他的父亲回家时，带回的不是鸭子，而是对彼此一次新的理解和对大自然的爱。
这个特别而美好的晚上见证了小屋里的欢声笑语
结尾
语料积累
花束 the bunch of gorgeous flowers
某物进入视线 emerged into her line of sight=come into one’s sight
某人震惊 astonished=dumbfounded=caught sb off guard=looked at sb questioningly=with disbelief and gratitude written on his face
没有做...而是做... contrary to doing=instead of doing,
通通说出 poured out
笑容灿烂 A radiant smile illuminating his face
告知/得知来龙去脉，经过简短交谈 told her the whole story= learned the story behind sth= after a brief conversation
压抑不住的骄傲 with irrepressible pride and contentment
感动得流泪
Hearing the heartfelt words, his mom was deeply moved, embracing the boy tightly and murmuring her love and thanks repeatedly.
...tears streamed down sb’s face when sb realized how many efforts he had made.
Scarcely had he seen this when his tears brimmed over, with a mixture of thankfulness and contentment overwhelming him. Never in his life had he received such a heartwarming present.
Sb’s soft heart was touched, all her previous ...giving way to the pure ...
急切去往 promptly trotted /strode toward the flower shop
眼里闪光 Her eyes beaming with admiration
眼中流露惊讶 a hint of surprise registering in her eyes.
脸上绽放笑容 a big smile spreading across his face
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