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读后续写系列微技能
--语言描写（Dialogue in Continuation Writing）
语言描写过长，说话动词单一，表达单一
Sb said +adv, “ ”
Sb said in a +adj. voice, “ ”.
对话描写原则
③ 不宜过长，侧重口语化词汇，避开生僻词汇；
② 对话描写必须反映人物的心理与情感，刻画人物的性格；
④ 尽可能结合动作描写，明确对谁说。
① 对话要为推动故事情节服务，每段出现一两句即可；
She said, “Our bus will arrive in five minutes.”
Mary said, “Come here, you two!”
He asked, “Why not have a drink ”
格式1：_________________
当句首为he said, he asked等词时，后面一般用逗号，引号内根据情况用不同的标点符号。
Sb said, “BXX.！？”
(一) 直接引语中标点符号的正确使用
“I hope you will be here, ” he said.
“I don't care!” he said.
“Why ” he asked.
格式2：_______________
当he said, he asked等词位于句末时，引号内陈述句句末用逗号，疑问句用问号，感叹句用感叹号。
“XXX,”sb said.
(一) 直接引语中标点符号的正确使用
1. 说 _________________________
2. 小声说 _____________________
3. 解释 _______________________
4. 请求 ________________________
5. 大喊 ________________________
6. 建议 ________________________
7. 尖叫 ________________________
8. 补充说 ______________________
9. 宣布 ________________________
10. 同意 __________________
11. 承认 ___________________
12. 重复说 _________________
13. 继续说 _________________
14. 叹息说 _________________
15. 责备 ___________________
16. 认为 ___________________
17. 嘟囔 ____________________
18. 结巴地说 ________________
say, utter
whisper, murmur
explain
ask, beg, request, demand
yell, shout, cry
advise, suggest, propose
scream
add
announce, declare
admit, acknowledge
agree
repeat
continue
sigh
scold, blame
think, believe, argue
mumble
stammer
各种各样的“说”
(一) 换个词--- 不能只是said
1. “Why don’t you want to accept this wonderful opportunity ” ___________ the boss on the phone.
2. “Shall we leave now ” he ___________ to us and we left the room very quietly.
3. “Help! Help! I can’t swim,” ___________ the frightened boy.
4. “Please don’t hurt my cat,” ______Sarah as her brother picked it up by one leg.
asked
whispered
screamed
begged
scream whisper beg ask
(一) 换个词--- 不能只是said
读后续写系列微技能
--语言描写(二）
构建动作面
林小杏
语言描写过长，
表说话动词单一，
句子表达单一
Sb said +adv, “ ”
Sb said in a +adj. voice, “ ”.
2. Analyse
3. Watching and Thinking
1. What did Sheldon say
2. How did he say them
例1. Sheldon打开门，扫视哥哥的房间，说：“天呐。”
例2. Sheldon一边问哥哥：“...”,一边收拾房间。
例3. Sheldon摇摇头，对爸爸抱怨：“ 20块搞不定。”
Sheldon opened the door ______ looked around, _______, “Oh, dear.”
“ ,” Sheldon asked his brother, ________________.
/________ the door, Sheldon looked around, ________, “Oh, dear.”
Sheldon shook his head, complaining to his father, “$20 doesn’t work.”
小结①：语言描写+_______描写：
1)加1个动作：Sb did,____________, “ .” 或 “ ,” sb. said, ______.
2)加2个动作：Sb did1 _______ did2,____________, “ .”
_________, sb. did, _________, “ .”
saying
and
saying
Doing
saying
doing
and
uttering
Opening
uttering
tidying up the room
动作
3. Watching and Thinking
谓
谓
谓
谓
谓
3. Watching and Thinking
1. What did George say
2. How did he say it
例1. 听到Sheldon的话，哥哥拿过试卷，惊讶地说：“你在开我玩笑吗？”
____________________, the brother picked up the paper, ________________, “Are you kidding me ”
Hearing Sheldon’s words
uttering in surprise
uttering in a surprised tone
3. Watching and Thinking
3. Watching and Thinking
1. What did Missy say after finding out Sheldon was choking
2. How did she say it
例2. 看着Sheldon，他的妹妹声音颤抖，大喊：“Sheldon要死了！Sheldon要死了！”
__________ Sheldon, his sister _____________________, “Sheldon’s gonna die. Sheldon’s gonna die.”
小结②：语言描写+_______描写+______描写：
1. ____________，sb said ______________________, “ .”
2. ____________，sb said ______________________, “ .”
Doing
with/in +表情绪n.
Doing
with +n. +doing/done
动作
情感
Staring at
cried with her voice trembling
3. Watching and Thinking
in surprise/ shock/ sorrow
with delight/excitement/pride/embarrassment/patience
谓
谓
1. 翻译下面句子。
（1）“我会继续写下去的。”我承诺道，脸上带着坚定的表情。
（2）“母亲节快乐，亲爱的妈妈!”双胞胎高兴地叫了一声，紧紧拥抱着妈妈。
（3）“谢谢你的及时帮助。”我忍不住哭了起来，眼睛里闪烁着兴奋和感激的光芒。（闪烁 twinkle)
“I will keep writing, ” I promised with determination.
“Happy Mother’s Day, dear mom, ” The twins yelled with delight, hugging their mom tightly.
“Thanks for your help, ” I couldn’t help weeping with eyes
twinkling with excitement and gratitude.
4. Exercise
（2022年新高考1卷）越野跑比赛
前情提要：David参加越野跑比赛，因残疾怕被他人取笑，我（老师）该如何鼓励他？
Para.1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
Para.2: I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
2. 根据提示续写第一段。
4. Exercise
① 思考Para1的情节
(3min)
② 小组讨论
Para1的情节
（5min)
③ 代表回答,评价
4. Exercise
Para.1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
（我鼓励他参加越野赛：语言+动作+情感描写）______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
（David答应参加越野赛：语言+动作+情感描写）
___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Para.2: I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
“David，are you sure you don’t want to run ” I asked David in a gentle voice, patting her shoulder slightly.
After a while, he cried with his voice trembling this time, "I'm scared, Teacher. I'm scared that the other kids will laugh at me or that I might fall again."
After hesitating for a moment, David raised his head and said with determination, “I will run.”
④ 按要求写语言描写的句子(5min)
⑤ 展示
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. With head down and shoulders trembling, obviously, he was trying hard to hide his disappointment. “David，are you sure you don’t want to run ” I asked David in a gentle voice, patting her shoulder slightly. David lowered his head, stared at the floor and kept silent. After a while, he cried with his voice trembling this time, "I'm scared, Teacher. I'm scared that the other kids will laugh at me or that I might fall again." I quickly put my arm around his shoulder, telling him that I believed in him and that he could do it. After hesitating for a moment, David raised his head and said firmly, “I will run.”
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
Sample
Summary
语言描写
构建动作面
语言+动作
语言+（动作）+情感
1)加1个动作：Sb did,____________, “ .”
“ ,” sb said, ______.
2)加2个动作：Sb did1 ___ did2,_____, “ .”
或_________, sb. did, _________, “ .”
1. (_____，) sb said ____________, “ .”
2. (______，)sb said ______________________, “ .”
saying
doing
and
saying
Doing
saying
Doing
with/in +表情绪n.
Doing
with +n. +doing/done
Homework
完成练习二的续写第一段；

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