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67. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A couple of months before I started high school, my parents gave me the greatest gift any teenage boy would ask for: a cell phone. I lived on that phone all summer. I always texted my friends, even at night. And I paid no attention to the people and things around myself. Being connected to the Internet(动名词短语做主语) was more important than being present.
So, you can imagine my displeasure(人物情绪描写) when the time came for our family vacation that year. It was not the Disneyland trip or beach vacation that I had been hoping for. "This year," my dad said, "we'll be doing something special, something I used to do with my dad when I was a kid. We're going camping in the forest!"
His excitement was met with a disappointed sigh(独立主格), which was my communication style at that age. But he had made the decision and would not change his mind. I comforted myself by telling myself that it was still a vacation. I remained uninfluenced while they were busy preparing for the vacation.
My mind was on my phone, the texts flying back and forth(独立主格). I focused on the screen in my hands so much that the first time I looked up was when we drove across a bridge on the trip to our campsite(表从).
I looked out of the window and saw a fast-moving river. The air blowing into the car from the open windows(现在分词做伴随动作) was hot and smell of trees. But that didn't matter to me. The reason why I had looked up was something far more serious and annoying(adj做后置定语). My phone no longer had service. The signal was weak. During the last hour of the drive, there was no signal at all.
注意：续写词数应为 150 左右；请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1: When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face.
Paragraph 2: The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun.
67. 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A couple of months before I started high school, my parents gave me the greatest gift any teenage boy would ask for: a cell phone. I lived on that phone all summer. I always texted my friends, even at night. And I paid no attention to the people and things around myself. Being connected to the Internet was more important than being present.
So, you can imagine my displeasure when the time came for our family vacation that year. It was not the Disneyland trip or beach vacation that I had been hoping for. "This year," my dad said, "we'll be doing something special, something I used to do with my dad when I was a kid. We're going camping in the forest!"
His excitement was met with a disappointed sigh, which was my communication style at that age. But he had made the decision and would not change his mind. I comforted myself by telling myself that it was still a vacation. I remained uninfluenced while they were busy preparing for the vacation.
My mind was on my phone, the texts flying back and forth. I focused on the screen in my hands so much that the first time I looked up was when we drove across a bridge on the trip to our campsite.
I looked out of the window and saw a fast-moving river. The air blowing into the car from the open windows was hot and smelled of trees. But that didn't matter to me. The reason why I had looked up was something far more serious and annoying. My phone no longer had service. The signal was weak. During the last hour of the drive, there was no signal at all.
注意：续写词数应为 150 左右；请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1: When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face.
Paragraph 2: The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun.
一、类型归类与构思分析
分析项目 内容
题材类型 情感成长类（亲子关系 / 个人成长 / 自我觉醒）
文本风格 叙事型第一人称，略带幽默的青少年视角
核心冲突 “沉迷手机” vs “被迫断网的亲子露营”
构思策略 从“抵触—被动接受—感知自然—情感转变—领悟亲情”逐步递进，形成心理与情感的“成长线”
布局建议 第一段承接抵触情绪和初入自然的不适；第二段从被动适应转为主动参与，建立与父亲的情感连结，实现心理升华
续写切入点 原文已完成铺垫：抵触情绪、自然环境线索、亲情暗示、无信号制造转折，续写宜承接“无网状态下”的心理转变和行动变化
情节设计建议 融合“自然体验”“父子互动”“自我反思”与“感情转折”；可借助“父亲讲故事”“被迫参与户外活动”“夜晚星空”推动情感升华
二、“故事山”结构分析
故事结构 内容及作用 原文表现
开端（设定） 拥有手机后沉迷，冷漠忽视周围人事物 I lived on that phone all summer...
上升（冲突出现） 被迫参加“没有信号”的家庭露营 "We're going camping in the forest!"；My phone no longer had service.
高潮（转折点） （续写展开）参与自然活动，逐渐放下手机与偏见，重拾亲情 【段首句引导】“I stepped out of the car with a long face.”
下降（情感变化） 从内心抵触到情绪舒缓、逐渐被自然吸引 （续写中体现）
结局（领悟成长） 真正感受亲情、自然与陪伴的意义，情感完成转变 （第二段段首引导）“The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun.”
三、原文线索分析表
分析角度 内容 原文反应句
人物刻画 第一人称男孩，初始自我中心、冷漠，后续需写成长 I always texted my friends... / I paid no attention...
