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实练读后续写
读后续写第五档：21-25分
1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。
2.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。
3.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
内容与文本有紧密联系
定语从句，状语从句（非谓语），名词性从句，特殊句式（独立主格，强调）
After that,...,at that moment, Then, The instant, as, while....nevertheless, at the same time ...
At the fanciest restaurant in town, Emily's most recent date, Nathaniel,talked about his boats, horses , and real estate(房地产)collection. He was exactly the kind of man her parents wanted her to marry, but she was unimpressed. Suddenly, a quarrel at the door caught her attention." Please, I just want some fries!” an old woman in cheap clothing begged. Emily fixed her eyes on her bare feet and frowned. Being barefoot was unacceptable at any restaurant. The waiter was displeased and tried to drive her out, but something in Emily's heart told her to stand up.“Wait a second," she said to the waiter. “She's with me."The waiter's eyes widened as Emily gestured for the woman to join her table. Nathaniel’s face turned red. “What are you doing, Emily ” he demanded, whispering although the old woman could hear him."I'm inviting this woman to sit with us. Is that a problem ” she asked sweetly.The old woman introduced herself as Martha."Yes, it is!" Nathaniel replied, throwing his cloth napkin on the table,standing up quickly and going out angrily.“Bye!” she waved at him as she sat down. Her voice turned sympathetic and kind as she looked at Martha.“Now, what’s going on Can you tell me why you're here And why are you barefoot ”"Oh, madam. You didn't have to invite me to your table," Martha shook her head.“I just wanted some fries for my grandson. He's just been so sick, and I can't get him to eat anything. He told me he only wants some fries. So I sold my shoes to a man walking by and he gave me enough for some."“May I ask, why not go to a fast food place "Emily said gently.“Well, this place was closer. It's too hot outside for me to walk much farther without shoes. ” Martha answered. The woman continued telling her story. She and her grandson had been living on the streets for a few years since her daughter died, and they couldn't afford rent because no one would hire her.
注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Emily's eyes watered as she took off her shoes._______________________________________________________________________________The other guests put their shoes back on._____________________________________________
内容
从出场顺序
Emily:noble status,unambitious,sensible(明智的，理智的)polite,sympathetic,kind
Date：wealthy, look down on others(dismissive),angry
Old woman(Martha):poor,full of trouble
waiter:social climber,snobbery(势力，自以为优越的态度)
grandson
other guests(customers)
人物
人物
行事
Emily's eyes watered as she took off her shoes.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The other guests put their shoes back on.________________________________________________________________________________________
倒推提问法：Q1：Why did Emily take off her shoes
Q2:Why did the guests take off their shoes
Q3:What made them put their shoes back on
Q4：What would Emily, the waiter,the guests do for Martha What are the results
第一段
第二段
Q1：Why did Emily take off her shoes
续写小试1：担心其受伤，生病的孙子还需要照顾
“请穿上这双鞋，外面太热，你要保护好自己以免烫伤，这样你才能很好地照顾你的孙子。”Emily 边 安慰道边为其穿上自己的鞋子。（with的复合结构；protect....from...; so that ）
“Please put on the pair of shoes. _____ the sun scorching,you’re _________(suppose)to protect yourself from __________(burn) _________you can take good care of your sick grandson.”Emily comforted her ____she helped Martha put on the shoes.
With
being burned
so that
supposed
as
Q2：Why did the guests take off their shoes
因畏惧而效仿还是单纯效仿？（No）
为此情此景所打动，都要帮助女士。（Yes）
续写小试2：因深深地被Emily 的善举所打动，其他顾客也纷纷脱掉鞋子，睁着要帮助这位光脚的女士。
__________(move) by her kind gesture and words ____(deep), the other guests also desire to assist the old woman ____ their shoes ___ their hands.
Being moved
with
in
deeply
Q3:What made them put their shoes back on
Emily 劝说下：鞋码合适，感谢大家
Martha 自己选定
续写小试3:最后，这位女士选择了一双来自Emily的简单的平跟鞋。
Finally, the old woman __________(determine) to put on a simple pair of flats, _______belonged to Emily.
determined
which
Emily's eyes watered as she took off her shoes.“Please put on the pair of shoes. _____ the sun scorching,you’re _________(suppose)to protect yourself from __________(burn) _________you can take good care of your sick grandson.”Emily comforted her ____she helped Martha put on the shoes.__________(move) by her kind gesture and words ____(deep), the other guests also desire to assist the old woman ____ their shoes ___ their hands.Finally, the old woman __________(determine) to put on a simple pair of flats, _______belonged to Emily.
