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读后续写：女孩与母亲吵架后重归于好
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Jenny was the only child in her home. She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and she ran out of the house angrily. She couldn’t help weeping sorrowfully when she thought of the scolding(责备) from her mother. Having wandered aimlessly in the street for hours, she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat, but it was not even possible for her, since she had nothing with her. She stood beside a stand for a while, watching the middle-aged seller busy doing his business. However, with no money in hand, she sighed and had to leave.
The seller behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked, “Hey, girl, you want to have the noodles ”
“Oh, yes… but I don’t have money on me” she replied.
“That’s nothing. I’ll treat you today,”said the man, “come in.”
The seller brought her a bowl of noodles, whose smell was so attractive. As she was eating, Jenny cried silently.
“What is it ” asked the man kindly.
“Nothing, actually I was just touched by your kindness!” said Jenny as she wiped her tears, “Even a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles, while my mother, drove me out of the house. She showed no care for me. She is so merciless compared to a stranger!”
Hearing the words, the seller smiled “Girl, do you really think so I only gave you a bowl of noodles and you thanked me a lot. But it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby. Can your number the times she cooked for you Have you expressed your gratitude to her ”
Jenny sat there, speechless and numb with shock; she remembered mother’s familiar face and weathered hands. “Why did I not think of that A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel indebted, but I have never thanked my mum for what she has done for me.”
On the way home, Jenny made up her mind to make an apology to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home.
Paragraph 1: Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. ____________________________________________
Paragraph 2: A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. ________________________________________________
一、文章主旨大意
文章主要讲述了珍妮与母亲吵架后离家出走，在饥饿无助时得到一位摊主的帮助，摊主的话让她意识到母亲平时对自己默默付出的爱与关怀被自己忽视，从而决定回家向母亲道歉的故事。主旨在于通过珍妮的经历，引发人们对亲情的思考，提醒人们不要忽视身边亲人给予的爱，要懂得感恩与珍惜。
二、伏笔
1. 开头提到珍妮与母亲吵架后离家，这为后面她在外面经历的种种以及思想的转变埋下伏笔，因为这次离家出走是她反思亲情的契机。
2. 描写珍妮看到摊主生意忙碌，为摊主免费给她提供面条这一情节做铺垫，突出摊主的善良，同时也与后面摊主对珍妮的劝导形成对比，进一步凸显亲情的珍贵。
三、续写要点
第一段： - 描述珍妮在门口的紧张心理，如心跳加速、犹豫是否要敲门等细节。 - 写出珍妮进门后看到母亲的场景，比如母亲可能正在焦急地踱步或者坐在沙发上黯然神伤等。 - 珍妮鼓起勇气向母亲道歉，表达自己的悔意和对母亲的感激。
第二段： - 母亲对珍妮的反应，可能是欣慰、激动地落泪并拥抱珍妮。 - 可以描写母女和解后的温馨场景，如一起坐在沙发上谈心，或者母亲为珍妮准备食物等。 - 最后要体现出珍妮通过这次经历深刻体会到了亲情的珍贵，升华主题，如她决定以后要更加珍惜母亲，多关心母亲等。
四、情节线
1. 开端：珍妮与母亲发生争吵，一气之下离家出走。她在街头漫无目的地游荡了几个小时后，感到饥饿，站在一个小吃摊旁，虽渴望食物却因身无分文只能无奈离开。
2. 发展：小吃摊摊主注意到珍妮，主动请她吃了一碗面条。珍妮吃面时因摊主的 kindness 而感动落泪，并向摊主倾诉母亲将她赶出家门的事，摊主听后对珍妮进行劝导，提醒她母亲多年的养育之恩。
3. 高潮：珍妮听了摊主的话后，内心受到极大触动，意识到自己对母亲的忽视与不感恩，在回家路上便下定决心向母亲道歉。
4. 结局：珍妮走到家门口，深呼吸后敲门，母亲开门，珍妮道歉，母亲原谅了她，随后母女俩和解并进行了交流，珍妮决定从此珍惜母亲，珍视亲情。
五、情感线
1. 珍妮与母亲吵架后离家时：充满愤怒与委屈，对母亲的责骂心怀不满，这种情绪驱使她逃离家庭环境。
2. 在街头饥饿无助时：除了身体上的饥饿感，还有内心的失落与孤独，看到小吃摊食物却无法拥有时，增添了无奈之情。
3. 得到摊主帮助时：对摊主充满感激，因一碗免费的面条而感动落泪，同时也因摊主的话开始对母亲的行为有了新的思考，内心逐渐产生愧疚。
4. 回家路上：愧疚感愈发强烈，坚定了向母亲道歉的决心，意识到自己过去的错误，对母亲的情感由之前的愤怒转为深深的自责与懊悔。
5. 到家与母亲交流时：紧张又诚恳地道歉，得到母亲原谅后，感受到母亲的爱与包容，内心充满温暖与对亲情的珍惜，情感得到升华，从自我反思上升到对亲情本质的深刻理解与珍视。
六、主题升华句
1. Family love is like a quietly burning flame that gives us endless warmth in ordinary days, yet we often forget it while chasing the lights in the distance.亲情是那默默燃烧的火焰，在平凡的日子里给予我们无尽的温暖，我们却常常在追逐远方的光亮时将它遗忘。