情感层次 初始烦躁—冷漠—被迫接受—无奈转变—惊喜体验—感动领悟 His excitement was met with a disappointed sigh. / My phone no longer had service.
关键情节点 得知露营消息；手机没信号；抵达营地（段首句）；次日早晨（段首句） We're going camping in the forest! / My phone no longer had service.
语言特色 简洁口语化，夹杂青少年情绪表达 My dad said... / I comforted myself by telling myself...
关键词 分析 annoyed, disappointed, focused, looked up, signal, forest, trees 【反映心理】与【自然环境铺垫】关键词
心理描写 无奈、烦躁、沉迷、被迫、转变 My mind was on my phone... / my displeasure...
动作描写 坐车看手机，叹气，出车下营地 I focused on the screen... / stepped out of the car
环境描写 森林、河流、热风、树香（视觉、嗅觉、体感） saw a fast-moving river / smelled of trees
隐含主题 成长与陪伴比科技更重要；回归本真自我 暗线贯穿：从科技依赖到情感回归
情感转折 “手机无信号”引发矛盾升级，铺垫后续情绪转折 My phone no longer had service.
空间转换 从家中—车上—露营地—自然环境 drove across a bridge... arrived at the campsite
时间过渡 夏天开头—旅行当天—“The next morning” A couple of months before... / The next morning...
四、续写注意事项与技巧设计
项目 说明
段首句承接 第一段：情绪+动作；第二段：时间+自然描写，引入情绪转变契机
人物心理承接 第一段体现抵触+初识自然的不适；第二段展现变化（宁静、惊喜、父亲交流）
情节递进设计 ① 强制参加活动 → ② 被吸引 → ③ 与父亲交流 → ④ 领悟自然与亲情意义
对话设计建议 使用与父亲的交流促进情感发展，例如父亲讲述他童年露营的故事
环境描写技巧 运用五感描写（阳光、风、树叶沙沙声、溪流声等）唤醒主人公感知
情绪转折设计 使用某个触发点（如星空、父亲举动）制造“情感瞬变”
语言技巧融合 使用高中加分语法（虚拟语气、非谓语、倒装、强调句、感叹句等）提升表达质量
五、续写创作建议（简略框架）
Paragraph 1
承接段首“我下车时一脸不情愿”
描写营地环境（闷热、虫鸣、简陋）引发心理反感
被迫参与父亲安排的活动（如搭帐篷、搬柴火）
与父亲产生简单交流（敷衍应对）
夜晚无所事事，烦躁加剧
暗示转折：“不经意抬头看到星星”或“听到父亲讲故事”引起内心波动
Paragraph 2（150词左右）
段首“阳光唤醒我”自然过渡
清晨环境描写：阳光洒入帐篷，鸟鸣，空气清新
内心感受发生变化，手机信号不再重要
主动加入父亲准备早餐或一起散步
父亲讲述他与爷爷的露营回忆（情感升华）
心理升华：“陪伴的意义”“放下屏幕感受真实世界”
结尾：不再急于寻找信号，而是珍惜当下
3. 推荐英文例句 & 高级替换词
动作描写
He slumped on a rock, glaring at his phone. （他瘫坐在石头上，瞪着手机。）
Dad handed me a tent pole, urging me to help. （爸爸递给我一根帐篷杆，催促我帮忙。）
I kicked a pebble in frustration. （我懊恼地踢了一颗小石子。）
The deer pricked up its ears and bounded away. （鹿竖起耳朵，跳着跑开了。）
He struggled to light the damp firewood. （他努力点燃潮湿的木柴。）
I shuffled my feet, reluctant to join. （我拖着脚步，不情愿地加入。）
The campfire crackled, sending sparks into the night. （篝火噼啪作响，火星飞溅进夜空。）
A cool breeze rustled the leaves overhead. （凉风吹过头顶的树叶，沙沙作响。）
I fumbled with the tent ropes, my fingers clumsy. （我笨拙地摆弄着帐篷绳。）
Dad clapped me on the back, grinning. （爸爸拍拍我的背，咧嘴笑了。）
心理描写
Resentment bubbled inside me. （我心里涌起一阵怨恨。）
A pang of guilt hit me as I saw Dad’s tired face. （看到爸爸疲惫的脸，一阵内疚袭来。）
I couldn’t shake off the frustration. （我无法摆脱挫败感。）
A strange sense of peace washed over me. （一种奇怪的平静感涌上心头。）
My mind buzzed with complaints, but I stayed silent. （我心里满是抱怨，但保持沉默。）
For the first time, I felt a flicker of curiosity. （第一次，我感到一丝好奇。）
The silence gnawed at me. （寂静让我感到不安。）
I wrestled with my stubbornness. （我与自己的固执斗争。）
A reluctant smile tugged at my lips. （我的嘴角勉强露出一丝微笑。）
The beauty of nature caught me off guard. （大自然的美丽让我猝不及防。）
环境描写
The forest hummed with unseen life. （森林里回荡着看不见的生命气息。）
Golden sunlight filtered through the dense canopy. （金色的阳光透过茂密的树冠洒下来。）
The river gurgled over smooth stones. （河水在光滑的石头上潺潺流淌。）
A chorus of crickets filled the night air. （蟋蟀的合唱声弥漫在夜空中。）
The scent of pine needles hung in the air. （松针的气味弥漫在空气中。）
