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第二讲 续写情节构建——2025年高考真题实战
一、情节构建核心原则
读后续写情节需遵循 “冲突驱动、逻辑连贯、情感递进、主题呼应” 四大原则，以原文情节为基础，通过 “发现冲突→推进冲突→解决冲突” 脉络，实现故事自然延伸，且两段续写需形成 “承接 - 升华” 的逻辑关系。
二、2025 年高考真题（全国 Ⅰ 卷）情节构建解析
（一）真题原文回顾
My wife and I wanted to share our new home with family and friends by hosting a small gathering in the early summer. She had prepared lots of snacks, while my job was to have the backyard in order. There was plenty of space for the kids to run and play. There was just one thing I hadn't counted on: my brother chose to bring his dog Toby, a 50-pound ball of fire. Though friendly, he could easily knock over my niece's small boys and my six-month-old granddaughter. So, when my brother showed up, I asked him to watch Toby and keep him outside.
My plan was working out just fine. Toby was using up his energy by running back and forth in the backyard and giving the kids plenty of room. Unexpectedly, after supper, the weather changed. It started to rain and everyone went indoors. It was an awkward moment. I didn't want Toby to be running around in the house, and my brother wasn't happy with driving home with a wet dog. Eventually, my brother decided to leave rather than force the issue.
A few days passed, and I hadn't heard anything from my brother. I texted him and expressed wishes for him to come out again. His reply came as a surprise—a shock, actually: “Not a chance.” Clearly, he was unhappy over the way we had parted. After all, I had left him little choice. Well, he'll get over it, I reasoned.
Two months passed. My wife suggested I get in touch with my brother, but I resisted, thinking he should call first. However, my conscience kept bothering me. I tried to put myself in my brother's shoes. He was facing health issues, and his wife of thirty-five years had passed away a few months earlier. Toby was his constant companion, the one who kept him going.
续写段首句：
1.I realized it was me who was at fault.
2.With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
（二）原文冲突与伏笔分析
核心冲突 内部冲突：“我” 的 “安全顾虑” 与兄弟的 “情感需求” 矛盾；外部冲突：亲情疏离
关键伏笔 1. 兄弟丧妻不久，Toby 是唯一陪伴；2. 兄弟因被冷遇拒绝再次聚会；3. “我” 的良心备受煎熬
情感基调 愧疚、懊悔→主动弥补→温暖和解
主题指向 亲情至上、换位思考、主动道歉的勇气
（三）情节构建四步法
第一步：拆解段首句，锁定情节方向
第一段首句：I realized it was me who was at fault.
核心任务：展现 “我” 的内心觉醒与行动决心。
逻辑延伸：反思错误（忽视兄弟痛苦）→ 共情理解（Toby 的特殊意义）→ 制定弥补计划（登门道歉）。
第二段首句：With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door.
核心任务：呈现 “和解过程” 与情节收尾。
逻辑延伸：紧张忐忑的见面→ 真诚道歉的表达→ 兄弟破冰与原谅→ 亲情修复的温暖结局。
第二步：设计关键情节点，搭建情节框架
段落 关键情节点 1（铺垫） 关键情节点 2（推进） 关键情节点 3（过渡 / 收尾）
第一段 回忆兄弟抱 Toby 失落的画面，强化愧疚 妻子的鼓励坚定道歉决心 准备礼物（饼干），动身前往兄弟家
第二段 敲门时的紧张心理与兄弟的意外反应 倾诉歉意，承认忽视其情感需求 Toby 主动亲近，兄弟拥抱和解
第三步：补充细节描写，让情节更生动
环境细节：第一段可加入 “夏日傍晚的微风”“远处的晚霞”，烘托愧疚中带着希望的氛围；第二段用 “门廊上熟悉的花盆”“Toby 湿漉漉的爪子”，唤起亲情共鸣。
动作细节：“握紧装饼干的盒子”“手指无意识摩挲门把手”“眼眶泛红” 等，展现人物内心。
语言细节：道歉时不说空洞的 “对不起”，而是具体表达 “我不该忽视你失去嫂子后的孤独，Toby 对你太重要了”。
第四步：呼应主题，实现情感升华
情节结尾需回扣 “亲情” 主题，如通过兄弟的对话 “家人就该互相体谅”，或 “我” 的感悟 “真正的亲情不是坚持对错，而是懂得为对方让步”，让故事更有深度。
（四）高分范文与情节解析
I realized it was me who was at fault. As I sat on the backyard bench, the memory of my brother leaving in the rain flashed before my eyes—his shoulders hunched, Toby trotting sadly beside him. How selfish I had been! I’d only cared about my granddaughter’s safety, ignoring the pain of my brother who’d just lost his lifelong partner. Toby wasn’t just a dog; he was the only light in my brother’s dark days. My wife placed a hand on my shoulder: “Go talk to him. Family isn’t worth losing over a misunderstanding.” Her words gave me courage. I grabbed the biscuits she’d baked—my brother’s favorite—and headed out the door, determined to make things right.
With the biscuits my wife had made, I arrived at my brother's door. My hands trembled as I knocked, fearing he might turn me away. The door creaked open, and there stood my brother, his eyes widening in surprise. “I’m so sorry,” I blurted out, holding out the biscuits. “I was wrong to push you and Toby away. I can’t imagine how lonely you’ve been.” Before he could respond, Toby bounded over, wagging his tail and licking my hand. Tears filled my brother’s eyes as he pulled me into a hug. “I’ve missed you,” he whispered. We sat on his porch, sharing biscuits and stories, while Toby curled up at our feet. In that moment, I knew that 亲情 had mended the rift between us.
