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浙江省温州市2026届高三第一次适应性考试（温州一模）
英语试题 读后续写写作指导（自我关怀并非自私）
【原题回顾】
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
With three little babies, I never took a break, completely ignoring any self-care. When I was too tired to make myself dinner, I’d just eat the kids’ leftover cereal (麦片粥). I thought this was a great plan to lose some weight and called it the “Cereal for Diet.” Back then, I knew nothing about nutrition. Of course, the Cereal for Diet failed, as did all my other attempts.
One day, after cleaning up all the mess my kids had made, I went out for a walk. I passed a gym. I looked away. Healthy people went there, but this was not me. While turning away, I saw an ad for a six-month fitness challenge. I continued my fast walk in the opposite direction, but that sign just stayed on my mind.
I still remember what finally motivated me to sign up for the challenge. It was a ten-minute period in which my son threw his spaghetti plate straight up, sending noodles and sauce flying everywhere. As soon as my husband got home, I said, “You’re in charge.”
I made a beeline for the gym, marched straight in and said, “Fix me.” And I was assigned a young and fit trainer, Emily. She asked what my goals were for the six-month challenge. At that moment, I was speechless. Noticing my embarrassment, Emily just handed me the heaviest weights I had in my life and said, “Okay, so in six months you will compete in a body-building show.” I tried explaining, “No, I don’t want to do a show. That sounds scary.” She ignored my fear, and we jumped into strict workouts and nutrition planning.
Over the next six months, Emily forced me to focus on myself — my wants and my needs. I learned to see food as strength and sweat as progress. I learned how to fuel my body instead of starving it, balancing proteins, carbs, and fats. Emily pushed me past my limits, correcting my form, timing my breaks, and cheering me on when I wanted to quit. I improved every day in the gym.
注意：
(1) 续写词数应为 150 左右；
(2) 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: One day, Emily handed me an application form.
Paragraph 2: Soon, I jumped into weeks of preparation.
【学生易出错的思路】
1. 情节偏离主线：错误表现：新增无关情节（如艾米丽的个人故事、家庭矛盾升级），或脱离“健身挑战”核心（如转而描写照顾孩子的细节，未体现“自我突破”）。原因：未抓住原文“忽视自我→通过健身找回自我”的核心线索，过度关注次要信息（如孩子的调皮），导致续写内容与原文脱节。
2. 情感逻辑断裂：错误表现：情绪转变突兀（如突然从犹豫变为狂热，缺乏心理铺垫），或未体现“动作反应-情感反应-动作反应”的链条（如只写“我训练很努力”，未描写训练中的疲惫、坚持后的喜悦）。原因：忽视原文中“我”的性格基础（初期被动、缺乏自信），未结合前文“尴尬、恐惧”的情绪铺垫，导致情感转变缺乏合理性。
3. 衔接与照应缺失：错误表现：未呼应原文关键元素（如“麦片减肥法”“艾米丽的严格指导”“三个孩子的母亲身份”），或第一段末句与第二段首句衔接生硬（如第一段写“我拒绝了申请表”，第二段却写“我开始准备比赛”）。原因：阅读时未标注原文关键信息，续写前未规划“线索承接”，导致情节断裂、前后矛盾。
4. 主旨升华偏差：错误表现：将主题局限于“健身成功”“赢得比赛”，未挖掘“自我关怀”“爱自己才能爱他人”的深层内涵；或升华过于牵强（如突然提到“坚持就是胜利”，未结合原文语境）。原因：对原文核心矛盾（“母亲角色”与“自我需求”的冲突）理解不深，仅停留在表面情节，未抓住“自我价值重塑”的本质。
【文本材料分析】
人物： “我”：一位忙碌的三孩母亲，最初忽视自我照顾，通过健身挑战实现了身心转变。
艾米丽：年轻健壮的健身教练，性格坚定，在训练中不断鼓励和推动“我”突破极限。
故事情节发展：从忽视自我照顾的状态，到偶然看到健身挑战广告，再到受家庭压力刺激而报名。在艾米丽的指导下，经历了严格的锻炼和营养规划，逐渐找回了对身体的掌控感。
人物情绪变化：初期：疲惫、迷茫，对自我照顾感到无力。报名后：从尴尬、恐惧，逐渐转变为专注和坚定。训练中：感受到进步的喜悦，并建立起自信。
【段落构思】
Para. 1
以“艾米丽递给我一份申请表”为起点，展开对“我”的犹豫、艾米丽的鼓励的描写。运用动作链、非谓语动词作状语等语法结构，体现“我”的情绪转变。最后一句以“我”决定参与比赛收尾，与第二段首句形成衔接。
Para. 2
以“我投入数周的准备”为起点，描写“我”的训练细节。结合情感反应与动作反应，展现“我”的坚持与成长。结尾归纳主旨，点明健身带来的不仅是身体变化，更是自我价值的重塑。
【写作示例】
Paragraph 1 One day, Emily handed me an application form. My eyes fixed on the title “Body-Building Show Entry”（名词独立主格结构）, I froze, memories of my “Cereal for Diet” failure swirling in my head（名词独立主格结构）. “You’ve worked hard for this,” she said, tapping my toned arm and smiling（非谓语动词作伴随状语）, her voice warm yet firm. With my heart beating fast（with复合结构）, I picked up the pen, signed my name and whispered（动作链：did and did）, “I’m going to do this.” It was the first time I’d dared to chase something just for myself, and I knew no effort would be in vain.
Paragraph 2 Soon, I jumped into weeks of preparation. Waking up early to practice poses（非谓语动词作时间状语）, I would touch my defined muscles—the ones I never thought I’d have（非谓语动词作定语）—and smile, my tiredness turning into determination. Every repetion I finished, every meal I balanced, felt like a step away from the old me who once survived on leftover cereal. Not until I stood backstage did I realize（倒装句） how much I’d grown: from a mother lost in daily chaos to a woman reclaiming her strength. Self-care is never a selfish choice. Instead，it’s the foundation of being able to give love, for only when we nurture ourselves can we truly care for others.

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