Stars winked in the ink-black sky. （星星在漆黑的天空中闪烁。）
Mist curled around the tree trunks at dawn. （晨雾缭绕在树干周围。）
The campfire cast flickering shadows. （篝火投下摇曳的影子。）
A cool breeze carried the earthy smell of the forest. （凉风带来森林的泥土气息。）
The morning dew glistened on the grass. （晨露在草地上闪闪发光。）
4. 高级替换词
（1）高级替换词（按场景分类）
普通词 高级替换词 适用场景
angry resentful / frustrated 表达更复杂的负面情绪
happy content / at ease 描写平静的满足感
look glance / gaze / peer 不同方式的“看”
walk trudge / shuffle / stride 不同情绪的“走”
say mutter / urge / exclaim 不同语气的“说”
固定搭配 & 词法解析
"Met with a disappointed sigh"（回应以失望的叹息）
搭配解析："be met with"（得到某种反应）
例句：His suggestion was met with silence.（他的建议无人回应。）
"The air smelled of trees."（空气中有树木的味道）
搭配解析："smell of"（散发出……气味）
例句：The kitchen smelled of freshly baked bread.（厨房里飘着新鲜面包的香气。）
"My phone no longer had service."（我的手机没信号了）
搭配解析："no longer"（不再）
例句：She no longer trusted him.（她不再信任他。）
"A pang of guilt hit me."（一阵内疚袭来）
搭配解析："a pang of"（一阵……情绪）
例句：A pang of sadness washed over her.（一阵悲伤涌上她的心头。）
"The campfire crackled."（篝火噼啪作响）
搭配解析："crackle"（形容火、无线电等的声响）
例句：The firewood crackled in the fireplace.（木柴在壁炉里噼啪作响。）
可积累的语料（生词短语）
loom over（笼罩；逼近）
词性：phrasal verb
近义词：tower over
反义词：recede
例句：
The dark clouds loomed over the mountains.（乌云笼罩着群山。）
The exam loomed over him, causing stress.（考试逼近，让他感到压力。）
falter（动摇；结巴）
词性：verb
近义词：hesitate, stumble
反义词：persist
例句：
His smile faltered when he saw my reaction.（看到我的反应，他的笑容僵住了。）
She faltered mid-speech, unsure what to say.（她说到一半结巴了，不知该说什么。）
gnaw at（啃咬；折磨）
词性：phrasal verb
近义词：bother, torment
反义词：soothe
例句：
Guilt gnawed at him all night.（内疚整夜折磨着他。）
The dog gnawed at the bone.（狗啃着骨头。）
catch off guard（使措手不及）
词性：idiom
近义词：surprise, startle
反义词：prepare
例句：
The sudden question caught him off guard.（这个突如其来的问题让他措手不及。）
The storm caught the hikers off guard.（暴风雨让徒步者猝不及防。）
at ease（放松；自在）
词性：phrase
近义词：comfortable, relaxed
反义词：tense
例句：
He finally felt at ease in the quiet forest.（在宁静的森林里，他终于放松下来。）
Her friendly smile put me at ease.（她友好的微笑让我感到自在。）
Possible Versions(3)
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When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face. The sun was already dipping below the treeline (环境描写), painting (现在分词短语做后置定语)the sky in shades of orange and purple. Mom immediately started organizing the cooking supplies while Dad struggled with the tent poles. "At least help your father," Mom said, handing me a flashlight (现在分词短语做伴随动作). I sighed but took it, using it to illuminate Dad's work (现在分词做伴随动作) as dusk settled around us. The forest noises grew louder in the darkness - owls hooting, leaves rustling (独立主格) - making me jump at every sound(现在分词短语做后置定语). After a simple dinner of canned beans and sausages cooked over the fire, we sat around the dwindling flames. Dad told stories about her childhood camping trips while I stared at my useless phone. Eventually, exhausted from the day's travel and fresh air(过去分词短语做主语补语), I crawled into the tent and fell asleep to the unfamiliar symphony of nighttime forest sounds.
