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2025-2026学年江浙皖高中发展共同体高三10月联考
英语读后续写写作指导与范文
这次江浙皖高中发展共同体的读后续写题，讲述的是一个因困境而沉默、因信任而重生的故事。
主人公 Michael 在老师 Mr. Evans 的关怀与指导下，走出了家庭经济压力带来的自卑与焦虑，最终在数学竞赛中找回自信。
这类题的写作重点，不是写“赢不赢”，而是写“成长的力量与被看见的温度”。核心关键词：信任、坚持、突破、感恩、成长。
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Every student at Oakridge High knew that Michael was struggling. His family had recently moved to a smaller apartment across town after his father was laid off from work. The financial pressures at home cast a shadow over everything he did.
Each morning, he arrived at Oakridge High wearing the same faded jeans and worn-out sneakers. Where he once participated eagerly in class discussions, he now sat in the back row, hoping to escape notice. He found himself staring blankly at the whiteboard, unable to focus. The numbers blurred together as worries about his family’s situation crowded his mind.
Mr. Evans, a teacher with twenty years of experience, recognized the signs immediately. After class, he asked Michael to stay for a moment. “I know you’re going through a difficult time,” Mr. Evans said, his voice filled with genuine concern. “But remember this: difficult roads often lead to beautiful destinations. The struggle you’re facing today is developing the strength you need for tomorrow.” He placed a reassuring hand on Michael’s shoulder. “This temporary setback doesn’t define you—it’s preparing you. I’ve seen your potential, and I believe in you even when you might not believe in yourself.”
Their after-school sessions became regular. He taught Michael how to break down complex problems into manageable steps—a strategy that applied not just to mathematics but to life’s challenges as well. Most importantly, he consistently emphasized Michael’s capabilities, rebuilding the confidence that had been eroded by recent difficulties.
As weeks passed, Michael’s performance began to improve dramatically. He started arriving early for their sessions, often with questions prepared in advance. The frustration that once clouded his expression was replaced by determination. In class, he began raising his hand again, offering solutions to problems that challenged other students.
Paragraph 1： The true test came with the annual mathematics competition.
Paragraph 2： After the award presentation, Michael went to Mr. Evans’s office.
解题思路
情节主线
竞赛考验 → 压力与自我怀疑 → 回想老师鼓励 → 坚持完成 → 获奖或收获信心 → 感谢老师 → 主题升华
情感递进
紧张 → 迷茫 → 被鼓励 → 坚定 → 成就感与感恩
续写目标
第一段：写“考场中的心理变化与成长”，用紧张—回忆—自信重生的结构。
第二段：写“情感回归与升华”，让‘师生情’与‘自我成长’双线合一。
第一段逐句结构设计
Paragraph 1：
The true test came with the annual mathematics competition.
这是转折点，考验Michael是否真正“学会成长”。接下来要写心理变化和行动转折。
句1： As he sat among hundreds of competitors, the familiar whisper of doubt crept back into his mind.
【结构】时间状语 + 拟人化表达；
【承接逻辑】延续“考前紧张”情绪，设置心理冲突。
句2： The first few questions seemed impossible, and his hands trembled slightly as he held the pencil.
【结构】并列句（and连接）；
【承接逻辑】描写外在细节，强化紧张感。
句3： Then, Mr. Evans’s words echoed in his head: “Difficult roads often lead to beautiful destinations.”
【结构】主句 + 引语；
【承接逻辑】引入内心支撑，形成情绪转折点。
句4： Taking a deep breath, he focused on one problem at a time, just as his teacher had taught him.
【结构】现在分词作状语（Taking...），时间顺序自然；
【承接逻辑】行动与思维方法结合，体现成长。
句5： Minutes turned into hours, and confidence quietly replaced fear.
【结构】时间转化 + 拟人；
【承接逻辑】体现“心理逆转”，为成功埋伏笔。
句6： When the final bell rang, he knew he had given his very best—and for the first time, that felt enough.
【结构】时间状语从句（When...）+ 破折号强调内心转折；
【承接逻辑】以“自我认可”收尾，而非外界评价，升华内核。
第二段逐句结构设计
Paragraph 2：
After the award presentation, Michael went to Mr. Evans’s office.
段首句表明事件结果与情感回归，要表现感恩与成长的融合。
句1： In his trembling hands was a silver medal, shining like a promise kept.
【结构】主句 + 分词短语作定语；
【承接逻辑】延续结果，赋予象征意义。
句2： “You were right, sir,” he said, emotion thick in his voice. “The road was hard—but beautiful indeed.”
【结构】并列引语；
【承接逻辑】呼应老师的金句，完成主题闭环。
句3： Mr. Evans smiled, his eyes soft with pride, and said, “No medal could mean more than seeing you believe in yourself.”
【结构】主句 + 独立主格（his eyes soft…）；
【承接逻辑】师者温度体现，强化情感共鸣。
句4： For a long moment, they stood in silence, the air filled with unspoken gratitude.
【结构】时间状语 + 过去分词短语作定语；
【承接逻辑】氛围描写收尾，感情沉静而有力。
句5： As Michael left the office, the setting sun painted the hallway gold—a quiet reminder that light always follows struggle.
【结构】时间状语从句 + 破折号总结句；
【承接逻辑】象征升华，用“光”比喻“希望”。
范文
Paragraph 1
The true test came with the annual mathematics competition. As he sat among hundreds of competitors, the familiar whisper of doubt crept back into his mind. The first few questions seemed impossible, and his hands trembled slightly as he held the pencil. Then, Mr. Evans’s words echoed in his head: “Difficult roads often lead to beautiful destinations.” Taking a deep breath, he focused on one problem at a time, just as his teacher had taught him. Minutes turned into hours, and confidence quietly replaced fear. When the final bell rang, he knew he had given his very best—and for the first time, that felt enough.
Paragraph 2
After the award presentation, Michael went to Mr. Evans’s office. In his trembling hands was a silver medal, shining like a promise kept. “You were right, sir,” he said, emotion thick in his voice. “The road was hard—but beautiful indeed.” Mr. Evans smiled, his eyes soft with pride, and said, “No medal could mean more than seeing you believe in yourself.” For a long moment, they stood in silence, the air filled with unspoken gratitude. As Michael left the office, the setting sun painted the hallway gold—a quiet reminder that light always follows struggle.
写作升华
这道题的亮点，不是“他得了第几名”，而是他从“自我怀疑”到“自我认可”的蜕变。高分写作要抓住三点：
情绪线：从紧张 → 回忆 → 平静 → 坚定；
关键词：belief, perseverance, light, gratitude；
意象升华：光线、金牌、沉默，都象征成长与希望。
真正的成功，不是赢过别人，而是走出自己的阴影。一句“我相信你”，有时能点亮一个孩子的人生。添加小助手，领取内部资料，让你的作文，写出真正的“温度与力量”。

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