情节亮点：1. 用回忆镜头强化冲突，让道歉更具说服力；2. 妻子的角色推动情节，使行动更合理；3. Toby 的互动成为破冰关键，情节自然温暖；4. 结尾回扣亲情主题，升华情感。
三、2025 年高考真题（全国 Ⅱ 卷）情节构建解析
（一）真题原文回顾
“What’s your name ” is a question most frequently asked when people meet for the first time. But for me, it was the first challenge I encountered as an international student in Ireland. The pronunciation system of the Chinese language is quite different from that of English. For native speakers of English, some Chinese words are rather difficult to pronounce. My given name Qiuyu (秋雨), for instance, happened to be a great challenge for many of them. Every time I gave a self-introduction, I had to explain how to pronounce my name at least five times, yet they still could not say it the way I did.
Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates. I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter. I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me. After all, I did care about how others would think of me. I realized that if I didn’t stop, the entire lecture would be ruined. “It’s okay, professor,” I shrugged. The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter. I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further.
After that incident, I stopped acting as a “Chinese teacher.” Instead of correcting others when they were struggling to pronounce my name, I just smiled and nodded approvingly. This approach spared me the discomfort of having to over-explain. However, I soon found that by doing so, I might be losing something more important: the opportunity to share a small part of my cultural identity.
续写段首句：
1.In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name.
2.Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class.
（二）原文冲突与伏笔分析
核心冲突 内部冲突：“我” 的 “社交尴尬” 与 “文化认同” 的矛盾；外部冲突：跨文化交流中的语言障碍
关键伏笔 1. 中文名发音难引发课堂尴尬；2. “我” 选择妥协却感到文化身份的缺失；3. 同学对中文名的好奇潜在
情感基调 尴尬、迷茫→主动表达→自信认同
主题指向 拥抱文化身份、自信跨文化交流、主动传递文化价值
（三）情节构建四步法
第一步：拆解段首句，锁定情节方向
第一段首句：In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name.
核心任务：打破妥协，主动分享名字的文化内涵。
逻辑延伸：意外被邀请的紧张→ 鼓起勇气解读含义→ 结合文化背景（诗歌、节气）→ 获得初步认可。
第二段首句：Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class.
核心任务：展现文化交流的积极成果，升华主题。
逻辑延伸：同学主动请教发音与文化→ 耐心分享并教学→ 建立跨文化友谊→ 领悟文化认同的真谛。
第二步：设计关键情节点，搭建情节框架
段落 关键情节点 1（铺垫） 关键情节点 2（推进） 关键情节点 3（过渡 / 收尾）
第一段 讨论中被老师点名，内心紧张犹豫 分享 “秋雨” 的诗意内涵与家庭期许 同学安静倾听，眼神充满好奇
第二段 围拢请教发音，认真模仿学习 延伸分享中国节气、相关诗歌 收获友谊，坚定文化表达的信心
第三步：补充细节描写，让情节更生动
心理细节：第一段 “心跳加速”“深吸一口气”“声音逐渐洪亮”，展现从紧张到自信的转变；第二段 “内心暖流涌动”“自豪感油然而生”，体现文化认同的喜悦。
场景细节：“阳光透过教室窗户洒在课本上”“同学们低头记录名字的写法”，营造温馨的交流氛围。
语言细节：用 “‘秋’是收获的季节，‘雨’象征滋润”“它源于唐诗‘空山新雨后’”，让文化分享更具体。
第四步：呼应主题，实现情感升华
结尾通过 “我” 的感悟 “文化认同不是强迫他人接受，而是勇敢分享自己的故事”，或同学的评价 “你的名字里藏着中国的美”，凸显 “主动表达” 在跨文化交流中的重要性。
（四）高分范文与情节解析
In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name. My heart raced as all eyes turned to me—I’d never shared my name’s story publicly before. Taking a deep breath, I smiled and said, “Qiuyu means ‘autumn rain’ in Chinese. It’s not just a sound, but a beautiful scene from nature: gentle rain nourishing the earth after autumn harvest.” I added that my parents named me after a Tang poem, hoping I’d be as calm and resilient as autumn rain. As I spoke, the classroom fell silent; no longer was there awkward laughter, just curious and appreciative glances. When I finished, the professor nodded warmly: “That’s a name full of culture and poetry.”
Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class. “Can you teach me how to pronounce it correctly I want to get it right,” one girl asked eagerly. Surrounded by smiling faces, I repeated “Qiuyu” slowly, guiding each of them through the tones. Some even pulled out their phones to look up the poem I’d mentioned. “Chinese culture is so fascinating,” a boy exclaimed. We talked about autumn traditions in China and Ireland, and I realized that my name had become a bridge connecting two cultures. That day, I didn’t just teach them to say my name—I found the courage to embrace my cultural identity, and that was the greatest gift of all.
情节亮点：1. 以 “名字的诗意内涵” 为突破口，让文化分享更易接受；2. 同学的主动互动推动情节发展，真实自然；3. 从 “名字” 延伸到 “诗歌”“传统”，情节有层次感；4. 结尾升华到 “文化桥梁”，主题深刻。
四、情节构建黄金技巧
1.冲突解决型结构：原文冲突→ 尝试解决→ 出现小波折→ 成功解决→ 主题升华（适用于亲情、友情类话题）。
2.成长蜕变型结构：面临困境→ 内心挣扎→ 主动突破→ 获得成长→ 领悟道理（适用于个人成长、跨文化交流类话题）。
3.细节支撑情节：每一个情节点都需搭配 “动作 + 心理 + 环境” 细节，避免情节空洞。
4.段间衔接自然：第一段结尾需为第二段埋下伏笔（如 “我决定登门道歉” 衔接 “抵达兄弟家门口”），确保逻辑连贯。

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