2. A mother's love is like a trickling stream. Although it is silent, it can converge into a vast ocean in the desert of the soul and nourish us throughout our lives.母亲的爱如同涓涓细流，虽无声无息，却能在心灵的荒漠中汇聚成浩瀚的海洋，滋润我们一生。
3. Home is always the harbor of the soul, and a mother's embrace is the safest berth. No matter how stormy it is, we should never get lost in the outside world and forget this deep affection. 家，永远是心灵的港湾，母亲的怀抱是最安全的停靠，无论风雨如何，我们都不应迷失在外面的世界而忘却这份深情。
4. Gratitude is not just in words, but in truly understanding the efforts of our loved ones with our hearts and repaying that selfless love with actions, so that the flower of family love will always be brilliant.感恩并非只在言语之间，而是要用真心去体会亲人的付出，用行动去回报那无私的爱，让亲情之花永远绚烂。
5. True love is not a momentary emotion, but something that can withstand the test of ordinary years in the long river of time. A mother's love is so profound and lasting. 真正的爱不是一时的感动，而是在岁月的长河中，经得起平淡流年的考验，母亲的爱便是如此深沉而持久。
续写范文
The First Version
Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. Her heart was pounding wildly as if it wanted to break free from her chest. She raised her hand, paused in mid-air for a few seconds, and then finally mustered the courage to knock. The door opened almost immediately, and there stood her mother, her eyes red and swollen, evidently from crying. Jenny's throat tightened, and she stammered, "Mom, I'm so sorry. I shouldn't have run away and said those awful things. You've always been there for me, cooking countless meals, taking care of me when I was sick, and I took it all for granted. I was wrong."
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. Jenny looked up and saw her mother's tear-streaked face. Her mother pulled her into a warm and tight embrace, whispering, "It's okay, honey. I'm just glad you're back." They stood there for a long time, holding each other. Later, they sat on the couch, and Jenny shared with her mother everything that had happened, including the kind vendor's words. From that day on, Jenny made a promise to herself that she would cherish every moment with her mother, show her love and gratitude more often, and never let a petty quarrel come between them again. Because she knew that the love of a mother was the most precious gift in the world, and it deserved to be treasured with all her heart.
The Second Version
Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. She could hear her own heart thumping loudly in her ears. Her hand trembled slightly as she reached for the doorknob. As she entered, she saw her mother sitting in the dimly lit living room, her face haggard and weary. Jenny walked slowly towards her, her steps heavy with guilt. "Mom," she said softly, "I'm back. I'm so sorry for what I did. I was so blind and ungrateful. You've given me so much love and care all these years, and I repaid you with rudeness."
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. Jenny looked into her mother's eyes, which were filled with a mixture of relief and love. Her mother cupped her face in her hands and said, "My dear, I was so worried about you. I'm just glad you're safe." They hugged each other tightly, and in that embrace, all the anger and hurt melted away. Jenny realized that this was the place where she truly belonged, and that her mother's love was an unbreakable bond. From then on, she made it a point to be more patient and understanding with her mother, knowing that every moment spent with her was a precious gift. Because in the end, it was the love of family that could heal all wounds and make one whole again.

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