Paragraph 2:
The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun. Blinking against the light filtering through the tent fabric(现在分词短语做伴随动作), I realized with surprise that I'd slept through the night without tossing and turning like I usually did. Outside, I could hear Mom quietly humming as she prepared breakfast and Dad gathering more firewood. The crisp morning air carried the comforting smell of coffee brewing and bacon sizzling. Rubbing my eyes(现在分词做伴随动作), I noticed my phone lying untouched in the corner of the tent - a first for me. As I emerged, squinting in the sunlight(现在分词短语做伴随动作), Mom smiled and handed me a steaming mug. "Sleep well " she asked. I nodded slowly, realizing with some astonishment that I actually had.
Version 2
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When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face. The sun hung low in the sky, casting(现在分词做伴随动作) long shadows across the clearing. Mom began unpacking the food cooler while Dad wrestled with the tent instructions. "Stop sulking and gather some firewood," Mom suggested, handing me a small axe(现在分词做伴随动作). Reluctantly, I wandered into the edge of the forest, collecting dry branches(现在分词做伴随动作) as daylight faded. By the time we got the fire going, darkness had completely enveloped our campsite(环境描写). We ate simple sandwiches as Dad pointed out constellations between the tree branches. The complete blackness beyond our fire circle felt oppressive(环境描写), and I kept reaching for my phone out of habit, only to remember it was useless. Eventually, the combination of physical work and fresh air made my eyelids heavy(无灵主语句), and I fell asleep almost as soon as I zipped myself into my sleeping bag.
Paragraph 2:
The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun. For a moment, I didn't recognize where I was, then remembered with surprise that I'd slept soundly through the night. Outside the tent, I could hear Mom and Dad speaking in hushed tones as they prepared breakfast. The air smelled wonderfully of coffee and something sweet - maybe pancakes I stretched, noticing(现在分词做伴随动作)with some amazement that I felt more rested than I had in months. My phone lay forgotten in my backpack, its usual morning alarm unnecessary here(独立主格). As I emerged from the tent, squinting in the bright sunlight(现在分词做伴随动作), Mom turned with a smile. "Look who's finally up," she said, handing me a plate(现在分词做伴随动作). I accepted it gratefully, realizing(现在分词做伴随动作)with some shock that I wasn't in a hurry to check my phone at all.
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When we finally arrived at the campsite, I stepped out of the car with a long face. The setting sun painted the trees golden(环境描写) as Mom and Dad began their efficient camping routine - Mom organizing the kitchen area(独立主格)while Dad tackled the tent. "Make yourself useful," Mom said, handing me a lantern to hang(现在分词做伴随动作). As twilight deepened(环境描写), we worked quickly to establish our campsite before full darkness fell(无灵主语句). After a simple dinner cooked over the fire, we sat around the flames, the circle of light feeling small against the vast darkness of the forest(独立主格). Mom told funny stories about their early camping disasters while Dad poked at the fire. The unfamiliar quiet and darkness made me uneasy at first(无灵主语句), but gradually, the rhythmic crackling of the fire and the chorus of crickets became almost soothing(无灵主语句). By the time we retired to the tent, the day's fresh air and physical activity had left me pleasantly exhausted, and I fell asleep almost immediately.
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The next morning I was woken up by soft rays of the sun. For the first time in months, I hadn't woken up during the night or checked the time anxiously. Outside the tent, I could hear the comforting sounds of Mom cooking breakfast and Dad gathering more firewood. The morning air was crisp and clean(环境描写), carrying(现在分词做伴随动作) the delicious aroma of frying eggs and toast. I lay still for a moment, noticing(现在分词做伴随动作) how different this awakening felt from(过去分词短语做后置定语)my usual mornings filled with immediate phone-checking(过去分词短语做后置定语). When I finally emerged, stretching in the sunlight(现在分词做伴随动作), Dad turned with a knowing smile. "The outdoors agrees with you," she observed, handing me a cup of hot chocolate(现在分词做伴随动作). I took it, surprised to realize(过去分词做adj补语) he might be right - I felt more awake and present than I had in a long time. My phone, I noticed with some satisfaction, remained untouched in my backpack(无灵主语句).

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