The other guests put their shoes back on_______________
______________
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？
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各帮其忙
The guests——捐钱救济生活
The waiter———道歉并自掏腰包买薯条
Emily——助其孙子看病并解决就业
先 扩句，再 连句成段
1.他们热情地捐献出自己的一份钱来救济女士的生活。
2.那位服务员为其坏态度向女士道歉并自掏腰包买了一大盒带有番茄酱的薯条送给她。（Ketchup）
3.Emily 派自己的私人医生为其孙子看病，并联系一位餐厅老板雇佣其为清洁工。（private doctor; treat illness）
Q4：What would Emily, the waiter,the guests do for Martha What are the results
Martha:As a lucky person recieving so enormous help, Martha couldn’t resisted rolling down tears like waterfalls pouring out of her eyes,kneeling on the ground saying“Thanks a lot.” to all the people present.
Emily：The scene in the restaurant was the most moving display she had ever seen. At that moment, she felt hope for the world, sighing there’s nothing happier than giving others a helping hand.
The moment Emily tackled the “quarrel”,it occurred to her that as long as every one contribute a little love to the world, it will better itself.
续写积累
1.复杂心情（负向）
2.不知所措（负向）
3.感激（转变）
4.激动（转变）
5.紧张+成功（正向）
6.成功+结尾（正向）
万能片段1：复杂心情（震惊、害怕、迷茫）
For a moment, within my heart was a complex feeling,which made me rooted to the spot. I should not have behaved in that way.
有一瞬间，我心中有一种复杂的感觉，令我钉在原地（倒装+定从）
我不应该那样做（虚拟语气）
高考链接：
在她内心有一种复杂的感觉，简维持一动也不动，疲惫而无法动弹。
2.在我内心有巨大的惊讶和感激，我站着一动也不动，盯着那个即将从盒子里拿出午餐的女孩。
3.爸爸难以置信地钉在原地，当他看着可怕的厨房，想象双胞胎做了
Within her heart was a complex feeling, Jane remained rooted to the spot, exhausted and unable to move.
Within my heart were enormous surprise and gratitude . I stood rooted to the spot, staring at the girl who was about to take out their lunch from a box.
Within his heart was a complex feeling. Dad remained rooted to the spot in disblief ,watching the terrible kitchen and imagining what they had done.
complex adj.复杂的 be rooted to the spot (因为惧怕或吃惊而)钉在原地
complicated adj.复杂的 abruptly 突然地
emotion(s) n.吃惊的 stand(stood) still 站住不动
startled adj.吃惊的 imagined what sb. had done 想象下某人做啥
freeze(froze) v.冻住，冻结 the sudden situation 突如其来的情况
万能片段1：复杂心情（震惊、害怕、迷茫）
万能片段2：不知所措（茫然、紧张、害怕）
基础版：心在狂跳，她不知道该怎么办。随着数秒后，她的脑海里出现了一个想法。
Heart beating wildly, she had no idea what to do. As a few seconds passed, an idea came to her mind.
升级版：（高分替换词+比喻+名从+时间独立主格句式）
Heart beating wildly like a beast, she was at a loss what to do next. A couple of seconds slipping away, an idea struck her like lightning.
练习1:她的脸颊因尴尬而灼热，她不知道该怎么办。（前半句“五官”用：独立主格）
Cheeks burning with embarrassment, she wondered what to do.
练习2：顿时，她的大脑一片空白，不知道该怎么办。（前半句“大脑”用：独立主格）
All of a sudden, her mind going blank,she had no idea what to do.
练习3：被所发生的一切吓坏了，他站在原地不动，不知道接下来怎么办（非谓语）。
Terrified by what had happened, he was rooted to the spot, not knowing what to do next.
万能片段2：不知所措（茫然、紧张、害怕）
总结
读后续写不难过，五档评分尤重要，
通读理解是基础，理清人物定基调，
两句提示莫忘记，倒推反问限范围，
关注内容融洽度，做到语法词汇丰，
连接成分用起来，紧凑结构加加分。

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