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Continuation
2024新高考全国卷一
Writing
CONTENTS
读六要素，梳理情节山
十句五定，三原则填充
修改草稿，润色升级
Reading & Searching
六要素
when
who
where
what
why
how
主要人物
故事
时间
故事
地点
事
件
原
因
情
节
人物性格特征
注意事件
地点变化
一个核心人物对应一个核心事件
矛盾问题
情节和情感同时发展
Reading & Searching
Read the whole passage to search for the theme and six elements.
I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. l touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.
That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.
Who
I, Gunter
When
a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September
What
I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference.
Reading & Searching
Read the whole passage to search for the five elements(5w).
Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it,” he said.
Just then I realized that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry.”
Para1:I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
Para 2:Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
Where
Why
the bus station
“I” had zero cash in my wallet.
Theme
help needy people;
keep promise
Reading & Searching
Read the whole passage to summarize the plot and emotion development
I was in a hurry to catch the ___________ to Prague due to the delayed flight.
I jumped into a taxi whose driver was _________ and arrived at the bus station with no ________.
The ____________ and _____________ didn't work but the the bus queue was thinning out.
the last bus
Gunter
cash
card machine
cash machine
anxious
embarrassed
helpless
Paragraph 1: I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
Paragraph 2: Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
Show Time
Work in groups to perform the story to have a deep understanding of it .
Writing
Para 1.A0（段首句） Para 2.B0（段首句）
定 A1: 衔接句--就地取材，文字接龙 定 B1：衔接句--就地取材，文字接龙
A2: B2:
A3: B3：
A4: 定 B4:故事性结尾（happy ending描述画面）
定 A5: 过渡句到P2--反向文字接龙 定 B5:主题升华
十句五定法的思路
剩下的五句补齐细节：三大原则+所见，所闻，所说，所做，所思
1. Action—Response原则
角色A的行为引起其他角色的反应
2. Conflict—Solution原则
原文出现的问题，续写中解决问题
3. Negative—Positive原则
情感变化，积极正能量
听到这个消息后，Gunter 的反应
坐上了去往Prague 的公交车
我在车站再次见到Gunter，载我去机场
付费给Gunter; 和Gunter 成为朋友
升华主题：诚信，友善，传播善意
1
2
3
4
5
3
4
5
Para.2:Four days later,when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
Para.1: I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news .
演员：Guner&I
A1
A2
A3
A5
B1
A4
B2
B4
B5
十句五定，场景风暴
B3
演员：Guner&I
地点:airport
地点:airport
Writing
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. _____________________
_______________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.___
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Polish
There are so many tips to polish the writing
How to choose the most suitable tips to make your writing more consistent(一致的，吻合的)with original text(原文）
从文章中来，到文章中去
Reading for language
Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it,” he said.
Just then I realized that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.
At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry.”
动作描写 ；语言描写 ；心理描写 ；环境描写 ；外貌描写
动作链+从句
直接引语
副词+无灵主语+用动作体现心理
practice
方式一使用非谓语
1.Doing...,... 或者…，doing....
2.With+n+ doing/done/to do...（with的复合结构）
例句翻译：
“对不起，银行的提款机坏了，我拿不出现金。”我尴尬地解释道，脸上火辣辣的(burn)。
"Sorry, the bank machine is out of order, so I can't take the cash out. " I explained embarrassedly, with my face burning.
practice
方式二使用动作链
同一个主语，动作A+动作B，and 动作C
（将笼统的大动作拆分成具体的小动作，画面感十足）
例句翻译：
我坚定地和他握手，然后跳下车，疯狂地向公共汽车跑去，在公共汽车出发前跳上了公共汽车。
Giving him a firm handshake, I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure.
practice
方式三 使用无灵主语
01 A flood of +情绪 (n) seized/ washed over me....
02 无灵主语（表示时间、地点地名词）+有灵动词（see/witness）
例句翻译：
当我听到他的话时，一种感激之情涌上心头。
A flood of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words.
polish your writing
then share with the class!
Evaluation
Assignment
1. Reflect and polish your writing work .
2.Read the original text of the story and finish the exersices following it. (Optional)
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