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How to Complete a Story
Continuation Writing
Contents
Read for the theme
读主旨
Read for the plot and emotion
读情节和情感
Discussion and writing
分析语言风格
Presentation and evaluation
展示与评价
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A2
A3
A4
A5
Analyze the language style
讨论与写作
A6
Summary and homework
总结与巩固作业
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Pre-writing
deep blue sky
cotton-like clouds
rolling mountains
colourful flowers
green grass like a huge blanket
What’s Jane’s choice
Read for the theme
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This past summer, my family went on our yearly vacation in a cottage on a lake. There were various activities to keep everyone busy: swimming, fishing and building sand castle on the beach. In the evenings, we gathered on the beach, having great fun.
However, by the third day of our vacation, I noticed my sister, Jane, spent most of her time watching videos and looking through online shops indoors. She was so addicted to her cell phone! Over dinner, I told Jane we would hike to the top of the mountain across the lake the following morning. I stared at her,"Put your phone away and enjoy the scenery. It ' s really amazing."
“ Well," Jane shrugged （耸） her shoulders and answered unwillingly," there are some bargains tomorrow in several online shops, so I ' ll not be available."
"Come out to enjoy the fresh air and many views. Hiking is fun!"
"Sounds more like punishment than a vacation." she didn't look up from her soup and mumbled （嘟嚷）," I cannot walk that far."
When I said it only took half an hour of steady walking to climb to the top, she nodded, "OK, I’ll go."
The next morning was perfect for a hike, with sunny clear skies and gentle winds. I got up early and packed some sandwiches and bottles of water into my backpack along with the camera. Jane came slowly downstairs, and announced in a very passive voice," I’m ready to go, Jim ."
Anyway, we stepped out of our cottage and quite a different view unfolded before our eyes. Against the blue skies, a rough path wound (蜿蜒) to the top of the mountain across the lake with wild flowers and grass on both sides. The sunlight brightened on the glassy surface of the lake. We began from the path. "I’m still wondering if this is a good idea, but if you could do it, I could also do." She complained, frowning.
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theme
1. Who-person
_______;______________; my family
2. Where -place
3.When-time
4. What happened
6. How to do
a cottage on a lake, beach, _________across the lake
Last summer---_____________
Jane spent most of her time on her ________ indoors.
Jane was asked to ___ phone down and ___ to the top of the mountain to enjoy the ______.
Read for theme（主旨）
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5. Why
Jane were _________ to her phone.
5W1H
P1:She hiked unwillingly and missing her _________.
P2: She fell in love with outdoor _______.
7. Ending---
I (Jim)
Jane( my sister),
a mountain
morning
cellphone
addicted
put
hike
scenery
P1:She followed me , her mind wandering.
P2:Reaching the top, Jane widened her eyes, shouting, "How fantastic!"
phone
views
Read for theme（主旨）
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5W1H
1: Put _________ down and get close to ______, and you’ll appreciate fantastic scenery.
2: Getting close to nature can help us to stay away from __________ addiction （上瘾）.
P1P2
cellphone
nature
cellphone
A2
Analyze the plot and emotion
1. My family including my sister Jane went on yearly vacation.
happy\excited
beginning
development
development
Climax（高潮）
ending
A2
Analyze the plot and emotion
1. My family including my sister Jane went on yearly vacation.
2. Jane spent most of her time on her phone.
3. She was required to hike half an hour to enjoy fresh air and views.
4. She hiked with me with complaint.
5. She saw fantastic views.
Ending
What would happen
addicted
happy\excited
Unhappy and unwilling
Tired and bored
Surprised and happy
Analysis of the language
A Dream of Red Mansions
Which book does this picture refer to
Who’s the writer of this book
Cao Xueqin
Co-writer: Gao E
Continuation writing by Gao E is wonderful because language feature he shows is similar to the original works.
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Analysis of the language
语言特点：非谓语动词
(Para 1. ）In the evenings, we gathered on the beach, having great fun.
(Para 6. ） When I said it only took half an hour of steady walking to climb to the top, she nodded, "OK, I’ll go."
语言特点：对话---直接引语和间接引语
(Para 7. ） I got up early and packed some sandwiches and bottles of water into my backpack along with the camera.
语言特点：使用了并列词语和并列句式
(Para 8. ） “I’m still wondering if this is a good idea, but if you could do it, I could also do." She complained, frowning.
语言特点：使用了条件状语从句，非谓语动词，并列连词,神态描写
语言特点：使用了with复合宾语结构，生动的景物描写
(Para 8. ） Against the blue skies, a rough path wound (蜿蜒) to the top of the mountain across the lake with wild flowers and grass on both sides.
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A4
Teamwork rules for continuation writing（小组合作写作规则）：
Each teammate should finish writing one paragraph on the colourful card, except team leader . （除组长外，每位组员完成一段续写，写在彩色卡片上）
Tasks for each teamleader（组长的职责）:
① Hand out cards（分发写作卡片）
② evaluate each paragraph written by teammates and give a mark（评价组员的续写并根据评分标准评出分数）
③ choose two paragraphs to make up a complete continuation （选出两段构成完整的续写）
④ stick them to a bigger card （将一篇完整的续写粘在大卡纸上）
⑤ put it up on the front board.（将大卡纸展示在前方的白板上）
While-writing
Self- Evaluation List
Evaluation and presentation
评价项目 评价标准与分值（满分25')
得分
内容合理 （10分） 符合主题（10')、欠合理（6')、 不合理（3')
连贯流畅 （5分） 使用多样且恰当衔接手段（5')、 偶尔使用（3')、没有使用(0')
语言表达 （5分） 使用多样词汇和语法结构（5')、 使用简单但正确的词汇和句式（3')、 词汇简单且错误较多（1')
版面及书写 （5分） 版面完整且美观（5')、 版面比较完整，书写工整（3')、 版面不完整，字迹不工整（0')
A5
Study nature , love nature , stay close to nature. It will never fail you .
学习自然,爱自然,亲近自然。它永远不会让你失望。
Let’s take time to embrace the nature and enjoy its beautiful scenery.
让我们花时间拥抱自然并且欣赏美丽的风景。
Nature is the good medicine to our soul. 自然是心灵的良药。
Getting close to nature can help us to build a healthy lifestyle.
A6
Summary & homework
亲近自然会帮助我们形成健康的生活方式。
Summarize 3 basic rules and 4 key steps for
continuation writing.
2. Polish your continued story and write it on
your notebook.
HOMEWORK
A6
Thank
you !
She followed me , her mind wandering. Minutes later, we started to climb a steep slope. Jane sighed, dragging her legs behind me. I was surprised to find some rare trees and flowers, and took many photos but Jane showed no interest. She stopped and sat on a rock, thirsty, sweaty and bored. I handed her a bottle of water and we took a break. "I missed my phone," she complained as we continued climbing. Though unhappy, she just climbed along with me.
Reaching the top, Jane widened her eyes, shouting, "How fantastic!" She looked around dreamily, her eyes twinkling wild excitement. A refreshing breeze brushed the mountain top, and miles of trees spread out below us and birds chirped（唧唧叫） between branches. We sat on a large rock and ate sandwiches, enjoying the sounds, the smells and the sunlight. "Anyone still wants her phone " I joked. She rolled her eyes, laughing out loud. The next morning, Jane danced to my room, crying, "Let’s hike around the lake today." " Sure, get our backpack then." I beamed, relieved and joyful.
非谓语动词作状语
生动的语言
形容词作状语
状语从句的省略
固定搭配
范文赏析

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