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读后续写：Kevin的成长，传递勇敢行动的正能量 讲义
读后续写
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Kevin was pretty bored. His mother was at work, and his father had been away on business. Therefore, he was left in the care of Mrs. Hill, an old lady who lived next door. His parents had raised the 12-year-old to be a good boy. He never got into trouble, though sometimes he wanted to do risky things.Mrs. Hill was asleep. Kevin sighed (叹息) and hoped something exciting would happen. Suddenly, a movement outside caught his eye.
Mrs. Hill’s front window faced Mr. and Mrs. Green’s house across the street. The couple had both gone to work, so it was strange that someone was over there. Kevin stared at the man at their front door. Suddenly, the man jumped through an open window into the house. With his heart in his mouth, Kevin grabbed Mrs. Hill’s home phone and called the police.
Thinking that the man might get away with whatever he wanted before the police arrived, Kevin decided to do something. He rushed out of Mrs. Hill’s house and crossed the street quickly. Grabbing a branch from a cut-down tree, he jumped in through the window. “Stop right there! You must leave right now!” he called out, holding the branch with both hands.
The man froze for a second, but when he saw the skinny boy he breathed a sigh of relief. “Hey, kid, put that down. It was my home. My parents used to live here and my father’s watch was here,” he explained, trying to lift a floorboard.
At that moment, the sounds of a police car echoed (回响) in the air. The man stood up in a panic, then ran through the house toward the window and jumped out. Kevin followed out and told the arriving police officers what had happened. They pursued and arrested the man.
Kevin went back to Mrs. Hill’s house. Somehow he wasn’t sure he had done the right thing. “What if he has told the truth ” he thought to himself. The man’s words sounded pretty convincing.
注意：（1）续写词数应为150左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them.
Paragraph 2: Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station.
解题思路与步骤
1.理清情节
Kevin目睹不速之客闯入邻居家，并勇敢地采取行动。
然而，当嫌疑人解释自己是原房主的孩子并且拥有父亲的手表时，Kevin感到困惑，不确定自己是否做了对的事。
故事的转折是Kevin在与邻居交谈后，找到的手表对事件的进一步验证。
2.情感转折
第一段： 通过Kevin的内心斗争表现出他的怀疑，并通过与Mr.和Mrs. Green的互动解决疑虑。
第二段： Kevin带着找到的手表与Mr. Green一起去警察局，最终通过警察的认可，Kevin意识到他做了对的事。
具体写作
第一段： 通过情感描写、细节描写、动作链推进等展现Kevin的内心挣扎与人物互动。
第二段： 通过情节升华和主题点睛展现事件的解决和Kevin的成长。
第一段：Kevin的自我怀疑和内心转折
1. 情感描写（开篇点题）
句式： A sense of doubt washed over Kevin, making him feel uncertain about the choice he had made.
解释： 开篇通过Kevin的内心情感波动展现他对自己行为的怀疑。
2. 细节描写（补充情感）
句式： His hands trembled slightly as he explained the situation to Mr. and Mrs. Green.
解释： 描述Kevin的身体语言，表现他因怀疑而产生的不安。
3. 动作链推进（承接情节）
句式： Upon hearing Kevin’s explanation, Mr. Green nodded and led him to the living room.
解释： 通过动作推进，展现Kevin与Green夫妻的互动，使情节自然流动。
4. 冲突铺垫（引出矛盾）
句式： Kevin hesitated for a moment, unsure whether he had made the right decision.
解释： 内心冲突加剧，Kevin产生了内心的疑虑，情节发展进入紧张期。
5. 情节转折（高潮）
句式： No sooner had Kevin voiced his concerns than Mr. Green reassured him with a calm voice.
解释： 用“no sooner...than...”推动情节的转折，Mr. Green的安慰缓解了Kevin的疑虑。
第二段：事件的解决与Kevin的成长
6. 情节升华（总结收尾）
句式： With the watch in hand, Kevin felt a wave of relief, realizing that he had made the right choice.
解释： 在手表交给警察后，Kevin感觉释然，情感升华。
7. 细节描写（补充情感）
句式： As the officer examined the watch, Kevin’s heart slowed, realizing that things were falling into place.
解释： 通过警察的动作，表现Kevin心情的逐渐放松。
8. 动作与情感结合（推动故事）
句式： With a deep breath, Kevin smiled slightly, feeling a sense of accomplishment as he stood by the police desk.
解释： 通过情感与动作的结合展现Kevin从怀疑到释然的内心转变。
9. 他人反应或对话（增强层次感）
句式： “Good job, kid,” the officer said, giving Kevin a reassuring pat on the shoulder.
解释： 通过警察的反应和言语进一步推动Kevin的情感转变，增强故事互动。
10. 主题点睛（画龙点睛）
句式： This experience taught Kevin that sometimes, doing the right thing isn’t about certainty, but about having the courage to act.
解释： 用总结性句子点明主题，展现Kevin的成长，传递勇敢行动的正能量。
范文
第一段：
When Mr. and Mrs. Green got home, Kevin went to talk to them. A sense of doubt washed over Kevin, making him feel uncertain about the choice he had made. His hands trembled slightly as he explained the situation to Mr. and Mrs. Green. Upon hearing Kevin’s explanation, Mr. Green nodded and led him to the living room. Kevin hesitated for a moment, unsure whether he had made the right decision. No sooner had Kevin voiced his concerns than Mr. Green reassured him with a calm voice, “It’s okay, Kevin. You did what you thought was right.”
第二段：
Kevin and Mr. Green took the watch they had found to the police station. With the watch in hand, Kevin felt a wave of relief, realizing that he had made the right choice. As the officer examined the watch, Kevin’s heart slowed, realizing that things were falling into place. With a deep breath, Kevin smiled slightly, feeling a sense of accomplishment as he stood by the police desk. “Good job, kid,” the officer said, giving Kevin a reassuring pat on the shoulder. This experience taught Kevin that sometimes, doing the right thing isn’t about certainty, but about having the courage to act.

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